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Posted: 12 years ago
#81
My challenge :

Write a story on Rathod n his wife , not Aisha or Riya plz... U can use any other girl's name (apna naam lene m sharam aa rahi h mujhe 😳 )
how they fell in love...d sweet memories of that time... Bt sm tragic situation made them go apart from each other...but they still love each other ... Finally after some sacrifices from both side...they overcome d circumstances... An emotional meet... N start their life once again...
Now u decide what d situation was which gave them so much of pain...whether its d same evil sikander or somethong very diff thing...


Love youuu kunchuuu di...
Muaahhh... :-) :-) :-)


Hope i dint trouble u much... If i did then u cn leave this story... No pressure...
Mai achchhi sissy hu na ;-) :-)
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Posted: 12 years ago
#82
All d best di...
grt challenges !!!
Edited by Payal_156 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#83
Questions fr today di
1. ur reaction i tell u i hate u
other dan upset
2. wat if i tell u i leave af
3. what if u becum finance minister
4. wat if u becum education minister
5. wat if i tell u r beautiful other dan happy reaction
6. wat if i tell u dat u r a very brilliant writer
7. wat u lyk most abt me
8. wat u hate abt me
9. candlelight or beach
10. wat u cook fr me nw..!!!! ???
i hv a insurance dnt wry rofl di
phew done
hws it ??
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Posted: 12 years ago
#84

Originally posted by: Fiza28

CONGRATS HELEN HUGS ME VERY HAPPY ENJOY THE GRILLS

I HAVE A CHALLENGE FOR U HEHE

OK ITS ON ME N MY ROWDY RATHORE N ALL MY FFS SAM IS ALWAYS ANGERY N JEALOUS I WANT DIFFRENT OS

HOT ROMANTIC VERY LOVEY DOVEY HEHE
AND WANT A RAIN SCENE AND THIS IS AFTER MARRIAGE

CANT WAIT HEHE SUPRISES ME N HAAN I WANT IT TO HAVE A TWIST HATKE OS šŸ˜†

WILL SEND U GRILLS LATER BYEE HUGS CONGRATS AGAIN



THIS ONE FOR YOU FIZA.. HOPE YOU ENJOY IT...

The sunrays hit her face. It was a beautiful morning. She closed her eyes and tried to reach out at the other end of the bed. It was empty. She opened her eyes and searched the room. He was not there. She got up and went to the balcony, washroom and the whole house. He was not there. She came back to the room and saw a note at the side table. "good morning jaan… urgent kaam agaya. C u later. Love… Sam"

She was upset. "not today please…" she was upset with the note. Was upset with him. At least he could have called her up and told it. after all its their first wedding anniversary today. And she missed him. "jao apne kaam pe… aaj baath bhi nahi karungi mien apse…" she said pouting he face.

She went to the washroom to brush her teeth. On the mirror was a sticky note. She pulled it out. "naraz ho?? please smile for me…" and below it was a hand drawn smiley. She saw it and smiled looking at the mirror. Then she saw the reflection of a note behind her. She turned and took it off. It read, "that's my girl. Keep smiling. Sam"

She gets ready after a bath and came to her wardrobe. A white shirt and a black denim stood a bit separate from all other dress. Maybe he had selected it for her. She wore it, had a small breakfast and was ready to go to her job. She stood by a big portrait of her wedding. "happy wedding anniversary Sam… I miss you!!"

She reached her work place and went to her cabin. The fashion show that was coming up, was eating up her brains. There were a lot of work to do and she was with a huge responsibility. She was looking at her mobile once in a while to check if there is any call or message. But none came. "agar aap ziddi hai, tho mien bhi hu. I wont call you."

But within a few minutes she was fed up and she dialed his number but it went to the voice message. "hi this is Sameer Rathod. Please leave a message"

She cut the call and mocked the line making faces. She started calling him in every few minutes and the result was same. Its almost afternoon and she was really pissed off. "where the hell is he?? Aaj wish karna tho dur ki baath hai, ek bar baath bhi nahi kiya mujhse…" she was worried too, so she decided to call the office.

"hello… ETF…" a chirpy voice came on the other end.

"hai, Riya its me"

"hey Fiza, how are you?"

