Story for contest - The Brimming River

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Posted: 13 years ago
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The Brimming River

Prologue

The calamity had struck again in the village of Hariyalipur. The tide had ebbed again and taken with it the lives of many' the lives that slogged to feed the mouths of India, who worked to prevent India from facing a food crisis' lives of those godsend men whose lives mattered no more -The Farmers. The Farmer living on a square meal per day, with tattered clothes, yet living and providing for the rest of the brotherhood.

In another of a city a calamity had struck. Apparently this had swept that part of the world of its feet. A IT professional was murdered violently. The CID had been called to investigate. He was a millionaire , one of those men who wielded money as a weapon to obtain everything. The man with splendid brains, they said, had stashed away his enormous earnings in multiple investments. But few lamented. There were hungry wolves waiting to get to the top rungs of power'and with it came a conspiracy.

Chapter 1 'The Coverage

Raju, one of the newbie in the Mera News channel was from the village of Hariyalipur. One of his uncles had died in the previous week due to the ebbing tides. One among many victims he thought. He packed his camera and the other equipment as he set out to his village to provide the channel with a cover story for the week.

Raju stared wide- eyed at the remains of the disasters. The barren land was strewn with corpses in all stages of renunciation of their mortal body. The river had caused a very large scale disaster and the people would certainly be happy to get some financial compensation to set their lives going again.He would make sure they got it.

Chapter 2-The Investigation

CID team officers winced visibly at the crudeness of the murder of the IT official.He had been stabbed in the chest by a traditional Indian dagger,khukri.

Daya;Ye kya haalat banaake rakhi hai iska?

Abhijeet: Ye job hi hai bohot hi jaldi mein aur gusse main iska khoon kiya hai.Aur ye chaku ke nishaan dekh rahe ho? Shayad khukri jaise cheez se maari hai kisine.

Sachin: Is ke barah main koi bhi information nahi mil raha hai sir. Inke family ke baare me to kuch bhi pata nahi hai. Ye do maheene ke pehle ise appoint kiya gaya tha , is branch mein.

Abhijeet:Ye kahaan ka hai?

Vivek:Bangalore ka hai sir...ACP sir ne mujhe aur Nikhil ko kaha hai waha jaake investigate karne ke liye.

Daya:Toh der kis baat ki ...abhi jao (winks)

Abhijeet: Is laash ko lab bhejthe hain.

Purvi: Sir aapne TV pe dekhi hai Hariyalipur ke baare mein?wahaan pe river overflow hone ke baad bohot sare log mar chuke hain.Par weather reports ke anusar is baar utni bearish bhi nahi hui hai.Keh rahe hai ki koi seedha sadha mamala nahi hai.

Daya: Suna hai maine bhi.(Dr. Salunkhe calls up)Kya pata chala doctor saab?kya?Ham log abhi athe hain.

Chapter3- In the Lab

Dr.S. Aao..jaldi.agar aapko pata chalega ki maine kya pata kiya hai...toh aap naachne hi lagenge.

Abhi : Waisi kya baat hai sir?

Dr.S. Iske sharer main bohot saare capsules mile hain. Ye sab plastic coated hai isliye assimilate nahi hui hai.

Daya:Ye kaunsi davaayi hai doctor sab?

Dr.S Ye koi davai nahi balki ye kisi "Naveen Hara" committee ke members ke naam aur pata hai isme.Ab tak aur ek naam milne ko baaki hai. Jab tak mein nikaalta hoon aap log naam ke list ko check kijiyega.

Daya and Abhijeet check the list.

Daya; Ye kya hai boss? Isme toh sab IT professionals ke naam hai...yeh sab toh itne bade aadmi hai.

Abhijeet: yeh kis cheez ki committee ho sakthi hai?Daya, ye article dekho. Artificial chlorophyll, the breakthrough in food sciences.

Artificial chlorophyll, the breakthrough in food sciences.

Several industrialists claim that they have created a new way to produce food. By using the right laboratory conditions, they hope to create food, this would make the humans a creator and protector of life...is this really possible?

-Natasha Sharma

Science for you magazine, Feb 2012

Abhijeet:Ye Natasha Sharma wo hi hain na jo kahi din pehle accident mein mar gayi?ye shaayad publication se pehle likhi gayi report hai...

Daya:Haan ye wohi Natasha hai.in sab operations ka leader ye Prashant hai, jo ab mar chuka hai...

Abhijeet; Iske next kaun us position pe aayege?

Daya ; Ye koi Siddhart hai, Bangalore se...par ab tak to is aadmi ke baare me Bangalore se kuch pata nahi chala hai...

Abhijeet; Ek baar khud jaake dekh lete hain...

Dr.S. Ye aadmi bohot hi chaloo tha boss...Jab ise pata chala ki woh marne wala hai...isne sai goliya kha li...aur us information safe reh gaya...

Abhijeet: ye company ka maamla nahi, ballki koi committee ki ...chalo Bangalore chalke dekhte hain...

Chapter 4 ' Bangalore

Duo arrive in Bangalore and visit the people on the list. All of them are industrialists and pure science students...Vivek and Freddie however manage to get in touch with their famailies.Totheir annoyance and shock, all the people are missing. They are however able to extract some information on the committee .They are a group of old college mates who were very bright students and have decided to redefine human existence. They call all the spouses of the missing team members for a conference to take down details of their absence.It is then they notice the abnormalities of the spouses and note it down it thus...

