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After many days I have posted in this forum...and created a new story...an OS
The Confession !!!!
So please read and comment ...thank you for reading,
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PrAja OS:The Confession

Pratap again had a fight with Ajabde.He could never understand anything beyond her mother.Whom he loves like anything.

Ajabde Punwar,a family friend of Jaivanta bai,was taking care of her.She was seriously ill.And Jaivanta bai needed someone to talk too,and help her out in some of her works. Hansa bai who was Jaivanta bai's closest friend couldn't come to her because of a family problem taken place there,and so Ajabde;Hansa bai's only daughter has came to have a look at Jaivanta bai,and to give her a jolly company.It was a time when the kings and queens couldn't relay upon servants aka dasis and anyone except their close ones.It was better to call someone you know,and someone you trust.And so,Ajabde was taking care of her medicines and all necessary stuff she needed at times.

But this time,Jaivanta bai has not taken her medicines.And,unintentionally,unknowingly Pratap thinks that Ajabde hasn't given her mother any medicines.He could also take care of his mother,but,as Uday Singh,his father had to go to another Rajya he has to take care of his whole kingdom.Plus,after knowing the cruel intentions of Dheer Bai,he has been more careful to trust on anyone and has always taken safety measures for his mother,who was the one where his world lied.Because of this,he immediately,orders Ajabde to leave his palace.Ajabde continuously begs Pratap,that it wasn't her mistake,and if it was,then she won't repeat it next time.But Pratap's blind love for his mother couldn't see anything for Ajabde.The love and the care,or anything she had done for him.He did not listen,and see Ajabde for once after that,and Ajabde goes away in the palki.Tears were flashing out of her eyes,but no one was there to look at them.Even the dasis,weren't asking.Nobody had a look at Ajabde,and her mood,her feelings,and her truth and simplicity.Everyone thought that the current condition of Jaivanta bai,which was spoilt even more than before,was because of poor Ajabde.

After a little time Pratap goes in his mother's room.

"rani maa,aap theek toh hain ? humein pata hi ki hamein aisa kucch nahi karna chahiye thaa...yeh hamari galti hai...hamein ajabde ko bulaana hi nahi chaiye,,,tha..unhi ki wajah se aapki aaj aise tabayat ho chuki hain"Said,Pratap.

"dekhiye,Pratap,aap hamari ajabde ke baare mein kucch mat kahiyega ! weh ek bohut hi acchi ladki hain..weh hamare kucch bigadne ki jurrat bhi nahi kar sakti hain,samajh gaye aap ?aur agar aapne unhe bhagane ki koshish ki,toh humse bura koi nahi hoga !"Orders,Jaivanta bai in a strict manner.Even though she was in a rotten condition,she couldn't hear anything against Ajabde.They had developed a special bond in a fortnight.

"kya?aap aisa kyun keh rahi hain?unhone toh aapko jaan buch kar davaiyan bhi nahi di thii haina ?hum jaantey hain,unhone hamare saath boht bura kiya hai,,aapki bimari ka fayeda uthaya hai ! hum bhi aap hi ki tarah unhe ek acchi ladki samajh te the..hamein woh boht acchi bhi lagti thi..in choudah (14) dino mein humne aur unhone apni saari duwidhaayen baatein bhi theen..par aaj unhone joh aapke saath kiya hai..woh toh hum kabhi soch bhi nahi sakte the"

Jaivanta Bai was shocked to hear such a thing from Pratap.She wanted Pratap to marry Ajabde.She knew that Dheer bai's case had put on a bad affect on everyone,especially Pratap.As pratap loved dheer bai the most.But she never knew,that affect would reflect on Pratap till now ! It was good that Pratap wasn't trusting anyone blindly except her.But this was also not a way,that he shan't trust even his close ones,especially Ajabde.She quickly,tried to sit up on the bed.

"are aap kyun uth rahi hain?agar aapko kucch chahiye toh hum laate hai !"

"theek hai,fir humein ajabde chahiye"

"kyaa?ajabde? we kyun?unhi ki wajah se toh aapka yeh haal hua hai"

"chup kijyeya aap.unki wajah se kucch bhi nahi hua hai.wo to hum hi nahi khaa rahe the davaiyaan...aur aapne unse jane ke liye kaha hai jinki koi galti bhi nahi hai"She nagged."ham ...naa unke bager khaana khaayenge aur naa hi davai lengei,ab jab tak aap unhein nahi laayeinge hum yeh sab nahi karenge aur aapse kabhi baat bhi nahi karenge...aur humein sach batayiye..kya aap unse prem nahi karte ? aapko toh veh bachpan se hi pasand thi naa?aur agar aap ab aisa karenge ?toh unhe kaisa lage ga ?aapko unke saath aisa nahi karna chahiye tha..pehle humse toh pucchten...ajabde toh hamesha se hi ek saadha ladki hain,unhone aapka bura kabhi nahi chaha hai,we hamesha aapka aur hamara boht khyaal rakhti hain,hamesha unhone aapke liye accha chaha hai aur aapko apne pati samaan maana hai. She said it,in the praise of Ajabde.

Pratap started to blush a little and quickly went off from there !

Then he slowed his motion and started to think a bit about ajabde,and got lost in his own imaginary world.

He remembered the care she did for his mother and for him,the lovely moments he had spent with her throughout his life.The sweet innocent ,hazel shaped eyes,her beautiful face,and hair.His bitter-sweet moments with her.

He reached his room and there he lied on his bed in opposite direction.

He gently closed his eyes and had a sudden thought of Ajabde again !

He opened his eyes and again started to imagine Ajabde all over the room.

