{COTM II} [Voting Round] (RESULTS pg 1)

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Hi BDSAH-ians! Finally the time has come, to elect a winner of our Competition Of The Month! You can vote for only one story. You may like all, but you have to comment the number of entry to vote. Happy voting, and All The Best👏
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Entry #1

2015( Destiny)

2015 &212 were hiding from uncle ...
They were in a park ...

2015- acha hua 212 hame pehle hi patah chal gaya ki uncle ne gps fit kiya tha... ..warna woh hame phir se pakd leta ...

212 - haan 2015...acha hua aur hum woh colony se bhaag aaye warna woh insaan hame agents ke haath pakdva dete...

2015- haan 212.. hum Bach gaye ...par mein apne parivaar phir se nahi mil paaya 212

212- tum phir se contact karo na apne parivaar ko...aur unhe dusri jagaah aane ke liye kaho..

2015 tries to contact his family but couldn't contact them.
He looks at the date in tab...
"7th June 2016..."

2015- 212,aaj hame 2 saal hogaye yahaa prithvi pe aaye hue..Aaj do saal baad mein apne MA aur Papa se milne wala tha..par..mil nahi paaya .212...

212- 2015 tum dukhi mat ho tum apne parivaar walo se jaroor miloge...

2015- mujeh Aaj bhi woh din yaad hain jab mein Ruth gaya tha ... 212 kaash uss waqt mein ne gusse mein aake grah na choda hota...

Flashback starts

At grah...

Vasant- 2015, ...mein ne tumhe manna kiya tha woh weather control machine ke remote ko chunne se aur apne saath le jaane se...phir bhi tumne meri baat kyu nahi maani..haan..mein ne tumhe baar baar manna kiya tha 2015...

..aur Ab tumne woh remote ghuma diya..ab...kya karenge hum haan..agar woh 1313 uncle ke haath lag gaya toh.

Varsha- 9211... kuttu kuttu... 87sq.. gaya hain remote ko dhoondhne.. mil jaayega remote...chinta mat kariye


Vasant- - 1721 mujeh remote ki itni phikar nahi hain2015. ki hain..agar usse kuch ...hojaata toh..(looking towards 2015).. 2015 .. tumhari jaan khatre mein aajati agar woh 1313 ko jaraa si bhi patah chal jataa ki remote tumhare pass hain.


2015- papa mein. ..sirf apne dosto ko batane le gaya tha. .

Vasant- mein ne tujeh manna kiya tha 2015 abhi yeh remote ke baare mein baat nahi karni hain..kisi se bhi nahi aur agar tujeh batana tha toh mujeh se ek baar pucha hota toh..aur Ab woh remote tumne ghuma diya hain...

Sharad comes with remote

87 sq-. Bhaiya yeh lijiye remote mil gaya mujeh hum abhi isse hc ke pass lejaakar destroy karwa dete hain..aur Ab mein ne naya lock set kiya hain ..machine mein. Ab yeh machine aapke ,2015 aur -426 ke power se hi repair ho paayega ya khul paayega..

Vasant was still angry on 2015 for his. Carelessness..
2015 was not understanding his father concern for him and thought that his father was more concerned about machine. Further..as.nani 555 instigated him against his. Father..so he gets more angry..

2015- nani..555 sahi kehti hain. aap mujeh pe bharosa nahi karte ...aapko meri parwaah nahi..

Vasant - yeh tum kya keh rahi 2015..mein tum pe vishwas karta hoon par remote ko tumhare pass rakhne ke liye.. nahi de sakta ..tumhari jaan khatre mein aa sakti hain beta..

2015- nahi mujeh patah hain aapko mujeh pe bharosa nahi aur toh aur aap mujeh se pyaar nahi karte .. aap sirf apne. Baare mein sochte hain papa...yeh toh acha tha nani 555 ne mujeh sachai dikhai...

2015 speaks in anger all the words which he should not say.

87sq- 2015!!! Yeh tum kaise baat kar rahe ho...maafi maango bhaiya..se. woh tumhare bhale ke liye keh rahe ..

2015- nahi 87sq chacha.. mein galat nahi bol raha.. hoon...

Vasant -.2015 bas bahut hua kabse tumhari baate sun raha hoon...mein ne keh diya na woh remote tumhare paas nahi rahega .aur nahi hamare paas .rahega. Ab...1721 samjhao 2015 ko ...kyu mein usse remote nahi dena chahta...

With this vasant and sharad goes to meet hc.

Varsha tries to explain 2015 the situation but 2015 is still angry..

Varsha - 2015..beta samjho baat ko papa tumhare bhale ke liye ke rahe hain...woh tumse bahut pyar karte hain lekin unhe tumhari chinta hain beta..

tumhe patah hain na 1313 machine ke piche hain..uske irrade ache nahi hain. ...9211 ko tumhari fikar hain beta...

agar Aaj tumhari laaparwahi ki wajah se tumhe kuch hojaata toh...


