FF~Behind the mask~ Ch10 pg34 (13-10-15)

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Posted: 10 years ago

#151

Originally posted by: cuteariya
hey simi plz no discontinue plz plz 🥺 No I wuzon't... neva eva again 😳

Originally posted by: 1993.ssg
Hey pls don't discontinue it
Love the story very much
Pls continue it Thank You so much for supporting me even though I... but still I won't discontinue..I promise 😊

I will surely continue it guys and I am sorry I shouldn't have said that 😔

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Posted: 10 years ago

#152

Hey sis, how you? 😊

So sorry for the extremely late reply

Loved the concept, it sounds very interesting

I read chapters 1-7 and it has all been beautifully written and I agree that Chapter 7 was short and I can't wait for Chapter 8

Chapter 1

I can understand how excited yet nervous she felt because she was entering a new environment and thanks to everyone's appearance (dressing) I guess anyone wearing something different would feel self conscious...

And then with the ragging, honestly, guys need to grow up...

If I was ragged, I certainly wouldn't want to do that to anyone because I would know how it feels...

Oh my hat, Aryan is such a pervert, yuck!

Lol, loved this line "Uus suar ki aulaad ko to sabak sikhana hi parega han nhi to" It made me laugh

Love the friendship between Manya and Priya

Love the relationship between Uday and Unnati, you can see the love and care Uday has for his sister...

What happened that Devgarh and Jaigarh families are enemies?

Chapter 2

Yay, so finally Uday and Unnati went to the college

Lol, Manya is too much...she was thinking of a way to get back on Aryan and bumped into Unnati but Unnati was so sweet and understanding and I love how Uday appeared and showed his concern but he is quite rude so glad that she didn't bump into him because I don't think either of them would have apologized...

Loved how Priya knew that Unnati is a princess and Manya didn't as well as how she was admiring Uday whereas Manyata was criticizing

Loved the toy snake idea, it was hilarious...lol

So, let me get this straight, Manya doesn't know that she is Manyata, right? How did she go missing and who took after her?

Chapter 3

It was shocking to read that Manyata is not proposed or going to marry Uday but I guess things will change soon...

Lol, I agree with Shaurya when he said that Uday has too much attitude

Aww, Unnati and Priya are so sweet, love their shopping scene...it was sweet

Gosh, Uday is so evil...what made him so evil?

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Posted: 10 years ago

#153

Chapter 4

Aww, loved the first part where Uday and Unnati compliment each other

Oh no! Why did Manya have to go alone...

I was right, Aryan is such a pervert, yuck...

Love how Uday rushes to the rescue, lol

I don't seem to understand why the Devgarh and Jaigarh families are enemies...What could have happened that Jaigarh hates the Devgarh family so much if Uday and Manyata were friends at one stage?

Yay, I knew it, Manya is Manyata!

Chapter 5

Giriraj and Vassundra are such a sweet couple, love their scene...

It was such a touching scene, first Giriraj wa shot and then Vassundra and over that Vassundra is pregnant...

Oh my hat, I honestly believe that someone wanted to break the relationship between the Devgarh and Jaigarh families and I doubt Brijraj did something like that and if he did bail that man out, there must be a reason behind it...I have my eye on MP

Vassundra is still in coma? Hope she gains conscious soon

I feel like crying, as much as I want Uday and Manya to get to know each other, I fear something bad is going to happen...

Chapter 6

Yoh, I actually thought that Anmol was serious when he said that they didn't miss the Devgarh family but was glad that it was a joke...

Aww, love the bonding between Anmol and Jagat and I was shocked to see that Jagat is engaged to Manyata...

Lol, Priya is like an ever ready battery...and loved the guessing part

Lol, love how Uday said "what! My dear choti will go (points at manya ) and you too"

Yes, so finally Manya met Anmol, lol, he asked her for her number whereas Jagat just brushed it off as a joke...Anmol is very sweet...does Uday like to spy? Lol, he watched Manya meet Anmol and Jagat...

Gosh, it's weird to have a guy helping a girl...I can imagine how uncomfortable it could be but it seemed that Manya was fine...

