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not.here

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Posted: 9 years ago

#201

Originally posted by: laughingpearls
I am back after looong time, I know. From now, this place will be a second home. I am using it as a draft box so that I could copy paste. My fb page isn't working :-D

That's okay pearl, good to see you though.

What's a draft box?

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pillowtalk

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Posted: 9 years ago

#202

Part 4

Raman started packing his luggage and the principal also was helping him. He packed all the RKB photos, video CDs, greeting cards etc which were filled in his room.

"Raman, did you take your tickets for the travel. "Principal asked him.

"Ha sir, I kept them in my pockets. And do not forgot to take your medicines after your lunch. I will be back very soon and if I find that you are not taking the medicines than you have to face an angry young man. OK." Raman said the principal.

"Ha Ha OK. Now hurry up we are getting late. We have to catch the train."the principal hurried him.

All the way everyone greeted them and gave their gifts to give them to RKB. The whole town is a fan of RKB but not more than Raman.

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Raman and the principal reached the railway station and started searching the train platform number in the list. As soon as they saw the platform number they made a run for it.

Raman seated himself on the window side seat comfortable and locked his luggage to the seat. He peeped to the window and spoke with the principal until the train started to move. They both bid an emotional bye to each other.

As the train started moving Raman saw around himself and noticed that there is a family sitting beside him. A father, mother and their two little children. A family which he always dreamed.

He spoke sometime with them until it is night. He had a great time with them. He was about to sleep but the baby cry stopped him. Everyone tried a lot to calm the baby down but it didn't.

Lo Lo Lo... laali...Lo Lo laali...Lo Lo Lo laali... laali laali...Lo Lo Lo laali...

The baby's mother sang a song from RKB movie making Raman feel happy and calm the baby. It worked.

Raman turned to his left and saw RKB new movie poster from the window. He again saw inside the compartment where the father is picking his son and put him in the seat. It reminded him of RKB.

He is seeing only RKB where ever he is seeing. Everything reminds him of RKB. RKB is like a sweet poison for Raman.

Ta ta ta ta...ta ta ta...

follow karoon twitter pe tag karoon facebook pe tere quiz mein google ko beat kar diya (I follow you on TwitterI tag you on Facebook,I have beaten Google on your quiz.)

.mirror mein tu dikhta hai neend mein tu Tikta hai tere madness ne mujhe dheeTh kar diya (I see you in the mirror,You are there in my sleep,your madness has made me insolent.)

He started singing and everyone turned to wards him.

tu hai sodde ke botal main banTa teramain to handle karoonhar TanTa teramere dil ke mobile ka tu unlimited plan ho gaya (you are a soda bottle and I am your cap,I'll handle every problem related to you..you have become the unlimited plan of myheart's mobile..)

main tera haaye re jabrahoye re jabra fan ho gayamain tera haaye re jabrahoye re jabra fan ho gayao tujhe dekhte hi dil mein Dhan Te nan ho gaya (I've becomeyour big, crazy fan.as soon as I saw you,there was a music in my heart..)

He smiled remembering his moments with RKB movies and sang again.

maine tujhpe, kari Ph.D.mera luck mera haq, tu hi only wajahmain to sachchi, ho jaaun touchykoi tere jo baare mein bole bura (I've done a Ph.D. on youyou are my luck, my right, my only reason (to live).I really get touchyif someone talks bad things about you.)

tera yaar haayemujhko bukhar haayejaane saari colony maintere liye insane ho gayaI have your fever, (O dear..The entire colony knowsthat I have gone insane for you..)

By now everyone joined him and sang in chorus.

main tera haaye re jabrahoye re jabra fan ho gayaO tujhe dekhte hi dil mein dhan te nan ho gayamain tera haaye re jabrahoye re jabra fan ho gaya

style tera phaTTe haitujhpe khele saTTe haintujhse hi wifi connection juDaayour style is superb,I have betted on you, (I'm connected to you via wi-fi)

.tere tak jo aati hainlinein saari Taapi hainkoi kitna bhi roke, main to na rukatune jo jo kaha, maine ditto kiya (all the lines that come to youI have hacked into them,however much someone tried to stop me, Ididn't stop. whatever you said, I did the same.)

He stood up and went near the compartment door and bent down and again stood up.

kabhi jeb mein rakhakabhi dil pe liyateri aankhon ki garmi meinsar se, per tak, Tan ho gaya (kept you in the pocket sometimesand kept you in my heart sometimes.in the heat of your eyes,I got tanned from head to toe.)

Finally everyone applauded him and appreciated his skills and looks. Everyone retired to their respective berths and slept.

main teraoh tera, oh terafan ho gaya..main tera haaye re jabra hoye re jabra fan ho gayao tujhe dekhte hi dil mein Dhan Te nan ho gayamain tera haaye re jabra hoye re jabra fan ho gaya

Raman slept with a smile on his face dreaming about tomorrow. Him meeting RKB is finally happening.

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pillowtalk

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Posted: 9 years ago

#203

Originally posted by: Cortana

That's okay pearl, good to see you though.
What's a draft box?

draft box...? ya something like a note pad for me...

:-D I need a place to copy paste right, so it's perfect

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not.here

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Posted: 9 years ago

#204

Originally posted by: laughingpearls
draft box...? ya something like a note pad for me...

:-D I need a place to copy paste right, so it's perfect

I think I understand now.

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not.here

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Posted: 9 years ago

#205

Originally posted by: KrishnaPriyaa
Hi :)

Hey 😊

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pillowtalk

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Posted: 9 years ago

#206

Originally posted by: KrishnaPriyaa
Hi :)

hey Priya are you ramayan fan? me too

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pillowtalk

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Dazzler

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Posted: 9 years ago

#207

Arya can you suggest me how to write a "long" chapters. All my updates are short and I feel long ones will reveal the story soon :-(

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not.here

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Posted: 9 years ago

#208

Originally posted by: laughingpearls
Arya can you suggest me how to write a "long" chapters. All my updates are short and I feel long ones will reveal the story soon :-(

There are several ways but short chapters aren't bad. People like short chapters so they can read it easily. Also you will find that you naturally write a certain amount , big or short , which is unique to you.

One way is to write. Just write and don't think about it. After you can see how long it is and which part can be poted.

Second is to have a target. Once you reach your target like 1000 words for example you can say you're done on that chapter. But you have to decide how long, long is for you.

Third is to write the whole story and then break it up according to where you see fit. It might produce long chapters.

Your chapters aren't short though. Their length is alright.

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not.here

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Posted: 9 years ago

#209

What do you mean by soon? Are you having problems with finishing your stories?

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pillowtalk

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Dazzler

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Posted: 9 years ago

#210

oh thank you so much. And na I'm thinking if I write more in a single chapter the story will complete soon. For example if I write long chapters the story which I write in 10 parts gets finished in 5 to 7 parts.

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