2015- nahi ma..unhe kisiki chinta nahi haii..woh sirf aur sirf apne baare mein sochte...

Varsha- nahi 2015 aisa nahi hain..beta..papa tumhare bhale ke liye hi bol rahe hain...unhe tumhari fikar hain beta ..agar Aaj tumhe kuch hojaata toh ..

aur woh tumhe zimedaar ..banna chahte hain tum bade ho beta toh woh tumhe acha zimedaar alien banna chahte hain..

2015-(in mind ) koi meri parwaah . Nahi karta ..sabko woh remote ki chinta hain...thik hain toh mein ne bhi Faisala kar liya.mein yahaa se chala jaata hoon...hamesha ke liye...

2015 leaves his house ..and soon with 212 & 1947 he leaves his grah

Flash back ends...

At ghotala house...

Varsha was sad as they again missed the chance to meet their son..

Sharad- bhabhi aap roye mat .. woh waha se chala nahi gaya tha woh uncle ke chamcho ko dekh ke dar ke bhaag gaya..aur yaha shayad pakde jaane ke dar se bhaaga ho...
Woh hame phir se contact jaroor karega...bhabhi...

Vasant- haan varsha ..tum udaas mat ho...2015 phir se contact karne ki koshish jaroor karega...
..
Varsha - vasant Aaj hamare bache ko yahaa aaye hue do saal hogaye...Aaj do saal baad hum apne bache se milne wale the ...

Vasant- haan varsha ..yaad hain mujeh Aaj ka din do saal pehle jab woh ghar chodke chala gaya tha..


Flash back starts...

Varsha comes to the lab...where vasant and sharad were busy in correcting hemant.. words..

Varsha ( crying) -9211...87sq ...9211.. 9211..

Vasant - kya hua 1721...tum itni pareshan kyu ho..kya hua..

Varsha -9211..woh 2015...9211... .2015 ghar mein kahi nahi hain ...9211..mein ne 212 ke maa papa se pucha .unhone kaha ki.2015 aur 212 waha bhi nahi hain...aur 2015 se contact bhi nahi paa raha..aur uska bag bhi nahi hain...

Vasant- kya???. tumne 1947 ko pucha ..shayad uske saath ho dono..

Varsha- 9211 .kahi woh 1313 ko patah toh nahi chal gaya na..kahin ussne 2015 ko ..

Vasant- nahi 1721 aisa kuch nahi hua hoga... 87sq..Tum jaao 1947 ke ghar jaao .mein aur 1721 555 saasu ma ke yaha jaa rahe. Hain dekhne ..hoon

Sharad- hoon...mein apne saath 333,-426 aur 2+2=5 ko bhi lejaata hoon.woh uncle ka bharosa nahi.

ishaaba.

Vava- ishaaba...


They all go in search for 2015 but he was no where found..

Vasant- 2015...kahi nahi mila aur toh aur 212,1947 bhi nahi hain ..woh bhi gayab hain 1721..

Varsha- 9211 kahi naraaz hoke kahi chala na gaya ho..2015...mujeh bahut darr lag raha hain

Vasant- nahi..1721kuch nahi hoga usse..woh jaroor yahi kahi hogaa.. shayad apne dosto ke saath hoga...mein aur 87sq..usse dhoondhne jaa rahe hain...
Tum ghar pe raho shaayad woh ghar aajaye..
Hoon

Varsha- hoon

Vasant and sharad searches everywhere for 2015 & his friends...but they were not found...

Vasant- 87sq..kahin.2015 mujeh se ruth ke kahi woh chala toh nahi gaya..mein ne usse bahut daata tha uske laaparwahi ke liye...87sq. ..

Sharad - bhaiya aap chinta mat kariye woh bahut der tak rutha nahi reh sakta woh chotta tha tab se jaanta hoon mein..usse...hum ghar chalte hain bhaiya...shayad woh ghar aagaya ho...

When they reach their house ...
Varsha informs that one of their spaceship is missing..
Vava and sharad goes to meet hc and inform.them about matter...
HC informs that of their spaceship has been detected to be going out of their grah...
Vasant and varsha are shattered on hearing the news..

Flash back ends...

Varsha- ( crying) vasant kaha hoga abhi woh kahi woh 1313 .. ne phir se toh usse pakd nahi liya na ho..

Vasant - nahi varsha aisa kuch nahi hua hoga ..mein jaanta hoon 2015 ko..woh chotta nahi hain varsha . Uske pass powers hain varsha ..uncle usse Ab pakd nahi sakta..

Sharad- hum patharwale bhagwan se prathna karte hain bhaiya.. bhabhi..uski salamati ke liye.

Vasant - sharad thik keh raha hain varsha chalo hum patharwale bhagwan se prathna karte hain..

Varsha - haan chalo...

All prays for 2015 & 212 ki salamati

Here at park...

