Veebs SS 'Tum Hi Ho Ab Tum Hi Ho'(part two updated)

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Posted: 11 years ago
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VEEBA FF "TUM HI HO AB TUM HI HO"

Hey peeps it me annie u can call me wishi I'm new on this forum and this is going to be my first veeba ss so plz bear with my mistakes... nd a big thanks to all who encouraged me to write this ss ok enough of my bakwaas here goes my ff (it is after wen baldev jumps from veeras window)

Part 1

Baldev: ooi meri taang !! ; He said in pain while roaming around his pind

Kaisi nagin hai yeh bina dasey hi apna zeher phela gayi!! mujhe bhi bara pyaar araha tha nah uss nagin pey jo main ussey dekhney chala gaya !!

As soon as he finished talking he just realized what he had said a second ago

B: oye nahi koi pyaar vyaar nahi aa raha tha mennu uss pey main toh bas dekhney gaya tha kay who ki kar rahi thi!! ; He said trying to convince himself

While talking to himself he never noticed tht he waz going to bump into someone and them DHUM!! They banged onto each other. He recognized it waz someone whom he loved banging into her fragrance always had some magic on him. It was his sherni! His veera ... wait a minute did he just say his veera... he didn't know what was getting on to him

V: baldevaa! Dekh kay chal nahi sakta tu andha ho gaya hai ki !! dekh nahi sakta terey samney sey koi aa raha hai ! Huh? ;she yelled at him with all her anger on the face

Her screeches were like melody to his ears but after such a betrayal it was like mocking of his love which he never realized. He had been wounded but never showed that this petty little drama in her words had broken him down inside. he wanted to flush out all the pain in once which he did the very next moment .

B: HAAN! Main andha hoon !! sahi bola tu ney main hoon andha isliye toh terey is masoom say chehrey ke piche ka asal raaz nahi jaan paya! Menu lag ta tha kay tu kisi kay saath bura nahi kar sakti ! sahi tha main tu kisi kay saath bura nahi bohot bohot bura kar sakti hai ! main hi gadha tha jo soch ta tha kay tu kisi kay naal inna vadda dhoka nahi kar sakti !! ; he said flushing out all his agony ... he had never been so depressed even when his own father used to rebuke him

V: baldev meri...

BAS AB MENNU KUCH NHI SUNNA SAMJHI; HE ROARED WITHOUT LISTENING TO HER AND STOMPED AWAY

Veera was knew that baldev was hurt but she never knew he was so hurt that he would not even listen to her. Veera have seen an angry baldev a lot more than 100 times but a broken baldev was someone she could never bear to see . veera knew how does it feel to be betrayed then how could she do it the person who had always supported her whenever she needed a friend. She left with a heavy heart . she had just seen a nightmare in the daylight which she could never imagine.

percap: another biggest shock for baldev in his life which he could never imagine after that baldev has broken down completely nd tries to hurt himself+ lots of veeba romace

Guyz I know it waz short but plz do let me know if I shud continue ? criticisms and advices are welcome if u liked itt plz hit the like button

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Posted: 11 years ago
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hey wishi...u did an awesome job...really,iam a 15 year old writer my self.wrote a book which i did not publish.u are wonderful.pls continue.i read ur ss 2 times...keep up the good work...and pls update tomorrow itself.its my birthday tomorrow...love u !!!!!!!!!!!
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Continue soon..can't wait for the upcoming parts.. :)
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Can't wait for more updates! Continue soon dear!
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heya wishi..lovecd it dear..plzz continue asap👍🏼
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Really good start. Do continue it.
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hii wishi...nice update sweety...continue soon and haan do pm me when you update
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Posted: 11 years ago
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First of all thank u all of those who liked my post and admiring it (Princessxyz, Deena1D, sanjanatamannah, zainabawoon, kinkinikki, ~~BaBy~AnGel~~, ..-DeViLiA-.., Lovely_Bajwa_, TasrinS, DazzilerDizzy, krock, ..RiMjHiM.., Shivani_4u, )here goes my part two and sanjanatamannah this is specially for u happy birthday sweety enough of my bak bak nd here it goes
Part 2

it was late in night when baldev had returned from his adda he knew there was someone who cared for him his mother who always supported him no matter what came in way. on the other side there was bansuri talking to her friends

bansuri: oye hoye vaddey dinon baad phone kiya hai kaisi hai?

friend:kya bataon bnsuri mainney suna kay tera puttar haar gaya chunaav mein .. kitni dukh ki baat HAI.. kitna bara chara kay bol rahi thi kay tuvadday puttar mein vaddi qabliyat hai phir ki hoya

bansuri: ki bataon mera nalaiq puttar hai hi aisa! usey toh puttar kahtey way bhi mennu sharam aati hai ... socha tha kay jab vadda hovega toh mera faida karaiga meri jholi main paisey hi paisey hogein lekin meri phuti kismat kay aisi nalaiq aulad milli hai mennu

friend: oye bansuri koi nahi ranvi bhi tera damaad hai nah toh tu uski taraf hoja chan paisey bhi miljayange aur pind di aurtein bhi teri izzat karengi tanney to nahi marengi

bansuri: wah wah kya changa dimaag lagaya hai tunney ... chal main nah kal tuvadde naal sakoon say gal karaan gi abhi who nalaiq chokra aata hoga agar uss ranvi nay bhi mera saath chor diya toh main baldev say bhi haat dho baithungi aur waisey bhi merey khabriyon nai mujhe abhi bataya kay who aney wala hai!!