"fine yaar!! Wo.. mien… Sam kaha hai?"

"Rathod Sir?? Aaj sabere thak yahi the. Patha nahi dopahar ke bad kaha gaye hai? uss Akdu Rawte ko hamare dimaag khane ko choda hai.. kash Rathod sir yaha hothe.."

She smiles at her words. "so wo waha nahi hai!! any idea wo kaha gaya hai?"

"nahi Fiz… no idea.. oh God Akdu aarahe hai.. anything else??"

"nahi Ri… any way all the best with your akdu…"

"thanks Fiz… I really need it… luck.. see you later" Riya cuts the call and she could hear Arjun's long "RIYA!!" call at the other end before the line went off. "bechari Ri… lekin ab Sam kaha gaye? Wo bhi kisiko bina bathaye??"

She was worried and upset. After 5 pm, she left her office and reached back home. Still he was not there. She had called almost 30 times now and was in vain. She reached her bedroom and fell on to her bed and closed her eyes. "kaha ho tum SAM??"

Her mobile beeped showing a message. She jolts up. "missing me??" it said.

She was so angry now. "WHERE R U???" she messaged back.

"bapre ithne gussa"

"come here NOW!!"

"sorry busy…"

"WHAT?? I SAID NOW!!!"

" get up"

"WHAT???"

"get up jaan… go to your wardrobe."

She rolls her eyes and walks to the wardrobe. There was a gift packet over there. She could swear it was not there in the morning. That means he came home when she was not at home??

She takes the packet to the bed and opens it. her eyes showed how happy she was… it was a beautiful red saree… with silver works at the border... not too heavy.. simple but yet elegant. And there was a note. "be ready by 8… Sam"

She hugs the saree and gets looks at the clock. There was still 2 hours.

After 2 hours she was in that beautiful saree and was waiting for him. But he was late. She kept on waiting. After half an hour… another message came. "Bored…??"

"no.. kaha ho aap?" she replied.

"sorry… sit in the car, driver will take u to me."

"but I want to come with u Sam"

"sorry jaan… please…"

She looks ahead and finds the driver waiting for her. She closes the door and sits in the car. "hum kaha ja rahe hai bhaiya??"

"just wait for a while mam. Hum bohot jald pohonchege." Saying that he started the car. She could feel light moist in her eyes. They reached a spot and the car stopped.

"Saab ne kaha hai ke aapko yahi chod du. Yaha se aage jayiye. Baki apko patha chalega…"

"but…"

"mujhe bas ithna hi patha hai madam"

"ok" she says and walks ahead. Then she saw a beautiful garden… it was dimly lighted. A smile came her lips. But there was no one there. She looks around and suddenly she feels a hand around her waist. She shivers a bit at the touch and then closes her eyes. She knew the touch well. There was his breath on her neck.

"naraz ho??" came his husky voice. She nods yes.

"mafi milege?" she nods no.

"please… what can I do to make it up??" she was smiling inwardly and acted angry. She jerked his hands and tried to move ahead. But he was so fast.

He turns her to him and holds her waist again and this time her facing him. If looks could kill, she would be dead soon. There was a lot of passion in those eyes. She lowered her eyes, unable to stand it.

Kuch na kahe, bus chup rahe
Khamoshiyaan he keh jaaye

His free hand came and pushed her hair behind her ears there by leaving her neck free. He came forward and kissed her neck and moved slowly to the cheeks and then her lips.

Tham jaye ye jahaan
Or pal b thehar jaye



her eyes were closed. He left her and looked to her face, cupping her face. "look at me Fiza…"

She opens her eyes. There was a slight moist in her eyes. He kept looking at it…

Rahe na kuch b darmiyaan
Mite ye sari duriyaan
Milke b hai adhoori si ye dastaan…
Rahe na kuch b darmiyaan


A small rain came in wiping her tears for him. They were lost in each other's eyes. He slowly guided her hands to his shoulder and he held tightly to her too. He moved slowly taking her along with him.

They swayed in the rain, without saying a word, just looking at the eyes.