2015 ( with tears)- 212 mujeh mere maa papa se milna hain...patah nahi kyu mein ruth ke aagaya 212 Aaj mere galti ki sazaa sirf mein nahi mera pura parivaar aur tum sab bhugat rahe hain .212...

212 - 2015 , meri baat suno...tumhara yahaa aana insaan ki niyati thi... hamare yaha aane ki koi na koi toh wajah hogi 2015..1313 uncle yeh sundar prithvi ko tabah karna chahta hain..aur usse rokne ke liye hum sab yaha aaye hain yeh tumhari niyati hain 2015

2015-haan 212 tum sahi keh rahe ho... yeh insaan ki niyati hain . .jo mujeh yahaa laai hain.. .aur Ab mein 1313 uncle ko unke plan mein kaamyab nahi hone doonga.. chahe kuch bhi hojaaye .uncle ko mein uske plan mein kalyaan nahi hone doonga..212...

212- haan 2015 ..hum usse kaamyaab nahi hone denge...
Hun!!

.2015- hunnn

Edited by iKunshTyagi - 9 years ago
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Entry #2

Kya Mein Aapke Liye Jaruri Nahi!!!






Vasant, Sharad, Manav go towards a village. Vasant recognizes the village to be of Premlata's as he was brought there. & Then he had to run away from there. Manav takes them near a old haveli. It was half broken. There were trees, bushes, wild flowers inside the haveli. As it's roof was devastated. There was a room whose door seemed to be locked from outside but it wasn't the case, as the handle was broken & it was purposely kept in such a way to seem real. Manav knew this. Manav opens the door & they all enter quietly.


There was a way towards underground from there. When they got down, there was a passway for about 1.5 km Sharad holds Vasant & Manavs hand & all three go further by super duper power to save time. Manav felt sum sensation as if sumone watching them, sumone holding him during this travel. But couldn't make out. As they stop towards the place, they see there was a wall. Any normal person would think it to be wall. But Manav knew it wasn't wall, it was door prepared in wall form to ghumrah people. But there was a code word to open the door wall.


Sharad uses a different voice & said sum word in his alien language & door opens .


It was a very big place, Vasant & Sharad were shocked to see the equipments kept there & they realised earlier Manav had been correct in saying he couldn't have been able to destroy this all & stop 343 square root. But they couldn't see him or any other person there. Manav felt this as strange as he knew that 343square root was there & he dint have invisibility superpower. So where was he. Vasant realised as 343sq root wasn't seen here, there has to be some underground place even here. He & Sharad scanned the whole place nicely. Vasant had borrowed Shishir's superpower with him. With help of that he came to know the exact place where 343sq rt was there doing his experiment. He even saw 2015 there, tied up unconscious. Even one human was there. He couldn't recognize that person. But decided to even help him. Sharad recognized the door & realised it was illusion of door so they could easily move further.


Sharad & Vasant asked Manav to stay back there & they would deal with 343 sq rt. Though not happy he stayed back as it was Vasants order. He couldn't deny him. Sharad, Vasant move ahead. They themselves see 343 sq rt experimenting on their 2015 & a human.


Sharad : 343sq rt. Ruk jao!!! Band karo apna yeah experiment jo sirf tabahi macha sakta hai.


Vasant : Kya milega tumhe yeah sab karke. Tum apne is khatarnak maksad me kabhi kamiyab nai ho paoge.


Vasant & Sharad suspected that real 343sq rt may be somewhere else or in some other Roop coz the could make out that the one standing in front of them was illusion. He wasn't real. & To show powers in front of illusion was wastage of energy plus it would warn 343sq rt that who they were & what their powers were. So they had to play well here. So it was better to prode him to speak so they could know were he is actually.


Vasant : Tum kuch bhi karlo, tum kamiyab nai ho paoge. Me aisa hone nai dunga. Agar me nai toh koi aur aakar tumhe rokega. Lekin tumhe kamiyab nai hone denge. Yeah insaani prajati ke bhagwaan, tumhe rokne ke liye kisi na kisi ko bhej hi denge. Is liye behtar hoga ki tum baar maan kar apne ghar wapas chale jao. Tum jeet nai paoge.


Listening all this 343sq rt couldn't control himself. As he had his weakness anger. He gets anger too soon. Vasant knew this weak point. Sharad was observing every thing keenly & sees some chemical boiling in d test tube & understands that the testtube is 343sqrt. As he was getting angry the chemical starts boiling. Sharad awared Vasant through his mind contact. Both Vasant & Sharad were paying attention to that test tube. & Vasant continues his proding. Finally after few minutes, 343sqrt couldn't control his anger any more & shouts after coming to his human form.


343sqrt : Chup ho jao!!! Tumhari yeah bate mujhe nai hara sakti!! Mujhe harana aasan nahi hai. Tumhe kya lagta hai, me itne saal se is experiment per itni mehnat kar raha huu, aur in insaano ko sab meri mehnat tabah karne dunga. Bilkul nai, me insaano ko apne vash me karlunga. Insaano ka khatama kar dunga iss dharti se. Yahan sab robots rahenge ab. Jo meri hukum ka plan karenge. Jo mere ghulam honge. Hahaha...


