ShraMan FF: Holding You, (C18 pg 102) - Page 26

Hello Saleha, I have to open an account here just to read your story! This was amazing! Now I did understand, why Sanjh cried reading this! BTW she is my roommate. She said such good things about your story, I thought she was exaggerating! But no! You are truly a gem .

u hv a very nice talent of portraying d hurt, sorrow, desperation n loneliness of Shravan...lekin ab bas bhi karo yaar...bahut ro liya dono ne ...ab aur mat rulao...

Great update as usual Sal. Oh God! Why are these two oblivious of each others' feelings. Ego! Ego! Ego! This word is going to ruin everything. Just shut up and kiss her Shravan! Update soon Sal. Loved the longing between the two. So distant, yet so close. So close, yet so distant.

Sumo was hurt beyond any words, she didn't want to go in front of him but wanted to make sure he is fine. Shravan's inner fight between forgiveness or hatred towards his parents. Hope Shravan understand Sumo's feelings for him & reciprocate to it with full heart. Hoping to see some light hearted moments between Shraman soon.

Beautifully written
Vinu

Originally posted by: Itssanjh

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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">First of all sal❤️thank you so much for dedicating the Chapter to me! But...But...The spamming is on! Don't think, I am not going to irritate you anymore! Just be prepared to get irritated after 3-4 days!😆😉</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">It was as good as I had expected! Just now I am having my dinner, and as usual my eyes moistened! And I normally don't cry!</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">What can I say about this chapter Sal! So many to say! So many moments,</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2">So this how it felt. Loneliness. He looked at his room in the semi darkness. He wouldn't wake up to the soft humming of her song, the left side of his bed would always be cold. The bathroom would not be filled with her citrus scent anymore. The cupboard would be filled only with his clothes, with colors she found bland. His room would be empty, once again like its owner. -<font color="#990000"> deep and powerful yearning for his Sumo.</font></font>

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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2">He didn't have it in him to trust again, to believe again. He might be a coward, he might be too afraid to love, to meet with disappointments and he admitted it, at least to himself. He didn't have anything to give anymore<font color="#0000cc">. - </font><font color="#990000">like loosing his prime purpose of life!</font></font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">Shravan-nirmala part👏</font>

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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2">Their eyes met for a temporarily moment and they couldn't look away. She leaned slowly towards him, her hands on his strong shoulders as his own hands came to hold her elbows.<font color="#0000cc"> - </font><font color="#990000">still their heart sings the same song.</font>
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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2"><font color="#0000cc">Then, </font>the whole park portion<font color="#0000cc">- </font><font color="#990000">when you know the answer, when you want to believe, but your experiences binds you to have a leap of faith!</font></font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="2" color="#0000cc">Amazing Sal! Amazing! You are really doing a great job! I am totally in love with your work. Lots love and ek bone crushing Wala hug for you.</font>

Hey you deserved it 🤗
I actually don't mind the spamming, like it helps me to write faster 😆
I love your take on the lines and I love when you guys quote a para you liked because sometimes I am not sure of what I have written so it helps ❤️ 😆
And I am loving your spamming 😆
Ek bone crushing hug back to you 😳

Originally posted by: Faith28

Superbly narrated...pLs upd tg soon😊

Thanks Faith will try to update soon :)

Originally posted by: maddy_edkv

Sal , right now, I'm feeling an immense pain in my heart.

😭😭

Sal, you write so well that I can feel myself in their shoes.

Yeh kitna painful hai yaar.

Whenever I thought, about what would have happened after their reconciliation, I always imagined a happy life for Shraman.

But, when you're describing their trauma, I feel like crying.

Life is such a twisted math.

I always quit the painful part in a movie or book. But im loving to read your story. You are such a wonderful writer. Take a hug Sal.

Please update soon. I can't let the same pain pierce me so many days. I want new pain.

Even pain seems to be good when you're writing it.

I'm oh so in love with this story.

Please update soon.

Love

Madhu

I know it gets heavy sometimes but the thing you said about their happy life it will come I promise they just need to get through some more more heartbreak, realizations as I want them to come stronger out of all this. Thank you so much for views, it means a lot to me 😳 🤗

Sal...🤗
Just read last 3 parts in one go...!!
So here the res 😉
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Killer one Sal... 👏
Ramnath Malhotra's redemption...!!
Can I tell you that you had written ALL in your style what I badly wanted to read and badly wanted to see...A hug your way for that buddy... 🤗
Thank you 😊

Oh you truely didnt realised Mr. Malhotra...not only you, nobody realised actually!!
Shravan always had wanted an assurance...assurance that he was NEEDED and that he do BELONG...to someone, to his loved ones!!

