SS-'Tanhayee-An Emptiness'update pg-51&52 (9 june) - Page 11

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Nancy_NUTS

duh how the heck m i reading this one so late?

😆😆its okay dear... it happens
anyways first of all m so happy u r back Kakul Di🤗
aww thnks a lot dear...

this is amazing emotional FF eh! Priya's condition is so damn pathetic..aww😔...n its increasing my curiosity level
yeah... actually it turned out to be more emotional than vat i had initially planned for... i hope i'll meet ur expectation to make it worth to wait for getting ur curiosity solved

seriously cant wait to read next part, and u gotta update longer(sowwiee but the first part didnt apear like three pages to me...wanted to read more!)...pleaseee update ASAP😳
next update will be up soon... yeah actually that first part was 3 page but with line gaping 1.5 i word...

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: love4raya

oh wow awsum yar.. shez nt shipz and suddu's daughter?? and she alrdy loves ram?? interesting yar.. waiting to knw wer she saw ram and hw she fell for him..:))

aww... sry dear i cant answer any of ur questions... but all ur answers will be there in my next update... so do read it😉😉
god wat all i have to do... to get my readers hooked to my ss/ff😉😉😉
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: name2saakshi

cant wait to read next part, and u gotta update longer

yeah... next update is comparatively longer... hope it will make up for alll delay...
do lemme know whether d length of next update is okay... or not...
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: kaparikh1

That was a gr8 update...But really anxious to know the future story...Plzz take rest and take care...Will be waiting for the next update...

thnk dear... hmmm some facts will get revealed in next part... hope it will help to bring down ur anxiety...
thnks for ur concern dear... now i'm feeling much better... next update will be up soon
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Siacutie

awesum too gud and she luves ram wow kakul

get well soon

ha ha ha... yes our princess is already in love with our cuddles...
and that too since last 16 years....
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: salsaly

awesome update...👏... i didnt get it...😕... want my questions answers soon.. i'm not going to give a list of questions here...😆... but u knw na , wat i'm talking about... LOL... 😉



continue asap... but first get well soon.. take care... thank u... 😳

thnks dear... for comment and for lovey pic of our princess... next update will have answers to some of ur quest...
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Posted: 13 years ago
thanks a lot to all y readers... those who commented and also to my silent readers...
it really feels good to see ur love and liking for my work...
and socly this ss... as i didnt expected to receive such gr8 response for an emotional storyline...
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thanks... next update will be up in few minutes... hope u all will like it...
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Posted: 13 years ago

Part 3

I generally use purple color but from now on... i'll use red for all flashbacks and purple for present scenes.. just to avoid any more confusion... as it is my updates have many confusion😉😉
Part 4

She remembers the first time she had seen Ram….

(Flashback)

That day is still fresh in her memory… that was the day when she 1st saw Ram…

It was one of the Sunday morning when she visited to club, where her father give tennis classes to some elite class peoples and their kids. She came to give her father, Ayesha and Karthik their juices and breakfast. She was waiting for them near the car but after some time she went inside and sat in the locker room. There she saw him first time… he came out with his frnds after playing squash… his favorite game… she still remembers their convo:

"Friend: Yaar Ram, kabhi to haar jaya kar…

Ram: Never, this is my favourite game, and I can't lose in this game…"

He was smiling... his smiling face was the thing, which had captivated priya's eyes and focus on him… there was a kind of innocence in that smile but his voice had some kind of authority. His eyes were deep like ocean speaking millions… for next few days priya couldn't separate him from her thoughts… but she thought it's just an infatuation of her youth but on next Sunday… she again saw him and her heart started racing… she tried her best to avoid him… there's no place of such emotions in her life… but she couldn't…

She still remember "that day"…it was the same day when she realized her love for him and when she came face to face with the harsh truth of her life…

"That Day"

She was very happy to see ram in front of her yes… smiling and busy with his same friend… she glanced in his direction for few minutes and then turned towards the locker room.

When a security guard stopped her for enquiry, she was lost in Ram's thought and just replied she is here to meet her father who is a coach here she was about to disclose the name when Sudhir stopped her saying the guard that she is his friend's daughter…

Sudhir; hai na Priya?