Just as he finished saying & started laughing, Vasant & Sharad join hands so their powers of electricity & Air join & creates a storm. But before they use the superpower, 343sqrt suddenly stops laughing evilly but laughs madly. Vasant, Sharad are shocked on this. Vasant realise that sumone is using gudgudi superpower on 343sqrt. But no one is seen. & They realise it is Hemant. 343sqrt falls down laughing. & Hemant does "Heeen" & comes back to visibility form. Vasant is about to shout at Hemant but Sharad stops him & tells to concentrate on 343sqrt first.


Vasant realises the situation & he & Sharad again form the superpower of storm, & they throw it on 343sqrt & he gets unconscious. Vasant then slowly takes all the equipments, machines, testtube & destroys them all through his superpowers, but they couldn't completely do this as it would cause a blast. & If they did d blast here then , haveli above would also get completely destroyed & if d haveli fell down here then their 2015, a human who r unconscious wil b affected. So Sharad calls Manav in as manav had the breifcase with him.


Manav opened the breifcase, Vasant gathered all the particles & kept all of them in the breifcase. Then Manav holds the breifcase, Sharad catches Hemants hand, as the underground was Anyways starting to get affected due to all chemicals reactions, & the storm they had formed. Vasant picks 343sqrt & Keeps him in d box High command gave them to imprison him. He keeps that bottle in his pocket. As their briefcase was full of the destruction materials. Vasant then picks up Unconscious 2015 & the human & they all slowly start coming out.


After coming out Vasant places the unconscious bodies on the garden grass as that is harmless to both of them. Then he takes out the bottle wer he caught 343sqrt & gave it to Sharad to catch. He opened the breifcase from Manav & removed all the materials & completely destroyed them & threw them away. In the back house of the haveli & freezes its door. Then he sends the bottle of 343sqrt to Hc so he would punish or do whatever needed. Hemant was playing with unconscious 2015 & d human & Trying to wake them up. As there was very less light in underground way they couldn't see d humans face. Now wen Hemant was playing, Vasant goes to stop him & notices, 2015 was in his human form. & D other was a human who was considered dead, but he was alive here.


Hemant : Papa, dekhiye na!! Yeah 2015 bhaiya aur yeah Manav chacha ke hamshakal Manav Bhaiya jaise dikhrne wale dino uth hi nai rahe.


Vasant : Arey gende! Woh 343sqrt ne inko chemical dalke behosh kia hua hai. Ab pehle indono ko humare saath ghar le chalte hain, phir unhe hosh me layenge.


Saying this Vasant was about to pick them through his superpowers, when Manav stopped him & told.


Manav : Vasant bhaiya!! Aap in dino ko ab kyun utha rahe hain? In dono ko aise hi ghar tak le jayenge kya?? Hum ghadi laye hai na. Usme inhe le jayenge na.


Sharad : Jab me logic istemal karta huu tab sab mujhe daatte hain, aur ab bina logic istemal kiye koi itni bakwaas baat kar raha hai. Arey, 2015 aur insaani Manav dono behosh hai na. Toh khud chalke toh nahi jayenge ghadi tak. Is liye bhaiya inhe utha kar ghadi me bithane le jaa rahe hain.


Vasant : Ohh! Hemant chacha!! Kya kar raha hai? Ghadi kholna pehle, phir usse tane marna.


Sharad realises & goes to open d door quietly. But before he could go, Hemant comes.


Hemant : Hmm hmm hmm hmm hmm (ojha uncle style) Jhallar! Mhare hote huge tum log kaam karoge. Me apne Papa ki madam karunga.


Vasant : Shabash beta! Chalo ab jaldi se dsrwaza kholo.


Hemant happily doing his signature style aage aage & goes to open d door. As soon as Hemant opens d door, Vasant keeps both 2015 & Manav in it & all sit in d car & go towards Sunshine colony. They reach Colony by midnight as the travel was more.


All colonywale were waiting outside as they had seen Varsha worried. & They were informed by Anna that Ghotalas got a hint about 2015's wareabouts & Manav had accompanied them as that place was known to Manav. So he took them. When d car stops, Vasant comes out as he had to take both out. Varsha immediately runs to Vasant & sees Hemant in d car & hugs Vasant.


Varsha : Vasant aap thik hai na?? Mujhe baad me patah chala yeah genda bhi aapke saath aaya hai, aur me itni darr gai ki patah nai, ab yeh ladka aap logo ko kitna pareshan karega.


Vasant consoles Varsha & asks her to relax, they all are fine. One by one Sharad, Hemant, Manav come out of car. Then Vasant first removes 2015 & places him on the bench in garden. Then he turns & removes someone else too. All were surprised who is that. But when he placed Manav there, all were shocked.