Mite ye sari duriyaan… x2
Milke b hai adhoori si ye dastaan
Rehke b sang hai juda
Bhulega na kabhi jahan
Hai ye alag he dastaan

He went closer to her and kissed her forehead, then her eyes, and her nose…

He placed his forehead near to hers. "Happy anniversary jaan… sorry I couldn't make it special for you… but mien…" she close his mouth.

"its ok Sam… you already made it special for me… thank you… an I love you… for everything you are for me…"

He smiles at her. "so mafi milgaye mujhe?" he was having a naughty face. She nods no.

"its ok jaan… mujhe path hai ke mujhe kya karna hai…" she raises her eyebrows. He winks at her and the scoops her up in his arms. "mafi maangane ka mera ek thareeka hai… abhi samjhatha hu…"

She knew what was coming up and she hid her face in his chest. And he carries her off to the pent house…

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Posted: 12 years ago
#85

Originally posted by: kunchu


THIS ONE FOR YOU FIZA.. HOPE YOU ENJOY IT...

The sunrays hit her face. It was a beautiful morning. She closed her eyes and tried to reach out at the other end of the bed. It was empty. She opened her eyes and searched the room. He was not there. She got up and went to the balcony, washroom and the whole house. He was not there. She came back to the room and saw a note at the side table. "good morning jaan' urgent kaam agaya. C u later. Love' Sam"

She was upset. "not today please'" she was upset with the note. Was upset with him. At least he could have called her up and told it. after all its their first wedding anniversary today. And she missed him. "jao apne kaam pe' aaj baath bhi nahi karungi mien apse'" she said pouting he face.

She went to the washroom to brush her teeth. On the mirror was a sticky note. She pulled it out. "naraz ho?? please smile for me'" and below it was a hand drawn smiley. She saw it and smiled looking at the mirror. Then she saw the reflection of a note behind her. She turned and took it off. It read, "that's my girl. Keep smiling. Sam"

She gets ready after a bath and came to her wardrobe. A white shirt and a black denim stood a bit separate from all other dress. Maybe he had selected it for her. She wore it, had a small breakfast and was ready to go to her job. She stood by a big portrait of her wedding. "happy wedding anniversary Sam' I miss you!!"

She reached her work place and went to her cabin. The fashion show that was coming up, was eating up her brains. There were a lot of work to do and she was with a huge responsibility. She was looking at her mobile once in a while to check if there is any call or message. But none came. "agar aap ziddi hai, tho mien bhi hu. I wont call you."

But within a few minutes she was fed up and she dialed his number but it went to the voice message. "hi this is Sameer Rathod. Please leave a message"

She cut the call and mocked the line making faces. She started calling him in every few minutes and the result was same. Its almost afternoon and she was really pissed off. "where the hell is he?? Aaj wish karna tho dur ki baath hai, ek bar baath bhi nahi kiya mujhse'" she was worried too, so she decided to call the office.

"hello' ETF'" a chirpy voice came on the other end.

"hai, Riya its me"

"hey Fiza, how are you?"

"fine yaar!! Wo.. mien' Sam kaha hai?"

"Rathod Sir?? Aaj sabere thak yahi the. Patha nahi dopahar ke bad kaha gaye hai? uss Akdu Rawte ko hamare dimaag khane ko choda hai.. kash Rathod sir yaha hothe.."

She smiles at her words. "so wo waha nahi hai!! any idea wo kaha gaya hai?"

"nahi Fiz' no idea.. oh God Akdu aarahe hai.. anything else??"

"nahi Ri' any way all the best with your akdu'"

"thanks Fiz' I really need it' luck.. see you later" Riya cuts the call and she could hear Arjun's long "RIYA!!" call at the other end before the line went off. "bechari Ri' lekin ab Sam kaha gaye? Wo bhi kisiko bina bathaye??"

She was worried and upset. After 5 pm, she left her office and reached back home. Still he was not there. She had called almost 30 times now and was in vain. She reached her bedroom and fell on to her bed and closed her eyes. "kaha ho tum SAM??"

Her mobile beeped showing a message. She jolts up. "missing me??" it said.

She was so angry now. "WHERE R U???" she messaged back.

"bapre ithne gussa"

"come here NOW!!"

"sorry busy'"

"WHAT?? I SAID NOW!!!"

" get up"

"WHAT???"

"get up jaan' go to your wardrobe."

