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Posted: 14 years ago
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Since I was so badly disappointed that they didn't show the much much awaited Kavitha scene😭...i ended up writing my own small version for it. Probably it might have not turned out that good, but still couldn't help but share with you all. 😳

Certain dialogues are the same from that shown in the scene...while some scenes have been modified.

Hope u enjoy it 😃 and do leave ur comments.


RaDev Kavita Scene:
The rain drops kept splashing across the gazebo under which they stood, swirling the fresh wet mud smell all over. Dev kept looking at Radhika lovingly as she read his poem from the page he just gave her. Soft cool breeze whirled around, blowing her dupatta and her hairs.
A shy smile slowly spread, stretching Radhika's lips slightly as her cheeks felt warm. She looked up from the piece of paper in to the warm eyes of her lover – her husband, and found him gazing at her ever so adoringly, and made her blush.
With a slightly crooked smile, Dev moved closer, never moving his gaze from hers and halted just a step away from her to pull the sheet of paper. Radhika didn't shift her gaze from him either.
Pulling the paper away, he smiled sweetly and tore his gaze away from her to the paper……and began reading the poem aloud for her.
With innocent sparkling eyes and a beautiful smile
You came as an angel and raked my soul
By touching the essence of my life, with passion
You drew me out from the abysmal dark hole.
Slackening the bonding chains around me
You made me feel the real me
Wrapping me in the warmth of your love
You snatched my fears and let me rise above
Since I have someone to share my things so comfortably
My soul feels the ultimate peace
And stormy nights don't bother me anymore,
Because her support for me would never cease.
Radhika kept looking at him lovingly as he recited those lines. Dev lifted his gaze and met hers for a small instance and then began reading the lines again in a whispering voice, inching closer to her.
When I see your face it brightens up my day
Instantly pushing all my worries at bay
Your adorable smile makes me feel blessed
Knowing that I am the only one who has it possessed!
Your sweet laughter makes my heart skip a beat
While your blushing cheeks makes it rush harder
And your loving gaze penetrates through mine so deep,
Seizing my senses with so much power,
That makes me yearn for you more than ever.
Radhika's lips stretched some more. His whispering husky voice seemed to have enwrapped her inside some trance. He looked up again to meet her gaze. This made her smile turn shy and she cocked her face to the side coyly.
Grinning at her shyness, he moved his feet and halted behind her.
She felt her heart skipping a beat on feeling his breaths on her ear and neck……
With a twitched grin, he continued whispering the poem in to her ear.
I love you more than you can imagine ever
I love you more than words can tell ever
All I wish is to have you in my life forever………..
Taking a deep breath to control her spinning senses, she glanced around at the green leaves outside the gazebo idly……while her heart raced underneath in joy. But the next instance, she gasped inaudibly and her eyes drooped down…..as she felt his lips touching her ear ever so lightly.
A small moment passed and she lifted her gaze up. Blushing hard, she tightened her fingers around the duppata near her chest and began walking away shyly.
Dev beamed in joy to himself.
Radhika had barely moved a few steps away when she felt her dupatta being stuck. Her heart missed a beat and cheeks felt warmer……..wondering if he had held it.
"Umm…….Chodiye….." she mumbled, looking at him over her shoulder.
Her words made him frown in question for a small second……..but then saw her duppatta stuck to his watch. Twitching his lips naughtily, he edged closer.
"Mudke dekho to sahi…….ke kaun hai jo nahi chahta ke tum mujhse dur jao" he replied.
She blinked once and turned back…….only to find her duppatta stuck on his watch. Her smile faded for a small instance, disappointed…….but then she smiled again as she inched closer to him.
He kept gazing at her adoringly as she removed her duppata end from his watch.
Glancing up at him once with a sweet smile, she turned to walk……….but felt her duppata being tugged again.
She felt her heart missing a beat again and another sweet smile filled her face. Glancing over her shoulder, "Iss baar kaun rok raha hai mujhe?" she asked and turned to face him.
He stood there with a twitched grin, holding her duppata end so possessively. "Main" he shrugged.
"Kyun?"
"Kyunki main nahi chahta ke tum mujhse dur jao……." He replied
She came closer. "Lekin hume der ho rahi hai na……chodiye……."
But his grip didn't slacken. "Der? Kyun?"
"Ghar main sab intezaar kar rahe honge" she said.
He shrugged again. "To kya huwa? Humara roka ho chukka hai ab. Keh dena sabse ke tum apne hone waale pati ke saath time spend kar rahi thi"
This made her smile wider.
"Kyun……theek hai na?" he asked, his eyes sparkled like a little boy.
She hid her smile and glanced around, outside where the rain was pouring heavily. "Umm……lekin dekhiye na baarish kitni ho rahi hai…..aapko jaldi nikalna chahiye na? Warna Mathura pahunchne main problem huwi to?" she said, putting a mask over her teasing tone.
