The Return of the CRIMINAL - by Shagnika

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Posted: 15 years ago
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just one word for ya WOW ..awesome story with superb plot...beautifully handled.. professionally exhibited with a emotional and creative thoughts....personally i believe that whatever i get to watch this friday and saturday i wont mind too much because i got my weekly dose here....remembered me of those golden era ....not much use of forensic lab, trio bond, emotional touch,valid reason to take revenge, professional jobs done by freddy, vivek and tasha...no comedy as we are bearing these days...just perfect story for a crime show... ..aur kya bolo yar m really speechless...i could see everything happening in front of my eyes....trust my i got emotional while reading story... 👏
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GR8 STORY..EXCELLENT.
BUT DON/T LIKE THIS
Hii everyone..i have been trying hard to write a story for many days now..but everytime i failed to do so.This is the story that i started this week and finished it today..Its a very stupid one i know.Not much of investigation at all..and neither were there any twists and turns. It has a refenrence to one old story...i am sorry for those who havent seen that episode..U will know when u read the story.Its very long too.Its a continuation of my STORY KHOONI KAUN(only the Dr.Tarika issue).SOrry guys!!! Will try to do better next time..😕
NO NEE DTO SAY ALL THIS..YAAR ..HAR BAAR INVESTIGATION AUR LOVE KI BAATEIN HONA CHAHIYE KYA? SIMPLE STRORY HEIN LEKIN BAHUT ACHHI HEIN.
WHAT A BEAUTIFULLY HANDLE RELATION BETWEEN OUR TRIO..RONA AATA HEIN..
ONE THING LOCAL BLAST YA TERRORIST KE ATTACK HO ATS SAB JAGA KAAM KARATI HEIN...UNKE SATH DUSARY AGENCIES LIKE IB,RAW,LOCAL POLICE,CID SAB KARTE HEIN..LEKIN UNAKA KOI REFERANCE NAHI HOTA..BECAUSE THESE ARE THE SECRATE MISSIONS.
SO ABHI NEXT STORY LIKHANI SHURU KAR DO SAMJHI...WE ARE WAITING FOR THAT
Edited by jiya1 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Excellent story with good plot.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Arre wah, mazaa aa gaya. Kya kaam kiya hai Madam T ko bhej diya. Thank you. Subah Subah kuch achha padne ko mile to mazaa aa jata hai.

Interesting plot, you managed to create a fantastic atmosphere (your writing has improved in this area), I was feeling the tension. Loved to see old characters come back DIG, DCP, Vasudev. Singh Saab as DIG, I can still hear his voice, see his deadly looks. And some jokes were just WOW, now that is good humour. One suggestion ACP is not the one to have tears so often, try saying he is worried or upset instead of crying. Baaki also try using Daya instead of daya. In small letter register nahin hota ki it's a name. Also you have to agree ki "daya" apne DAYA Sir par theek nahin lagta, chhota lagta hai.
Also can you please change the title of this thread to
The Return of the CRIMINAL - by Shagnika

Originally posted by: Shagnika

Hii everyone..i have been trying hard to write a story for many days now..but everytime i failed to do so.This is the story that i started this week and finished it today..Its a very stupid one i know.Not much of investigation at all..and neither were there any twists and turns. It has a refenrence to one old story...i am sorry for those who havent seen that episode..U will know when u read the story.Its very long too.Its a continuation of my STORY KHOONI KAUN(only the Dr.Tarika issue).SOrry guys!!! Will try to do better next time..😕

NOW. this part needs some editing
Intro should be -
Hii everyone..here is my 3rd attempt The Dr.Tarika issue from STORY KHOONI KAUN is continues here. [Recap : She has been trasfered to Forensic Dept in Bangalore]
This part should come at the end of the story
It had a refenrence to one old story...My apologies to those who havent seen that episode
Rest is not needed. Kindly edit and also add [MEMBER ONLY] and [NO COPY] tages to your story.
Edited by prabha. - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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WOW WOW WOW WOW,yaar thank you so much for giving such a good start to my day today.
I'm feeling so refreshed,khush kar diya tumne,nice plot,good story,this story had a kind of realistic touch and thank you for continuing with Taarika's transfer and now I understand why you were asking me yesterday about the DCP's and DIG's 😊 was happy to see them back,so keep it up yaar

SCENE 4:
ABHI-DAYA board the car once again..in a hurry.
Abhi: Jaldi chalo daya. Humein jald se jald Bureau pahunchna hai.ACP sahaab subhah se hi phone nahi utha rahe hain.
Daya: Haan.....(after a pause) Abhijeet, Tarika??
Abhi: ACP sir ki jaan jyada kimti hai daya. Bureau chalo.
daya gives a "proud" smile.



WOW even imagining this scene and this moment is making me feel so happy and proud
Edited by didobhav - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Just excellent story. Remember yesterday you told me. So first up came today was excited to read your story. Excellent. As the days are passing of this week I am getting more and more happier.

You made my day. Excellent story. Keep up the good work. This story has everything.

There were number of scenes in which they reacted the way we want CID team to react. Excellent
Edited by sunnyp1414 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: prabha.

Also can you please change the title of this thread to

The Return of the CRIMINAL - by Shagnika

Here I meant change the THREAD TITLE - MY 3rd STORY...(27.05.10) to
The Return of the CRIMINAL - by Shagnika
Edited by prabha. - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Thank you everyone for liking the story😳....personally i felt the story had some loopholes...glad none of u mentioned it!!😉
@prabha di, i have made the neccessary changes..."daya" was just a typing mistake... i have changed the case almost everywhere...and editted the post too...😃
@didobhav, yes thats the reason why i was asking all sort of nonsense questions yesterday😆 Anyways thanx for helping me with that!!!😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shagnika

@prabha di, i have made the neccessary changes..."daya" was just a typing mistake... i have changed the case almost everywhere...and editted the post too...😃

Awesome. Thanks for taking my suggestions. Way to go Girl keep up the good work.

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