She rolls her eyes and walks to the wardrobe. There was a gift packet over there. She could swear it was not there in the morning. That means he came home when she was not at home??

She takes the packet to the bed and opens it. her eyes showed how happy she was' it was a beautiful red saree' with silver works at the border... not too heavy.. simple but yet elegant. And there was a note. "be ready by 8' Sam"

She hugs the saree and gets looks at the clock. There was still 2 hours.

After 2 hours she was in that beautiful saree and was waiting for him. But he was late. She kept on waiting. After half an hour' another message came. "Bored'??"

"no.. kaha ho aap?" she replied.

"sorry' sit in the car, driver will take u to me."

"but I want to come with u Sam"

"sorry jaan' please'"

She looks ahead and finds the driver waiting for her. She closes the door and sits in the car. "hum kaha ja rahe hai bhaiya??"

"just wait for a while mam. Hum bohot jald pohonchege." Saying that he started the car. She could feel light moist in her eyes. They reached a spot and the car stopped.

"Saab ne kaha hai ke aapko yahi chod du. Yaha se aage jayiye. Baki apko patha chalega'"

"but'"

"mujhe bas ithna hi patha hai madam"

"ok" she says and walks ahead. Then she saw a beautiful garden' it was dimly lighted. A smile came her lips. But there was no one there. She looks around and suddenly she feels a hand around her waist. She shivers a bit at the touch and then closes her eyes. She knew the touch well. There was his breath on her neck.

"naraz ho??" came his husky voice. She nods yes.

"mafi milege?" she nods no.

"please' what can I do to make it up??" she was smiling inwardly and acted angry. She jerked his hands and tried to move ahead. But he was so fast.

He turns her to him and holds her waist again and this time her facing him. If looks could kill, she would be dead soon. There was a lot of passion in those eyes. She lowered her eyes, unable to stand it.

Kuch na kahe, bus chup rahe
Khamoshiyaan he keh jaaye

His free hand came and pushed her hair behind her ears there by leaving her neck free. He came forward and kissed her neck and moved slowly to the cheeks and then her lips.

Tham jaye ye jahaan
Or pal b thehar jaye



her eyes were closed. He left her and looked to her face, cupping her face. "look at me Fiza'"

She opens her eyes. There was a slight moist in her eyes. He kept looking at it'

Rahe na kuch b darmiyaan
Mite ye sari duriyaan
Milke b hai adhoori si ye dastaan'
Rahe na kuch b darmiyaan


A small rain came in wiping her tears for him. They were lost in each other's eyes. He slowly guided her hands to his shoulder and he held tightly to her too. He moved slowly taking her along with him.

They swayed in the rain, without saying a word, just looking at the eyes.

Mite ye sari duriyaan' x2
Milke b hai adhoori si ye dastaan
Rehke b sang hai juda
Bhulega na kabhi jahan
Hai ye alag he dastaan

He went closer to her and kissed her forehead, then her eyes, and her nose'

He placed his forehead near to hers. "Happy anniversary jaan' sorry I couldn't make it special for you' but mien'" she close his mouth.

"its ok Sam' you already made it special for me' thank you' an I love you' for everything you are for me'"

He smiles at her. "so mafi milgaye mujhe?" he was having a naughty face. She nods no.

"its ok jaan' mujhe path hai ke mujhe kya karna hai'" she raises her eyebrows. He winks at her and the scoops her up in his arms. "mafi maangane ka mera ek thareeka hai' abhi samjhatha hu'"

She knew what was coming up and she hid her face in his chest. And he carries her off to the pent house'


Helen sweets

hayee the end i was like


just loved everything really enjoyed it to bits

mera yeh ETF chief

ACP Sameer Dhamsingh Rathore

god sirf kaam aaj ki din off nahi le sak ke?šŸ˜”šŸ˜†

but reaaly itna sweet romantic tha

the lil notes sachi yaar

love them my fav note was the bathroom smile

i thought for a sec that sam was driver šŸ˜†

i was wrong
btw what song was it ?
darmiyaan from jodi breakers ? or bahoon ki darmiyaan?
n e ways over all
madam challenge may pass hui 😳

hugs thanks again
amazing writer ho tum
well desevered this weeks wotw šŸ‘

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Posted: 12 years ago
#86

Originally posted by: vidya.anand


7) my challenge for u...write a OS in max 300 words...Make Arjun propose to Aisha before the entire ETF team surprising them or rather shocking them!
[I know i am being naughty here and trapping u...but thats the challenge na? so go on...am waiting!]


first of all sorry that I am increasing the word limit given by you.. couldn't stop myself from writing this one!! SORRY CHECHI...!!!

