ShraMan poem : Faaslein...!!

Hello guys!!!

As I said am back with a new poem on ShraMan's equation with each other 😳

Hope I all like it 😊


FAASLEIN...


Tere mere darmiyaan yeh...
Chand kadmo ke faaslein...

Doori yun toh kuch palo me ho jaaye paar...
Arso puraane zakhmo ke ghamo ne par rokk rakha mere yaar...

Chahe shikvo ko keh na paaye yeh zubaan...
Nazarein toh karti hai har dard ko bayaan..

Sanjoye hain jo yaari ke dhundle pal...
Aaj ho gaye hai humaara beeta kal...

Qaafilein ab bhi teri yaadon ke aankon mein rehte hain...
Mutmayeen shabo mein ashqq ban kar behte hain...

Chashme-E-Nam phir haule se muskuraati hain...
Khushnuma yaadein jab teri hawaon ki bheeni mehek si sehlaati hain...

Roothi nazarein gilo ke lamhe bhi ginwaati hain..
Beete palo se yun rubaroo karwaati hain...

Man karta hain ab har gham bhula dein...
Muskura ke tumhe gale se laga lein...

Pal bhar mein har khamoshi mite dein...
Dil ke shor ko sukoon dila dein...

Jod le tumse apne saare raaste...
Kyonki tum aur hum bane ek duje ke vaaste...

Am hoping u all will give me ur feedback on my first ShraMan poem 😳
Likes, appreciations, n constructive criticisms are welcome 😊


Dictionary 🥱

*Chand = Few
*Zakhmo = wounds
*Shikvo = complaints
*Bayaan = express
*Sanjoye = cherish/treasure
*Mutmayeen = (here) silent
*Shabo = nights
*Ashqq = tears
*Qaafilein = groups/ caravan (here referred to memories)
*Chashme-E-Nam = wet eyes
*Khushnuma = happy
*Bheeni mehek = sweet fragrance
*Gilo/Gile = reproach
*Rubaroo = face to face

Ooh Amreen! This was really really nice man!

Originally posted by: .SankaDevi.

Ooh Amreen! This was really really nice man!

"Roothi nazarein gilo ke lamhe bhi ginwaati hain..
Beete palo se yun rubaroo karwaati hain..."

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*Also lowkey thanks, I'd like to think my Hindi is pretty good but reading this much Hindi at once it was a bit hard for me to read + make sense of what I'm reading 😆 so the little word-key at the end was a really thoughtful & sweet gesture! :)

Thanks a lot Kritu!!!
Am so glad u wrote ur response...

My fav is Chashme-E-Nam stanza 😊
Baby... its not hindi..but pure urdu...
I knew here most people must not be knowing such high level urdu... so did that...
Kyuki agar padhenge par samjhenge nhi toh kya faayda 🤣
I have written one more...check it too!! 😳

http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4613009

Aaamreen. .. u r a GEM..loved it 😳

Originally posted by: Ruchiritu

Aaamreen. .. u r a GEM..loved it 😳

Shukriya... shukriya 😃

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

very nice...

Thanks!! 😊
But seriously such thanda responses... like 2 3 comments discourage from writing more!!!!