Wow, so Uday helped Manya pick clothes although it looked like he was loosing patience quite quickly...

I guess Uday does have good taste and Priya makes me laugh especially when she compliments Uday or Manya...

Chapter 7

Lol, I see Uday falling into his own trap

Not taking a cell could be dangerous if they get lost or separated...

Okay, so he took care of my concern but what if the GPS falls into the water or it breaks, then what?

Wow, a waterfall, I can already imagine it...

Lol, I love Vijay...he makes everything so much fun love Unnati for making him sing...

I honestly felt that Uday did that on purpose so that he could spend quality time with Manya, lol

Maybe he wouldn't have to wonder around the jungle if he hadn't sent her in the first place...

Last but not least, I want to thank you for all the pms you have sent me

Please do continue to send me pms whenever you update

Love the story, please do continue soon

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Posted: 10 years ago

#154

Originally posted by: humairaa1

Hey sis, how you? 😊 I am good sis, how are you? 😊

So sorry for the extremely late reply It's ok sis it happens and I can understand

Loved the concept, it sounds very interesting Thank You 😊

I read chapters 1-7 and it has all been beautifully written Thanks again
and I agree that Chapter 7 was short and I can't wait for Chapter 8 I'll updateon Monday sis

Chapter 1

I can understand how excited yet nervous she felt because
she was entering a new environment and thanks to everyone's appearance
(dressing) I guess anyone wearing something different would feel self
conscious... Right!.. you think that you are the odd one out who does not belong there

And then with the ragging, honestly, guys need to grow up... Indeed they do.. but alas nothing never happens

If I was ragged, I certainly wouldn't want to do that to
anyone because I would know how it feels.. Inhuman behavior is this

Oh my hat, Aryan is such a pervert, yuck! yeah he is

Lol, loved this line "Uus suar ki aulaad
ko to sabak sikhana hi parega han nhi to" It made me laugh Yeah 😆

Love the friendship between Manya and Priya True friends 😊

Love the relationship between Uday and Unnati, you can see
the love and care Uday has for his sister... Glad you like it

What happened that Devgarh and Jaigarh families are enemies? Something bad 😔

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Chapter 2

Yay, so finally Uday and Unnati went to the college

Lol, Manya is too much...she was thinking of a way to get back
on Aryan and bumped into Unnati but Unnati was so sweet and understanding and I
love how Uday appeared and showed his concern but he is quite rude so glad that
she didn't bump into him because I don't think either of them would have
apologized.. LOL you're right.. it'd have led to a HUGE fight

Loved how Priya knew that Unnati is a princess and Manya
didn't as well as how she was admiring Uday whereas Manyata was criticizing Priya is Priya

Loved the toy snake idea, it was hilarious.. lol Indeed it was

So, let me get this straight, Manya doesn't know that she is
Manyata, right? How did she go missing and who took after her? You'll know that soon sis

<p>Chapter 3
It was shocking to read that Manyata is not proposed or
going to marry Uday but I guess things will change soon.. hope so too

Lol, I agree with Shaurya when he said that Uday has too
much attitude Mr. Attitude 😆

Aww, Unnati and Priya are so sweet, love their shopping
scene...it was sweet A friend in need is a friend indeed

Gosh, Uday is so evil...what made him so evil? Time and circumstances

Edited by simi.k. - 10 years ago

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Posted: 10 years ago

#155

Originally posted by: humairaa1

Chapter 4

Aww, loved the first part where Uday and Unnati compliment
each other Bhai behen ka pyaar 😆

Oh no! Why did Manya have to go alone.. Kismat ka khel 😆 .

I was right, Aryan is such a pervert, yuck... Bloody blood sucking monster 😡

Love how Uday rushes to the rescue, lol Meri heroine ko koi kuch nhi krega

I don't seem to understand why the Devgarh and Jaigarh
families are enemies...What could have happened that Jaigarh hates the Devgarh
family so much if Uday and Manyata were friends at one stage? You will know soon

Yay, I knew it, Manya is Manyata! Smart of you

</p>
Chapter 5

Giriraj and Vassundra are such a sweet couple, love their
scene...

