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donwannaone

@donwannaone

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+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#11

🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣mission pink🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣v

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samy18

@samy18

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#12

lovely and emotional chapter its really nice love u miss cool its superb i want story to turn like dis in serial but cv's ne humare dil ke arman chur kar diye har karam humne kiya apne ema ko top par pahochane ke liye par pd khak me mila ke sb chal di continue soon

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Ashu

@Avalanche.

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: babydolll
meri baby jo hai😆😆😆

Ji japanah 😆
Aapki hi beti hoon 😆

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ArlequinAJ

@ArlequinAJ

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: manikarnikaa
superbb senior ...plz update soon
iss kamala,pakhi,rags ko tho

karnika udhaa de kamala ,pakhi aur rags ko bomb se... 🤣 🤣

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sonia

@SONIA6702

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

heart touching,emotional ... awsum... m already cryin thinkin wat will happen tomm ... 😭😭😭... update soon

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ragnabw

@ragnabw

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#16

Plz update soon these FF, SS, OS only v have now CV has played with our feelings. Plz update soon.

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donwannaone

@donwannaone

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: ArlequinAJ

karnika udhaa de kamala ,pakhi aur rags ko bomb se... 🤣 🤣

anju ye dekh

rags ko

kamala

pakhi

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Megha

@ForeverFabulous

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: manikarnikaa

anju ye dekh
rags ko
kamala
pakhi

Kam hai! Atom bomb gira de! 🤣

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-DarkSlayer-

@-DarkSlayer-

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#19

RES!

Unres.

Chalo, jitne joote maarne hai mujhe maar lo. Main yaheen hoon. Lol.

Kar li pitai? Now onto my review. 😆

Effing hell, Shona. Kamla's betrayal was worse than the RaKhi twist. How in the world can a mother forget about her own flesh and blood and help her ex-boss' daughter?? That is sick and twisted. *cries* But I loved the way you portrayed Kalpi. Damn, no emotion no nothing. It was perfect. Something that would probably happen to me if the man I was to marry decided to marry my bff without telling me and my Mom helped them. Her retracting within herself was perfect. Hats off to that.

Coming to Kamla and Pakhi. Not going to say anything except crack my knuckles and pick up my axe. Grr.

Raghav. Now another character beautifully penned. Yup, you've captured his reaction to Kalpi's blankness perfectly. I genuinely wanted to give him a bear hug and tell him that one day everything will be fine. But at the same time, worried about him and the drinking. Specially him and DUI. Hope for the best.

Okay, now you've gotta update this girl. I'm dying to know what's going to happen next. Specially the whole "I will come back one day" from Kalpi. I just wonder where she's going and what she's going to do. Please hurry up.

Now I saw you wanted Title suggestions. I have a few but don't know how good they are.

1) The Doors of Betrayal

2) Wedding Abyss

3) Her Revenge

4) Destiny's Game

That's all I can think of. Since it's only one chapter so far, I couldn't come up with much. But please do continue soon and let me know what you thought of the titles.

Lots of love,

Raz

🤗 ❤️

Edited by AWriterAtHeart - 11 years ago

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ifrini

@ifrini

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#20

Super likes for the post.. Do continue, I wish the real one too goes this way.

Knowing Kalpi, after the initial shock and outburst, she will withdraw into her shell .. Raghav b't the happy /smiling/fun loving Kalpi out of her but then his this task will bury her further down and he fill be most hurt by it, as he knows he caused it .. We will get to see new side of Raghav now