~Rimi's VeeBa-OS Library~UPDATE OS-9 P27 - Page 9

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Posted: 11 years ago
#81
rimi when r u posting ur next veeba os??????
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Posted: 11 years ago
#82
aaj karr doongi Ambika... vaise mai tumhe kya bulaaon? ambi ????
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Posted: 11 years ago
#83

Originally posted by: RiMjHiM19

aaj karr doongi Ambika... vaise mai tumhe kya bulaaon? ambi ????

ambi is ok😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#84
ok ambi... abhi i am going but i will be back soon with another rocking OS, then there is something special also ...😉
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Posted: 11 years ago
#85

Originally posted by: RiMjHiM19

ok ambi... abhi i am going but i will be back soon with another rocking OS, then there is something special also ...😉

k bye i will be also after an hr


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Posted: 11 years ago
#86

OS-5 (Ankahee baate)
Part-A
(Baldev enter's veera's house in anger😡.)
chaijee- ki hoya? tu kaha chala aa raha hai?😕😕
Bladev( controlling his anger)- vo.. mainu veera se kuch kaam tha.😳
chaijee- ki kaam tha veera se? vo ghar pe nai hai.. bahar gayi hai apne dost ke saath.
(this increases baldev's anger😡😡.)
baldev- kitthe gayi hai vo?😲
chaijee- shaayad karan ko pind dikhaane ke vaaste gayi hai.. tenu kaam ki hai usse???😕
Baldev- chalta hoon...😡
(he leaves.)
chaijee- bada ajeeb banda hai..!!!😕

(its night time. veera comes home with karan, she is laughing😆. but chaijee is angry😡.)
chaijee- arre veera... inni raat ho gayi... tu abb aa rahi hai???😡
veera- sorry moti chai jee... maaf karr do mainu.
caijee- chal bohot ho gaya abb... yaha raat ko ladkiyaan yu bahar nai ghoomti.😒
karan- vo ...
chaijee- tu toh kuch matt bol😡. iss pind ke ladko se kuch seekh. iss tarah apni patniyo ke saath bhi raat-raat bhar nai ghoomte. abhi ranvi yaha hota na toh tenu...
veera- moti chaiii jeee... mai jaa rahi hoon na sone... karan tu jaa... bye...😕😕😕
(she pushes him to go.)
chaijee- abb jaa jaldi sone. bhookh lagi ho toh khaa liyo kuch...😔
(chaijee leaves in anger.)