Hall of fame...Just a mere materialistic things!!
He do had found everything...success, his own identity, name, fame...But lost himself, his true self!!
What an irony!!

The most fav line of mine here Sal...
In the quest of creating a man, he had killed the child inside him and as much as he tried he couldn't bring him back....Loved it sooo much ❤️
Exact words to explain to what extend, you had destroyed Shravan, your son Mr. Malhotra!!
Killed it here girl 👏

Even though Ramnath was to be blame for Shravan's pain but!!
I always had a soft corner for him...I cant hate him...not more than Nirmala Ahuja!!
He had made his son a successful personality, he had made his son strong n confident individual, he had loved his son with all his heart...N most importantly...He was there with him...Atleast he was there!!
He was in every damn way, a better parent than Nirmala Ahuja...N thats a fact for sure !!

Redemption...It is what you can do now...He sure was late but better late than never!!
N yes,...He does have his support system with him this time...His life,his wife, his best friend, his childhood friend, his Sumo!!
She sure was the woman who would stand strong no matter what comes her way when it comes to Shravan, her chashmish!!

Shravan was going to hurt. His heart was going to break, again....❤️ ❤️
Actually Shravan's heart was made to be broken!!
No matter who was at fault, but his heart n soul was made to be broken!!

Scared Shravan, insecure Shravan...He always was!!
But Sumo can see through...through the facade, through his mask of indifference!!

Morning scene...
ShraMan at peace...N am at peace❤️
Their bickering...Oh!! How much I missed it ...Loved it !!
Their cute, lovey dovey moments...Haaye
Beautifully penned down girl...❤️ ❤️

Shuddering Shravan...Aww!!

It was funny how easily they could fight with each other but when they had to open up to the other, they found their palms sweating and their hearts racing....Indeed!!
#ShraManGoals

Emerald earrings...Aww!!
Shravan..❤️ ❤️
Sumo truely was imprinted all over his mind... 😳

Aapne ghar ? Ye ghar tumhara nahi hai kya...Oh My!!
It did felt like...Like a child is speaking...A hurted child, complaining child, an insecure child who is afraid...afraid to lose her...Who wants an assurence that shes here ...with him...foever!!
Loved it !❤️
Actually Shravan's Love was like a child...Stubborn, Sweet, always giving, demanding, Soo.Innocent, soulful...!!

The way Sumo assured him...She is the Sumo we all want to see...She is The REAL SUMO!!
Thank you Sal...🤗

Tumhe kabhi bhi kisi cheez ke bare main baat karna ho to main hoon. Jab tumhara dil chahe, to bula lena, main poch jaon gi....Thats what he ever wanted!!
And Only n only Sumo can give him that!!...Sooo damn loved it Sal..❤️

Hamesha...Aww!!
It gives a diff feeling when Shravan whispered it seeing her retreating figure!!

I soo Loved it how you had chosen that very same place for confrontation!!
It held special place n memories.!!

Loved how you had taken care of simplest things which held so much importance and feels real...Like the way Ramnath seeing Shravan sitting infront of him n thinking how times flew!!
Great work buddy...Small things but held great importance n left great impact!!


The way you had written the whole convo...Splendid job Sal 👏
I can literally imagine it all happening infront of my eyes...Nailed it here buddy !!

He was an object to them, his love was nothing more than a thing. One had estimated his worth, the other had sold him...Nothing can describe Shravan's pain than these words!!
Can feel connected to them!!

was a nightmare and there was no emergency exit from it....Ah!!...The words n their impact... 👏

She was the only one I ever wanted. The only thing I ever asked from you...It had left an impact on my heart like no other Sal...Touched me hell deeply❤️
Made me cry...N mind it am not one to cry easily...Always in control!!
So you can imagine its effect on me!!

Shravan really would have choosen his father had he asked him to chose btw Sumo n him!!
Shravan's condition n state of mind in your words Sal...Oh My My!! 😭
Kitna rulaane ka iraada hai Sal??
Nailed it...Killed it girl!!

He wanted to sleep and never wake up again....Pain pain n pain!!
How do you bring someone from the darkness, how do you hold their hand and ask them to stay?...Espacially when that person is hopeless!!

One touch and all his defences came crashing down, he was so vulnerable with her, so exposed...He always was!!
This is what makes them ShraMan!!

