OS: Can't Let Her Go [Omkara Repentance]

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Can't Let Her Go

She looked paler and considerably thinner, if that was even possible considering her already petite form. But malnourishment seemed to hardly be an issue when he took in the loss of life in her eyes.

If only he'd trusted--if only he'd just given her a chance to speak.

If only he listened. Then.

Because now, there was no one to listen to. The woman in front of him barely resembled the passionate woman who fought tooth and nail for those she loved, the vulnerable woman who wore her heart on her sleeve, the courageous woman who dared to love without any expectations in return.

He didn't deserve a love that pure, he didn't deserve her. And yet, unfortunately, he was the only one the doctors suspected could convince her to find a will to live.

She didn't eat, didn't sleep, barely spoke.

It was quite fortunate for him, that after he disgustingly tossed her out of his life--after utilizing her goodness to counteract Svetlana's ploy--she'd been rescued by the social workers that ran this hospital. She'd been here for 4 whole months until they were able to get a lead on her. To find out that apart from her mother who passed away mourning her daughter's fate, she had a husband. As undeserving as he may be.

But he too was looking for her. Ever since the day Kali Thakur's notoriety, alongside his involvement in his wife's murder made the news. Something about henchman working in his network being captured and made to confess. He remembers feeling disgusted, but more so with himself. He could care less for the obvious faults in the character of that monster yet dared compare a woman who only asked so much as to be heard by him to a wh**e.

He looked at her sleeping form, tears failing to fully convey the extent regret. He noticed though, with something of a nostalgic smile forming beneath his swollen eyes that she still slept with her hands neatly tucked under her chin. Something very oddly feminine he always took note of when she used lay beside him as Chulbul.

He loved her.

It wasn't a sudden realization, just a painstakingly late one.

That night, for perhaps the first time in what felt like ages, Omkara let his hair loose. Laying his weary head down onto the edge of her pillow, he claimed one of her hands as his, bringing it to his lips.

"You didn't deserve this," he whispered entwining her hand further in his tousled hair, now beckoning her wrist to his mouth, "I'm sorry," he wept kissing along her frail trail, finally resting his head above her heart--a place he promised he'll one day earn back.

"I'm so, so sorry."

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I'm considering a Part 2, do let me know if you'd like to see this narrative continue. I just like the idea of a remorseful, overtly in love and enamored by his wife Omkara so I penned this down. Let me know what you thought,

-A
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Sakura24 thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
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If something's beautiful it's bound to break your heart...like this one had done with its absolute brilliance! Wonderful writing!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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It's just so perfect... I am.loving this regretfulkara... Am up for the next part ..update asap plz
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Superb concept
How did Gauri reach in such a state
Wish Omkara is able to get her back

I want u to write more than 2 updates for this
OS is very short
Plz make it SS
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Posted: 8 years ago
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awesome.
Yes, do write part 2.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Loved it. Would certainly like to see om on this avatar. Please continue
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Posted: 8 years ago
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awesome update
i really wanted to know how gauri reached this stage
He had broken her beyond repair
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I would love to read part 2 <3
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wonderful please write part 2.. excellent portrayal of emotions👏
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Posted: 8 years ago
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OH MY GOD.
FIRST AND FOREMOST PLEASE CONTINUE THIS AND MAKE IT AN FF. THIS IS SO GOOD AND LIKE EXACTLY WHAT I NEEDED IN MY LIFE RN.

The language apart from being really well written was very thoughtful too, the choice of words really brought out the extent of his grief and remorse and gaaah idk if we'll ever get to see this in the show but literally, yeh padh ke dil ki muraad puri ho gayi, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE!

I think the best part of this story is that the characters are really close to what they are in the show so like, it makes reading this all the more realistic and satisfying. And if I haven't said it enough, PLEEEASEEE PLEASE DO CONTINUE! <<and make it into an FF if possible>>

-Kriti

PS. also I have friend who I was discussing FF's with (she actually recommended this to me haha) and she also shares the same sentiments..
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