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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: liana2304

Awesome update .

Loved it .
Thxs for the PM .
Continue writing .

thx😊
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: riddzykhanmalik

I m sorry riaaa...

Me jaldi reply nahi kar pai because of my friend engagement...
But chapter six was awesome...poor raghu usse to kuch pata hi nahi hai or antara usse revange lene aa rahi hai...ye dm or uss k ghatiya plan...
And now chapter number seven...ye to super se bhi uper wala tha...antara nikewadi pohoch gayi or wo satyanash wo bhi aa gaya...but best moments was matki todne wali jo krishna ne nahi radha rani ne todi...or rantara ka eyelock...or stya ka girna... Mind blowing...dear...I love it...

Muje bhi pata tha ki log badal jaate hai

Magar Aye Dost

Maine to kabhi usee logon main gina hi nahi tha...!!!!!




it's okk ridzy...
and again i am speechless and overwhelmed by this wonderful sayari...😳
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: pampz

the previous update was just perfect to hype my mad urge of waiting for the grand entry of Raghu...and now let me come to this update ...

it is a BRILLIUNT update Ria ...i loved how Antara broke the matki ...it was SUPEEERRRBBB!!!!!👏👏👏
AND then comes that very special moment when their eyes met ... perfect perfect perfect ...loved it ...witing for moreee ...cant wait dear ...jaldise next update dede ...
and yes the toilet brush hair name was just sooo mind pleasing 😆 ...dilko thandak pad gaya ...cant stand this Satya ...
ria update soon !!!!

thank you pampi ji...😳
haan yaar... raghu ne nahin tor paya uss fattu ki wajah se😡... so antu ne khus hi tor diya😆
thank you yaar... toliet brush hair-ye naam to famous ho gaya...😆
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: ruhakhan

ok so antara is nw in mumbai

nd satyanash ki entry kya naam diya hai antara ne toilet brush hair hahahahahahah
nd rhea calls janglu nd manglu hahahahaahha
bt she broke their tradition by breaking the pitcher
waiting for rantara face to face meeting
do update soon

yes toilet brush hair😆
thank u😳
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Posted: 11 years ago

~:Chapter Eight:~

"Chahe Jag Hasein Ya Hazaron Mare Tana

Suni Shyam ki Banshi Bawri Bane Fir Radha."