Lajjo : Manav!!! Manav !! Mhara beta!! Beta!! Keh hua there ko? Bolna chup kyu hai?


Ojha : Lajjo keh bol rahi hai? Woh humare Manav na hai! Yeah humare Manav hai! Yeah dekh!


Lajjo : Yeah mhara beta hai ojhaji!! Ek maa ka dil dhokka nai kha sakta. Yahi mhara bachha hai!! Mhara Manav!! Vasant bhaiya!! Aap ne keh kiya mhare bachhe ko?? Ke hua isse??


Ojha : Lajjo!! Ke bol rahi hai. Dekh yeah Manav hai! Yahan, achha khasa toh hai.


Vasant decides now to break the silence & to reveal the truth. Whatever the say be.


Vasant : Ojha uncle, Lajjo aunty sahi keh rahi hai. Yeah aapka beta Manav hai. Dekhiye please pehle humari puri baat sun lijiye. Phir agar aapko lage ki hum aapke gunheghar hain, toh aap jo bhi saza denge hume manjoor hogi. Itne dino se jo aapke ghar reh raha tha woh aapka beta nai tha. Yeah bhi humari hi prajati ka hai. Ise laga ki aapka beta Manav mar chuka hai, toh yeah agar uska roop le le ga toh koi dikat nai hogi, kyun ki Lajjo aunty ko toh manav ki maut ke baare me pata nai tha. Aur ojha uncle ne Manav ki laash toh dekhi nai thi is liye usne aisa kiya. Lekin iski taraf se me aapse maafi mangta huu. Please isse kuch mat kahiye ga. Usne yeah sab humare karib rehne ke liye kiya tha.


Bhadresh : Aapke karib rehne ke liye kiya tha matlab? Ye aapka beta 2015 hai kya?


Vasant : Nai yeah humara beta 2015 nai hai. 2015 toh woh hai. (Pointing towards 2015).


Ronnie : Yeah tumhara beta haye? Toh phir yeah kaun haye jo Manav wo ba wo ba ...


Bhadresh : Dch dch dch dch. Arey waala bol!!


Ronnie : Ruko man!


Vasant : Jagah ko Hindi me kya bolte hain.


Ronnie : Haan!!


Vasant : Jagah hi bolte hain.


Ronnie : Tumhara toh!! Chhodo!! Yeah kaun haye jo Manav ke jagah par yahan rehta tha. Bolo man!!


Sharad : Yeah, 57/57 hai. Humara Bhai!!


Anna : Haan Ronnie bhaiya!! Yeah Darasal, Mr Ghotala aur Sharad ka chota Bhai hai. Jo kariban 10 saal pehle humari prithvi par aaya tha. Woh...




Flashback...

Manav : Kyun ki, asli Manav mar chuka hai, Anna.


Anna : Manav mar chuka hai? Manav, mera Manav!! Nai aisa nai ho sakta, tum jhooth bol rahe ho na. Taki hum Manav ko yahan na lekar aaye aur tum aaram se yahan chat ke niche hum sabke bich humari aankhon me dhool jhokkar reh sako.


Anna about to go to ghotalas & others, but manav stops her.


Manav : Anna, ek min, pehle meri baat toh suno. Plz ghotala parivar ko mat batao ki me kaun huu. Bekar me unki umeed badhegi aur phir tutegi. Kyun me woh nai huu jinhe dhundhne woh log yahan aaye hain. Mein koi aur huu.


Anna : Mujhe tum pe bharosa nai hai. Me abhi jake Mr. Ghotala ko sab kuch batati huu.


Manav : Kya bataogi? Kaun huu me?? Patah hai tumhe. Toh phir. Aur tum unhe jaa kar kahogi ki me Manav nai balki unhi ki tarah alien huu toh umeed mujhse jhud jayengi ki me 2015 huu. Jo ki mein nai huu.


Meanwhile, As Ghotala wanted to confirm about the colonywale are complete humans or not , they come to Manav & Anna as they both were only left to be checked. Sharad checks Anna & she turns out as fairy. Manav pleads with Anna to not let Sharad see him, so Anna sntches the glasses & smartly changes the topic with help of Hemantgiri.


Next day, morning when Sharad was recollecting that Anna looked fairy. He realized they dint check Manav & Anna smartly changed the topic. So he decides to have a word with Anna. As talking to Manav was useless as he would either bluff or wil give him fake information. He goes to Dsouza house. He sees Anna thinking sumthing deeply & there were tear marks on her face. He wanted to know the reason behind this. He started to towards Anna but stopped & thought he would read her mind & find out & would console her indirectly. So he started reading Anna's mind.


Anna : (In mind) Aisa kaise ho sakta hai? Mera Manav mar kaise sakta hai? Itne din me isse Manav samaj kar dosti nibhati rahi. Par shayad is liye hi mera dil usse puri tarah se kabuul nai kar paya, kyun ki yeah Manav hai hi nahi. Aur agar yeah Manav nai hai, toh yeah kaun hai? Isne kaha yeah 2015 nai hai. Agar hota toh turant Ghotala family ko bata deta...


