Once Again[AU]~A ShraMan FF(PART 10_PG 24)15.02.17 - Page 9

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Posted: 8 years ago
#81
awesome update
too good
shravan is too cute
loved it
continue soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
#82
Hey Anu,
Sorry for the late comment, was really busy. This for the last two updates. Firstly so glad your Sumo is a painter and she's making Shravan's portrait. Just imagining it feels so good. 😉 and secondly now we know the reason Sumo is mad at him. Sumo has every right to be mad at him, but she is melting down because of his efforts. You truly depicted all this clearly. Hoping Shravan does more to change her heart completely. And the way your story is moving forward, looks like that's gonna happen soon. So my dea update soon with some cute moments of them together.

Lubna.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#83
Hiii Shona!!!😃
mein yahan bhi aagae😆


CHAPTER 2
WOAH...tht was hell amazing😃
bijlian hi bijlian gir rahi thi😆
Poor Shrvan kept on aplogysing...but wht he actually did...thts intrugigng...ab kya kand kiya hai is sahab nay🤪
Sarada hoa sorry🤣...her anger n outburst👏
mera curiosity leven high hi kar dea n so is my grin😃
Just imagine colorful Sumo in anger...dekhnay wala scene😆...Anu tremendous😉


CHAPTER 3
OMG!!!
My excitement has no bounds😃
Zabardast say bhi zabardast👍🏼
There cute lil moment was❤️
Cudnt stop herself from caring about him...she still loves him..just denying it..ego prob
Shravan needs to practice his lines once more😆...ek achi si apologyzing speech bhi dani nhi ati😛
Kya hoa tha...wht did he do wrong...wht insult???..haaah..hell curious to knw😳🤪


CHAPTER 4
Anu! Anu! Anu!
upi by upi meri tu excitement bharti hi jaa rhi hai...really ur FF is mindblowing⭐️
its a sheer pleasure reading it😃
woah...the flashy was🥺
he did so wrong...gussa achay achon ko laay dobta hai!
ohh Suman's room scene was❤️
Shravan climed the window😆...so sweet😳
really loved their convo...beautifully penned!👏
She loves him hell alot...bas us ko smjhnay mein dear ho gae!
thy r staying for one week...which means he has a week to manaofiy her😉
potrait...shez drawing him..awwhhh❤️


Chapter 5
WHT THE f***???😡
HOW DARE HE???😡
Sumo's anger is fully justified...i mean how cud he be so insensetive...tht was really bad of him.
I dont think so she shud forgive him aisay hi...just make him prove tht hez really sorry n wont repeat it again...i mean comeon yarr its his second time...i knw hez a human being aur ghaltiyan insaan say hi hoti hain par still assuranc tu chahiyay akhir dil ka mamala hai.
feelings n emotions are not for sale or exibition k jiss ka dil kiya un ka mazak bana kar chala jaay.
my nazuk kali u just nailed it👏
loved it! ❤️loved it!❤️ loved it!❤️



TADAA!!!🥳
Magnificent job Shona!!👍🏼👏
hats off bae😉
plz plz ab ziyada intezar na karana...plz update soon...curiosity n excitement r on its peak😳
Shona love u yar🤗
m hell impressed by ur FF...its hell aamazing!⭐️
it was sheer pleasure reading it...by the end i had a hiiuge grin ruling my face😃



Take Care!
Jellybean❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
#84
Nice update..
Poor sumo... Shravan always reacted without knowing Sumo's side of story...Sumo's anger is justified..
Excited to see what Sumo will decide now... Continue soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
#85
hey anu
its amazing. shravan is always bhukkad. nimmo ko sev ki sabji aur moong dal halwa banana thodi aati hai. use to nirmala special daal banana chahiye tha.
the flashback part is very emotional. he wanted to talk about the most imp decision and she coldnot come. all her efforts were burnt. really sad. hope she forgives him soon and they both confess their love for each other.
thanks for the pm and update soon.
love
Madhu
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Posted: 8 years ago
#86
Flashback was really sad part for Sumo!... He was waiting for her confess his love but she couldn't go because of exhibition got fire... But this guy is not ready to listen the truth, was Sumo has to be done for this... After he came to know what really happened he is asking apology since 5 years... Us waqt kya dimag gaas chadne gaya tha, such mein wohi bolte hai na gusse me aadmi ka sochne samaj ne ka shakti cheen leta hai... That's why think twice before speak.
I hope Shravan ko uski maafi jaldi mil jaye aur humein toda inka romance dekh ne ko mil jaye 😉