Crying...!!
It is how your body speaks when your mouth fails to explain the pain or happiness you feel...!!
Shravan...My heart goes out to him... 😭

Darkness engulfed him as oxygen left his body....Oh My God!! 😭
Nervous Breakdown 😭

This is the sound of heartbreak, it's silent....Oh My My!!
One line n it said it all!!
Touching one 👏

OMG Sal!!
You are something else ya...Indeed !!
Hats off to you buddy... 👏
Am in loveee with this one...❤️ ❤️
Thank you for writing it...😊

Ok!!
So I have literally written a short OS here 😆
Cant help it you know 😉😆
Nikke se Nik se Nikka sa likha nahi jaata 😆

Thanks for the pm dear...😊
Loads n Loads of Love n tightest of 🤗 🤗
Nikka sa Nik ❤️

Res 😆
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Sal...🤗
Am backkk!! 😎 😆

Ok Ok...Without any bak bak...lets go to the upii!!😉
😭
It was me!!

Shravan...The Broken Soul!! 🥺
He clutched the side of his t-shirt, where his heart rested,...This gesture...It says much more than words could!!
When the pain in the heart becomes unbearable, you starts feeling it externally too!!
N in Shravan's case...It was too much for a person like him.!!

Take it away... Please, just take it away...An innocent and broken beyond repair soul is begging to take away all the pain...The pain of heartbreak that too by your loved ones.
It pinches my heart!!

Sumo's care...❤️
It all that Shravan needed...Always!!

They belong together. Be it in the hollows of the darkness or the rays of light....Soulmates!!
They are together...n thats what matters the most!!
They can face everything together being each other's support and power!!

Please, hold on to me...You know Sal,...For me it signifies much more than physical support.
It feels like Sumo is asking and begging him to take her hand and stand up...To face every difficulty and problems.
To take strength from her.
As if to assure him that She will be there with him always...Just hold onto her.
And Shravan...As if he had nothing left in him to trust anyone,...He doesnt want to believe anyone, anything.
And he was sliping into unconsciousness...Unconcious of lonliness, of depression or of Death!!

Shravan." She whispered...It felt to me as if She was calling out his name to bring him back from that darkness from where there isnt any return.
And it worked!!

Dekho main hoon Sumo, main hoon tumhare saath...Telling him that she is here with him.And will always be there, by his side.No matter what!!

Tum ho?
Chod ke to nahi jaogi."...His insecurity asking her again for an assurance, a promise...Which his mind was trying to deny and his heart to believe.
The heart n soul who was afraid to be broken again...brutally!!

Kabhi nahi....Two words...Two most important words.
They were all what he needed to come back to her.

Chale?...An extanded hand by Sumo and Shravan accepted and hold onto her and do came back.
She and her love do brought him back to life!!

his head on her torso... ❤️
Like a child found warmth and security in his mother.

Her nimble fingers checking his breathing near his nostrils...Its the fear...Fear of losing him.
Her reason to live.

his best friend wouldn't fail him....❤️❤️
N this time there will be a wife who loves him more than anything along with his best friend.
She wasnt assuring him only but herself too.

It's like something had left his body...Oh My !!
It does felt like that. His will to live n believe left ..his soul was lost.

she had lost him to all the betrayals, the hurt and the hate....You did Sumo...but not in a way that he cant return back to you. His heart was ,is and will always remain attached to his...Who will always find their way to each other.

Sumo...This girl wasnt what CV's had turned her into.
She had the same broken heart as Shravan...No one to call hers...No one to care for her, no one to keep a hand on head in a loving manner...She was all by herself!!
She had to growup...independent , earn ...Along with a debt and feeling of liability.
To live with anger in your heart may not be easy but living witg a guilt is the worst!!
Sumo had that guilt within her all along!!

Sumo-Ramnath convo...Beautiful ❤️
his head was bowed down....My heart goes out to Ramnath here too. 😕

Kuch chahiye tha, Uncle ?...When Sumo asked it to Ramnath, It felt like he was asking for his son when he said...Shravan!!😕
Father's heart wants his son back!!

the man in front of her acknowledged her for the first time....Can feel for Sumo here.She always had longed for this acknowledge.Poor Girl!!

Ramnath's apology ...Sumo understanding him...Beautiful penned down Sal❤️

After all, they were both bound by the love they had for the same person and they both had tried in their own clumsy way to protect him....So damn true!!
They both loved him with all that they had...but their ways of protecting him were wrong.
They took it all upon themselves not letting him decide for himself.

Shravan's decision of talking to his parents...His first step towards his happiness!!

The urge to connect to him was so sudden,...They got conscious around him.Isnt it natural.

perfect family photo, where he wasn't left out....Oh My God... 😭
Shravan...you didnt deserved that!!

