Second Story - Khatre Mainn Daya Abhijeet

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Abhijeet was getting ready to go on duty and
door bell ringed
Abhijeet: Daya will be there.
Again bell ringed.
Abhijeet opened the door but no one was
there. He checked outside but no one was
there. He was returning inside he saw a parcel
on the mat. He saw his name on that. He
opened and saw CID badge full of blood. It
was of Daya.
Abhijeet tried calling Daya. But his phone was
switched off. Abhijeet tooked the badge and
wore his jacket and went some where.
At Daya's home. Abhijeet saw his house was
locked. Abhijeet had a duplicate key. So he
opened the door and saw all the things were
here and there. As if there was tsunami came
there.
Abhijeet was not able to understand what to
do.
He received a call. It was from an unknown
person.
Abhijeet: Hello..
Person: Hello... Searching for Daya..
Abhijeet: How did you came to know.. Who are
you?
Person: Is that important or Life of Daya..
Abhijeet: You kidnapped Daya... Why?
Person: To take revenge..
Abhijeet: Revenge... What revenge..
Person: That you will come to know as the
time comes... Now just concentrate on how to
save Daya..
Person cuts the call..
Abhijeet locates the number and reaches
there. But no one was there... Some one came
from back and hit A rod on the head of
Abhijeet... Abhijeet feels unconscious.
At Bureau -
Freddy was thinking something and Pankaj
came.
Pankaj: Sir missing your wife?
Freddy: No... Thinking about friendship of
Abhijeet sir and Daya sir.. Since 19 years they
are best friends. And have been there against
them even during bad times.
Pankaj: Yes sir... Both are soul of each other.
Acp sir: what's going on?
Freddy: Nothing sir...
Acp sir: Ok.. Where is Daya and Abhijeet..?
Freddy: Sir they have not yet came..
Acp sir: It's 10 am and they have not yet
came..
Freddy: Sir I am contacting with Abhijeet sir..
Freddy calls Abhijeet but his phone was
switched off. So he tried calling Daya but his
phone was also switched off.
Freddy: Sir.. Phone of both are switched off..
: Where are both
Acp sir: Poorvi just find out the last location
of their phone.
Poorvi: Sir the last location is of Daya's sir
home.
Acp sir: What..
At Daya's home -
Acp sir, Pankaj and Poorvi arrived and found
that the door was open. They went inside and
saw the condition of hall was worst. As if
some tsunami had came.
Acp sir ordered Pankaj and Poorvi to
investigate. And Poorvi saw too much blood
on the floor. She called Acp sir.
Acp sir: My god. Too much blood...
Poorvi: Sir this blood could be of Daya sir!
Acp sir: Possibility.. Just take a sample to
check. And send it to Salukhe.
At unknown place.
Daya became conscious. He saw he was
locked in a room. And while looking around he
saw a man who was unconscious. He was not
able to see the face of that man. As he had
faced to wall. He went there and saw that it
was Abhijeet.
Daya: Open your eyes Abhijeet..
Abhijeet was not responding. Daya got scared
then he saw a jug on the table and went there
and took some water and sprinkled it on
Abhijeet's face.
Abhijeet: Hmm..
Daya kept jug aside. And helped Abhijeet to
became conscious and also to wake up.
Daya: Are you OK?
Abhijeet: What will happen to me.. You are
there..
Daya smiles.
Abhijeet: I was just afraid when I saw that
badge full of blood. Many negative thoughts
were coming in my mind.
Daya keeps his hand on the shoulder of
Abhijeet.
Daya: Who has a friend like you what will
happen to him.
Abhijeet: Oh really.. Well how all this
happened.?
Daya: Yesterday after dropping you when I
came back and opened the door and switch on
the light I saw a man seating on the sofa. He
had worn a unusual mask. I went inside to see
who was he. Has I moved a step ahead
someone came and kept a handkerchief on my
face and I became unconscious. Then I don't
know what happened.
Abhijeet: We have to find out about him as
soon as possible..
Daya: But how? Be are trapped here and the
door is of metal.
Abhijeet: There will be someone way out from
here.
At lab -
Dr Salunkhe was checking the blood sample
and Acp sir and Poorvi arrived.
Acp sir: Who's blood is this?
Salukhe: This has blood of two people.
Acp sir: Who?
Salukhe: One of Daya and one may be of
kidnapper
Pankaj came with an old lady.
Pankaj: Sir she is Amrita. She wants to inform
you something.
Acp sir: Ya sure...
Amrita: Sir I had seen 5 people yesterday
night in they were kidnapping Daya. Acp sir:
What... Did you saw anyone's face?
Amrita: No sir. Because they all had worn
masks. 1 was walking with the help of stick.
And that stick had Golden Lion on the top.
Acp sir: What lion?! can you help us to make
the sketch of that stick.. Amrita: I will try sir..
Acp sir: Poorvi just go with her and bring back
with the sketch.. Poorvi: Yes sir.. Come
Madam..
At Bureau
The sketch artist was drawing as per Amrita's
instructions. Acp sir and Freddy came there.
Acp sir: Is the sketch ready?
Artist: Almost..
Acp sir: Hmm
After some time.
Artist: Sir sketch is ready.
Acp sir: Great.
Acp sir tooks the sketch and See's..
Acp sir: Ohh this is that stick.
Amrita: Yes sir.
Acp sir: Poorvi just find out about this stick.
And also who has ordered such sticks. Poorvi:
