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Posted: 12 years ago
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ohh woow amazing..polzzz pm me
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Originally posted by: ayaazukideewani

nice part pooja

plz do continue👍🏼

Aww thank you hun! 😊 will update tomorrow.

Originally posted by: sweetdesire

Loved it

do continue soon plz

Thanksss a lot 😊
2nd part almost done.

Originally posted by: honeybees22

wow this is osm i loved the convo betwen rantara wow i was osm pls cont soon and pls pls pls pls pm me

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Originally posted by: dreamyrose

loved each n every bit u've done a awesome job plzz do continue soon cant wait

Aww, glad you loved it, hope you will like the next part aswell. 😊
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Cutie, what a start! it was simply magical! i loved it. please update asap! will be waiting!

thanks such a sweet compliment. thank you 😊
I am planning to update tomorrow

Originally posted by: ifians

poojoo it's awsome yaar...u are a gr8 writer

thanks a lot yaaar! no no I was bored so just wrote it randomly, not that great.
will make sure next part is better 😛

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Its awesome! Please continue!

THanks!! 😃 sure, will do.
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Thankss! 😃

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Wow..love it..amazing..cont.soon puja

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I am back with Part 2 ! Sorry it took long. THank you all for the wonderful kind comments for the previous part. It really encourages me to write more. 😳
This one is slightly longer and it's the last part of the OS.
Happy Reading!
PART 2
It was already midnight, I lay there on my bed with the letter clutched in my hands, still deciding whether to read it now or wait. I mean, I have waited for this letter the whole day and now that I have it, I am afraid... this weird feeling that this surprise will not be as pleasant as I imagined. I knew I won't be able to sleep so I slowly read the letter..

Ayee Sweetchill, ya phir Miss Kaul.. bole toh chalti firti disaster..

I found it strange, reading the first line, It only reminded me of Raghu.. there was no-one else that would start a letter like this, but I continued..

Tu theek hai na? bole koi problem hai toh share karne se dil halka ho ja ta hai,

pata hai todha ajeeb lag raha hoga.

Samjh nahi aa raha kya aur kaise bolu..

Dil mein ek baat ayi, toh socha tumse mil k batadenge..

Lekin yeh kambakhat waqat hai ki itna tezz bhagta hai ki khabhi mouka hi nahi diya..

Waise hum ek dusre ko kafi acche se samjh ne lage hai, fir bhi bohot kuch hai jo hum nahi jante.

Itne pass ho kar bhi dur, jaan k bhi anjaan..

Baar baar milke bhi pehchan nahi payi, kash tu mere bina bataye he sab samajh jati,

Par iss mein teri kya glati hai, mein ne hi tumse chupaya,

Maloom hai ki tum apne.. kya bolte hai.. prince charming ko dhoond rahi thi, tu bhi eydee hai, teri footi kismat, goonda mawali se panga ho gaya. . yeh surprise se 1000watts ka jatka laga ho ga, par ab tu kya karegi, mere baar mein kya sochenge yeh mereko nahi maloom.. mujhe woh.. pyaar, ishq vishq wali baate karna nahi aata. SORRY, tum ne socha iss mein mohobaat wali shyari likhi ho gayi.. sab ulta hogaya... lekin humara jo yeh music ka rishta hai na, woh koi kismat connection hai.. iss ki wajah se humne bohot kubsurat pal jeeye hai.. toh ab tumhe theek lage toh ek baar woh chudiya phehan k mere samne aana..

Kuch dil se likha hai, bura mat maan na..

Haste dilo me gham bhi hai,
muskurati aankhe kabhi nam bhi hai,
dua karte hai aapki hansi kabhi na ruke,
kyunki apki muskurahat ke deewane hum bhi hai...

Tumhara .. Raghu..

I was more than schocked, I didn't know how to react. I could sense how Raghu would say this upfront, it somewhat gave me peace and an unusual happiness. From what he wrote, it is clearly evident that he said it straight from his heart and we were both feeling mutual, although once again he hasn't said it directly, indirect hint of his love. Tears rolled down my cheeks, as I realised my prince charming was in fact Raghu.. Did I just read it right? Hold on, my mind probably knew this a long time ago, maybe it was my heart that took so long accept it. I closed my eyes tightly and all I could remember was him.. Raghu's silly pranks, his mischievous behaviour, sweet caring moments, and funny awkward eye locks. The only thing that was worrying me was how will I face him tomorrow? Then the devil mind of mine, thought of something, with that in mind I sleep in peace whilst having the biggest grin on my face.

Antara! Wake up! It's 8:00am! Mum said while opening the balcony door to let the sun come in.