Nice update & thanx for the PM...

For Finally u can take 4 or 5 yrs leap & u can show Shraman became parents.. Most of the stories had same thing... Its just a suggestion... Likh na tumhe hi hai...

Vinu
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Posted: 8 years ago
#87
Hie...m back early...sorry for not replying personally but read each one of them and thanks a lot...Actually don't have time ..Itne saari packing karni hai aur problems bhi bohot hai...SUNAIN thank u sooo much for commenting...VIMIKRAO will take ur suggestion in consideration abt the epilogue...thanks for dropping by ur thoughts...This one is dedicated to ARPITA...aaj jo bhi hua uske liye...😊so here goes chappy ...No proof read
ENJOY

ONCE AGAIN


The next morning

Sumo came out of the room...Ready to talk to Shravan...

Everyone was seated on the dining table having breakfast

"Good Morning Suman..aaj der se uthi hu...Tabiyet toh thik hai na..??"Priya asked

"Nahi maa...woh sardi hai na...issiliye ..."

"Aacha..chal aa...breakfast karle..."

She sat down...facing Shravan

"Toh suman mai soch rahi thi ke jabke humlog ek hafte ke liye yaha ruke hai toh kuch karte hai...Matlab..."

"Mai samaj gayi aunty...par kya kya kare...planning karni hogi..."

"Tum ek kaam kyu nahi karti...aaj Shravan ke saath planning kar lo...baad mey hume batana...kyu Shravan??"Priya said

"Ha aunty..yeh sahi rahega...kyu sumo??"

"Thik hai...breakfast ke baad karte hai..."

After the breakfast in sumo's room

"Suno na...aaj ke din ka mast plan hua hai mera..."

"batao phir..."

"Yaha nahi...bahar challenge..."

"Kaha??"

"Tum aayogi na..??"

"Par kaha ye toh batao...??"

"Tum bas ye bolo ke aayogi ya nahi..."

"aayungi..par-"

"Thik hai...aadhe ghante mey milte hai meri gadi mey..."

"Suno toh..."

But Shravan ran out a whirlwind...

"Aajeb ladka hai ye...kuch bataya bhi nahi..."

After half an hour in Shravan's car

"Aare waah..aaj time par aa gayi.."

"Bolo aab ,,,kya plan hai??"

"Ha...toh pehle humlog jaayenge school aur canteen mey lunch karenge..uske baad long drive pey jaayenge aur ring road ka ek chakkar merenge phir purana quilla jayenge aur boating shoating karenge aur phir movie dekhenge aur finally India Gate ke kulfi khaayenge..."..."Kya hua??Plan pasand nahi aaya??"

"Hmm...aacha hai...chale??"

"Chalo..!!"

So they headed to their school first...canteen mey samosa with green chutney...

"Sumo yaad hai tumhe...mai ek samose ke saath puri kr puri chutney khaa jata tha..."

"Haa...bhukkad the aur bhukkad he rahoge..."

Meanwhile in Tiwari Quilla

"Priya ye lo...coffee"

"Thanks ...saalo ho gaye tumhari hath ke coffee piye huye.."

"Hmm...vaise mai tumhe sorry kehna chahti hu..."

"Kisliye??"

"Woh...tiwariji ke jaane ke baad..hum log aa nahi paye...actually LA mey bohot kaam chal raha tha aur Ram bohot busy the...Aur Shravan bhi Newyork mey tha..."