Sharad stopped his reading. He goes towards Anna & asks her to give him their alien glasses. When Anna gave him glasses, he forgot to console Anna & goes towards Manav. He doesn't ask Manav anything. But from a bit of distance he wears the glasses & sees Manav in his alien form. First he gets surprised, then happy, then doubt, then angry. He gets super angry.


Anna realises she gave Sharad glasses now if he checks Manav he would come to know the reality. So she runs towards Sharad. But before she comes out, Sharad already knew the truth.


Sharad : Anna, tumhe mera ek kaam karna hoga. Woh kya hai na me Manav ke liye kuch khas karna chahta huu. Usne aaj tak bahut madad ki hai humari, toh me soch raha tha ki uske liye kuch khas karu. Aur me soch raha tha ki, Lajjo aunty se kahu ki woh Manav ke liye kuch achha sa tofah le aaye, ko Manav ko ekdam mmm lage. Aur agar me unse kahunga toh woh jayengi ya nai pata nai. Toh kya tum unhe kahogi, abhi hi woh bazaar ke liye nikale. Aur ojha uncle se bhi kehna unke saath jane ke liye.


Anna doesn't understand this behaviour. But she did as he told her as her mind wasn't working properly.


Anna : Uncle Ojha! Woh actually na aaj Manav ko kisi kaam se bahar jana hai, Army office jana hai. Aur aap toh jante hi hai ki Lajjo aunty kitni pareshan ho jati hain agar unhe pata chala ki Manav army office jaa raha hai. Toh kya aap thodi der ke liye, Aunty Lajjo ko bahar le ja sakte hain. Unse yeah kahiye ki aapko Manav ki pasand ki chije leni hai. Please.


Sharad dint trust Anna for this matter. He doubted if Anna would be able to convince ojhas. So he controlled Anna's words & spoke this to uncle ojha. After speaking this he stopped his controlling.


Ojha : Heeheen!! Thik hai Anna bitiya, mhare jaisa sanskari, mahan, sevabhavi purush thara yeah kaam kar dega.


Saying this ojha uncle goes. Anna stands confused that she dint even say anything to ojha uncle & he went saying this. Sharad after listening ojha uncles words goes inside Ghotala house to call all of them out.


After some time, ojha uncle along with Lajjo aunty leaves for market. All ghotalas, Bhairavi & Bhavana, Anna & Ronnie were out in garden. Sharad then calls Manav through his mind telepathy & tells him to come immediately to colony garden.


Vasant : Sharad!! Kya baat hai? Tune hume yahan kyun bulaya hai, beta.


Sharad : Bhaiya! Aap do minute rumour, abhi aapko pata chal jayega.


Manav comes rushing to colony garden. He was about to ask Sharad why he called him, but before he could ask, Sharad punches him hard on his face. Manav is shocked at the punch. He doesn't understand the reason behind this action. Sharad again punches Manav on another cheek. He tells manav to get up. Vasant-Varsha runs towards Sharad to stop him.


Vasant : Sharad! Yeah kya hai? Tum Manav ko maar kyu rahe ho? Kya hua? Sharad pehle ruko. Manav ko maar na band. Maine kaha na.


Finally Sharad stops pouncing on him. Though he was punching Manav & showing anger, but d punches wernt hurting Manav coz they weren't with force.


Sharad : Bhaiya! Bhabhi! Puchiye isse ki kaun hai yeah? Aur aaj tak isne hume apni penchant kyun chupai? Kya yeah pehle se nai janta tha ki hum kaun hai. Aur is liye yeah yahan sunshine colony me aaya tha . Puchiye isse.!!


Varsha : Haan Sharad, hum puchte hain, par tum shant ho jao pehle. Shant ho jao.


Sharad : Kaise shant ho jao bhabhi! Yeah jankar ki yeh kaun hai! Nahi shant reh sakta.


Vasant while his eyes on Manav his voice directing Sharad: Kaun hai yeah?


Manav doesn't watch anyone, his head bend down.


Hemant : Sharad chacha kahunga yeah humare 2015 bhaiya toh nai hai.


& Saying this he jumps on Manav. & They fall down as manav was fallen on bench before. But while falling now, Hemant fell down on ground. Manav immediately got worried for him.


Manav : Hemant tum thik ho na? Hemant utho!! -426 utho na, dekho agar tum jaldi uth gaye toh me tumhe apne kandhe pe baith kar pura colony ghumaunga bus uth jao plz, -426 uth jao na.


Hemant opens his eyes. & Does Heeen. Vasant-Varsha are completely shocked. All others are confused.


Sharad : Bhaiya!! Bhabhi! Yeah 57/57 hai.