Whaaat!? How did I oversleep! I got up and stretched my hands and went to the balcony to get my towel so I could go bathroom and get ready, but then I froze as I saw something that I coulnd't take my eyes off. Raghu. He was just about to take off his black vest, I stood there shamless but it was as if my feet deined to move. Ok, now it was completely off, he was shirtless.. my mind and heart were having their own conversation, "yes, yes don't get too excited, you've already seen his abs muscles before, what's the big deal?" but my heart by racing and saying "but look at the six packs?!" "control, control, don't faint!" mind said. Just then Raghu turned around and I bend down , hiding myself, because I wasn't going to let him know that I was looking at him in that way.. I mean, not until my plan works and he admits his feelings for me.

I left without having breakfast, now it was time for action.. I had worn the chudiya he asked me to wear but he's not going to get an easy answer, I will make him confess his feelings. Ishaan was already waiting outside for me, just then Raghu came and said he would drop him to school. "I am here, Ishaan will go with his Di." I said while walking toward Raghu. His eyes still looked hurt from what I said yesterday but no he always has to argue back, "Ishaan doesn't want to go in Auto, he likes my Jeep, right Ishaan?" Raghu said take-that attitude as ishaan agreed, I frowned. I pulled ishaan towards me but Raghu pulled him back. I called MachMach, "MachMach, give me the keys to the jeep" I ordered. Raghu looked amazed. "eydee and jeep? Oh no, Lagta hai sabko hospital pohchane ka irada hai.. waise mental hospital aage se left phir right.." I cut his nonsense and gave him the eye roll and he made a funny face and was about to give me the keys, but Raghu was too quick and took it before me.

Ishaan was annoyed and jumped onto the jeep, I sat down too but Raghu questioned " why you coming?! My Jeep doesn't like you." He said that like a kid angry because he didn't get a chocolate. I laughed and said "but the driver likes me so what's the problem?" Raghu had nothing to say and looked back at me blankly.. "Raghu bhaiyya, aage dekhiye, aur jaldi chalao." Ishaan said looking tensed. "haan theek hai na, ek class bunk kar lena." Raghu said casually. Antara annoyed " Tum ishaan ko apne jisa mat banao!" "haan, toh mujh mein kya kharabi hai? Mere jaise body banale phir dekh teacher bhi tujh pe fida!" Raghu said patting Ishaan on the back. Talking about his body, Antara remembered the morning scene and blushed a little and Raghu caught her but didn't comment as he remembered their conversation yesterday night, he thought " apni body ki baat kar raha tha aur yeh apne who idiot kamina prince charming k body k khayalo mein kho gayi" Raghu got annoyed, made a silly face and stopped the Jeep.

They arrived at the school and Antara told Raghu to drop Ishaan to the classroom. When he came back, he found Antara talking to a guy, and got frustrated but as he walked towards them, Antara sat on the drivers seat and signalled Raghu to sit on the other side. Raghu ignored and walked straight to the guy anatara was talking to earlier, and held his collar and said "whats your realtion with Antara, why you getting close to her? Oohh.. you are that guy... but you don't match with the style.. sala kuch bhi interesting nahi hai tujh mein phir kaise.. anatara.." The guy stopped Raghu, and said "excuse me? What nonsense is this.. I am Ishaans English teacher!"Raghu felt embarrassed and hit his own head and turned back to see Antara laughing her head off. She drove the Jeep to where Raghu was standing and said "oo Raghu ji... c'mon I will give you a lift. Don't worry, this Jeep and the driver both likes you" she winked. Raghu completely gobsmacked, just nooded and sat in the jeep. "you wasted such valuable time of that teacher, what did you think that he was my.. prince.." she laughed a bit more. "tum chup raho, pareshaan kar k rakha hai, sab tumhari glati hai" Raghu fumed how dare she make fun of me.

Everytime she steered the wheel, her chudiya made noise, and then Raghu noticed she was wearing them. He got excited and asked " why are you wearing those?" pointing towards her chudiya. "why can't i? they are mine. I wear it when I want to, do I have to ask you if I can wear them?" Antara said teasingly. Raghu's smile disappeared as he remembered that letter he wrote to Antara.. he thought to himself looking all confused "what if she has read it? Has she read it? Maybe she just went to sleep and didn't notice the letter. Then did someone else find the letter? I hope she hasn't, I can't believe I'm such a fool. How can I say something like that in the letter, I wanted to tell her that I like her but before my surprise she give me a surprise by telling me she already found her prince charming, and she would never have a husband like me. I have to take the letter back somehow" Anatra knew what was going on in his mind, she could tell just by looking at his impatient eyes.

She diverted his attention so he would look at her, She was whistling the same tune they sing at night, and then Raghu looked where they were going. "Are you crazy? Where are we going?" He asked furiously. Antara put on an evil smile and said "I want you to meet someone". Curious Raghu asked " who?! Don't waste my time". "I need your opinion, we are going to my future husband's house". Raghu fisted his hands " I don't want to come. Stop using my Jeep and me for your benefit!" Antara remined calm "deep breathe in and out Raghu, why you getting angry over small thing, just meet him once."

