ZaYa FF- A Beacon of Hope Ch6 (Updated 15/05/14)

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mridula

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Posted: 11 years ago

#31

nice concept.waiting for zaya story to start.update soon.

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Anupama Jinethri

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#32

this is nice

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Posted: 11 years ago

#33

Awesome part
Waiting for zaYa bricking start or zaYa sences
Tyt best of luck for ur exams

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Lovely update
Plzzz update soon
And thanks a lot for the pm

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Anisah

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awsome update👏 plz update your next update soon...Thanks for the pm😃

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Shweta

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Great Update..
Loved it.
PM me the next part :)

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AnotherAdmirer

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Found this FF today, the very first chap had me 😳

Chapter 1 :

I like your narration, you make it sound so smooth and easy but it's not. Love the flow of words.

Zain landing at Bhopal, that is exactly how it is, no hustle bustle, small town airport, glistening clean, fresh air <3 Nice way to introduce a character next to him, enters Rizwan, and the boyish fun starts with sarcasm and humor.

Zain saw Aliya for the first time probably not having seen her face yet feeling connected and drawn to her, isn't your title playing it's role now :) A guide/Signal towards hope <3 Something that draws you in. 😳

Liked the way Zain introduced Aliya to Rizwan, these small nuances you add, like Shabana asking Rizwan to greet with Salam, they play a smile on the reader's face.

Within a few words, you managed to depict that mother whose daughter is going to wed perfectly ! Totally got that feeling. I am still in awe as to how you managed to pull that one.

Lovely style of narration 🤗 Now onto Chapter 2 😆

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AnotherAdmirer

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Chapter 2 : Crisp Clear introduction of the terrace without much ado, we move on to Zain abruptly ending the call, something unusual as mother Suraiya hints us, probably Zain is in a hurry, yet he has time to stay and listen to the ring of laughter, and eavesdrop later feeling rather ashamed about it. Nice way to introduce another aspect, You just seem to flow with words !

Now comes the father son duo, Honestly barring the laal bete, I liked the convo, and how the father knew Bhopal wasn't the place Zain wanted to be ! Zain is a complete Daddy's boy isn't he? It was nicely done.

It appears all upbeat as Zain takes his phuppi and Rizwan by surprise abt the sudden trip to Dargah. Phuppi's concern and Rizwan the foodie had me chuckling. 😆 Aren't aunts just like that, feed you to the brim and friends eye the food that family brings 🤣

Comes the surprise of the day ! Aliya has a checklist for her Prince Charming ! 😲 and Zeeshan doesn't fit the bill 😆 Awwhh 😳

And the list makes one go double awwwh 😆

Always smiling ? really? 🤣 Hang on that's our Zain. Check ! Smart and Intelligent - Check ! Must be able to handle any problem easily - 5 lakh bargain. Check! 4th point- Just look at him with his phuppi and Dad, Check Check ! 6th point - Major Check ! 😎 There Alia, Your Prince Charming exists ! 🥳

Coming to the thought of a successful marriage, something she wouldn't be able to talk to her mother, she relies upon her Lord to help her through it, Sweet ! :)

Aliya is heading to the Dargah too ! What a coincidence. Not ! 😆 That's where you are gonna make them meet? ⭐️ Or are we still gonna play hide and seek? 😆

Coming to the Brother and Sister talk. Osman and Shabana. Wasn't that swweet, them discussing their kids, how they are the light in their lives, yet Osman has a few matters to be disappointed about, Shabana tells him Zain's a good son despite that. They end with dua for the others kids or rather apne hi tou bachche hain kinda style <3

That was so sweeet and nice ! Leaves one feeling happy :) Nice way to end the chap 👏

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AnotherAdmirer

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Chapter 3 :

Do you know how beautiful a city Bhopal Is ?

Now we step into the Dargah, with Rizwan being childish 🤔 😆 At this rate i dont think he is going to enter Dargah at all 🤣

Perfectly pictured them meeting, nice way of putting it, Hat in hand, climbing up, banging into someone, blue clothes, magical voice 😳 Unrecognizable yet so familiar. She is drawing his attention, like a beacon of hope. Is that what you mean by the title, is Aliya the one which brings Hope in Zain's life? She referred to him as Janab, so didn't expect that, but it seemed to ring in my ears 😳

Zain like a true son prayed for his father <3

Now comes the surprise. Aliya notices him only now, clearly she noticed him before, when he stood stumped and she said are you okay Janab, but it's only now that he makes an impact on her. Like the exchange of arabic terms, you bring the muslim feel in your work aptly.

Rizwan did make it to the Dargah as he comes back, he eyes the girl and his friend, making an impression that Zain is afterall a flirt.

Zain seems smitten surprisingly, a guy like him who can't wait to party in Bangkok, must have met pretty girls before, what is it about Aliya then ?

She pays for the ride herself, well if they shared the boat, they should share the fare, only right! She didn't share her name with an apt reason. Nicely Done ! 👏

Next Chapter !

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AnotherAdmirer

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Chapter 4:

Fulfilling his promise, and Possessive already ! My My we are moving fast and Aliya's love at first sight is rare is coming true, isn't it? 😳 Happy for her ! <3

Rizwan the foodie ! 🤣

And what a treat awaits him, Paratha's !! 🤣

Zain does remember plenty lot, given it's been 10 years, such memory only comes back when there was utter fondness for each other <3 It displays how deep and amazing their bond is 😳

Rizwan is a glutton, It's official, Half a paratha already ? 🤣

Zain doesnt wanna meet Aliya, really bad memories Zain? That's sad 😆

Now how much did Phups feed these boys ! 🤣 They are going different from Bhopal, they gotta keep in mind the Bangkok party !! 🤣

Enters Aliya, having made the kheer *Gulps* Not phuppi ki haath ki kheer Zain, it's Aliya. He clearly didn't register Aliya calling his phuppi Mom 😆

Zain lacks basic manners greeting with left hand, what's with him, too entranced? 😆

Liked Shabana scolding her for her harsh words :P and the sorry that followed.

Zain again, makes us laugh with his jibe at poisoned kheer, Aliya He fits the bill completely, Marry Him! Forget Zeeshan 🤣

Now wasn't that rude of Zain, to lie like that, he could have added, Phuppi's is always better, but well Aliya had to get pissed off. Liked the prank Rizwan played on Zain, and Shabana's typical reaction, a happy go lucky moment, but the phone call changes the ambience, something happened in that good 10 minutes, which had Zain shed away his boyish self and pay attention. I wonder what it was. Hmmm curious.

Liked Shabana and Aliya's joy on hearing Bhai/Mamu coming with family :)

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter, you are an amazing writer, and this FF is clearly the best I have read on ZaYa <33

Send in a PM when you update ! :)

Love ZJ 😳

Edited by AnotherAdmirer - 11 years ago