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balhfan4ever

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Posted: 13 years ago

#71

YOU ARE AWESOME !!! Thanks for continuing the FF...you write so well as if you have studied each character so closely...its like watching the continuation of BALH and exactly the way I would like the story to proceed...👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

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IndYa4u

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Posted: 13 years ago

#72

Priya_Fan - you are a great writer.. Keep'em coming..

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Priya_Fan

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Posted: 13 years ago

#73

Thank you guys! 😊

m still hiding!! (ha ha , working actually!) 😉

stopped quickly to check comments... u flatter me, ppl.. 😳

will come back to reply individually... 😊

still 11 hrs 2 go for epi!! 😭

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LalitaLahiri

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Posted: 13 years ago

#74

Loved it priya fan ! It was too awesome.

You know the best part about it? Its not over the hill or too cheesy ... its such an elegant sweet way of executing this entire sequence... I loved it. Really.

What about the morning after the big C? Please...one more chapter... today?

This was really great !

👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

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-SakshisFan-

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: lolita_lahiri

Loved it priya fan ! It was too awesome.

You know the best part about it? Its not over the hill or too cheesy ... its such an elegant sweet way of executing this entire sequence... I loved it. Really.

What about the morning after the big C? Please...one more chapter... today?

This was really great !

👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

I loved it...One brilliant writer is praising another equally brilliant writer...thats lovely...😊

Bless you both

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Etika

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Posted: 13 years ago

#76

You are Lovely, fantastic , brilliant , adorable ,sweet, cute ,awesome writer.
You potrait each and every emotion of characters so well that i have no more words for that. ;-)
And please continue it. :-P
Aur hum sab ko chodkar bhaagne ke baare main sochana bhi mat. :-D

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Priya_Fan

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Posted: 13 years ago

#77

Originally posted by: lolita_lahiri

Loved it priya fan ! It was too awesome.
Thanks!!
You know the best part about it? Its not over the hill or too cheesy ... its such an elegant sweet way of executing this entire sequence... I loved it. Really.
aww.. so I guess I achieved my goal! Thanks!!😊
What about the morning after the big C? Please...one more chapter... today?
hawww! you tempted me.. 😛 not chapter, but I wrote a scene for the next morning will post after sometime, when I get back to my lappy
This was really great !
Thank you so much!!!😊 I too like ur writting 😊
👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

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Priya_Fan

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Posted: 13 years ago

#78

Lemme pack my bags before I post next part...😛

Corner won't do this time for hiding...😳

I can hardly believe that 'I' wrote it...😲

here we go...

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Priya_Fan

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Posted: 13 years ago

#79

Next day Ram woke up first and got fresh. Priya was still asleep. He sat at corner of the bed, admiring her innocent face.

He was revisiting last two days in his mind. They were the best days and offcourse nights of his life. He didn't know which one was better. But he was amzed at Priya's various transforms.

The innocent girl with him, to whom he was trying to tell the 3 magical words..

his own gudiya, when he was telling that he has finally found her...

The longing for pure love in her eyes, when he looked up after reading her letter..

The lovely angel, who herself came into his arms..

And the next morning, anxious and shy Priya, who was running away from him all the day long..

Then, she was the new dulhan, who wanted to respond to his touch, but was still shy..

And finally, how, as the night had went on.. she transformed into a complete woman...

Priya woke up.. But she didn't want to open her eyes, as the bliss was still lingering on her senses. When she finally opened her eyes. First thing she saw was Ram's smiling face and she felt, her morning couldn't be more perfect.

She sat up on bed.

P : good morning..

Ram doesn't say anything, but continues to stare at her, smiling naughtily..

P :(the way ram is smiling is making her blush) kya hua?

R : wo kya hai na Priya.. Maine tumhare bare me jo bhi bate kahi ya sochi thi.. Unmese bahot si galat thi..

Toh mai has raha hu, ki meri ek bat toh sach nikali..

P : Kaunsi?

R : (pointing at a scar on his neck)

Yahi ki tum kitni agressive ho...

Poor Priya, who was flustered, Got up from bed and ran towards bathroom, before Ram could catch her.. And Ram sat there laughing heartily..

Ram was sitting in room, reading newspaper, and waiting for priya to come out, so that they can have breakfast. He suddenly heard a muffled scream from bathroom. He went near to door

R : (worried) priya?? Kya hua?

Priya came out, limping. Her hair, and even the dress she was wearing was slightly wet. She explained that she slipped in bathroom but she's ok.

Ram hepled her towards bed. As she was going to sit on bed, with Ram's arm still around her, her wet slipper again slipped, and both of them fell on bed..

As Ram felt her warm breath near his face , he remembered previous two occasions when he was in the same situation. He wondered how did he ever manged to get away from her.. how foolish of him!

Priya tried to get up, but his grip was firm.

P : ye kya hai?? Plz muze uthne dijiye..

R : achha.. Thik hai, toh pehale muze koi valid reason toh batao..

P : (sounding witty)

ek toh abhi waiter ata hoga breakfast leke,

Dusra aaj monday hai, apko office jakar kam pura karna hai..

Aur tisara, abhi NY ka'museum of modern art' dekhna baki hai, rat ko nikalne se pehale hame waha jana hai...

Ram (in victorious voice):

koi bat nahi...

Ek toh darwaje pe 'do not disturb' ka tag hai..

Dusra, mai company ka malik hu, muze kam karna nai karwana hota hai, wo manage ho jayega..

Aur rahi bat museum ki, woh ham bad me jayenge.. Are.. Mr. & Mrs. Kapoor apne 2nd.. Well actually.. first honeymoon pe aaye hai toh tisre din thode hi wapas jayenge??

To this, our witty Priya had no retort.. And even if she did have.. It was pointless..

Beacause...you see.. For talking, you need your lips free...! 😉

Edited by Priya_Fan - 13 years ago