Antara's POV

"God you two!! What can I do with this two girls!!" Mummy ji stroke her head. "Ohh come on mom. You don't have to do anything with us. Cause you yourself told that ki humara kuch nahin ho sakta!" Rhea said from my side. Mummy ji stroke her head. "Ohh Sarru darling... Just leave it! you know you can't handle us. It's impossible!!" I said keeping my elbow on mummy ji's shoulder. I used to call mummy Sarru darling as her name is Sarojini... aka Saroj. "Bahut badmash ban gayi hain tu..." Mummy ji pulled my ear tightly. "Ouch!!... sarru darling it hurts!!..." I winced comically. "Chup kar shaitan... sab samajhti hoon main...tujhe kya lagta hain.. didi nahin hain to tujhe koi rokne wala nahin hoga?!" she blabbered all aof a sudden and I felt another huge push. Mummy ji quickly stopped as she said those words and looked towards my face worriedly. She knew that how much it hurts while someone mentioned about my momma-pappa and she did that. I became silent for a while. "antara!!..." mummy said worriedly. "it's okk..." I smiled towards her. mummy got relieved and smiled. "chalo... but u know.. you really chocked my breath when I saw you on that height breaking the matki... Aren't you afraid?!" mummy ji asked. "ummm... yup a bit... but you know sarru darling... I was thinking to give audition for khatro ka khilari... so I was just practicing for audition." I said. "whaat?!! Badmash!!!..." mummy ji stroke on my shoulder. "Ouch!!... Sarru darling your hand has become dhai kilo ka hath'! are you attending gym now a days?" I asked naughtily. "ufff!!... god... I am fed up!! I can't keep up with these two..." mummy ji sighed and sat on the table. "ohhh mom!! Take a chill pill!!.." rhea said from said. "yeeah yeah!!.. always same dialogue.. take a chill pill...take a chill pill!!... Not chill pill.. I need a nerve pill!! Cause I am going to be mad with thes two antique pieces!!" mummy ji said stroking her head. "Oh mom!!... you are overreacting u know.. just see.. di is total feat and fine... right di?!" rhea asked me. "yeah of course...but I think that toilet brush hair is not fine yet!!" I said laughing. "Yeah di... I think he really got a huge strike on his a**." Rhea and I both laughed. "what is this haan?!.. you are just laughing all arround and who is this toilet brush hair?!" mummy jii asked. "ohh yeah I forgot to tell you, di gave another new name yo our manglu AKA satya naik!! And that is toilet brush hair!" rhea said. "what?!!! TOILET BRUSH HAIR?!!!" mummy ji looked like she was about to faint. "yes mummy ji, don't you think his hairs looks exactly like toilet brush?!" I asked her. "antara u!! But yeah u are right in fact.." mummy ji wandered. "you know mom, I was thinking that our toilet brush is not in good condition, why don't we feet manglu's hair in our brush?..." Rhea said. "wow excellent!!" I jumped in excitement, "then lets so this, we will invade in his room at night when he will sleep and we will cut his hairs... what say?!" I proposed rhea. "antara!! ye sab kya kahe rahi hain tu... chup!!" mummy rolled her eyes. "arey di.. we don't have to do so much difficulties... if we say that janglu about the fact he will happily strangle manglu's hair and bring that for us.." rhea said with a huge grin. What?!! Janglu means that raghunath naik! my heart shattered even thinking about his name. I remembered how he was watching over me while I broke the matki. That firm yet somehow tender gaze, my heart burned and I felt a lump in my throat as I remembered our encounter in Kashmir and then the blast!! "NO!!!..." the whisper came directly from my mouth. "what?!!" rhea seemed a bit startled. "noo!! I mean how could we take help from him?! no we can't!!" I said trying to compose myself. Rhea looked at me with startled eyes looking at my sudden mode swing. "why not di?! I know he will jump at the proposal. And trust me di when he will come to know that you are the reason for satya's epic fall woo ek tang pe khara ho jayega aap ke madad ke liye.." rhea said. "I SAID NO!!" my voice became harsh all of a sudden and startled both mummy ji and antu. I looked aawya from their face in irritation. I just didn't want to even hear his name. It hurt.. it really really hurt!!! Composing myself with a deep breath I said, "I mean, I don't want to get in anyone rivalry. That's why I ... spry I overreacted." I said in apologetic tone. "okk okk... now just go inside and get freshen up... good when ur mama will come back..." mummy said. I sighed in relief and at that moment we all heard a high pitch song from the door and all of our face moved towards the direction. "Main Sayar To Nahin/ Magar Yee Hasii/ Jab Se Dekha Maine Tujhko Mujhko Sayari Aaa Gayi..." singing this classic sing in his special high pitch and making all of us almost deaf, our mamma ji aka Govind Kashyap made his entry in the house. "Dad!!..." Rhea's startled voice could be hear from my side. "Mamu!!" even I was surprised seeing mama ji like that. he was holding a gift pack in left hand and a red rose in right hand and he was behaving odd. "Ohh god!! Now what happened to him!" mummy ji again stroke her head. Holding the rose in his hand with a style mama ji again started his sayari "Hum aashiqi kyun na karein kyun hum darein bhala/Din hai jawaani ke masti mein jhum lo mahraba/Aao labon ko labon se chum lo dilruba/ Humko ishq ne maara!". Mummy's eyes popped out from eyehole looking mamma ji like that. Me and rhea were having hard times to stop our giggles. "I think dad is possessed by romantic ghost!!" rhea said from my side in a low voice. "but what actually happened?! I don't think it's v-day!!" I wandered. "Now what is this?! what happened to you now?!" mummy ji asked towards mamma ji. "I told u naa sarru darling hum ko ishq ne marra... now see I can't sing your bengali's rabindrasangeet (rabindranath tagore's song). And if I tried to sing then great poets soul couldn't rest into peace in heaven. So iss sayari se hi kaam chala lo..." mamma ji said giving the rose in mummy's hand. "arey par ye sab kiss liye?!!" mummy jii was utterly confused. "arey sarru darling.. tum humari anniversary bhool gayi.." mamma ji said. "what?!! Aniversery!!" me and rhea blurted together. "aap ki yadast naa bahut kamzor hain... humari anni9versery pichle mahine chali gayi.." mummy said. "darling main shadi wali anniversary ki baat nahin kar raha hoon..." mamma ji said, "remember sarru darling, 20 years ago... You were singing in the feast of vidyasundar collage in kolkata and a boy from the audience looking towards you like possessed. You are glancing freq towards him while singing?" mama ji said. mummy's eyes suddenly gleamed and at the next moment she dropped her eyelids in embarrassment. "uff aap bhi naa..." mummy ji said in coy face. "Dad that means..." rhea's eyes gleamed. "yes my little nachchari daughter. Today is the day when Kashmir fell for bong beauty. Govind Kashyap Aka your dad saw your mom Sarojini Mukherji for the 1st time and the love at first sight happened." Mamma ji said. "just stop it okk.." mummy ji said in embarrassment. "Ahem ahem!!..." both rhea and me scowled looking at mummy ji's coy face. my mamma ji met muimmy ji while he was studying at vidyasundar collage in Kolkata. My mummy ji belonged to a Bengali family and a great admirer of great poet Rabindranath Tagore. So to impress my mummy ji mamma ji learnt a rabindranath tagore's song with so much difficulties and decided to propose her by singing that song. Mummy ji still laughed while she talked about that day. Not a single person could be seen near the college auditorium when mamma ji was singing for mummy ji in his high pitch nosy voice. Mamma ji also told me that though everyone left the place still mummy ji was seating there alone holding her ears. And when the song ended mummy went to the stage and accepted his proposal but warned him never to sing tagore's song in his life. Their marriage was a treat to watch! The mixing of kashmiri and Bengali cultures and we enjoyed so much.

