VeeBa OS/SS 'Love Confession'

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Posted: 11 years ago
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(This is my first ever OS on Veeba. hope u all like it 😃and give me ur opinions. plz do comment if im not good in writing i will not mind 😛😆 and sorry for my bad english im not good in it 😕😃)
it was dark night, Baldev trying to sleep but his thoughts dont allow him
Baldev; e ki ho gaya hai menu veera nu apne dimagh se nikal kyun nahi pa raha, inna wadda dhoka diya usne menu mere nal piyar da jhoota natak kiya inni chot ponchai menu iska badla mein le k rahon ga us se
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Veera is restless thinking about Baldev
Veera; mein ne Baldev de nal zyada galat to nahi kiya na.. par mein aur karti bhi ki wo mere peche hi par gaya tha main ne wohi kya jo menu sahi laga

her room's door opens
Ranvi; veera tu soi nahi abhi tak
Veera; vo.. veerji menu neend nahi aa rahi thi khushi k mare kal apki shadi jo hai gunjan didi de nal, aur ap bhi to nahi soye na apnu gunjan didi ki yad aa rahi hai ki (in a teasing tune)

Ranvi blushes a little

Ranvi; nahi aisi koi gal nahi hai main to bas aise hi chal to ab so ja rat buhat ho gai hai main bhi sone ja raha hun

Ranvi left and veera again gets restless thinking about baldev
Veera; pata nhi e Baldev hun ki kare ga menu pata hai mere nal badla to vo zarur le ga

Next day

Chaiji; ratan putar chal jaldi kar barat le k jane ka samme ho gaya hai
Ratan; ji chaiji main abhi veera ko bolati hon

At Balwant House

Balwant; o Bansuri ji jaldi aa jao barat aa gai hai
Bansuri; e Sarpunch ji ko bhi na pata nahi kis chez ki jaldi hoti hai, abhi ai ji

Bansuri and Balwant welcomed them
chaiji, ratan and ranvi were now in the house but baldev was still looking at the door
Baldev; o e veera nahi ai ki sath me kithe reh gai hai
Baldev Friend1; o paaji ap kyun fikar kar rahe ho parjaiji aa jayen gi
Baldev; oye apna mun band rakh vo koi piyar viyar nahi kardi mere nal, parjai nahi hai ab vo teri

Suddenly baldev jaw drops he saw a girl in blue Punjabi suite long hair with pranda, she was very pretty he can not stop staring at her, his eyes locked at her, he didn't see a beautiful girl like her before, and she was no other then Veera

Veera was also lost in him, they were standing in front of each other now, they were in their own world.
there was a table near them on which there was a flower filled bowl, kids were running, and playing there, one kid hits the table and while running hit Veera too, she was about to fall but he hold her, her hands were on his shoulders and they share an eye look.. their eyes were locked into each others, both their heart beats getting faster and faster... veera was feeling so safe in his arms first time she feels like this with him but why she was feeling so safe,
Veera(thought in her mind); why im feeling like this he was my enemy, wait he is still his enemy, why she is thinking all this, why she wants to be in his arms forever...

(So guys how's it..?😳 next part will be after review's on this plz do comment and sorry for my English mistakes and errors as i told u before my English is not that good😭 so forgive me for that 😃 my hands were shivering while posting it 😕 hope u all enjoyed, do comment 😊😃)
Edited by Lovelyvb - 11 years ago

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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice start...continue soon...😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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😳 thank u EVANNAPINKHEART and rashi
i was not excepting such nice review's.. yeah sure will update soon 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Loved it :) :)...continue soon. !!!!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Part 2
Now flowers were falling on them and their eyes were locked into each others..
she wants to breack the eye look but her heart don't allowing her,Baldev help her to stand her own her eyes were still locked at his face
Baldedv was back in his senses; tu.. tu theek hai na? lagi to nahi tujhe?
Veera; haan.. nahi... theek hon main
Baldev; chal ab chalte hain andar
veera; tu... tu ja main aa jaon gi
Baldev;tu mere sath nahi chal sakti ki?
veera;lekin mein tere nal kyun jaon?
Baldev;(angrly) tu.. tenu na kuch samjh hi nai ata
Veera; to tu samjha de na tu to buhat samjhdar hai na, bewaqof kahin ka
Baldev; (still angry) dekh veera tu apna mun band rakh, o vo main is liye keh raha tha k tenu aisy kapre pehnane ki adat nahi hai sambhal nahi sakti na to agr phir kisi se takra gai aur tenu chot lag gai tu phir menu acha nahi lage ga na..(wait what was he saying)

Veera can't believe what she heard

Baldev; o mere kehne ka matlab tha k mere hote huye tenu koi aur chot kyun ponchaye us k liye main hon na(evil smile appears on his face)

Veera smiles a little and nodded but didn't moved

Baldev; ab chal bhi, bhootni ban k kyun dekh rahi hai

She was smiling looking at him all the time in wedding
Veera(thinking in her mind); why i can't stop looking at him, why my heartbeat gets fast when ever he looks at me,

Baldev looks at her, her eyes has a spark, she suddenly feels so happy she wanted to be with him always its the first time she was in these kind of feelings. she can't understand what's happening with her...
(Is she falling in love with him, falling in love with her greatest enemy, but why suddenly her feelings has changed for him.. )

She was lost in her thoughts that she didn't even notice him coming her way..