Yes sir.
Amrita: Shall I leave?
Acp sir: Yah sure. Pankaj just go with her till
gate.
Pankaj: Yes sir.
Amrita and Pankaj leaves
Poorvi: Sir.
Acp sir: Yes..
Poorvi: Sir there are in total 2 shops who sell
such sticks and 3 factorys who produce. Acp
sir: Great. Now just go and check
.
Freddy, Pankaj, Poorvi and Shreya goes to 2
shops and 2 factory. But all in vain. In 3rd
factory.
Freddy shows the sketch: How many people
has ordered this type of sticks? Owner: Sir
orders are taken over by the manager Alok. I
may call him Freddy: Hm
Alok: Yes sir.
Owner: Alok this are from CID. They want to
know who has ordered this type of stick. Alok:
Sir it's in register. One second.
Freddy: Hmm
Alok: Yes sir there is one customer.
Freddy: What's his name?
Alok: Suryakanth.
Freddy: We want his phone number and
address.
Alok gives them the number and address.
Shreya calls on that number but the number
was wrong. They went to that address too.
But there they came to know that there is no
one named Suryakanth living there. They came
back to Bureau. Alok was called and asked to
help in making the sketch of Suryakanth. The
sketch was ready. Poorvi was checking with
the criminal record.
Poorvi: Sir..
Acp Sir: Yes Poorvi.
Acp sir comes there
Poorvi: Sir this is the past record of
Suryakanth.
Acp sir: Ohh this is Suryakanth..
Poorvi: You know him?
Acp sir: Yes.. Very well.. He is Shera... He was
caught in encounter 10 years ago his partners
were killed but he succeeded in flying away
Poorvi: But sir what's his relation with Daya
sir and Abhijeet sir..?
Acp sir: Daya and Abhijeet had caught him
and his gang. And Abhijeet had encountered
Jagan..
Poorvi: Means Shera is taking the revenge of
death of Jagan..
Acp sir: No matter what will happen.. But we
will have Abhijeet and Daya back safely and
also catch Shera.
At unknown place -
Abhijeet was thinking something and he saw
there painting on the wall and also saw the
camera in build in that..
He just went near Daya and catch hold his
collar.
Daya: Hey.. What are you doing Boss?
Abhijeet: I will not leave you. I had came here
to make you free not get stuck in this..
At control room
Gang Member (GM)1: I think they are gone
mad..
GM 2: In this madness if they will kill each
other then?
Boss: No this should not happen.. There death
will be with my own hands..
Suddenly the monitor stopped showing the
clip.
Boss: What's this happening.. Just go and
find out.
Both: Yes sir
Both goes there and See's.. That both of them
were not there..
GM1: Where are both gone? If they will not be
found then Boss will kill us..
GM 2: I think we should call the boss.
He put out his phone and Daya tooked it from
back. And Daya caught him.
GM 1 Removes his gun and targets Daya.
GM 1: Leave him or else I will fire..
Abhijeet comes and tooks his gun and GM
fires.
After few minutes
GM 1: Boss we have killed both of them.
Boss: What...? I told you that they are my
enemy. And I will kill them. GM 2: But sir if we
hadn't kill them then you had to see our dead
body. GM 1: Sir it's time to escape. If CID will
come and catch hold then. It's better you
leave. We will not tell to CID where are you.
Boss: Ok.. Hide all the evidence. And this are
the reward of your remaining work.. Take it
and leave.
Both of them took the cash on the table and
left.
At Bureau -
Acp sir was busy and he received an sms.
Sir Shera is in the planning of leaving the
country.. Just catch him. We are following
him. Abhijeet.
Acp sir: Shera.. You succeed last time but
not this time.
At unknown place.
Shera was waiting for the helicopter.
After some time... Helicopter didn't came but
a car arrived..
Few goons came and surrounded Shera.
They all had worn masks
Shera: What's this... How are you all?
Goon 1: We are your father...
Shera: What rubbish..
Another goon took catch hold of Shera..
Shera: Who who are you...
All of them removed their masks.
It was CID.
Daya had hold Shera..
Daya slapped him and he was arrested.
Acp sir: Now say.. Why did you do so!
Shera: I wanted revenge.. From Abhijeet and
Daya..
But how are you both alive?
Abhijeet: When your two people came they
were killed in the chaos.. Then we came to you
wearing the mask and forced you to come
here.
Shera: Such a big game... I will not leave
you...
Shera removes gun and targets Daya and
shoots..
Abhijeet comes in between and the bullet hits
him on shoulder... Shera seeing the change
escapes... Freddy and Pankaj goes behind
him.. Daya holds Abhijeet in his arms..
Abhijeet: Daya.. Catch Shera first..
Daya: But. .
Abhijeet : Please Daya...
Daya: Okk.
Acp sir calls the ambulance.
Daya chases Shera and catches him and gives
him a tight slap.
Daya: You will never succeed in killing my
best friend my brother.
Shera: I want revenge of the death of my
friend.. So I will try to kill your friend.
Daya catches his collar.
Daya: Don't dare to do so...
Acp sir: Daya leave him... Justice will be done.
Freddy and Pankaj take him.
Acp sir and Daya takes Abhijeet to hospital.
Doctor: He is alright.
Acp sir: Thank you sir.
Daya: Why you did so?
Abhijeet: You are my life. If something had
happened to you then? Daya: And if to you?
Acp sir: Nothing has happened so now relax.
Both shaked their hands.