"So that means, it's not only gokulashtami today... It's also mamu and sarru darling's first meeting anniversary!!" I said cheerfully from side. "arey... meri pyari si lauti si bhaanji... aap kidhar thi??!" mamma ji said from mummy's side. "mammu!!" I said cheerfully and then made a face, "You didn't even notice me earlier!" I said in a quite miffed voice. "ohh I am sorry rockstar!! But I heard that you already had rocked naik sadan's people!!" mama ji said with a quite funny voice. "huh?!!" all of us looked towards him making weird face. "arey you don't know... pure basti mein sab kahe rahe hain... aaaj tak satya naik ki jiss matki ko koi hath laga ne ki himmat bhi nahin karta tha ussi matki koo aaj kissi larki ne for diya aur sirf wohi nahin... sare paise usne basti ke logon mein baant diye.. tab hi main samajh gayi thi ye kaam sirf ek hi larki kar sakti hain... aur woo hain humari pyari si bhanji!!" mamma said with a huge grin. "ohh god!! Puri basti mein baat fail gayi..." mummy said with a worried face. "ohh saroj relax!! Tum itni chinta kyun karte ho... dekho antara ki wajah se humlog bhi famous ho gaye.." maama ji said. "yup!! That's true!!.." rhea said taking my side. "bhaagwan main kya karoon.. sare ke sare pagal mere palle pareein hain.. kaha aap inhe samjhaayengey ki agey se aaisa na karne ke liye... aap to ulta iski sath de rahee hain.." mumy ji said stroking her head. "arey saroj tension mat lo... waisey bhi ek matki hi too fori hain usne.. ismein kya hoga... tum jaldi se khana lagaon mujhe bahut bhookh lagi hain!!" mama ji said. "okk thik hain... rhea, antara... jaon jaldi se fresh ho ke aao.. tab tak main khana bana deti hoon.." saying that mummy ji moved inside the kitchen. Me and rhea both gave mama ji a tight embrace. Rhea left and I was still there. "Mamu!!.." I said. "haan antara bolo.. kuch kahena hain tumhe?!" mamma ji asked. "Thanks!!.." I said generously, "thanks for taking my side.. I know I had done something reckless but still you didn't mind." I smiled. "antara!!.." mama ji said with affectionate voice. "I know that I can never take your pappa's place. But I know how she had brought you up. I clearly know about the ideals and morals she gave you and I respected them. And guess what I will always try to support you as he did." Mamma ji said. I looked towards mama ji with a grateful smile. I was felling so lucky that I got those peoples as my family. Seriously they were the best. "mamu you know... not only me but you are also a rockstar." I smiled to him. "di where are you man?! come here I wanna show you our room.." rhea said loudly. "go now!! Otherwise that mad girl is going to make deaf all the basti peoples with her scream." Mama ji said. "after all she is your daughter..." I winked and moved from the place startling mama ji.