"Its ok Nirmala...Ismey itni badi baat kya hai...tum aayi toh thi na baad mey..."

"Par ..."

"Its ok na...Suman ka bhi dekhlo...who toh 10 din baad aayi thi..waha uska exhibition tha na..waha problem huya tha kuch...aur baad mey usse ticket bhi nahi mila tha...aur who bhi aayi bas do haft eke liye...tum itna dukhi mat ho Nirmala...hota hai..."

"thank you priya.."They hugged

"Vaise mai tumhe kuch dikhana chahti hu..."

"Kya??"

Nirmala took her phone...opened the gallery and showed her a picture...

"Ye kaun hai??"

"Shravan ke hone vaali biwi..."

ShraMan Scene

After the long drive, they went to the boating site...

"Sumo uss green boat mey baithte hai..."

"Kya?? Bilkul nahi...Blue vaali boat..."

"Nahi yaar sumo...Blue nahi please..."

"C'mon Shravan...tumhe abhi bhi blue pasand nahi hai..??Blue vaali boat mey he baithange varna mai nahi aa rahi..."

"Aacha baba...Blue toh blue.."

Tiwari quilla scene

"Ye tum kya keh rahi ho...Saach??Shravan ko paata hai ye??"

"Nahi Nahi...woh toh pagal hai...shaadi ka naam sunte he bhag jaata hai...pata nahi kya problem hai...parso he maine kaha tha key yaha aane se pehle us ladki se milkar aate hai..lekin nahi..."

"Vaise kaafi sundar ladki hai ..."

"Woh toh hai...aur mujhe yakeen hai ke Shravan ko pasand aayegi...London return hai...Miss Delhi bhi hai...Sundar hai..aur aajkal ke baacho ke bhasha mey hot bhi hai...Aur swabhav se bhi aachi hai..."

"Aacha...tum mili usse??"

"Aare nahi...Kamini ke kisi dost ke beti hai ye...koi Mrs.Singh karke hai...unki beti hai...Mai usse mili nahi par who Vandy ki bohot aachi dost hai...wohi mujhe bata rahi thi..."

"Aacha...Naam kya hai??"

"Urvashi"

"Hmm...aacha hai...toh Shravan ko kab baatane vaali ho??"

"Ha...agle hafte humari wedding anniversary hai na...toh Ram ne ek party rakhi hai...vahipe milva dungi...waha baatcheet karengi aura agar bhagwan ke maarji hui toh tabhi engagement bhi karva denge...Tum dono ko bhi aana hai ha..."

"Waah...aacha plan hai...aur hum zaroor aayenge..."

Shraman Scene

They reach India gate to eat kulfi after watching the movie..they park the car..

"Chalo..."

"Ha..."suddenly sumo's phone rings

"Shravan ek kaam karo na...kulfi yahi pe le aao...bahar bohot sardi hai...mey ye phone attend karti hu tabtak..."

"Thik hai...Pista flavor ya malai??"

"Dono.."

"Bhukkadi..."Shravan smiled ..

"Yes kiara..what happened..---"Suman received the call

"Shravan stood at the kulfi wala's as he made the kulfi and stared at sumo through the window and started thinking...

Ye hai meri purani Sumo...Meri sumo...kaise batau aab tumhe ke kitna chahta hu tumhe...kyunki tum toh abhi ke liye aise ho...ghar jaane ke baad vapas jahgdogi mere saath...par tumhari koi galati nahi hai...kaash uss din maine tumhari baat sun li hoti...

FLASHBACk

(this is the same as it was in the previons chappy..Its shravan's POV)

I called her at 2.15..she didn't pick it..."Raaste mey hogi shayad..."

2.30..2.45...2.50...3.00...

I waited and waited...but neither did she come nor did she pick the call...At last I left the shop at 5.30..totally enraged ...I called her assistant Kiara..

"Hey kiara...can you please tell me where Sumo is??"