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swathi17 thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
#2
I loved this short story...
Waiting for more stories...
More investigation and some non investigation stuff as well...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#3

Simple and Goood Story...👏👏

Like that Sudden Idea to First call Daya and then Believe on that Call...⭐️👏

Team approaching was Nice...😊👏

Both Kidnapped so Easily...😆😆

the Escaping Plan was Awesome...⭐️⭐️

Really that Idea to Call Boss and Telling Him about Leaving Country as CID behind Him because DUO Escaped Stole the whole Story...⭐️⭐️⭐️

Really Zabardast Writer...⭐️⭐️⭐️

the Bullet Scene is Not Appealing...

Bina Goli Khayey bhi Case Solve ho skta tha...😆😆

All and All, Wonderful Attempt...⭐️👏👏

Keep it Up...👍🏼👍🏼

Coming Up with More in Future...😊😊

Thank You so much...😳😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was a decent attempt. Simple and straight story. The best part was DUO fooling the boss. The way story was written was easy to read and understand. Writing style is pretty good 👏
The story seems to be inspired by the way FW make episodes (recently). Do you watch anything other than CID? or read any thrillers? If not, it's a good time to expand your horizon dear. Here are the points you could improve.

1. Technically they are cops, very well trained and highly efficient. They can not be lifted that easily ( unless u watch a FW show)
2. The drama of fighting before camera reminded one CID episode. CID ki Kidnapping 😉
3. The FW style drama with bullet could be avoided 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#5
Lovely story Chotu.
You did a great job..Awesome ⭐️

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