Raghu's Pov

"Ouch ouch!!... kaki... kya laga rahe hoo mere kamar par..." that looser satya screamed and jerked his whole feature on the bed. "shaheb... yee haldi or tel hain... iss sey tumhara dard more or less kam ho jayega.." kaki said from side. "damn you!!... ayii please... I don't need this damn haldi wala tel... mujhe doctor ki zarurat hain..." satya said loudly. I was standing near the door silently and enjoying satya's condition. Mai moved towards me and said, "raghunath, tune doctor ko phone lagaya ki nahin?!" mai asked me. "haan mai... apun ne baat kar li doctor se..." I said. "zara jaa ke to dekh woo pauche ki nahin?!" mai said. I moved out from the room and passed down the corridor. I was passing by ajji's room when I got a call from inside. "chintu!!" ajji's voice roamed in my ear. My feet stopped there and I turned back. Ajji came outside with worried face. "hath kaisa hain tera?! Khoon bahe raha hain kya abhi?" she asked. "arey naii ajji... tu khali pilli tension kyun leti hain... apun bachpan se goliyan kha ke bara huya hain... uss satya ki tarah lollypop chaba ke naii joo ek baar gira too fir uth hi naii paunga.." I chuckled. "bas bas bahut ho gaya..." ajji said, "waisey ek baat to batani paregi... aaj uss mendak ko girte dekh dil ko itna sukkon mila ki kya kahoon..." ajji said with a huge grin. Even I was also feeling so excited that sometimes I was forgetting about my wounded hand. But there was also another cause for my happiness. I got to see her again today. Each and everytime her face was flashing in my mind I couldn't afford my grin. I still couldn't believe that she was actually here, in our basti! "waisey, woo larki bhi kamal thi.. kaise fatak se aa ke matki tor gayi..." ajji said all of a sudden. "Hmmm..." I rubbed my hairs unable control my smile. "Oye!!... kya huya... ye nayi nayi packet se bahar nikli tubelight ki tarah chamak kyun raha hain?!" ajji asked. "ajji.. woo.. kuch naii.." I bit my tongue. "hmm... ek baat bata... tuu uss larki ko ghur ghur ke kyun dekh raha tha?!" ajji asked with a frown. "ghhh.. ghoor raha tha... kissey ajji?!.." I stumbled. "teri radha rani ko..." ajji said. "radha rani... naaiii naa ajji... uska naam Antara hain!.." I said in flow and then bit my tongue again. "Antara?!!... tujhe kaise pata chala?!!" aajji was a bit shocked. "arey woo.. woo ajji... apun chalta hain... woo doctor aa gaya..." saying that. I didn't wait a single time and rushed out of the spot. The day went abruptly. Doctor came and checked satya. He strictly mentioned for one weeks bed rest for him. I laughed heavily lying on my bed remembering about his face. Really that bird's poo worked. I smiled widely thinking of that. the train of 10:55 pm passed through the railway track situated behind our basti. Each and every night that trains sound broke the silence around. When the sound of train faded further I jumped out of my bed grabbing my mouth organ. I came out at the silent streets and headed towards the corner where machmach had kept the jeep. I jumped on the jeep and brought the mouth organ near the lips. when the instrument was just inches away from my lips I stopped for a while and twitched my face towards the house of Govind uncle. If my guess was right and she was rhea's sister from Kashmir then she must be living in their house. Arghh!!.. if I could see her again. if I could know in which room she was living. Bappa!! Why I was feeling so restless. My eyes fell on the window of 1st floor. I knew rhea lived in that room. I saw a shadow on the curtain and it was certainly not rhea. Looking at the height and feature... It must be her. An automatic smile escaped from my lips.