He pursed his lips. "Hmm……..to main Rawal main hi reh jaaunga. Lekin tumhe itni jaldi mujhse dur nahi jaane dunga" he replied lovingly.
Smiling coyly, she lowered her gaze……..when she realized that they were standing at the edge; the rain drops were falling on the stairs just beneath their feet. A naughty thought crept inside her mind and she glanced up in to his eyes.
Her beautiful, deep eyes just pulled him inside……making him forget everything else.
However, in the next moment, he felt the cool rain drops splashing against his face and his eyes closed for a small second in reflex, simultaneously his fingers loosened over her duppata.
He heard her giggling when he opened his eyes and then she ran away from him. Thinning his lips determinedly, he chased her.
Giggling, she ran around the gazebo itself…….but didn't let him reach her. Sighing, he came from the other side and was able to corner her.
"Ouch……" she cried lightly, when both her hands were arrested by him.
"Hmmm……..to mujhse bhag rahi thi? Kyun?"
She bit her lips, sheepishly. "Mera haath chodiyena…….ghar main sab chinta kar rahe honge"
"Haan jaane dunga……..pehle tum mujhe yeh batao ke meri kavitha kaisi lagi?"
She beamed in joy. "Bahut pyaari thi……"
He released her hands and pulled out the paper piece from his pocket. "To yeh lo……." Saying, he handed the paper to her. "Jab bhi tumhe meri yaad aaye……..ise padh lena"
Her smile widened and she took the paper from him.
"Lo tumhari problem to solve ho gayi……..par mera kya?" he wondered aloud somberly.
"Jee?"
"Hmm…….pata nahi Radhika…….aur kitne din tumse dur rehna padega…….." he said, sadly……and then twitched his lips to the side, disappointedly "Ab tak to sirf Roka huwa hai……kab sagai hogi……kab shaadi…….aur kab tum mere ghar aaogi"
"Dadajee ne humare vivah ki tareek tayr to kar di hai……." She mumbled.
"Par Radhika…….mujhse itne din intezaar nahi hone wala……..ab to kiiitnee din bache hain"
She chuckled. "Bas thoda aur intezaar"
He sighed and then smiled. "Pata hai Radhika problem kya hai…….."
"Kya?" she asked sweetly.
Taking her hand, he encased it within his hands. "Jab hum uss cottage main the…….to har pal saath main the. Bhale hi humare raaston main kayi saare pathar the…….par kyunki hum saath the……who raaste bhi aasan lag rahe the. Humara saath humari har takleef ko adha kar deta…….humare har dard ko dur kar deta tha"
She nodded, completely agreeing with him.
He sighed again. "Lekin ab……..ab jab tum wahan mere saath nahi ho……to har ek pal……bahut bhari lag raha hai"
"Takleef to ho rahi hai. Lekin hume dur to isilye rehna pad raha hai na……take hum aur kareeb aa sake" she said lovingly.
He nodded. "Tumhe yaad hai Radhika…….Jab main kaam se waapas aaya karta……to tum muskura kar mera swagat karti…….aur phir hum saath mein baithkar…….khana khaate……"
She smiled and bobbed her head once, reminiscing those moments.
"Lekin ab to tum yahan Rawal mein ho……..aur main wahan" he shrugged somberly.
"Aap udaas kyun hote hain……..Jab main aapke ghar aajaungi……..tab phirse hum wahi pal jee paayenge" she patted his cheek lovingly.
He grinned at this. "Hmm…….."
Suddenly his eyes turned somber. "Radhika…….Thanks"
"Kisliye?"
His throat felt thick and he lifted her hand to press his lips against her soft skin. "Mera saath har haal mein nibhane ke liye. Chahe kaisi bhi paristhiti aayi ho……. Tumne mera saath kabhi nahi choda. Mujhse kabhi nafrat nahi kiya……chahe jo bhi huwa ho. Tumhara vishwas ke hum ek ho sakte hain…….woh jeet gaya"
Smiling softly, she inched closer. "Saath to aapne bhi mera diya na. Jab mera vishwas dagmagaya……. Jab main kamzor padi……tab aapne mera saath diya aur mujhe girne nahi diya. Thanks to mujhe bhi aapko karna chahiye……."
"Tumhara saath kaise nahi deta…….meri zindagi ho tum" he mumbled, gazing in to his eyes lovingly.
"Aur aap meri zindagi hain……." She replied sweetly.
Their eyes locked for some moments………….
Glancing outside, "erm……..chaliye na kaafi der ho chuki hai……..ghar main sab chinta kar rahe honge……." she mumbled.
"Radhika thodi der aur……….please. Kitne ghante ho chuke hain ke maine tumhare saath kuch pal nahi bitaye….."
"Bitayenge……..lekin ab ghar chalen……..baba intezaar kar rahe honge"
He sighed, giving in, and smiled. "Theek hai chalo……….."
The car halted near Radhika's house. Dev turned to face her. "Lo aagaya tumhara ghar"
She smiled. "Jee…..main chalti hoon"
Suddenly he remembered something. "Are ek minute…….tumhe kuch dena to bhul hi gaya" mumbling, he shoved his hand in to his pocked and fished out a swanky cell phone. "Yeh lo"
"erm……main yeh nahi le sakti" she replied.
"Kyun?"
"Aap samjhiye na…….main nahi le sakti" she said solemnly, wishing he would understand without her having to say it.
He sighed. "To hum baat kaise karenge? Main kitni ummeedon ke saath le aaya tumhare liye"
"Erm……..aapko phone pe baatein hi karni hai na…….ek minute" she took the pen from him and wrote a number on his palm. "Aapko jab bhi baat karne ka man kare…….aap iss number par call karna……nukkad waale kaka mujhe bula lenge" she smiled.
He smiled. "Okay"
"Main chaloon"
"Hmm……."
"Apna khayal rakhiyega………." She said and got down from the car.
He smiled and kept gazing at her walking figure. She halted once and turned to wave at him. He did the same and started the car again…………