It was such a touching scene, first Giriraj wa shot and then
Vassundra and over that Vassundra is pregnant...

Oh my hat, I honestly believe that someone wanted to break
the relationship between the Devgarh and Jaigarh families and I doubt Brijraj
did something like that and if he did bail that man out, there must be a reason
behind it...I have my eye on MP 😲 MP! are you sure?

Vassundra is still in coma? Hope she gains conscious soon

I feel like crying, as much as I want Uday and Manya to get
to know each other, I fear something bad is going to happen... Be positive yaar

Chapter 6

Yoh, I actually thought that Anmol was serious when he said
that they didn't miss the Devgarh family but was glad that it was a joke...

Aww, love the bonding between Anmol and Jagat and I was
shocked to see that Jagat is engaged to Manyata... Yeah he is. sad na?

Lol, Priya is like an ever ready battery...and loved the
guessing part

Lol, love how Uday said "what!
My dear choti will go (points at manya ) and you too" Uday Uday Uday 😉

Yes, so finally Manya met Anmol, lol, he asked her for her
number whereas Jagat just brushed it off as a joke...Anmol is very sweet...does
Uday like to spy? Lol, he watched Manya meet Anmol and Jagat... LOL never thought like that

Gosh, it's weird to have a guy helping a girl...I can imagine
how uncomfortable it could be but it seemed that Manya was fine... Was she?

Wow, so Uday helped Manya pick clothes although it looked
like he was loosing patience quite quickly... Yeah short tempered Uday 😆

I guess Uday does have good taste and Priya makes me laugh
especially when she compliments
Uday or Manya... Lol yeah!

Chapter 7

Lol, I see Uday falling into his own trap

Not taking a cell could be dangerous if they get lost or
separated...

Okay, so he took care of my concern but what if the GPS
falls into the water or it breaks, then what? Hmm you have given me ideas!

Wow, a waterfall, I can already imagine it...

Lol, I love Vijay...he makes everything so much fun love
Unnati for making him sing... Ma da laadla bigad gya

I honestly felt that Uday did that on purpose so that he
could spend quality time with Manya, lol Possibility

Maybe he wouldn't have to wonder around the jungle if he
hadn't sent her in the first place... Point...

<p>Last but not least, I want to thank you for all the pms you
have sent me Aww you are welcome😊
Please do continue to send me pms whenever you update will do that for sure 😊

Love the story, please do continue soon Thank You and i will

Thank You for your long and sweet reply 😊

Edited by simi.k. - 10 years ago

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Humairaa

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Posted: 10 years ago

#156

Originally posted by: simi.k.

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Humairaa

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Posted: 10 years ago

#157

Originally posted by: simi.k.

Thank You for your long and sweet reply 😊

Sis, it had to be long, after all it was super late

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wqadf

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Posted: 10 years ago

#158

When are u updating it's Monday yaar waiting

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Posted: 10 years ago

#159

Dedicated to dimple ❤️

CHAPTER 8

"MANYA..." called out Uday "STAY WHERE YOU ARE, I AM COMING.."

He kept on walking along the directions provided by the GPS. He reached a place which according to it was THE place bit there was no trace of Manya over there."Manya kha ho tum? "

"Uday is that you? "

"nahi humara bhoot hai.. Kha ho tum? "

"Yahan neeche "

"neeche kha? " he asked while looking downwards. He saw manya fallen into a pit made by some wild animal hunter. "How did you ever get there? " "Ye sab tumhari wajah se hua hai.. Fruits collect karte karte yahan gir gyi! Agar tum mujhe yahan nhi bhejjte to mai kabhi girti hi nhi haina? "

"Apni bak bak band.kro aur haath do apna"

"Tum kya mera haath maang rahe ho? "

"Oh god kiske saath fasa diya.. shaadi ke liye nhi maang rhe hai.. bahar aana hai to haath do warnal yahi baithi raho!! "

"Ok ye lo"

He held her alnd and tried to pyll her out of there. "God kitni bhari ho tum!