veera-oh no! ye maine ki karr diya... moti chai jee nu naraaz karr diya...
(veera gets into her room and closes the door. she throws her bag on the bed)
Veera- aaj toh bada thak gaye.🤢
(and she is taken aback to hear- "Kyu, aisa ki karr rahi thi jo thak gayi?")
(she jumps and turns back to see baldev sitting on a chair and smirking away)
veera-😲😲😲 baldevv... tu itte ki karr raha hai? sharam nai aati , kisi ladki ke kamre me chhup ke baitha hai??😡
baldev- oye mai kitthe chup ke baitha hoon... mai toh tere saamne hi hoon... chhup ke toh vo sheher ka munda aaya tha na raat ko...😒
Veera(pointing her finger at him)- baldevv...!!! karan ke baare me...😡
(baldev gets up and holds her hand.)
(he pulls her close to him, with intense anger on his face😡.)
baldev- ki karegi tu?? maaregi mujhe? haan? bol? ki karegi? bol...😡😡
(they were close enough and veera could see anger and jealousy in his eyes. she could feel his fast breath, and racing heartbeat.)
Veera(wid a softer tone😳)- chadd mainu baldevv... haath dukh raha hai mera.
(baldev leaves her and moves back in anger.)
veera- vo mera dost hai baldevv. tenu ki pareshanni hai usse??😕
baldev- ki pareshaani hai? poora din, poori raat tu usi ke saath lagi rehti hai.din bhar karan! karan! karan!😡😡
Veera- haan toh ki gal hai????? dost hai vo mera.
(baldev holds her by her shoulders and pins her to the wall)
baldev- dost hai? sirf dost hai? 😡😡
veera- jo bhi hai, tenu ki farak padta hai??? ki hakk banta hai tera mujhse ye sab poochne ka?? haan?? bata???😕😕
(baldev leaves her and thinks for while. he has no answer to give. he goes to the window and looks out.)
(veera is confused. both of them are worst enemies, but still they have a sense of understanding. Veera goes to him and moves her hand to keep it on baldev's shoulder. she thinks for a while and finally holds his shoulder)
(baldev shivers at this lovingly touch of hers.)
Veera- baat ki hai baldevv? kuch hua hai ki? 😕
Baldev(turning back to her and giving her a helpless look)- bohot kuch ho gaya hai veera. tu nahi samjhegi.😕
Veera- oye kyu?😲
Baldev- kyukki tu jhalli hai ek number ki.😆(he laughs with shear sadness😕.)
Veera- baldevv... baat ki hai?😕
baldev- jo baat hai, vo kahoonga toh tu manegi nahi.!😒
veera- bol ke toh dekh.
baldev- chadd oye... mai jaa raha...
veera- ruk!!! aise kaise jaa raha... pehle toh chup chaap mere kamre me ghuss gaya phir mujhpar hi gussa kiya... aur abb bina kuch bole jaa raha hai? apna raaj samajh ke rakha hai ki???😡😡
Baldev- haan mera raaj samajh ke rakha hai.. ki karr legi???😡😡
veera- get out!!! nikal jaa...!!!!😡😡
baldev- jaa raha hoon. lekin yaad rakiyo. kal uss karan ne tujhe jiss jagah bulaaya hai...vaha matt jaaiyo... varna baad me mai nahi aaonga...😒
(saying this, he jumps out of the window.)
Veera(thinking)- isnu kaise pata ki karan ne kal mujhe apni party me bula rakha hai? and mujhe vaha jaane se mana kyu karr raha tha...?? ohhh!!!! zaroor mere aur karan ke beech dooriyaan laana chahta hai... meri khushiyaan nai dekkhi jaati na isse...!! bada aaya!!!!! mai toh zaroor jaaongi baldevv.. dekhti hoon ki hota hai.😔
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this OS was going a bit long so i decided to write it in parts. the next part is also cuming up soon... tab tak ye padho and socho ki hoga aage??😉😉 abhi plzz comment reserve karr lo , but part B ke baad hi apne reviews dena😳

Edited by RiMjHiM19 - 11 years ago
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#87
Part-B
(It's night time and veera somehow manages to take permission from chaijee and beeji to go with karan to the party ( all bcoz of karan ka bad influence 🤢)).
(she is wearing a crimson gown and looking gorgeous as usual😳.)
(karan kisses her hand and takes her with him in the car.)
(for a long time they are on the road. veera is getting tensed.)
veera- karan, hum log pind se inni door kitthe jaa rahe hain?😕😕
karan- bass aa hi gaye veera. vo rahi saamne party.
(she sees a large ground decorated for the party. they get down and go inside. it's huge and beautifully decorated. there are lights, dance floor, etc.)
(veera was happy until she saw something... there was a bar slot ... and most importantly, there was not a single girl except her.)
Veera- karan.. ye saare tumhaare dost hain?😕
karan- haan veera.. sab mere dost hain.😛
veera- lekin itthe toh koi ladki nahi hai..😕.
karan- koi baat nahi veera...mai hoon na tera dost.
veera- lekin...😕😕
(just then karan's friends come and takes him to the party. veera is left alone. she sees all the eyes looking at her. not a single boy looks to belong from a reputed family. all have a bad eye on her😈.)
(Veera quietly goes and sits on a chair. she looks at karan having fun with his friends. and then, she sees him drink.)
Veera(thinking)- kabhi karan ne nahi bataaya ki vo aise logo ka dost hai. and vo drink karta hai? ye bhi nahi bataaya...😕( she is heart broken.)
(she goes to karan.)
karan- arre..veera.. enjoy karr rahi ho?😆
veera- mai jaa rahi hoon karan. ghar chhodho mujhe.😡
karan- kya veera... abhi toh aaye hain..just chill...😆
veera- nahi! abhi chalo ghar varna...😡
karan- varna kya veera... thodi der mujhe enjoy karne nahi de sakti???😡
karan's friend- bass 2 minute ruk jaiye... abhi bhejte hain karan ok aapke paas.😊😈
(veera goes and sits, she is waiting fr karan.)
(she suddenly realized that the back chain of her gown is open from few parts. she tries to fix it but unable to do so as the chain is not working at all. she feels awkard and tries to hide it.)
Veera- kaash maine baldev ki baat maan lee hoti...😭

