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Shivani Priyam Kumar

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Posted: 11 years ago

Okay so here is another helping of my freshly cooked matarrr palao(mind the r)!! It basically is an idea so I might as well stop in case I do not get a clear cut verdict on the same. The entire credit for provoking me and making me write such stuff goes entirely to Shanaya!!

The genre is paranormal/psychological(not pretty sure as I haven't zeroed down on one as of now). Hopefully you'd like a different take on take on the known characters.

P.S. I know I have to update SD and that I've happily tested the patience of too many but please bear with me. I still am working on that.

P.P.S. It is still in its infancy hence all those who would really like to read and post a review do continue as it would save both your and my time.

P.P.P.S. If you want a PM; buddy me!

Scroll below for the prologue!

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Posted: 11 years ago

For character sketch and index!!

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Posted: 11 years ago

Res..😉/Unres!!!! Yes..Me First!!! Lungi Dance Lungi Dance Lungi Dance..😛😃 Im Here..Swaagat Nahi Karoge Humara..😉 Thankk Youu Sooo Muchh for finally posting it!!! I dont know for how long I was waiting for it!!! 😃😃 Finally..I will get read sum stuff on my favorites apart from the Pathetic Stories And Writers of You Know What Jodis..😉 And thank you for giving the credit to me thats real sweet of ya..❤️❤️ I provoked u to write on them but the concept was entirely yours yaar..😊 Anywayz..Coming back to the prolouge..!!! You described each and every minute Movements of a Ballet Dancer..Beautifully!! It was actually like watching Avi perform right in front of my eyes..I sooo lovee her..❤️❤️ And heck! She is so tensed about her performance.. But then its worth the tension!! And what was that in the end?? I left me goosebumps re..😲😲 Update Jaldi Jaldi..!!! Me Very Excited to read further yaar!!! You know Why..😉😃 Thanxx fr pm..Continuee Soonz!!

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laila

@laila1994

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Posted: 11 years ago

unres...

Prologue seems really interesting.

Girl's nervousness, tiredness, anxiety...everything was written beautifully.

Also this update reminded me of black swan movie😳

I will follow this story just coz of two reasons first it is paranormal/psychological story & second, coz it's written by you😃

PS. Thanks Shanaya for forcing this lazy lady to write this story.😊

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BitterBerry

@BitterBerry

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Posted: 11 years ago

That was fantastic Shivani😃
the way you have portrayed every feeling of the woman was brilliant 👍🏼.
Specially the feeling when you are not satisfied with a thing what others see is the best in you.

Well you couldnt trust me as reader as I can ditch you anytime with the story. Still I am reading as the genres are my fav, paranormal and thriller 😉!
Sorry for that in advance 😔!

Thanks for the PM and Do continue yeah!

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-TomNJerry-

@-TomNJerry-

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Posted: 11 years ago

wow, what a brilliant start! 👏 ... like I was reading pages off a book

loved the pace, setting and the flow ... totally gripping ... your writing is so fluent
the choice of words brings your writing alive!

you have so well captured ... Avantika's anxiety, excitement, nervousness, happiness and fear all coupled together as she prepares to hold up on the stage ... living her lifelong dream in front of 20 000 odd people

her trance is broken as a mystery caller calls ... his/her lines seem to be conveying a lot ... guess we will have to wait and see how much the words actually weigh out ...

but aaah, the entry of this hooded monster ... is like her darkest nightmare come true
already feeling sad ... for hers is going to be an abridged forgotten tale forever!!!

I donno if Avantika Kapoor is totally fictitious or there is some character relevance! ... haven't ever watch Arjun so donno ...

but please keep writing, Selfie ... I'd love to read more!! 🤗

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HawasKePujari

@Phir_Mohabbat

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Posted: 11 years ago

Interesting... very interesting

YOU ARE BACK !!!!

Please now isko thik se update krna meri maa... dnt leave it hanging in middle

I need dictionary update to praise your writing. though its impossible to guess yet doing it...hopefully etf will come in next update to solve case.

update soon

PS misshumptydumpty here ??!!!!

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kunchu

@kunchu

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Posted: 11 years ago

There you start it

wah kya start hai

the way you have detailed the bale with all those emotional conflicts... just wow

and Avanitka.. Well I am already loking forward for it, you know why

the climax... what was that??

jaldi update karo, esp SD

waiting waiting

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Shivani Priyam Kumar

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: Bubbly_Shanaya
Res..😉/Unres!!!! Yes..Me First!!! Lungi Dance Lungi Dance Lungi Dance..😛😃 Im Here..Swaagat Nahi Karoge Humara..😉 Thankk Youu Sooo Muchh for finally posting it!!! I dont know for how long I was waiting for it!!! 😃😃 Finally..I will get read sum stuff on my favorites apart from the Pathetic Stories And Writers of You Know What Jodis..😉 And thank you for giving the credit to me thats real sweet of ya..❤️❤️ I provoked u to write on them but the concept was entirely yours yaar..😊 Anywayz..Coming back to the prolouge..!!! You described each and every minute Movements of a Ballet Dancer..Beautifully!! It was actually like watching Avi perform right in front of my eyes..I sooo lovee her..❤️❤️ And heck! She is so tensed about her performance.. But then its worth the tension!! And what was that in the end?? I left me goosebumps re..😲😲 Update Jaldi Jaldi..!!! Me Very Excited to read further yaar!!! You know Why..😉😃 Thanxx fr pm..Continuee Soonz!!

Welcome shelcome ji!!! Aur bataiye kya haal chaal??

Arre yes...I had to write it...afterall your wish my command; nahi??😉😉 and I get it that you are pissed but be thoda soft!!

Ballet was at one point of time my passion but then I discovered it was too stiff and i switched to kathak instead! Glad i made the switch for kathak is way more cool than ballet; still its a beautiful dance form!

Sure enough! Chapter one is underway!!

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