Gayatri,32,wife of Siddharth- lotus tattoo

Farida, 26,wife of Shamim- Limps on the right foot

Suma, 34, wife of Sagar-mole on the right arm

Nidhi,28, wife of Suresh-right little finger shorter than the left one.

After that they return as ACP has called them.

Chapter 5-The Mega plot

The Hariyalipur disasters were getting larger scale in destruction.Acp informs the CID team that they're required to investigate the case.When they go and check the river bed, they find tiny outlets just as in the showers.

Vivek: Sir ye dekhiye in outlets ko...isme shaayad pani aake nadi ke is bhaag ko overflow karthi hai.

ACP:Agar itna paani ko paana hai toh isme koi water department ka haath hai...Par in sab cheezon ka matlab hi kya ho saktha hai?

Abhi; par mujhe lag raha hai ye woh committee wale case se judi hai... Fredie:Sir ye log keh rahe hain ki kahi maheene pehle kahi log is nadi ko desilt karne ke liye aaya the...tabhi ye sab lagaaya gaya hai. Aur unke description Committee ke sab members se milthe hai...

Daya: Par ye gayab kaise ho gaye?

The next day a letter arrives at the bureau.It has a threatening note which asks CID to give an amount of 5 crore rupees at the Roopanagar entrance... ACP agrees and they all get 5 crore ready...

When they reach the Roopanagar gate, they see 5 women in burkha ready to receive the money. Soon they are surrounded and their faces are revealed...they are the wives of the committee members. After investigation they reveal the plot...

Gayatri begins the story- When we learnt of the plan of the committee to create artificial chlorophyll , we knew there would be a threat to our Hariyalipur village which thrived only on farming...we are all daughters of the farmers there.We decided to avert the plans by stealing the papers...but when they murdered Natasha in cold blood...we decided we had enough ..moreover they installed the sprinklers in our village and flooded the river...killing hundreds of farmers.And then we kidnapped them...

Daya; Ab kahaan hai woh log?

Farida; Aap jane ke pehle woh jalkar raakh ho jayenge...

Abhijeet ; Sir wahaan door mein ek bungalow ko aag lagi thi kal...woh log already mar chuke hain

ACP:Par yeh toh nahi ho saktha ...Police neh statement diya hai ki woh saare log ladkiyan hai...doondho yahin kahin honge...Kajal, in haseeno ko apne bureau le jao aur muh khulvavo inke...

Daya, Abhijeet and Sachin search the for the four members of the committee ...Even after 3 hours...their search is in vain...then they see a car parked in a deserted corner...they go and inspect and find four people bound by ropes clumsily...Abhijeet removes his pen knife to cut the ropes when he notices a bomb ticking...time left is only 1minute...

They manage to pull out Siddhart, Shamim and Sagar when the car bursts into flames after a resounding crash...

Scene 6 - The Confessions

All gathered at the bureau...all let out the story after being subjected to some treatment...

'Hum saare log Bangalore mein ek saath padthe the...hum sab toppers the aur humne ye wada kiya tha ki hum aise invention karenge jisse bohot saare paise bhi milenge aur logon ki kuch bhalaayi bhi ho jaaye...Tabhi Siddhart ne is artificial chlorophyll ki avishkaar kiya...Nitin ko iske mahatv ke baare mein kuch nahi pata tha...woh sirf project ko fund kar raha tha...Tabhi hume laga ki hum project ke saath saath saare kisaano ko marvadenge toh bina aur kisi saharah ke log humare machines kharedenge...par nahi...is Nitin ne hamaari baat hi nahi maani...kehne laga sab jaake bata doonga...Bas use khatam kar diye...

"Shamim ka uncle toh Water department ke head hai...Isliye hum apne mission Hariyalipur se shuru karke wahan pe ye sprinklers fit karva diya...lagne laga tha ki hum nature ko bhi control kar lenge...par nahi..."

ACP-Aap log bhala kaam karne nikle aur baad mein itne khoon kar diye...Jail mein toh aapko machine le jaane ki permission nahi milege...rotiyan khaate rehna😉

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astonish thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Very short and quick story... Nice attempt..👏

Well... your story reminded me of a book (fiction) about artificially developed plans and vegetables.. Was a little too technical and tuff to understand 😆 Well..you kept that part simple in the story 👏

But I didn't get few points in the story... why and how was IT guy involved in it?? and why did the ladies ask for 5crore rupees???
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Posted: 13 years ago
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NSPO... Ur idea was Fabulous👏... but because of Short and Quick... some Deatails are missing... but very Good n Innovative attempt...👏
keep it up...!!!👍🏼

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Good attempt. Keep writing. Next time short mut kijiyega. Waiting 4 ur Lambi story. Thank u.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Updated the flaws...@ Astonish becoz the CID thought that the committee members were kidnapped victims...and then ladies wanted money to fund reconstruction in Hariyalipur
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Apoorva really nice story. 👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Naspo...just got time to read this now...sorry for the delay. I am a bit confused about the murder and Bangalore and the flood in the village. You could have taken some time to explain the connection in detail.
Also I didnt get it...why did duo have to go to Bangalore...Nik and Vivek had anyway gone.
I thought the plot was somewhat building up, but was shocked to see the confession so fast. 😆 Add some twists next time. 😉
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Posted: 13 years ago
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happens vis di ...one of my worst so far 😆wat to do...?i dint think much my lappy was due to be locked in one hour...anything and everything i wrote..iss baar kshama kijiyega...agle baar se aise nahi hota☺️
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice story Apoorva...
But i am also confused with the relation of flood & murder...😕
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Posted: 13 years ago
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very nice story..keep it up

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