Baldev; oye ki ho gaya hai tujhe jab se ai hai bs bhootni ban k khari hui hai, teri tabyat to thek hai na?

Veera comes back to her senses; nahi.. vo mein... haan mein theek hun

Baldev; to tu yahan ki kar rahi hai.. mujhe sab pata hai to yahan khari ho k menu dekh rahi thi tab se.. kahin tenu mujhe se piyar to nahi ho gaya(laughs)

veera was shocked; haan.. nahi menu kyun pyar hony laga tujh se shakal dekhhi hai tune apni.. bandar lagta hai tu

Baldev; oye veera tu zyada bakwas mat kar teri shakal kon si achi hai tu to bhootni lagti hai agar rat ko pind ki galiyon me nikli na to sab ne dar k bhaag jana hai...
Veera; oye baldev bakwas band rakhiyo apni bara aya bhootni kehne wala bewaqof kahin ka.. tu lene ki aya hai ithe? jb dekho apni bakwas shuru kr deta hai

Baldev(angrly); o menu koi shoq nahi hai tujh se bat karne ka.. wo teri beeji tenu dhond rahi hain bahir.. bedai da samme ho gaya hai is vaste

Veera;to tu menu pehly nai bata sakta tha ki.. chal ab hat mujhe jane de

Baldev keep on staring her while she goes

At night veera in her room trying to sleep

Veera; e ki ho gaya tha menu.. pora time us baldev ko kyun dekh rahi thi main.. kyun us k bare me soch k menu ajeeb si khushi ho rahi hai

["Flashback"
Baldev; kahin tenu mujh se pyar to nai ho gaya]

Veera; kya menu sach me baldev se pyar... nai e main ki soch rahi hon mujhe pyar vo bhi us bandar se

she smiles shying

Veera; shyed haan menu us baldev se pyar ho gaya hai i don;t believe it mujhe sach me baldev se pyar...

She smiles as she got everything she wanted in her life

Veera; ab main usko jaldi hi bata dun gi k main bhi us se pyar karne lagi hun.. thinks about baldev again, I Love You Baldev (smiles)

Suddenly she hears a voice coming from the window she get scared, she goes to see who's it, she was shocked to see baldev there

Veera was about to screem when Baldev pulled her close to him and kept his one hand on her lips

Baldev; oye chup koi uth jaye ga..

she nodded and free herself from him

Veera; ba... baldev tu.. tu ithe ki kar raha hai inni rat ko..

Baldev; o ki hai na menu neend nahi aa rahi thi main ne socha teri bhi neend khrab kar dun, tenu phone kar raha tha to utha hi nahi rahi thi main tere ghar hi aa gaya..

Veera; ab tu ne utha diya na mujhe chal ab ja yahan se tujhe pata nahi itni rat ko kisi larki k kamre me nai ana chahiye tu ja yahan se koi dekh le ga, tu..

Baldev keep his finger on her lips

Baldev; oye menu pata hai.. lekin main 'KISI' larki k kamre me nahi 'Apni' veera, apni sherni k kamre vich aya hun

Veera was shocked

Baldev; mein ne sab sun liya hai.. tu jo abhi keh rahi thi aik bar phir se keh de menu is wakt ka kab se intzar tha ab tu bs aik bar mere samne bhi bol de menu

Veera was still shocked she didn't thought it will be happen like this.. but she was happy that baldev has heard her feelings for him, she hugged him

Veera; baldev vo main tujh se buhat pyar karti hun.. apni jan se bhi zyada

Baldev was lil shocked but hugged her back

Baldev; main bhi tujh se buhat pyar karta hun meri sherni..

Veera; baldev menu maaf kar de main ne tere sath pyar ka natak kya aur tujhe itni chot ponchai lekin menu us wakt samjh nahi aa raha tha k mein kya karon

Baldev; tenu maafi mangne ki koi zarurat nai hai main ne to tujhe kab ka maaf kar diya hai.. baldev singh kabhi apni sherni se naraz nahi reh sakta

Veera's eyes were filled with tears she hugged him tight this time to never let him go and kiss on his check

Veera; i love u mere sher
Baldev; i love u too meri sherni

The End

(This is it guys! hope u liked it plz do like and comment and give me your feedback's😳 this was my very first OS. i know it was not that good😕 sorry for my mistakes and errors if u feel like its worth reading do comment and like 😃)
Edited by Lovelyvb - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Tasris thank u so much.. Im very happy u liked it 😃 i got good feedback's thank u all 😳 now i will sure keep writing 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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That was a really good effort, csrry on a d write some more
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Thank u so much Nikki 😳 yup sure i will write more 😃

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