Antara's POV

The twinkling sound of the bells made me smile. I hanged the bell on the window just a moment ago. My pappa and momma gifted me the bell on my b'day. "when we will not be with you. the sound of that bell will made you remember about us." They used to say. I smiled and and looked towards rhea who was in deep sleep long ago. It was so late at night and almost 11 pm. The whole basti was silent. I was not able to sleep as it was also a new place and there was such an unknown vibe in my mind being so close with those men who were the killer of my family! my face hardened all of a sudden. That raghunath naik's face flashed into my mind. I didn't understand why he was looking at me with such an odd gaze. I didn't want to admit but I was feeling somehow uncomfortable by his gaze. I sighed and moved towards the bookshelf where I arranged my books. I let out a book and moved towards the bed. Tossing my legs under the quilt beside rhea, I flipped the page of the book. I stopped at the page where a dry tulip flower was kept with the picture of my family. I caressed on the dry flower of my garden which was the only token of my homeland to me. I looked towards the photo. pappa, momma, noor appa all were smiling towards me. "pappa!!..." I said slowly, "momma... apppaa..." I continued to talk to thir photo. I felt like their smile got wider. "will I be able to expose them?! will I be able to show their real face to the world?!" I questioned. But there was no one to answer. I closed the book and sighed closing my eyes. I didn't know where I was heading to but there was no way for me to step back. through the open window of the room a chilly wind came and ruffled my hair. At that moment a very slow but pleasant tune hit my ear. Automatically a small smile crept on my face. Mouth organ!! I recognized the instrument. A boy from our junior year used to play in our collage and I really loved it's sound. It's so soothing and directly touched anyone's soul. The tune was really like that. Calm, poised and bohemian but still it was enough to create storm in someone's mind. I wondered who was playing such a beautiful piece so late at night. Following the tune I came out at the balcony and looked down. After looking here and there for a moment I at last saw him at last! Just after some steps away from our house there was a jeep kept under the lampshade and a fig was seating on the bonnet of jeep and playing the MO. His back was visible to me and also due to the lights his face was not clear to me. The sound was vibrating all over the silent street f basti and also my heart in an uneven speed. I suddenly felt an urge to meet that mouth organ player. It felt odd and insane that why all of a sudden I wanted to meet some stranger. But the pull was huge and I couldn't stop myself. Better to say that my curious mind didn't let me think sanely. Without waking up anyone I tiptoed downstairs and open opened the front door. Walking on the street I headed towards the jeep with a bright smile on my face.

Raghu's POV...