Priya realizing her mistake, gave a quick reply: yes sir

Sudhir took her inside in a corner… and placed a tight slap across her face… saying

Sudhir: chup bilkul awaaz nahi… ab chup chap yaha se jao kabhadar jo kisi ke samne phir se yeh baat nikali toh… mujhse bura koi nahi hoga…

Priya turned to move when sudhir again stopped her

Sudhir: jaane se pehle juice dete jaana karthik aur Ayesha ko… aur haan yeh aansoo pohch lena… and left…

Priya wiped her tears, took a deep breath and left to see Ayesha…

There she is sitting with her friends, showing off her new watch that she got as her bday present which was day before day yesterday… i.e. 20th july which is coincidentally Priya's birth date also… there was a big party for Ayesha at home, she got many gifts one of which was watch that she was showing off… but Priya was not even allowed to step in the party… and gifts was a distant thought as no one even thought of wishing her once… only thing she got from her mother was a tight slap… first thing in the morning… her mind drifted to the incident… early morning she stepped out of her room and found a single wrapped gift laying outside her room door… and excitedly she picked up thinking its for her… her first bday present, so she started to unwrap it… but her hand instead oof reacing to gift reached to her cheek feeling slap… due to the severity of the slap… her eyes got teary and she looked at the person who slapped her… and it was none other her own mother… and close to her was standing her father and sis with tears… her sis came towards her snatched the gift from her and moved out…

Shipra: himmat kaise hui meri Ayesha ka gift lene kii…

Priya: nahi… voh toh…

Shipra placed a one more slap shutting her saying she isn't interested in her excuses… and left from there… leaving behind a crying Priya to herself…

That was her bday present… but today when she saw Ram she felt God and her only support her nani which is with god has gifted her this present that she once again saw Ram… his smile makes her smile too… her thoughts were disturbed by Ayesha's voice…

Ayesha: mera juice…

Priya walked towards her gave her juice and left for home very well aware of the scolding and taunts she'll get once her father reached home in the evening…

She left not before getting a glimpse of Ram… who was talking about his trip…

Ram: yes yaar on Tuesday i.e. 24th july I'm leaving for US for my studies… I'll miss all of u… spclly this Sunday mrng matches, everythng…

Priya's heart broke thinking now she'll not be able to see Ram from next Sunday… and this realization brought fresh set of tears in her eyes… and with heavy heart she left from there but her eyes still drinking his face…

Soon she reached home… she moved to her room, cried her heart out... later that day around 5pm

Priya… Priya… came loud voice of her father…

And she knew wat is coming her way… slowly she came out from her room all shivering and tears flwoing from her eyes…

Shipra: kya hua sudhir chila kyu rehe ho… kya kiya isne ab…

Sudhir: pooch isse… (his voice showing his anger)

Karthik and Ayesha hid behing shipra…

Shipra: sudhir cool down ur scaring karthik and Ayesha… she lovingly made them go in their room and came out… and saw

Sudhir sitting on couch and priya standing few steps away from him head down and shivering…

Shipra: kya hua sudhir, ab batao…

Sudhir tells her everythng that happened at club

Shipra turned to face priya and slapped her across her face… making her to cry more… kya kaha tha maine… galti se bhi humhe ma-papa mat kehna na akele main a kisike samne… kaha tha na…

Priya: nodded in affirmative

Sudhir: phir samhaj mai kyu nahi aata tumhe… kitni baar kaha hai tumhe par iss dimag mai kuch gussta hi nahi… (tapping hardly at her forehead)

Priya: sorry sir aage se aisi galti nahi hogi…

Sudhir: nahi ho toh hi accha hai tumhare liye.. samjhi… jao tumhare room mai… bahar aane ki koi jarurat nahi hai…

Shipra: aur khana nahi banega aaj… hum sab bahar ja rehe hai… isliye tum aaj aapne room mai hi rehna…

She left from there for her room…

She came back to ask, whether she can take jug of water… when she heard

Sudhir: pata nahi jawani ki galti kab tak picha karegi…

Shipra: haan… usi time abortion karva liya hota toh accha hota… par maa ke karaan…, maa toh chali gayi… isse chood gayi humhare liye…

Sudhir: aur nahi toh kya… how ambarassing it is to tell in society that I was having a kid when I was only 21… itne saal se jo saach chupate aaye hai aaj iske karaan sabko pata chal jata…

Shipra: yes dear… we can't afford to take any more risk… it can affect my career and mostly our image… aaj se iska club jana bhi band…

Sudhir agreed..