"What?! Bhaari aur wo bhi mai! huh"

"Thodi koshish to karo baahar aane ki! "

"Mujhse nhi ho rha! "

"Ab to ek hi tareeka hai fir"

"kya? "

"Tum zindagi bhar yahin baithi raho! "

"Nahi nahi.. zara zor to lagaao! "

He pulled her out atlast after much difficulty.

"Thank you so much.. Thank you "

"Its okk"

"Chalo chalein phir? "

"Chalein! Are you serious Manya? "

"Han.. kyo? "

"Ek baat batao tum ne scholarship kaose le li? Kyunki tumhara dimaag to tumhara chalta hi nhi hai.. "

"Kya matlab? "

"Matlab ye ki tumhe ye to pta hi hoga ki jungle mein andhera jaldi ho jata hai.. "

"Han.. pta. hai.. "

"Agar tum is andhere mein hana cahti ho to you are most welcome"

"Woo.. "

"Raat mein jab jungli jaanwar milenge na to unhe humara hi bol dena ok"

"Nahi nahi tum theek keh rahe ho.. aaj raat hum yahi rahenge.. "

"Hmm... "

"Per yeh to btao kha par? "

"Whan" he said pointing towards a tree "us ped ke neeche"

"Yahan!! "

"Nahi agar tum kahi aur rehna chahti ho to tum jaao.. Ek kaam karo ye lo humara gps aur wapis camp hi chali jaao"

"Meri poori baat to sun lete.. mai to yeh keh rahi thi ki yahan!! kitni achi jagah hai.. wah!! "

They both go and sit under that tree. Manya starts to move her head in circles. Uday looks at her and she smiles making Uday roll his eyes.

"Ek baat puchu? "

"Agar na kehne par nahi poochogi to mat pucho"

"Ok "

Another five minutes pass. Manya is unable to control herself and says "Chalo puch hi leti hun, Ye btao tum har wakt itne sadhe hue kyu rehte ho? "

No answer

"Bolo na.. gar wakt bas aankhein kyu dikhate rehte ho.. itne arrogant kyu ho? "

No answer

"Hadh hai yaar! kuch bolo to shi"

"Shut up"

"Nhi pehle answer do"

"Nhi denge"

"Dekha..! Attitude! "

He turns away from her. Seeing that he is not interested, she too stops talking. After 10 minutes

"So gayi kya?.. " asked Uday

"Tumhe kya? "

"Okay humne to socha tha tumse jo baat karni thi kar lein par ab jab tum so rahi to rehne dete hai "

"Arre bolo na"

"Bolein?.. "

"Han Han bolo.. "

"Ok Hum ye kehna chahte the ki.. "

"Hmm.. "

"Good night " saying this he starts laughing.

"What?! "

He is still laughing while manya looks at her, she said "Haste ho na to normal lagte ho"

"Kyu waise kya abnormal lagta hun? "

"Nahi tum to.. "

"Hum to.. " he says while advancing towards her.

"Tum to.. " she backs away and gets up.

"Hum to?.. " he too gets up and starts moving towards her.

"Tum.. wo.. tum.. "she stammers.

"Hum kya manya? bolo.. " he keeps moving forward.

"umm tum.. " she stops moving as her back hits the tree.

"Hum.. " he comes near her and keeps his both arms on the tree, trapping her.

"Tum bohot.. " she tries to say something but finds herself at a loss of words. This close proximity was doing something to her.

"Hum bohot kya manya?.. " he comes very close to her. He now uses his one hand and moves some strands of hair behind her ear, side cupping her face. He caresses her cheek with his thumb, "Manya bolo.. "

"Tum... "

He moves his face forward like he is going to kiss her. Manya closes her eyes seeing this. His lips are only a few centimeters away from hers. He stays there and asks again "hum tumhe kaise lagte hain Manya? "

His breadth was falling on her lips and it was making her lose her senses.

"May I kiss you Manya? " he asked.