P.S: I am very bad in poetry...so please don't throw chappals at me for making u read the poem above...I tried searching the internet but my net was down and i couldn't resist myself so put my entire time in scratching my brains to make it sound like a poem. Hope it does.😳

Plus, i couldn't manage it in hindi...writing a poem in hindi is like impossible for me almost. So I am sorry for that too. U can imagine it in hindi 😳

Hope u like this small scene and Forgive me too for that poem

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Sia,very beautiful scene...sweet and innocent just like radev...avina would have been great enacting this...too bad that actualy didnt happened in cb...i guess it didnt have barkha in it so that is why they didnt show it 😆 😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Sia , you are a very humble person , you have done great job with your poetry , what more do you want to say ...Why do not DJ,s borrow scenes between Dev Radhika from here as they have gone blank where these two are concerned ...It was well written scene with emotions., well done ...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Sia, I like your literary creation. You should not hesitate, it is successful. I liked how you described with sensitivity, the scene when he recalled the moments spent together, the way that Dev asked forgiveness and kissed his hand, how he tried to approach her and when shy Radhika she retired , how he looked at hertenderly in the eye ...
Bravo, Sia!
Edited by instcris - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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I absolutely loved your version of RAdevs scene on Friday!! And OMG!! your poem was so sweet and beautiful!! Wish Cvs would see this and get some ideas🤔 ..They get a little blank when it comes to RAdev , they don't really give them dialogues but I still enjoy watching there expressions 😉Your modification of the scenes were really nice especially the rain part with the poem 😳
Thank you so much Sia for this lovely write up ,I really enjoyed reading it !!
Do share more of your version of Radev scenes 😃
Edited by billo77 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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yaar sia
By giving such beautifull,innocent scenes and ya so so so lovely kavitha i can't describe in words .u make us more angry on cvs,as we are already for giving barkha more space and see cvs have a lot of poems for GD and for our radev they don't have even one ,mujhe really bahut gussa aa rha hai,

u know, what i am going to do now and ya i want everybody who read this do it-
tell cvs to read this thread and they can atleast show us now by radhika remembering this ,this will be so so so so sooo lovely ,although i can see radev while reading it but even then i want them enacting for others as well as me.

no thanks but a big hug sia from myside.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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very well written do these chunnu munnu guys have a fanpage then we can email them with all the great ideas in this forum or invite them to read certain pages maybe ?
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Sia, I have no words to describe this; I was imaging Radhika really reading it during that scene with Dev in the rain. This is amazing ! :) Good Job, and it brought back a RaDev scene which will forever be in my memory. :)

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