Closing my eyes and feeling my beating heart, I was busy in playing that MO. Surprisingly I always felt heavy and alone whenever I played MO every night but on that day, I felt so content and pleased. My heart thudded as I heard very light footstep behind me. The wind changed his direction all of a sudden and I felt her presence. I didn't know how but somehow I knew that it was her, only her! my lips immediately stopped on the metal frame and I opened my eyes. Slightly twitching my shoulder I looked behind and there she was, standing just at some distance wearing that same white salwar kamiz and looking towards me with such an admiring eyes and a huge smile. I felt some strange wave through my nerves. I didn't know why my breath stopped when I saw that breathtaking smile of her. it was strange but somehow so good! But unfortunately that smile stayed for just a min. as soon as she saw me her smile faded like the abrupt power cut of Mumbai city. Her eyes widened a bit. My lips curled in a crooked smile and I jumped down from the bonnet of jeep. I kept gazing at her face silently like she did to me. Her expression changed totally. Her jaw hardened, her lips parted taking a heavy breath and her big hazels lost the happy glow and all of a sudden I saw an unknown fire in them. Really in my whole life I never saw anyone having such powerful eyes and presence. She looked innocent but her gaze was so matured. Such a dominance and possession she had which could make anyone bend in front of her. the fire in her eyes was enough to burn anyone. And the strange thing was that I wanted to get closer to those hazels so I could see my reflection in them. I was unable to move my gaze from her. she was observing me silently throughout the time. I saw so many emotions flashed together in them. they were strange to me but I saw pain. Yes pain! I didn't know why I felt like that. It was all strange to me. The girls was not like others I met before. She looked so vulnerable and yet so stronger. She was such a puzzle quite difficult to solve for me. She didn't uttered a single word and move back and stepped her feet on the reverse side. my heart ached all of a sudden. "Eee ruk!!..." automatically the words came out of my mind. she stopped surprisingly and twitched her neck a bit towards me. I stepped forward and came at her front. She looked towards me raising her eyebrow. She looked somehow cute in that posture. "kya hain.. haan?!" I asked in a bit frustrated voice. She looked a bit confused. "What?!!" her firm yet soft voice rang my ear. I heard her voice after such a long time and it felt so ear soothing. "tu kya kar rahi hain?!" I asked in frustration. The question seemed odd but that's what my heart actually wanted to ask. What was she doing with me? "hnnn!!.." she buzzed with more confused face. "wooo.. woo apun ka matlab... aise naa hello hi kahan.. naa bye bye kiya.. aise mooh utha ke ayi aura b jaa bhi rahi hain?!" I asked in confusion. my all question got jumbled looking at her firm gaze. Antara crossed her hands on her chest and said, "Soo what?!... aap ko ismein kya problem hain?... aur waisey bhi main ajnabi logon se baatein nahin karta.." she said in a slight hard tone. I felt a lump on my throat and a chink of pain appered in my chest when she called me stranger. She was about to pass by me when I grabbed her hand and her eyes frozen all of a sudden. I felt her whole feature stiffened. I dragged her back at my front and she looked towards me with a bewildered as well as angry gaze. "Ajnabi?! Apun tere ko ajnabi dikhta hain?... nahin pahechanti tu mere ko?!" I asked with a bit harsh voice. "NO!" she said straightly without missing a bit. my jaw almost dropped for a moment and then I get more frustrated. "Nahin pahechanti mere ko?!!" I asked again. "Kahan naa main nahin pahechanti aap ko.." she said with same tone. "eee memory card weak hain kya tera?!! Kuchi mahine pahele to hum mile the woo... Kashmir mein.. bhool gayi sab..." I asked. To my surprise she smiled a bit twitching her lips and looked away from me. I didn't know why her laugh seemed mocked to me. Also I felt like something glowed in the corner of her eyes but she quickly covered them locking her air