The love which was in his heart from the last 6 months was now realized by him !He thought the last lines said by his mother about ajabde thinking about him as his husband.He started to imagine her as his life partner,as his wife,and again blushed a little.He stood up,and went to his mother.

"humein ..wo..abb..hu..meiin woh ab humein lagta hai...k...kkii.."

"ki kya pratap ?"

"ki...hu...mm bhi ajabde se prem karte hain ..par kya sach hai yeh ?"

"haan...hum jaantey hain ki yeh sach hai..."

"sach mein rani ma..humein lagta hai ki ham un par hamesha bharosa kar sakte hain...aankh moond kar"

"aap kar sakte hain...koi shakk hai aapko abh bhi ?"

"nahi...par agar woh humse hafa huin toh ?"

"nahi hongi...sachhe prem mein aisa kucch nahi hota hai"

"aap humesha sahi hoti hain..aur ajabde bhi"

"woh toh hum dono hain"

"aur aapko pata hai rani maa hum unki yehi baat pasand karte hain"

Jaivanta bai was glad to listen to Pratap.She wasn't surprised,cause she always knew that they were made for each other,and loved each other in the most lovely way.And true love can never be separated for certain.

Pratap asked his mother to give a gift to him,for ajabde.As,when a boy is gonna propose a girl,for the most prosperous and happy life,they are given a gift.

Jaivanta bai,gave the most prettiest set of jwellery to pratap,and asked him to give her,even if she resists to have one.

He reached bijolia on his horse in a matter of one to to hours or so,on his horse.

When he reached there,he asked Hansa bai about ajabde,and she answered,that she maybe in her room.

And yeah,she was in her room,her feet were on the floor and her hands were on the bed totally compressed.

Pratap entered from the other side of her room.

He saw ajabde sitting there quietly and a little sad.He resisted to go there.Of course,it was a matter of being nervous and anxious.

"arre,,hum ne yeh toh socha hi nahi...ki hum unhe kaise bolenge ?"He said to himself in a whisper."hum...woo...kya kahenge aap kunwar pratap ?socha hai aapne ?"

Ajabde,saw Pratap.She was surprised to see his love there,and immediately went there.

"arre kunwar pratap aap yahan kya kar rahen hain ?"

"ajab..de...hum ...chaliye,.,aapke kamre mein chalte hain"

They both went together towards her bed.Pratap made ajabde sit on the bed,in the way she was sitting before.He did not sit on the bed and instead he sat in a manner of proposal.

His one hand was back and other hand moving towards ajabde.

A:kuar pratap aap yeh sab kya kar rahe hain?

P:shhh

P:hamein maaf kar dijiye,humne boht galat kara hai,par hum ab aisa kucch bhi nahi karengr

A:arre...ap yeh sab keh kya rahe hain?galti toh humse hui hai...aur aap humse maafi maang rahe hain

P:hamne bola naa...hamein aapse kucch baatein karni hain

A:bolen

P:h..hhu..hum

A:haan aap

Pratap was really afraid,he closed his eyes,and took ajabde's hand,and held it tightly,he felt her hand's essence,and everything,every thing was away from his mind,just leaving the confession.

P:hum aapse prem karte hain...hum se jo bhi galtiyaan hui hon uske liye maaf kar den...

hum aapko jeevan bhar khush rakhenge ajabde...

He was really afraid with what would ajabde say after this,although his mother had said that she also loved him,but still he was a bit nervous.So he gently opened his eyes and so ajabde's glowing face with lots of happiness filled,and a small bright smile.

P:hum aapke liye kucch laaye bhi hain

He couldn't wait for a bit.He was a very impatient boy.

He took his left hand and showed the set of necklace his mother had sent for her.

P:yeh hum aapke liye laaye hain

A:kuar pratap aapne hamare liye yeh ek boht badi baat kahi hai !

isse bada kucch aur nahi ho sakata hai.Hamein iss haar se keemti toh aap lagte hain,

aap ka yeh kehna hamare liye boht maayene deta hai.Hamein yeh haar nahi chahiye hai!

aapka prem kaafi hai.

She and Pratap stood up and ajabde came really close to him,,,she gave a tight hug to the boy,and the both felt as though they both were the only one in the whole world and joined the hug.They had a new sensation never felt before,and most of all they had, The Confession !!!


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Posted: 10 years ago
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oye casspu..beautiful stry..bt sirf ek part..i thought u r coming up wid wid big stories..chal koi na...mast tha tera story ..dil garden garden hui gava..😆🤗❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Rheaaa my jaan this is really nice... I loved the fact how you managed to put the entire story in such a short update... but awesome
I loved JB's tantrum of not having medicine till Ajab comes 😆 and also her suggestion of Ajab as her bahu. then Pratap's rrealization. it was the sweetest and just perfect.


then the best part the confession 👏 i don't have words... but it was the bestest and Ajab's reaction 👏

... thank you for the pm... i would have hated it if i missed this

keep writing more 😛 yeh dil bada badmash hai thoda mila nahi ki aur mangta hai😉
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Posted: 10 years ago
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What a lovely one 👍🏼❤️
Loved it all 😳
Only one part - okay, little surprising for me 😛
Keep writing 🤗
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Posted: 10 years ago
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wow !! amazing...as always',, keep writing more...! & thanx for the pm :-)
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its soo luvly..😳
vry well written rhea..👍🏼
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awesome update Tfs for pm 👍🏼
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thanks for pm dear really awesome!
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it is fantastic
kash asal story main confession itni jaldi ho jata
koi baat nahi yaha dekh liya haina to bass😃
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and thanks a lot for the pm

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