Manveer FF: |Choomantar| PMlist & Ch.4 (Pg9) Jan 4

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_SuMmEr_LoVe_

@_SuMmEr_LoVe_

Dazzler

+ 6

Posted: 13 years ago

#71

omgosh :D

your such a fabulous writer , I've never come across an FF as good as your's. I am all in praises. The way you pin down Uday is just Haaayyye :) There is always a scene or a line in every updates that leaves me cracking/smiling or thinking of even after m done reading .

Do add me to you Pm list please :)

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salekh1

@salekh1

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#72

It was SOWWW cute

loooveed uday's diagloges..

and awesomely written

please do continue soon

Please PM me also..

Thnk youuu😃

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minizz

@minizz

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#73

This chapter was really good.got to see a slightly different side of Uday.oh no J ko patha chal gaya

ab kya hoga?lovely update.enjoyed it a lot😃

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crazysandhir

@crazysandhir

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#74

Its SIMPLY SUPERB 👏 n thnanks for d pm 🤗

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moksha89

@moksha89

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#75

how did i not come across your FF before? i just read the first part & it's so good! I like how you've set up the story & made Manyata's character a little more smart! 😆 Loved how Uday is hating the guards ..& for some reason this line cracked me up " "Jaan-e-man, kaha aa rahi ho?" said one of them getting out of the jeep." reminds me of Shammi Kapoor going "badan pe sitare, lapate hui.. oh jaan-e-tamana..kahan ja rahe ho?" 😆

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moksha89

@moksha89

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#76

"Manyata turned around to see HIM. Oh no! not him again. Uday walked towards them with the jeep's headlights shining on him like a spotlight. His hands in his pocket, a smooth walk and a calm smile on his face.(A solid hero waali entry)"

so good! i love how you have Udayveer's hottness and intellligence in full form while Manyata is persistent as ever. Off to part 3 😉