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Posted: 12 years ago
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It's my first writing this might be lame, weird filled with mistakes. Pls bear with me read it and let me know how it is.

"Ok so if I complete 2 units a day without taking a break maybe I can meet the Deadline…." said the girl who had been stuck on her chair since the past 10 days doing nothing but worshipping her books.

"Manviii come on we are getting late we are leaving to go meet your Aunt in half an hour"

"Mum but you know I have so many deadlines to meet, I don't have time and I can't come out of the house"

"Yeah well you can't stick on your chair like that! You need to get out and my cousin has come after 5 years to meet us"

Well all Manvi needed now was, sleep, time and lots of Coffee.

"Manvi beta how are you? You have become such a grown up girl, I remember the last time I saw you were a little girl" Said her Aunt who acted like she is seeing her after 10 years.
Well I had to grow up I dint really have a choice Manvi said to herself
"Namaste Masi, I am fine" Manvi dint really speak much with people she dint know much.

"So how are you studies going beta have you finished school?" asked masi with so much curiosity
"Yes I just finished school 6 months back and now…"

Before Manvi could finish her aunt interrupted with a genius Idea

"6 MONTHS back! We should be looking for a boy for you by now, this is the perfect time"

Can I bash myself on the wall?? Manvi asked herself!
"Actually masi I am now taking an extended course and am just 19 am not getting married now!" Said Manvi all frustrated.

She started to fake coughing just to get out of there and go somewhere else.

As Manvi was heading in the balcony her phone rang she picked it up and she heard the voice that she was longing to hear, but not in that tone
"MANVIII, what is wrong with you why are you acting like I don't exist???" Said her Best/Boyfriend. "Lisn.."
"NO Manvi am not listening you haven't spoken to me in the past 5 days, do I even exist in your world??? I called, texted, but no reply! I can't believe you are doing this to me Manvi, I mean do you even care that am alive. Manvi it's enough! We need a break more like you need a break!!" said her frustrated, angry Best/Boyfriend who was missing her more than anything in the world!
"Viraat Lisn" before she could say one more word Viraat dis connected the phone.

Manvi said that she was heading home with the driver to finish up on her work as her mom would stop talking with her cousin for the next 3 hours.

Manvi decided to stop by her favourite place, the place where she would spend a lot of time with Viraat since he couldn't come at her house because that was the last place which has some privacy. Sitting by the river side she tried to relax herself. She couldn't believe the last conversation she just had with Viraat, the person who meant everything to her EVERYTHING spoke to her like that.

She decided to check her messages which she had not touched since the past 5 days.

Her inbox was filled with messages from "Viraat"

After reading them she already had realized that it was her fault and she had totally ignored him for the past days.

She knew that it wasn't the best time to call him back, but the only thing she wished for right now was Him! She wanted to be with him for a while away from all that stress.

At the same time Viraat regretted talking to her like that instead of understanding what she is going through. He wanted to be with her but he knew that it wasn't possible for now because of the way he spoke to her earlier. He decided to go and get some peace at their favorite place.

As soon as he reached there she saw a petite figure sitting their lost in her own world. Without a second though he knew that was his Manvi. She was sitting their hugging her knees and admiring the nature lost in her own world.

He went there and sat next to her; she immediately felt someone's presence and turned at him. She looked at him and said "Viraaat" in a confused and soft voice.

Just then they both looked into each other eyes with regret and guilt and the first word that came out together was "Sorry"
Manvi couldn't control herself and fell in him arms and said "I missed you" and Viraat promptly replied "I missed you more" she slowly loosened their hug and looked into his eyes and they both said "I love you" and then laughed at their timing. Just then Viraat said" I promise I'll never talk like that ever!" and Manvi confessed that it was her fault for not taking out the least time she could for him. "I promise I'll never ignore you no matter what", just then they stood up together and walked hand in hand along the river side talking and catching with all the moments they missed with each other.

Okkk so I was frustrated and stressed so I decide to write an OS for the Very first time! I pretty much the way Manvi is under the pressure of deadlines. I just wanted to write something even though am not a writer kinda person. I could bother less about the grammar mistake I have made, pls ignore them all. And this is my first OS so I would love to see comments and critiques. If you liked it pls dont forget to press the like button. I have another story in mind too which I will write as an SS if I get a good response on how I did in this one. But that will probably be next month. I always wanted to write something VirMan related for quite a while …. So if you guys think I should continue writing pls do let me know. Thanks.

Lots of Love

DiNa <3

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Dinaa :P

This was pretty good girly! I enjoyed reading it, short but sweet!!

Please Do write the SS I'm eager to see the concept of it! <3

-luv Pari :P :D
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Loved it.It was so sweet.😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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It is lovely...Enjoyed reading it...
Yeah...Do continue with the SS... :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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hey dina...ur first os is good...i liked it...at some points it was funny...especially Well I had to grow up I dint really have a choice...this line...good try...so u r frustrated and outcome is this...good...u should write something...i 'd love to read it...do well in ur exams and take care...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey ur first attempt ws awesum... plzz try to continue soon... i luved it! 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Dina.. I really liked your very first OS.. It was simple and sweet.. you should write more often.. 👍🏼 .. Would love to read your SS..Please continue soon.. take care 😊

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thanks for the comments and encouragement. Will write my SS soon, The concept is quite different I don't want to post it coz I am scared someone might steal it before I write my SS. :P
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Posted: 12 years ago
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this was good...i loved da way u showed manvi's frustration...

do write ur SS will be waiting for it


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