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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: pappais

nice story di👍🏼


Thanks dear... Though please provide me a detailed review as possible... 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

SONALI, Story Finished na...
or still have any Concluding parts...
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: gadhadada


SONALI, Story Finished na...
or still have any Concluding parts...


Concluding bole toh last part boss... Bas itna hi hai 😛
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Sonali.


Concluding bole toh last part boss... Bas itna hi hai 😛



Thank You...👍🏼
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: gadhadada



Thank You...👍🏼


Anytime boss... 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

SONALI, its really a Classy Attempt...👏👏
I Love the Topic, Handeling, Treatment...👏😳
U really Alert about Small Things especially taking Help from Police, Use Constables for Security purpose, Information Network and Media...👏👏
U excillentlly joint all and Knitted them Well...👏👏
Lovely Space to Every Officer and the Combine Work...
Cute Concern for DAYA Sir...😳😳
SUDHAKER entry was completely Unexpected..👏👏
Except the Length of part 2 as some parts feeling Dragged (in my opinion only)...😉
Its really a Fantastic Story...⭐️⭐️
A Big Thank You to You...🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
Nice story Sonali but somehow I feel you lost the grip on the story in part 2. The story is overall good but part 1 is more thrilling.


one more thing. You have shown Rajat exploding a truck of gas cylinders...I was a bit surprised under those circumstances.. That is just to distract the goons. In 571E the petrol tank was shot at because the was already a bomb and it was in an empty helipad ..but a gas cylinder truck standing on the road.. Probably to distribute to public...will a cid cop destroy public property? I don't know. ..! 😆

But overall nice story. Please don't give such a big gap between different parts. From my own personal experience I know the story will take a different track. In my case I ended up abandoning it.
Edited by visrom - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: gadhadada


SONALI, its really a Classy Attempt...👏👏
I Love the Topic, Handeling, Treatment...👏😳
U really Alert about Small Things especially taking Help from Police, Use Constables for Security purpose, Information Network and Media...👏👏
U excillentlly joint all and Knitted them Well...👏👏
Lovely Space to Every Officer and the Combine Work...
Cute Concern for DAYA Sir...😳😳
SUDHAKER entry was completely Unexpected..👏👏
Except the Length of part 2 as some parts feeling Dragged (in my opinion only)...😉
Its really a Fantastic Story...⭐️⭐️
A Big Thank You to You...🤗


Ohh my my... Aap se taarif sun kar toh dil baag baag ho gaya GD... Thank you so much... Regarding Sudhakar's entry jusr thought of it after Freddy sir's poem... Yeah may be it was a bit dragged... Emotions mein beh gayi 😆 thanks you so much for the appreciation buddy it means a lot...🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: visrom

Nice story Sonali but somehow I feel you lost the grip on the story in part 2. The story is overall good but part 1 is more thrilling.


one more thing. You have shown Rajat exploding a truck of gas cylinders...I was a bit surprised under those circumstances.. That is just to distract the goons. In 571E the petrol tank was shot at because the was already a bomb and it was in an empty helipad ..but a gas cylinder truck standing on the road.. Probably to distribute to public...will a cid cop destroy public property? I don't know. ..! 😆

But overall nice story. Please don't give such a big gap between different parts. From my own personal experience I know the story will take a different track. .in case I ended up abandoning it.


Thank you for the valued feedback Vis... I agree I really took long time...but what could be done soon after I posted part 1 I got promoted and loaded with work... The story turned out totally different than what I had thought... I completed the story in train... May be couldn't find proper grip...

Also regarding gas cylinders I agree I never thought that way...

Anyways thanks for the valued feedback...
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Posted: 12 years ago
Read the story finally.. Part 1 is really superb. The DUO in car..shootout..totally filled with suspence and thrill, action⭐️⭐️..
Part 2 is good too. Excellent team work⭐️👏.. I also feel at some points grip is loosened due to a long gap.. But overall the story is fantastic👏👏..

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