Vasant leaves Sharad & stands still. Varsha seeing Vasant shocked is upset. Seeing Manav she becomes emotional. She watches Sharad.
Sharad : Ab kahiye bhabhi! Kya mera isse marna sahi nai tha. Itne dino se. Isse pata tha, par isne hume batana jaruri nai samja. Paraya kar diya hai hume. Ab hum koi nai uske liye.


Manav : Maine paraya kia aap logo ko? Ya aap logo ne mujhe bhula diya? Me aap logo ka yahan intezaar karta raha, puri dharti par bhatakta raha, par aaplogo ne toh meri paravah tak nai ki. Jab mujhe pata chala ki mere Graham se koi aaya hai, me kitna khush hua. Phir aap logo ko dhundha. Par mujhe pata nai tha ki aap log kaun hain. Sachme mere Graham ke hi hai na. ya koi aur. Pata kia ki aap kahan rehta hai. Aap logo ke karib rehne ke liye yahan Manav banke raha. Phir dhire dhire aap logo ke bartav ko dekh kar yakin hogaya ki yeah toh mere apne 9211 bhaiya aur uska parivar hai. Kitna khush hua uss din. Phir thode din baad pata chala ki aap log toh mujhe bhul hi gaye hain. Koi mera zikra tak nai karta. Phir bhi himmat nai hari. Socha thik hai, aap log mujhe bhale hi bhule ho, par me toh aapko nai bhula na. Toh jab tak aap log yahan hain, meri zimedari banti hai ki me aapka dhyan rakhu, koi bhi aapko pareshan kare toh usse sabak sikhau. Phir jab aap logo ka sach samne aaya aur in logo ne kaha ki woh aapko bait agency ke hawale karenge, toh me dar gaya. Me bhi ek baar panda gaya tha. Badi mushkil se chutta tha wahan se. Nai chahta tha ki aap log wahan phase. Is liye colonywalo se binate ki ki aapko maafi karde. Phir jab aap logo ne aur Bhairavi didi ne bataya ki aap log yahan 2015 ko dhundhne aaye hain. Toh me pareshan ho gaya. Dukhi bhi hua. Me sochta tha ki aap log yahan ghumne ya Hc ka koi kaam karne aaye hain. Par aap yahan 2015 ko dhundhne aaye hain yeah toh kabhi khayal me bhi nai socha tha. Aur 2015 prithvi par hai, kahan kho gaya hai, yeah soch kar toh aur pareshan ho gaya. Itne saal yahan raha toh kuch dost bhi banaye hain maine, kuch log jo khufiya agencies me kaam karte hain. Inki madad li yeah pata lagane me ki aisa koi insaano hai, Jose insaani tor tarike samaj nai aate, jo thoda ajeeb ho. Kahan se kuch bhi pata nai chala. Toh apne aap ko nakam samaj raha tha. Ki aaplogo ki koi madad bhi nai kar sakta.


Saying this he starts crying. Vasant too much overwhelmed. Varsha goes to console Vasant. Even she is crying. Hemant is also doing hafu hafu.


Anna : Oh my god! I don't believe this! Manav tum unke rishtedar ho! Aur tumne phir bhi unse nahi kaha? Kya rishta hai tum hara inke saath? Bolo na.


Manav doesn't say anything.


Sharad : Anna, yeah mera aur Vasant bhaiya ka chota Bhai hai. 57/57.


Still Manav doesn't say anything.


Sharad gets more angry : Dekha bhabhi, yeah kya bol raha hai. Humne isse bhula diya. Humne!! Bhaiya ne!! Isse kahiye, jab yeah chala gaya tha tab bhaiya kitne toot gaye the. Do saal tak unhone apna dimag tak band kar diya tha. Issi wajah se aapki maa inhe nakara samajne lagi, phir pehle aapko bhaiya ke khilaf bhadkane lagi, jab aap nai mani unki baat toh unhone 2015 ko bhadkane shuru Kia, aur 2015 yahan chala aaya.


Varsha stops Sharad from saying anything further. She takes Hemant & Sharad inside the house. Shishir had gone to school, it was still time for him to return. She asks Ronnie, Anna, Bhairavi, Bhavana aunty to leave & let Vasant & Manav talk alone. Both brothers sit beside each other, no words needed. Vasant could understand Manav's silent plea through his tears. Manav joins his hands to say sorry to Vasant but Vasant hugs him. Manav breaks down. They cry & cry until there are no tears. After some time, Manav's phone rings & his face lights up.



Flashback ends...


Vasant : Manav ko phone aaya ki ek ajeeb bartav karne wala ladka ek hain ke pass haveli me jaate dikha hai. Par wapas aate nai dikha. Toh humne socha thoda aise dekh ke aaye. Toh wahan hume Manav bhi Mila. Par uncle ojha, woh hume pata chala ki Manav marne wala tha, akhri saanse le raha tha, tab us 343sqrt ne usse ek chemical ke zariye zinda raha tha. Ab aap log apne insaani doctor ko dikhaiye taki pata chale ko Manav ko thik kaise Kia jaa sakta hai, aur kitna waqt lagega.