(karan is not at all bothered. even after veera tried her best to let him know her problem. she is feeling helpless)
(few of the boys notice this and keeps looking at her. she was abt to cry when suddenly someone comes to her and gives her a hand)
"chal... dance floor pe chal."
(veera looks up with tears to find baldev😭)
veera- baldevv...!!!!!😭😭😭
(unknowingly she hugs her. everything is going unnoticed by karan as he is drunk totally)
(baldev covers her back with his hands so that the open parts of the chain is hidden.)
(veera realizes this and breaks the hug).
veera- ye ki karr raha hai?
baldev- kaha tha na .. matt aana itthe,... aur ye kaise kapde pehen ke aayi hai tu?
veera- karan ne diye the...😭
(badev looks around to see that every1 is looking at veera's dress)
baldev- abb mai tenu gale laga ke khada nahi reh sakta... aur tu apne haantho se chupa nahi sakti.
(veera is feeling embarrassed.)
baldev- chal... dance floor pe.
(he drags her to the dance floor. veera is confused. baldev slowly hugs her for a dance position. which covers her back.)
(veera too keeps her hands on his shoulder. they are just inches away from each other. the song is going on and they start moving slowly to the dance beats.)
veera- mainu le chal yaha se.
baldev- chintaa matt kar... mai le jaaonga...
veera- abhi le jaane me ki gal hai??
baldev- tere uss lafange dost ne apne bodyguards laga rakhe hain. vo agar dekh lenge mainu yaha tereko le jaate huye toh ..
veera- karan ne aisa kyu kiya?😕
baldev- mainu ki pata ki karna chahta hai vo tere saath.
(veera hugs him slowly keeping her head on his chest)
veera- le chal mainu yaha se...please...😭😭
(baldev hugs her back)
(karan is in no sense but still goes on the floor and tries to take away veera from baldev)
veera- chhodo mujhe karan.
karan- veera... tu iske saath kyu hai.. idhar aaa...
veera- leave me karan.
(baldev's anger burts and he gives karan a tight punch which makes him unconscious. baldev holds veera in his arms and looks at the others)
Baldev- kisi ne bhi aage aane ki koshish ki... toh yaad rakhna... mera vo roop dekhoge jo aaj tak kisi ne nahi dekha... ek ek hi haddi pasliyaan tod ke rakh doonga...
(baldev fights with ever1 who comes in their way,and finally baldev and veera somehow manages to escape.)
(he drops veera home.)
baldev- accha mai chalta hoon abb...
Veera- baldevv... mainu maaf...
baldev- koi nai... mai toh jaan boojh kar kal tujhe vaha jaane se mana karne aaya tha.. mainu pata tha tu jayegi... mai tujhe uss karan ka asli chehra dikhaana chahta tha bass...aur tujhe pareshaan dekhne me jo majjaa hai na..vo aur kahi nai ..😆😆...
veera- theek hai.. abb jaada bol matt!!!! 😆
(there is silence and they look at each other with intense love for a long time...as if they were doing their love confession in silence.)
baldev- mai chalta hoon veera...dhyaaan rakhiyo apna
...mera matlab hai ki... mujhse bacha ke rakhiyo khud ko...
(veera just smiles😊 as he leaves)
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ho gaya yaar... pata nai mai jo likhna chahti thi vo acche se likh paayi ki nai, but hope u all understood. maaf kar do for any mistakes 😳😳 and jaldi batao apne suggestions? reviews?😳


Edited by RiMjHiM19 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#88
rimi again a nice OS👏
lekin aisa show mein nahi hoga becoz
this karan will stay for a long time

Edited by sparkle2985 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#89
wow...

Part A

amazing update dear...

Baldev" karan karan and karan..

Part B"

wow kamal kiya tussi great ho g...
Edited by Roses-khushi - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#90
Wow finally KK ko punch pada... Ek do Orr lagane chahiye the... Karela kahin ka ... But our hero is really very sweet ... Pahunch hi giya bachane ... Sweetie pie ... Haule-2 ho jayega Pyar ... Thanks Rimzy ... Bahut hi umda likha hai... Aage Orr Bhi carry on ... Aaj Maine saare parts firr se read kiye ... Sachi mein maza aa giya ... Plz update jaldi karna ... Stay blessed :)
Edited by nicky13 - 11 years ago

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