"She is in the office right now...actually at the exhibition..."

"Thanks.."I cut the call and headed towards the office...

When I went there, bunch of people standing outside the office...

I peeped in just to find Sumo hugging a woman..smiling and saying thankyou ...everyone was also smiling...My volcano burst out and I started clapping...

"Wow...Miss. Suman Tiwari...great..."I said ..with total anger...

"Shravan..."

I cut her in middle..

"Shut up ...How dare you sumo...mai tumhara 4 ghanto se coffee shop mey intazaar kar raha tha...aur tum yaha khushiyaan mana rahi ho...GREAT"

"Shravan...just listen to me..."She tried to tell me but I didn't stop...

"U know madam" I said to the lady who she had hugged"U are investing your money in this girl...Please for god sake don't do this..."

"Shravan??"Sumo was shook totally...her bloodshot eyes said that...but for me...I didn't care..

"Excuse me??"The woman was confused

"Listen to me...She is a girl who will never keep your word...Trust me..I am her best friend...I know her in and out...I am saving your money...She will just give you fake assurances...But will never fulfill it...She will always put a sweet innocent face and fool everybody...fooled me also...but now onwards... NO...forget me forever...Maine kaha tha tumse..mujhe meri zindagi ke sabse important baat karni thi...par tum nahi aayi...Aaj se...I am a STRANGER for you..."

That word...I just blurted it out...It hurt me hard in but I ignored it again...

"Shravan...SHRAVAN..."but I didn't stop...I left her just as I did last time...Once Again I hurt her...All due to my foolishness...

When I learnt about the fire fiasco I was terribly shocked...Thats why she didn't come...that was the reason...I went to her flat there...She was packing her bags...

"Sumo mai..."

"Tum...andar kaise aaye??STRANGERS knock karke aate hai..."

"Sumo mujhe nahi pata tha ke waha aag lagi thi...mujhe laga ..."

"Kya laga tumhe Shravan...Bolo..Hamesha TUMHE hi sab kuch lagta hai..TUMHE he laga ke mai jhoot aur aiishwarya sach bol rahi thi...TUMNE he saare rishte tod diye...maine maaf kardiya..par phirse..TUMHE hi laga mai jaanboch kar naahi aayi...TUMHE he laga mai khushiya mana rahi thi...sab kuch tumhe he lagta hai Shravan...mera kya??hamesha mai galat kaise ho sakti hu??Bolo na...aab bas...Bohot ho gaya..aaj ke baad jaise tumne kaha ..WE ARE STRANGERS...ainda se tumhe jo jo samajna hai who samajlena..aur please mujhse baat mat karna..."

Sh went away to India...Nanu was no more..I did't know that...when I went to India after 10 days.. she had already left for New York again...I met her there but she ignore me totally...passed away besides me just like a Stranger...

Flashback Ends

"Sahab...""SAHAB..""Aapki kulfi..."

"Ha..dijiye..kitne huye??"

Shravan took the kulfi and started walking towards the car...Sumo had finished the call and waved him to come fast...

Suddenly a woman accidentally hit him and the kulfi fell on her dress...

"Oy..kaha dekh kar chal rahe ho tum...tumhe dikhayi nahi deta kya...dress kharab kardiya mera"

"I am so sorry madam..."

SUMO'S POV

I had decuded to talk to him while eating kulfi...he was coming till then a woman hit him by mistake and started shouting...

"Pagal aurat...khud mobile me ghusi huyi hai aur Shravan pe chilla rahi hai...aur ye kya??Shravan sorry kyu keh raha hai...abhi dekhti hu..."

POV ENDS

Sumo got down from the car..

"Oh..hello madam...kya??aab is bechare ladke par kyu daantoth phad rahi hai..."

"Aare...who takraya mujhe aur meri favourite dress kharab kardi..."

"Aare..aapko kisne kaha tha aaj favourite dress pehenne ke liye??"

"Sumo chodo na..."