Are you done with yout nonsense? Small thing?! You going to his house and then what next? Take me to do your wedding shopping?!"

"exactly, how smart!" said excited Anatra

" Stop the Jeep! And get off" Raghu exclaimed.

"ok, I know you're mad that I didn't tell you about him earlier.. but I just realised my love for him.." Antara said to tease him even more.

Raghu had enough of listening he pulled the handbrake and the car stopped, he pulled her out of the jeep. "Raghuu, chill, mein tumhare liye bhi mere jaise achhi larki dhoondongi"

Kya boli tu? Mujhe tere jaise nahi, TUM.. - he stopped.

Antara lifted her eyes and waited, Hoping he would complete his sentence. Matlab kya?

Tum jaise eydee nahi. Antara was more than disappointed, she sat in the jeep and kept questioning Raghu " okay, tu ek kam karo, tum mujhe describe karo tumhari spano ki pari, then I will send the list to marriage beauro"

Raghu was irritated, "tum chup raho." Then both stayed quiet for the rest of the journey.

Raghu quickly went inside, he was confused, annoyed and hurt all at the same time. He went up to balcony and wanted shut all the feelings and thought he had for Antara. He decided to climb through the balcony to reach Antra's room, so he can get the letter back. He went inside to search and looked everywhere but couldn't find it. Just then Antara taped him on the shoulder and he slipped looking at her.

Antara raised her eyebrows and asked mischiviously "tum yahan kya kar rahe ho Raghu Jaaan?" she walked closer to him "kya karne ka irada hai? She put her hands around his neck.

Raghu froze, why was she seducing him, He couldn't think f anything else, kya bakwas kar rahi hai ye, mujhe upar behjne ka socha hai kya.. he quickly brushed the thought out of his mind and stammered.. "mein.. woh.. kuch kaam tha, ishaan se.." he looked the other way.

"ishaan nahi hai, mujh se kaam chalega? Mein bhi bohot kuch kar sakti hoon" she blinked her eyes rapidly flirting.

"haan.. matlab nahi..mein toh aunty ko hello bolne aaya tha.." He quickly escaped from her hands but then she said "yeh dhoond ne aaye they na?" she showed him the letter.

He tried to reach the letter but antara moved and he run after her. He slipped once again and this time falling on the bed, I stood there laughing but he pulled me down with him which landed me straight onto him and accidently kissed him on the cheek. I didn't know what to do, I kept my eyes lowered and tried to move apart but he didn't let me, as if he wanted the time to freeze and hold me like this forever. The warmth I felt staying in his arms, so close to him, hear him breath.. so safe.. I felt I was in the right place, a beautiful wonderland, our paradise.

Not wanting to get out of our own fantasy, but now even the reality felt more beautiful than the fantasy. It was obvious that we were meant to be for eachother. The awkward silence pause before we spoke again " Antara.."

"Raghu"

He started moving closer and lifted my hands and ran his hands through my red chudiyas and asked " you wore them for me? You had already read the letter at night and just wanted to tease me, that's why you were doing all that stupid silliness from morning."

I nodded my head innocently, with the biggest smile that melted his anger. "nahii.. aisa toh kya likha hai iss letter mein? Shayad baat adhoori reh gayi hai na? so quickly tell me those 3 magical words." i demanded. I was still waiting to hear his feelings out loud.

"uh.. um.. woh antara.. mein khena chahta tha ki... He kept stammering, now I was getting impatient. How can he take so long.

"eydee hai tu !" he smirked and laughed seeing antara's expressions.

What the- but I couldn't say any more, he hugged me tightly.. "aur yeh eydee ko sirf tu pasand hai, mera prince charming."

"I love you, Antara" he wishpered in my ears. I asked him to scream it to the world, but he replied " you are my world. I love you."

I asked him to take me to somewhere where we can be alone, he took me to the balcony, showed me the path that connected to his balcony and told me to close my eyes and sing. And that's how we reach to the other side, This way we can be together even when we're apart.

The End.
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HOpe you guys didn't fall asleep while reading it. Sorry for any errors.
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Edited by Poojaa_P - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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that was a real sweet OS. that letter he wrote to antara was really really sweet! awh my heart melted with it 😆 Love it! great work! 😃
Edited by Delena-cious - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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sleep? no yaar ... it was ssooo awesome...loved d bubbly teasing antara and d stammering jealous raghu... :-*...write more...wil b waitng fr ur nxt os or ss or ff..n nxt tym plz pm me...:-)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Itz sweet n awesm update.dr.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awiee
that was so sweet
really loved it

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Really sweet os
Loved the ending
Hope you write more soon 😊

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