friend: KHABRI? kaun sey KHABRI?

bansuri: who jo uskey chamchey hai nah jaagi aur balli who nah merey jasoos hai unkon mainey nah bachpan sey 100 rupey deti thi aur who baldev ki jassosi kar they rehtey they aur aaj bhi wahi chal raha hai nah to tennu ki lag ta hai inney bewakoof larkey sai dosti kaun karega!!! huh? oye chal tata bye bye main chal ti hoon

she turned around and a tall figure was standing in front of her ... she was afraid because she knew it was none other than baldev. she knew that she had been exposed but still she carried on with her selfish drama😲😲😲

bansuri: ooh b...baldev puttar wohh mai nah us ka mun band kara ney ke liye nah jhoot keh rahi thi

baldev: mainnu pata hai BEEJI; he said softly pretending not to know anything

bansuri: chal puttar khana kha ley ... aur tu itni deri she bhi aaya hai toh mennu nah pareshaani ho rahi thi; she said fakely

after hearing bansuris fake concern baldev had started fuming afterall he was baldev singh he never learned to control his anger and then he erupted he was eventually broken inside but didn't show it to her because now she was no one to him... no ONE!!

baldev: bas beeji bas !! bohot hogaya aap ko kya lagta hai kay main dood peeta kaka hoon key main apka jhoot nahi samajh paonga!! mennu pata tha kay iss dunya which vadde zada swrthi log hain lekin yeh nahi pata tha kay swarthi maa bhi hoti hai.mennu hamesha lag ta tha key app mennu wadda zada pyaar kar tey ho lekin main galat tha!! galat app ek bohot giri huwi aurat ho !! aaj sey mera aapka koi rishta nahi samjhi!! main apsey nafrat karta hoon NAFRAT!! ; he said with intense agony in his heart

this was baldevs most dreadful day of his life . he never knew he would be decieved by those people whom he always had a special place in his heart.it had been an hour after baldev had left the house

he was in his adda where he stayed from his childhood to adulthood . this place had experienced baldevs love, mischief, enimity alomost every reaction of his .. but the reaction it was going to see now would be the most tender side of his

baldev was in his adda trying hard not to shed tears but these tears were unavoidable the always found a way to escape his dark chocolate eyes and the very next moment had turned baldevs world upside down

because there took an entry of the other pair of betrayers jaggi and balli

baggi: oh paaji aap toh aisey muh latkakey baithey ho jaisey kisi ney apko zor ka jhapad diya ho ; they said laughing out loud unable to see An angry baldev heading towards them

just when jaggi turned his face to have a convo with baldev there was a hard smack on his face the same went with balli

jaggi: oh paji mennu kyun mara ??

and there another punch throwing them out of the room

baldev: kaminon khud phareb kar kay mujh sey pooch rahe ho kay tum kya kiya hai meri jasoosi karoge tum log baldev singh ki! ! baldev singh ko dhoka diya tum logon ney

baggi had understood the situation very well and signalled every eachother to run away just then baldev raised his hand on them

at that moment the time had paused for three of them as they situation had taken an other twist

baldevs hand was in veeras hand ...

baldev: tu chali jaa yahan sey pehley bohot dhokeybaaz bharey parey hain yahan chali jaa ; he said with a thunderous voice which shaked veeras each and every nerve

just when baldev turned to teach those cheaters a good lesson he learned that they had runned away very long back

baldev: dekha !! dekha tunney teri wajah sey who log bhaag gaye ; he said with a shrill

veera; baldeva meri gal sun !!! tuneey aaj shaam ko bhi meri baat bina suney hi chala gaya tha plz meri baat sun .. ik wari

baldevs pain had increased after remembering what happened earlier the very same day💔

baldev: veera chali jaa yahan sey ... main tujh sey winti karta hoon chali jaa yahan SEY!! chali JAAA!! ; he said with all his power left in him😡

he sstomped away banging the door behind him

veera was really angry and decided to leave she minutes awyay from her house when she remembered baldev converstion to baggi about that their disloyalty ... veera was struck with a sudden thought that made veera rush to baldevs adda 😲

precap: baldev; veera main yeh dard akeley nahin she saakta nahin she sakta mein tu mere saath hai nah ??


guyz if u liked it plz hit the like button and comment +criticism and advices are welcome

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Posted: 11 years ago
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guyz i m in trouble i dont know how to change the topic like i want to write part to updated but i cant i dont know how nd sorry to everyone to whom i didnt pm i wrote this in hush hush so plz understand😭
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Superb update...👏...
Do update soon.

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