away from her face. she looked back to me and that time I felt like her eyes were burning. It made me almost numb. "haaan!!!... kaise bhpol sakti hoon main uss din ko... zindagi bhar nahin bhool sakti." She said slowly. Her words did some strange effect in me and my heart jumped in some excitement. A small smile escaped my lips as I scratched my head. "too tujhe agar yaad hain too.. aisa kyun kahe rahi hain kit u apun ko nahin pahechanti?!" I asked on confusion. "sach hi too kahan maine.. aur abhi bhi wohi bata rahi hoon... main aap ko nahin pahecchanti.." she said again. "arey yaar... ye locha apun ko samajh nahin aa raha hain... kahena kya chahti hain tu?!" I asked in confusion. she sighed and looked away again from my face. "kissi ko dekhne mein aur pahechan ne mein bahut farak parta hain... humne bas aap ko dekha tha.. pahechan ne ke liye ek dusre ko jaan na zarooi hota hain..." she ans in unconscious voice and her anser again jumbled my head. "abey yaar... apun ke dimag main teri batein nahin ghus re la hain... thik hain.. agar tujhe apun ka intro chahiye too bata deta hoon... apun woo..." I was about to say but she stopped me again, "choriye... bekar mein apne aap ko takleef mat dijiye... kyun ki mujhe aap ko jana mein koi interest nahin hain..." she said with a slight hard tone. "hayee..!!" I asked in daze. " aur waisey bhi... yahan iss basti mein an eke baad aap ko sab jaan jatein hain.. kyun?! Hain naa?" her small smile was a bit cunning. "ee dekh yaar...bahut ho gaya ab apun ka bheja fry mat kar... tab se kya bake jaa raha hain.. naa too kuch samajh atta hain aur upar se sar ghum raha hain teri baton se..." I was so frustrated on her. why she was behaving like that. her ignorant behavior really hurt me somehow. "batein aap ne suru ki maine nahin..." she said without missing a bit. "eee ab chup ho jaa samjhi naa... bheja kharap karne ke liye baat nahin karna thaa.. woo too bas.. woo..." I couldn't find any topic which could continue our topic further. She sighed and was about to leave. "eee ruk.." I said again. She looked towards me with her hardened gaze. "kyun ruku main! tumne kahan isss liye?!" she asked. "haan... bilkul... aur iddhar apun ki baton ko koi nahin taal ta samjhi?..." my voice raised and became harder. I didn't want to offend her but I just wanted to stop her from leaving. I was feeling like I had so many words to say to her but I didn't know what were they. "nahin samjhi.. aur samjhana chahti bhi nahin..." she said and moved forward without gving m another chance. "eee ruk jaa... Abey..." my words immediately stopped when she jerked her dupatta to arrange them on shoulder and to her unconscious it fell on me covering my face. I froze at the spot as her smell hit me. Such a beautiful odor, not the smell of any perfume but so pure and soothing. Like the scent of flower of some unknown valley. Like a fresh cool breeze hit on me on the scorching summer. As she moved forward the cover fell from my face and I looked towards her with a gentle smile. the bitterness was gine all of a sudden. She stopped abruptly and looked back to me with confused eyes. following her gaze I looked down and saw her dupatta stuck with leather belt on my wrist. I smirked looking at her bewildered face. "hmmm!!... ab too fass gayi tu... kaise jayegi apun se door?!" I asked with victorious smirk and surprised that how deep was my voice when I utterd those words to her. She looked at her badly stuck dupatta for a while and suddenly twitched her lips in a crooked smile. sge grabbed the duppata and pulled more. With a sound the dupatta was tore apart leaving a piece of cloth in my hand. I was so startled by her move and looked towards her. She smiled victoriously. "mujhe fasane ki koshis mat karna, kyun ki tumhare har jaal ko main tor sakti hoon..." saying this she turned back jerking her dupatta and moved forward. My eyes followed her till she moved inside govind uncle's house leaving me behind with so many questions. I stood there long looking at the closed door. I looked down and saw the piece of her dupatta still attatched to my leather belt. I smiled widely looking at the cloth pieces which was still containing her smell. Unknowingly she left her token to me.