Her eyes were still closed "Hmm...? "

This was like a green signal for Uday. He placed his lips on top of hers and kissed her softly. She was just unable to react. An electric spark ran through her entire body when he kissed her. All her senses were numb. She couldn't react. Uday was still kissing her softly but when she didn't respond he held her waist and pulled her towards him. He bit on her lower lip to ask her to open her mouth. Manya was enjoying and so she opened her mouth as a response. She kept her arms around his neck and started playing with his hair. Uday explored every nook and corner of her mouth while his hands caressed her waist. Manya grabbed his hair and pulled him more towards her deepening the kiss. both were enjoying it but as every good thing has its end, the kiss also ended. Something pricked Manya's foot causing her trance to break. Manya came back to her senses and pushed Uday away with all her force. Uday was taken off guard as he was not expecting something like that. He saw Manya's face and was startled. Her face was showing a combination of anger, embarrassment and confusion. It had turned into a dark shade of pink. He regained his composure soon and smirked.

"Kya hua Manya? Kiss pasand nhi aayi?" he asked teasingly

She turned even redder.

"bolo.. "

She wanted to answer him back but couldn't as she knew that she too was at fault and she couldn't blame him

"Kya hua.. bolti band" he smirked, "yeh acha tareeka hai tumhari bak bak band karne ka.. "

She didn't say anything but went and sat down and started to cry silently

"Oh Miss drama queen? "

She kept weeping.

"Kya hua? Kya tum itna sharma gyi ki ab apni surat nhi dikha rahi? "

Weep weep

"Acha mat bolo hum chale jate hain" he starts moving.

Manya lifts her face and saw that Uday was about to leave

"Ruko" she said still crying "Akele chod kr mat jao"

He turns and says "Kyu darr gayi.. Hum kuch khane ke liye le kar aate hain ok? "

She nods and he leaves. She again starts crying.

He comes back after 5 minutes with some wild fruits. He saw that Manya was still in that position so he went and sat beside her.

"Manya.. " he said

She lifted up her face. She had stopped crying by now.

"Ye lo fruits kha lo"

"Bhook nhi hai"

"Abhi tak kiss ko le kar upset ho? "

She looks down

"Hey... Its ok. Itna.. sharmane wali koi baat nhi hai"

Still looking down

"Ok aaj jo kuch bhi hua use bhool jate hain ok? "

"lekin.. "she said still looking down.

"lekin wekin kuch nhi, chalo humari tarf dekho" he says lifting her face "Lets start it afresh, Friends? " he asked forwarding his hand.

She looked at Uday and then his hand and back at Uday

"Ye hum pehli baar kar rahe hain manya warna aaj tak ye mauka kisiko nhi mila" he said

She broke into a smile and shook his hand.

"Thanks.. " she said

"Pleasure.. Waise tumne bataya nhi kiss pasand nhi aayi thi kya? " He asked while he smirked

She hit him on his shoulder playfully.

"Oww that hurt! " he said petending to be hurt

She giggled.

"Waise hasti hui achi lagti ho" he winked

She blushed

"Haye.. Kudi sharma gyi" he said.

"Tum ho kya Uday, kabhi itne arrogant to kabhi itne sweet to kabhi itne naughty? "

"Hum Yuvraj Udayveer Singh hain Manya, aaj tak koi hume samaj nhi paaya"

"Ok.. "

"Chalo ab ye fruits kha lo.. "

They eat fruits and then talk to pass time.

"Uday ek baat btao.. "

"Ye tumhari pet line hai kya.. "

"What? "

"Jab deko ek baat puchu, ek baat btao" he said imitating her

"Theek hai tum puch lo.. "

"ok tum apne baare mein btao"

"Kya Btaun.. I am Manya. I am an orphan... blah blah tumhe pta to hai"

"Hmm chalo tum hi puch lo"

"Tum apne baare mein btao... "

"Hum hain Yuvraj Udayveer Singh. Jaigarh ke Yuvraj. Baki ghar ja kr google kr lene sab pta chal jaega" he smirked.

