FF - Lost Heritage - CHAPTER 5 UPDATED (pg27)

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fia21

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Posted: 13 years ago

#121

Woah what an amazing update. Loved it to bits.
And omg Akash was on probation 🤣 . You will not believe how happy you made me by turning Akash's character into a filthy desperate dog. Bang on! 👍🏼
Uday's Royal Punch --- CLASSIC! 👏
I loved the last part. It's so amazing how Uday felt utterly comfortable in sharing his feelings with Manyata. And Manyata already kinda likes him. Thank God for that. Otherwise ir took her ages to start liking Uday in the show. Lol. Fabulous update. Can't wait to read the real dhamaka. Please update soon and PM me if you can 😊

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757315

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Posted: 13 years ago

#122

sorry for the late reply

lovely chapter ash each and every detail was perfect in this part u really developed manyata's character from her looks to her attitude to her loving side to her anger and her flirting and bold side too where she tells uday

"What's the deal Yuvraaj you have some crush on me?" I winked at him playfully

that line shows how easily manyata mingles with people and she kind of have developed a liking for uday then comes the suspense is uday this good i mean is there a political game behind his actions ?

i am eagerly waiting for the next update i really want to see when adaa maya manyata anvesha and everyone is in one party all the past coming together and i am really excited for the royal dance of manveer😉

please update soon and thanks for the pm actually update today please😛

Edited by vampire12345678 - 13 years ago

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Uday Lovie

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Posted: 13 years ago

#123

just strted readfin todayy ... plzz plzz plzz pm me wen u update ... :):):)

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Sarah

@MsLuscious

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Posted: 13 years ago

#124

W0w da update was w0rth waiting manyata ix lyk extremly pretty here i was hating reading pakash scene bt uv entry and hs punch makd ma day my 6 sense ix telng me drx sumthng wr0ng wid uday i mean hex surly planing sumthng plx try to update t0night if itx already written:/

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anushruthi

@anushruthi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#125

hey Kakacool

i read all the four parts of ur ff in one go

and i must say amazing plot and very beautifully written

loved the story very much

cont soon and do PM me if possible

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757315

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Posted: 13 years ago

#126

please update soon i ma waiting

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Ash

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Posted: 13 years ago

#127

Originally posted by: mahi0809
Nicely done... always love seeing Akash pay jootay paroing kinda scenarios and you made him a perverted criminal loll... hilarious.

Nice update... will wait for tomorrow's update, but somehow I don't understand how you just mellowed Uday towards Manyata.. I thought he wanted to avenge his distorted self respect... he saved her that was good but I felt it was too quick showing her taking a lift from him as I always imagined Manyata being very independent but still taking a ride from a practical stranger.

Plus I felt Manyata was too bindaas and could handle anything properly.. I wished there were more tashan moments between M and U with M's respect and independence being highlighted and ManVeer slowly falling in love... but lets see tomorrow's update.

Can't wait to see Anvesha going down!

Hey Mahi, i know i agree with all your points but manyata hasn't fallen for UV she's just intoxicated and that hardly equates to love we shall see them really getting to know each other later on 😃
I wanted to show different sides of M i feel she's a little hard so i wanted to make her a little soft

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Ash

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Posted: 13 years ago

#128

Thank you everyone for such wonderful constructive comments, I haven't yet wrote the next part but as soon as i am done i will put it up, please do read it it's very dhamakdar.

To all the new readers i have buddied you and i'm sooo happy you like this FF and to all the old friends luv ya for the comments and like