ps: now girls at first sorry for the length of this chapter... as u know i could never short out things and secondly.. i don;t know how the chapter was.. writing this from tomorrow and at last able to finish it. hope the chapter doesn't jumble your head.

Edited by ifians - 11 years ago
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beautiful banner ria
Purane dino ki yaad aah gayi...:'(

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Ria i dnt need 2 repeat myself n tell u dat im ur biggest fan!
We way u write ech scene n describe evry emotion in detail... it's jst beautiful!
Having a busy day n then reading an update lyk this is jst ausum
U made my day girl!
1st of all changing maama-maami character was an awsum decision... love them
Romantic maamaji..that's wat we havnt evr read
N definatly want more of it
Antara still didnt gt ovr d blast bt still is bubbly n a bit naughty
Dat's wat i luv abt antara in this story... you've written it beautifully
D change of emotions hw antara is happy n mischevious jst now n immediatly she is sad n depressed... n when she's in front of raghu her whole charactr sum wat changes
That's marvelous Ria
I totally enjoyed Raghu's pov
Raghu enjoying seeing satya in pain... i was also enjoying dat scene
N ajji raghu convrsatn was amazing... he told ajji her name... yay
N d end MO scene was jst mind blowing
Ria u penned it down so beautifully wid perfection
Raghu being confused n also lost in hr n antara mocking raghu n also trying 2 hide her sadness n pain...
Ria love u yaar
N im sorry sorry sorry 4 commenting sooo late
Kaan pakad ke sorry Ria ji
N i saw d banner of d nxt chappy it luks awsum
Can i expect a funny scene btween Rantara???
Coz they seem 2 b so happy n laughing




Edited by niki28 - 11 years ago
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As niki said,
puraane dino ki yaad aa gayi due to the first part of the update... Aur ,
Raghu toh is amazing as usual.. He is really caring.
But Antu 😕 God knows when she will realize Raghu's true nature and get over the demon in her head.
Loved it as usual
Sorry for my late unres
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what an entry!!!!!😛
astounding update ria!..👏
antara n rhea bonding is just top of the world...beautiful relation😳
janglu n manglu..good names!🤣
satya..satya ko choodo usko kaun puchta hai?..🤣
antu ki baat krte hain😆...how bravely n nicely she broke that matki...😃..n there goes first meeting in mumbai!
loved the update a lot!😊

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jangulu n mangulu...🤣
kyaa naame diyaa darls thumne...

but best thing i liked is sattu's purpleieria... enacted here tooo...

lols...

hw dare he shoot raghu...

this part i felt normal...nt confused...
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Okayy so riyu here is finally my review
Chapter 3, Im loving Antu and Rhea's bonding its so sweet yar
After reading this update im feeling so bad for Antara she was full of life yar but one accident changed her life completely. .
Any yes Antu SOTY impressive ;)

Chapter 4
Antara and Raghu's first meeting was so awesome yar and yes finally they met. And that guy bhondulu pr whatever he is strange yet funny. But Raghu usse kya hogaya yeda kaise naam poocha yar it was too cute. .

Chapter 5
Sorry riyu yar dont know what to say I was like crying such an emotional update yar.
How it feels whdn you lost your everything how hard it was for Antara to deal with it.
And yes I wish mein DM ko ussi bomb se urra paty moti churail dayaan

Chapter 6
Lots of planning han Antu baby go for it but dont harm my Raghu he is an innocent soul :)
Stupid Sataya aaraha hai vinaash karne idiot gadha kahi ka I hate him
But I like one thing Bird's pooo ;)
Raghu key liye shubh hoga ya nahi woh to pata chal hi jayega

Chapter 7
Matki phor wow I loved it yar
That janglu Manglu super funny yar
That stupid Satya shoor Raghu uski itne himmat
Loving the new names for Satya
The most shocking Antu broke the matki strange but mindblowing ;)

Riyuuu ab no more blackmailing key first review then update
And yes one more thing loving ur banners alot and alot ;)

Edited by Roy.nikki143 - 11 years ago

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