Shipra: chalo ab mood thik karo… aaj karthik aur Ayesha ko bahar le jana hai… yaad hai na… chalo

And they left… but vat they didn't notice was a small innocent 15 years girl standing behind the pillar…

In priya's room

Priya seeing at her image in mirror… iska matlab… ma-papa chahte hi nahi the kii mai is duniya mai aao… woh toh nani ne…

Looking at her nani's pic

Priya: kyu kiya aisa nani… kyu… aur agar kiya bhi toh kyu mujhe akela chhod ke chali gayi… aapke siwa koi mujhe pyaar nahi karta… koi mujhse baat bhi nahi karta… aap hi batao kaun hai mera… aap toh chale gaye… ab Ram bhi ja rehe US… ma-papa toh mujhe pyaar bhi nahi karte… jab mai unhe ma-papa kehkar bhi nahi bula sakti toh phir ab aur kis baat ki umeed karu…

Ayesha ke liye toh shayaad mai kisi maid se jyaada nahi… aur karthik haan woh mujhse kuch kehta nahi… kyunki uske liye toh mai hoo hi nahi… woh toh aisa ignore karta hai jaise usse mere hone na hone se koi farak hi nahi parta… ab aap hi batao nani mai kya karu…

Pls nani aap aa jao na mere paas… pls yaa mujhe aapne paas bula lo… mujhe aapke saath rehna hai… pls… aap toh mujhse pyaa karte ho na… bolo na nani karte ho na… yaa phir aap bhi baki sab ki tarah…

And soon sleep took over…

Nani: Priya… Priya beta…

Priya: nani aap aa gaye… pls mujhe apne saath le chalo…

Nani: nahi beta… aise nahi kehte… aur kabhi aisa sochna bhi matt… yeh jindagi kismet se milti hai, isse jeena chahiye… tum mehnat karo, khub padhai karo… independent bano… jis tarah tum abhi tution karti ho… aage bhi karo… job karo... tumhe puri tarah se independent hona… sabko dikhana hai kii tum bhi successful ho… aur rehi baat pyaar ki, toh mai tumse pyaar karti thi aur humesha karti rehungi… beta bas apni jindagi jeete jao… dekhna koi na koi aayega jo tumse bahut pyaar karega… bus tumhe uska intezaar karna hai…

Priya: koi nahi nani… mujhe ram chahiye… vo bahut acche hai nani

Nani: job hi ho beta… koi jarur aayega meri priya se milne jo usse bahut pyaar karega…tumhe bus uska intezaar karna hai… ab mai ja rehi hu… bye beta aapna dhyan rakhna…

Priya; nani… nani…. Naniii

She woke up from her dream… flushed with sweat… looking in every corner of her room searching for her nani…

Priya: nani pls aa jao na…

Took her nani's pic she wipes her tears and says

I promise nani mai bahut padhungi… aur phir job bhi karungi… aur rehi baat us insaan ke intezaar karne ki… toh nahi nani… mai sirf ram se pyaar karti hu… aur agar woh nahi toh koi bhi nahi…

Kabhi nahi…

(Back to present)

Priya: thank you nani… aaj aapke hi kaaran mujhe ram ko dekhne ka mauka mila… aaj hi ke din 16 saal pehle maine ram ko aakhri baar dekha tha… aur aaj hi din mujhe unhe aur unke chere ki khushi ko dekhne ko mila…

Thnks you nani kii aapne ram ke chere ki muskurahat ko kam nahi hone diya… thank you…

And she drifted off to sleep taking the pic of two most imp person i.e. Ram and her nani close to her heart…

(To be continued in next part J)

Do hit "LIKE" if u like the update and also post ur comments good or bad all... they means a lot to me...

Also i have received many comments for happy updates... and as the storyline demands some more updates will be sad and emotional... so do lemme know if u all wanna me to continue with the story or stop this SS...
Edited by fan_forever - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
very heart tochng update
kya yaar duniya k saare dukh priya ko hi de diye😭
but still if ur story demands its f9
waitin' 4 d nxt one
update soon😊

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Posted: 13 years ago
what should i say .. i can't see my priya in this state yaar ..
i want her happiness soon ... love the story but i want fast updates from you ...
thank you for the update
waiting for next one ...

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