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Originally posted by: Aandromeda

good one GD.

par tum poora story kyu nahi update kiya .

mera patience test kar raha hai kya ? ( mahino se lapata hone ka saza hai kya ,yaar )

well in any case glad u wrote this. but at this point many readers and i will forsee the future suspense ...so make sure you twist it with something unpredictable.

plz update soon my friend. looking forward to it.😳

Originally posted by: beena.thomas

Firstly,Thanks a lot GD for writing the story.😃 Do please keep writing. 👍🏼
GD, read your story.Very nice concept with a unique plot.⭐️ Well written. 👏 👏
Suspense has been well maintained.⭐️
Please update the story and complete it.Waiting to read the rest of the story.😊

Originally posted by: kkkloveu

The whole thing you started with much ease, the whole case for now going smoothly...

Thank You😳, I wrote it during eating Cheese thats why so SMOOTHLY Ride...😉😆

I felt somewhere a bit odd as to why acp sir and daya sir both focusing that bomb blast as a attempt to injure or murder abhijeet sir, i thought you would clear it later as telling that in past some more attempts to kill abhijeet happened because of which they thought so but nothing of that kind came...

hmm, Nice Query; Obviously as a Officer, there Life always in Sake although without any option of Prior Threat and Attempt, Correct; Now the Informer telling about something else and He find from far away from that place and when ABHIJEET Sir be there, the Informer Missing while Booth blast, it clearly meant that Someone trying to kill ABHIJEET Sir with His Informer help... thatswhy both ACP Sir and DAYA Sir focusing that its a Direct attempt over ABHIJEET Sir...😛

I am a bit confused though as to why the case going so smoothly..i don't why...it just seemed odd..

Sorry, I cant get that Point...😕😕😕

Hmmm..i think while writing this you not comfortable yourself as i found the usual characteristics of all the officers missing, even daya sir, abhijeet sir and acp sir were not in their characters solely..

😆 hmmm, U knew, I m always trying to change My Style with the theme of Story, Sometime I m too much Crisp, Stiff according to Plot; I m Not FW baccha always move on Same Track; U know, if I m doing that, after some times, U all started Complaining that What is this Dada/GD, Same style, we were Bored with that...😉😉

Here I m trying to give the Look that How the Work doing on Professional Level during such High Risk Offices and with their Employees... U want Scold/ Shak and All; its almost feeling FWish style as Heads mostly Catering Issues with Smoothness, If they turned into Panic state so whats the reason be there behind their Recuirtment and then whats the Difference between Common people and ppl working on such Seats from so long...😳

Khair, I m so Sorry that U feel its ODD, but I m trying to give a Smoothness to Story just to Variate it from Regular one...😊

I felt abhijeet sir ignored those surroundings and behaviour of daya...

Dheeraj Baccha, aagy aap ko is ka Jawab mil jayey ga...😆

And the last thing i felt a little confusing is, in this whole world or even in india is their only abhijeet sir who can shoot precisely with a revolver, no na, there could be many, though when somethings like this coming forward i think the person first considers a person whom they knew personally and also about their abilities so it got cleared for me may be because of my thoughts only...

True, Yes, DAYA Sir did not say that ABHIJEET Sir did that, He only presented His Idea by saying "kay main ek aisay aadmi ko jaanta hun jo ye kr sakta hay"...

Now somethings i loved...

really...🤣😉

Of course the first duo convo was really good...it took me some time to understand as what abhijeet sir was upto when he got down his bed...😆...but later it got cleared...that laugh of abhijeet sir annd smile on daya sir's face illuminated a smile on my face too..😃

The use of pictures was appreciable..👏 though their usage still hidden...

That "hello doctor" by abhijeet sir felt really good...

that innocent reply of daya sir was very good...though i think there you handled the situation a bit more lightly in my opinion it needed to be handled a bit more stiffly...

Thank You for all Ur Liking and Loving Baccha...🤗😳

But what was U referring with this, plz xplain so I will Reply U, Which Dialogue..?❓

That collar grabbing of daya sir by abhijeet sir i initially felt was not good but later his tense condition and the way you expressed it justified that act with much ease...👏...lastly those last lines created the most imagery impact on me...it felt as if i was feeling same as abhijeet sir..😉

Yes, the Seriousness of Issue really Tensed Him; He was Scaring as after 17 Years of Service He knew what kind of Consequences He dealt when Everything comes against to His end...😊

BTW, only Collar Grabbing for a Minute and Whispering to a Frnd just to Protects Himself from His Frnd Statement...😉

The story now at this moment seems predictable...but i think later you twist it in a way that is unimaginable..😉....

So now, I want that PREDICTABLE IDEA from U baccha... might Urs and Mine Mental chemistry working on Same Plane...😉😆

now what if i died of the suspense created by you...

it will be you who will be held responsible for this...

so to be safe from life imprisonment ...post the next part SOON!

Yup, so Soon...😈

I hope my any comments didn't hurt you and your readers, these are just my personal views...

Lastly take extreme care of yourself dada, next part bhi toh post karna hain na..😈

Ohh Nahi, Its Nice that U read it Keenly and giving Ur Words, it always help Writer to Improvise...👍🏼

A Big Thank You to U too...🤗

Originally posted by: Forfriend

Speechless and Confused...

Kya likhu review me kuch samj hi nahi aaraha hai...

but yes too good grip on story line and suspense...

Gr8 work BH

Originally posted by: rosepink.

@happy to to
uff teri adaa😉👏
@handsome murderer
zabardast..go on...👏👍🏼