Meanwhile, Hemant thinks sumthing & goes towards unconscious Manav & tries to heal him through his superpowers. Lajjo shocked as she dint knew what was this.


Lajjo : Arey, Hemant, Bawara ke kar raha hai mhare Manav ko?
Sharad immediately rushes to Lajjo & says : Lajjo aunty woh apne healing power se Manav ko thik kar raha hai.


Sharad, Vasant, Varsha were proud of Hemant. Others were shocked to know of this superpower. Manav was worried for Hemant. But he could say anything, Sharad contacts him through mental telepathy & tells him not to tell anything. After some time Manav gets consciousness & is surprise to be in his sunshine colony. He takes sum time to recollect all past events. All are happy to see Manav alright. They all go to meet him.


Vasant takes 2015 in their house, Ojha uncle stops him.


Ojha : Oh jhallar! Ghotala! 2015 ko kahan le ja rahe ho? Isse bhi Hemant se thik karvao!!


Even Ronnie, bhadresh & other colonywale support him.


Vasant : Nahi ojha uncle, 2015 isse thik nahi hoga. Woh 2-3 din me khud hi thik ho jayega.


All ghotalas go in. After some days 2015 gets conscious. Manav is told truth. All ghotalas go back to their planet .




------- THE END--------
Edited by iKunshTyagi - 9 years ago
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Entry #3

Does Ramnik still?

Ronnie:... Phir mai aur Liza aisa dance kiya, ke vo ba... Vo ba... Are ek monute man! Has the bird flied for sure ko Hindi me kaise bolte hain?

Liza: Kya vo chidiya pakka ud gaya?

Ronnie: Haa! Phir ham aisa dance kiya, ki Nisha ke pakka ud gaya! Chup ek dum! Achcha aunty Bhavna! Aap bhi apna past ke baare me bataao!

Bhairavi: Mai bolti hu! Vo to itni raat ho gyi na, ki baa sone chali gai... Inke jo husband the na, vo Urmila naam ki baa ke saath bhaag gye! Achcha haa! Unka naam Ramnik tha... Vo Andheri me rehte hain!

Liza: Bechaara aunty Bhavna... E Varsha! Mere paas ek plan haay, jis se hum ye jaan sakta hai, ki vo abhi tak Aunty se pyaar karte hain, aur vaapis la sakte hain! Idhar aao, Varsha!

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The next morning, Varsha went as per the plan.

Varsha went into Ramnik's and Urmila's house as a Fortune Teller.

Varsha:... Aapke haath ko dekh ke lagta hai ki aapke dil me U nhi, balki B likha hai!

Urmila: Achcha! Tujhe bada pata hai!

Ramnik: Dekho, mujhe bhook lagi hai, tum khaana leke aao!
... Ab bolo!

Varsha: Sach bolie! Kya aap Bhavna naam ki aunty se pyaar karte hain?!

Ramnik: Haa... Magar hain nhi thi! Vo to mar chuki hai😭😭!!!

Varsha: Are nhi! Matlab aapke haath ki lakeer aisa kehti hain! Vo to Boriwali ke paas Sunshine colony me rehti hain!

Ramnik: Dekho! Ab mera us se koi MATLAB hai!!!!

Varsha: Thik he! Agar fir bhi try karna ho to kar lijiye... Huuu?!

Ramnik: Hain?!

Varsha: Hain nhi huu! Matlab mai jaa rhi hu!

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The following night, Ramnik kept a divorce form near Urmila, and left for Sunshine Colony.

Ramnik: Ye rha Bhatt house! Bhavna! Bhadresh!!

Bhavna: Ye to jaani pehchaani si aawaaz lag rhi hai... Chal baba uth! Nalayak!
...
A... Aap!
She goes and hugs Ramnik...

Bhavna: Baba! Tere papa aaye hain!

Bhadresh runs(for the first time) and hugs his dad... Now Bhadresh had stopped being lazy, and started working. Bhavna thanks Liza and Varsha.

Happy
Ending😳😃
Edited by iKunshTyagi - 9 years ago
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Entry #1 is THE WINNER!

Who's the khush-naseeb😲??
She is...


Krish58
Krishu!!!!!!!!
A gift for you Krishu:


Edited by iKunshTyagi - 9 years ago
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I read last one ...#3 short & sweet ...remaining I'll read & comment who's best...meko thoda tym dena han man...for reading& making decision... hoon?!!!
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Originally posted by: -VisheshTippani

I read last one ...#3 short & sweet ...remaining I'll read & comment who's best...meko thoda tym dena han man...for reading& making decision... hoon?!!!

aww. Needs baby ko time chahiye... chal diya time...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Best if luck to all
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Both the stories are mmm I loved both the stories..
My vote goes to entry no.2
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Winner is Kunsh[:D/]

Achha achha my vote goes to entry number 3

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