"Attitude!! huh"

"Aur kuch"

"Kya tumhe kabhi pyaar hua hai"

"Pyaar.. Kyu tumhe kya? Aur ye kaisa ladkiyon wala swaal hai?! "

"Arre waise hi puch rahi thi aur ladki hun to ladkiyon waale swaal hi puchungi na"

"Nahi kabhi nhi hua hume pyaar"

"Oh kay"

"Chalo raat bohot ho gyi hai so jaate hain"

"Okay Good night "

"Good Night"

Suddenly a howl of a wolf is heard.
"Ye kya tha? " asked Manya

"Wolf tha kyu.. darr lag raha hai kya"

"Nahi mai nhi darti kisise"

Again wolf howled so she moves near Uday

"Main darr nhi rahi.. samjhe"

"I know.. " he smirked.

Again wolf howled and this time Manya held his arm and closed her eyes.

"Ab bhi darr nhi lag raha hoga.. right? " he smirked.

"Pta nhi iis wolf ko kya chahiye"

"Tum"

"What!! "

He smirked

Again wolf howled. This time Manya hugged him tightly hiding her face in his chest while uday keeps his hand on her waist

"Ab bhi nahi dari.. right sherni? "

"mai darr gyi khush..? "

"Bohot"

"Good night"

"Aise hei so jaogi.. irada kya hai tumhara"

"Chup muhje darr lag raha hai"

"Ok mam reh lijye humari bahon mein"

She moves back and rests her head on the tree trunk pretending to sleep

"Good night" he smirked

"Goood night " she said

In the morning, Uday is the first one to wake. He finds Manya sleeping on his lap. He tucks a strand of hair behind her ear and keeps looking at her. "So jaye to cute lagti hai, Ms han nahi toh" he chuckled.

What are you doing Uday? Ye tum kya kar rhe ho? Tumhe kisi bhi kimat pe apna mission nhi bhoolna hai.. Yeh sab pyaar vyaar beech mein nhi aana chahiye.. Get a Grip Uday!! he thought.

"Manya utho subah ho chuki hai... sab humara wait kar rahe honge"

"Hmm" she said and opened her eyes. It took her a moment to realize that she was sleeping on his lap "Oh sorry! " she said while getting up embarrassed.

"Its ok.. chalo ab hume chalna chahiye"

"Han chalo.."

They start walking. Uday was leading the way. In about 15 minutes they were at the camp. Vijay saw them first and called everyone

"Thank God that you've returned, pta hum sab kitna darr gaye the! " Vijay exclaimed.

"Dada, Manya aap log theek to hai? "

"Koi jungli jaanwar to nhi mila"

"Kya bol rahi ho priya.. waise tum dono theek ho na? "

"Han Hum theek hain" said Uday

"Main bhi theek hun" said manya

"Hume kuch nhi hua or na hi hume koi jungli janwar mila"

"Main bhi theek hun or mujhe bhi koi jungli janwar nahi mila"

"Chinta ki koi baat nhi hum theek hai ok? "

"Han mai bhi theek hun ok? "

"ye tum kya kar rahi ho manya jub hum bol rahe hain to tum repeat kyu kar rahi ho? "

"Tum to har wakt hum hum karke baat karte ho ab mujhe kaise pta chalega ki tum apne baare mein bol rahe ho ya hum dono ke baare mein"

"God! Seriously choti tum kaise rehti ho iske saath? Kal raat se humare naak mein dam karke rakha hai"

"Huh akdu kahin ka! "

"Aap dono bhi na" Unnati said while laughing

"Acha aage ka kya program hai" asked shaurya

"Wait and watch" he smirked.

CHAPTER ENDS

So guys how was it? Long or short? (actually I seriously lost my length calculator) Next updates will be according to this chapter (length wise)

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This time I wont ask for a particular number of likes.. I'll be happy with what you guys give me

1 more thing I seriously dont know when the next update will come as my classes have started again.. maybe in 2 weeks.. So sorry

Its sort of unedited so sorry again

1 more thing sorry for my bak bak please ignore, concentrate on chapter more (my bak bak=waste of time)

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