I soo loved how you had written Shravan looking at his mother from the corner of his eyes trying not to let them notice it,...Compairing his eyes with her,...Looking at her apperence, how she looked now...❤️ ❤️
It felt like a lost child, dying to feel his parents love is looking at them with all the longing he had always within his heart.
How he looked at his parents...So damn loveddd it ❤️ ❤️
These things makes your writing more effective Sal 👏

Unn hone aapko blackmail kiya aur aap ne dobara palat ke nahi dekha...Loved how you had written it...Shravan sitting and resting his head against seat n eyes closed...So many feels...!!

Mere liye ya aapne liya ?...This is the question!!
Bang on here Sal 👏

The way Shravan let ot all out...Loved it to the core Sal...❤️
Killed it girl.
The way he bared his heart out infront of her...OMG!!
Brought tears in my eyes 😭

I so loved how Shravan asked for some time for understanding all this.
Awesome ❤️

Sumo wanted him to let out his anger, his pain...Its what he needed now!!
A confrontation,..Answers to all his questions.

Ladti, jagad thi, mujhse bolti....This is what she must have done...Atleast had tried for once...But no!!😕
You shouldnt give up without trying even once!!

Because it was easier for you to give up on me."...Ouch!!
It hurts...much more!!
No matter how much it hurts ...but it was a truth, A bitter truth that you cant deny.
Not only Sumo, Nirmala Malhotra had also given up on him ...just like that!!

My heart is torn btw Shravan and Sumo here.
I cant say who was wrong...Ofcourse Sumo was but ...Was she to this extand????
No!!
She was indebted all her life. Living like a liability isnt easy.Where evrryone wants to get rid of her.
One question always linger on my mind...
Would Ramnath Malhotra had accepted Sumo as his DIL if she would have chose Shravan at that time,...Wouldnt she again be considered as selfish girl who only thinks about herself...wouldnt she be accused of snatching her sister's happiness by doing so...Wouldnt she be compared to Nirmala Ahuja again in that situation as well for being independent, selfish woman...And most importantly would Shravan had believed her if she had told him about the bitter truth of his father???
NO!!!!
He was so much blinded by his undying faith and respect in his father.
What an irony...Sumo was bound to be blamed!!!!!
But Shravan also cant be blamed...Both were right in their places!!

How can you expect me to come towards you when you made me feel unworthy every damn time...True that!!

The two best friends who had always something to say were both at lose of words, today....So beautiful Sal ❤️ ❤️
Coz both were fighting their own battles...Kuch khud se, Kuch ek dusre se, Kuch ek dusre ke liye apne aap se...!!

Ek baar koshish ki hoti....That cant be denied!!
She should have.
N that longing was always there.

You have already lost me...Ouch!!!
It hurts badly 😭 😭

. But if I saw you hurting the way I did. I would have given up in a matter of a heartbeat....Shravan ❤️
He would have been!!...As seeing Sumo in pain was never Shravan's thing!!

main pichle das saal se tumhara intezaar kar rahi hoon...Oh Poor Sumo 😭

Their tears mingled together even though they were the cause of each other's sorrow....Beautiful one Sal 👏
Sooo beautiful❤️ ❤️

Mere liye PCT chod sakti ho...His mind wants assurance and his heart wants to believe her!!

sawal ye hai ke kya tum mujhse kabhi ye maang paoge."...They both were mystery to each other...Yet nobody knows them better than the other one...Two pieces of puzzle who are incomplete without each other...They are ShraMan and their Love!!

he couldn't hurt people he loved, he couldn't give them the taste of their own medicine, especially knowing how much it hurt and even he was able to, his conscience wouldn't leave him with the satisfaction of his deed, his guilt would keep haunting him....Oh My God!!
This is Shravan!!...Thats it!!
These lines describes Shravan ..the true inner Shravan.!!

Torn btw Heart and mind...are we Mr. Malhotra!!

Loved to see Sumo in her real Sumo avtaar❤️
Galti...Isnt it what everyone makes her feel always.

she was not allowed to break in front of him....True!!❤️
Actually she wasnt allowed to break in front of anyone..!!

ShraMan...Both in sooo much pain 😭
Both are incomplete, breaking without each other...!!

Something was broken between them and mere words wouldn't be enough to mend it....For now it is!!
But eventually they'll find their way towards each other...And this time it'll be forever!!

You my girl are a magician...Creating a magic with your words.
You have written ShraMan's pain in the best possible way buddy...Hats off to you.👏

Uff!!
I didnt know what I have written Sal...N I guess I had written enough 😆
Sorry it is very much longer 😉

Thanks for the pm buddy 😊

Loads n Loads og Love n beary 🤗 🤗
Nikka sa Nik ❤️

Originally posted by: Nik03

Sal...🤗
Just read last 3 parts in one go...!!
So here the res 😉

I missed reading your comments 🤗
Unress soon ;)