"Tum chup karoo...Aur aap...khud mobile mey ghussi thi aur isse daant rahi hai..??Sorry kahiye..."

"Kya...mai kyu sorry kahu??Usne meri dress kharab ki uss kulfi ke vajah se..."

"Kamal ho aap...dress aapki..aur ye kulfi uss kulfi vale ke hai...aap takrayi ho...aapki galati hai...Kyu logo??"

A mob had gathered around till then...

"Mia sorry nahi kahungi..."

"Rehnnee do na sumo..."

"Bola na chup raho... "to the mob" Dhekha aap logone..kaise din aaye hai delhi ke??bade galati karte hai aur baacho ko sorry kehna padta hai...jara dekhiye iss bechare ladke ko...(held shravan's chin)aapko lagta hai ye ladka jaanbuch ke kulfi girayega...Aagar aisa he chalta raha toh kya hoga iss desh ka??"Sumo was talking with total nautanki...

All the people started giving sly glances to that woman...She tried to go away..

"Aare aise kasie jaayengi aap..??Sorry abhi baki hai..."

"sorry.."She said in a low tone..

"Sunai nahi diya..."

"SORRY"

"ha..aab thik hai...chalo chalo..jao sab log.."

"Kya ghur rahe ho??"

"Kuch nahi...kulfi khaaye..??"

"Nahi...aab mood gaya..Chalo ghar...vaise bhi aaj bohot khaa liya hai..."

Suddenly someone closes her eyes from behind

"Kaun??"

"Hum hai bhai..!!!"

"PUSHKAR...OMG...tu yaha??"

Sumo hugged him tightly...

"Bhai na bulaya tha...keh rahe the tumhe surprise dena chahte the... "

"Aacha...thank you Shravan... "

"Chalo aab ghar jaldi se...Bohot thand hai..."Pushkar said shivering

"Ha..chalo...Vaise tu bata..---""

And they drove back home

At Home

"Aare Pushkar..."Nirmala was shocked to see him...

"Badi maa..."Pushkar hugged her and touched her feet

"Pushkar..Aao aao...kitne bade ho gaye ho tum.."Priya said coming out from the kitchen

"Priya Aunty...Kaise ho??" Pushkar touched her feet

"Mai thik hu beta...Vaise tum achanak??"

"Woh Bhai Sumo ko surprise dena chahte the...issiliye unhone bulaya tha..."

"Oh...Aacha toh ye Shravan ka kiya dhara hai..."

"Chalo Bhai..aab jaldi se so jaao...11.30 baj gaye hai..."

"Ha maa...bohot thak gayi hu subah se...chalo...Good night everyone..."

"Good night ..." Shravan and Pushkar said..

"Suno Shravan...who nanaji ke kamre ke bagal vale kamre mey tum dono so jaao...chachee pe nahi..."

"Ok Aunty...Good night..." Biding good night the brothers headed upstairs

So hope u'all liked it...sorry for the typos...
Bada wala update kiya hai bcoz mah next update will be done after a week ...
Do not forget the cute little like button and the comment button there...😃Ur views are precious...
See u soon...
Love,
ANU😳

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Posted: 8 years ago
#88
Anu 🤗 thanks for updating early...
Sumo in gundi mode😎
Cute update😆
Thanks for p.m
Love ya,
Dolly

Also me first yay!!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#89
Yeh Urvashi yahan bhi tapak padi... Miss Delhi hmmm...
Nirmala standing in one leg get married his son with Urvashi... let's see what Shravan will say about this... He is in his own dreamland romancing with Sumo... Uske peeche kuch aur hi khichdi pak rahi hai... I don't know how Sumo will react to this... Now Pushkar also came it will be interesting...

Thanx for the PM & nice update

Vinu
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Posted: 8 years ago
#90
hey anu lovely update...show me to nahi hua lekin tumane delhi darshan ka plan successful kar diya😉...show ki yaad dila di tumane to 👍🏼
Thanks for PM

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