"WTH RAWTE?? How could you say all those to Aisha?Do dinse tum lapatha ho,na koi khabar ha aur na patha.Do you have any idea how tensed we were?Aur Aisha, wo tho pagal hogaye the tumhe dhoondke. aur aaj jab wo tumhare chot pe bandage lagane ayetho, kya kya keh diya tune?insensitivity ke had hothe hai, and you crossed your limits today" Rathod was so angry and he left banging the door behind him along with the team.

Arjun was just shocked. yes indeed he crossed his limits today. for 2 days he was behind Raghav and he was that close to him,and had he missed him.when he reached back,he had seen the concerned face of his team especially Aisha's.she had come to put bandage on the deep cut on his right palm, that he lost all his control. "kya kar rahe ho tum Aisha?mujhe kisike humdardi ke zaroorath nahi hai.ab ye jhoote act chodo aur chale jao mere zindagi se." he had given out all his frustration on her and for the first time he saw moist in her eyes.she had walked out of his cabin silently and he knew it was a silence before the storm.

He looks at his hand from which blood was still dripping.he could see the concerned eyes of Aisha infront of him.he closes his eyes and runs his hands through his hair.he takes his keys and walks out to the SUV.

He have lost his Roshni and Riya. yes he did recognize the feeling in Riya's eyes before but had tried to shut it down. and he himself had closed those eyes forever on the day in the hospital bed. But he couldn't ignore Aisha's eyes. it had spoken a lot in the very few days.and this time he wont ignore it for anything. it was raining heavily as if the nature itself was angry on him.he knew where she would be,he had seen her there before.

Sree rushes to Rathod informing Arjun's departure.he felt something was going in the wrong track so he asked to put Arjun's phone in trace and followed him.

At last Arjun reached the place,that was once Aisha's home. and there she was sitting in the small garden soaked in rain. he could read from far away that she was crying. he moved close to her and sat on his knees by her. she didn't even notice it. he placed his hands on her shoulder. She got up with a jerk."Sir...aap yaha kyu aye ho? aur kuch baki reh gaya tha kehne?tho please bathao aur mujhe akele chodo please." She cried out.

He was numb at her voice. He put his hand forward and cupped her face. She was crying so hard that she didn't even notice it. "Aisha,mere tharaf dekho please"

She looks at him with red eyes. both of them were soaked in rain but could understand the paths taken by the tears. "I'm sorry Aisha, I really am sorry.patha nahi ke mujhe kya hogaya tha, I just lost my control on you.please mujhe maaf kardo."

"do you have any idea sir ke mien kis halme the?I was almost dead worried about you"

"please mauth ko hamare beech me ane math do Aisha, I have already gone through it twice. (she looks surprised)ek bar jab meine apne pyaar ko khoya tha, aur ek bar jab ek pyar ne mujhe khoya tha.lekin ab nahi.is bar na mien aur na mere pyar ko khone dunga mien."

"aap kehna kya chahthe ho sir?"

"patha nahi kabse is dil me basi ho tum.chahke bhi bhula nahi paraha hu mien. Ab aur nahi Aisha.kya tum mere is adhure zindagi ke hissa banoge?"

She looks at him with joy and surprise.somewhere in the flowing rain he could see her blushing and her smile. He got his answer.he holds her face in his hands and kissed her forehead. And then he hugs her tightly while she hides her face in his chest.they were one now, after a run of driving alone, at last Arjun got a partner.

A few feet away from them was the ETF team, soaked in rain with a big shock on their face. All except Rathod had never thought that they would witness such a day!!!

Edited by kunchu - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#87
Awesome!
word count increase cheiythaalum, i am fine with it...thanks!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#88
Awesum wrk di
loved it
di u hv every right on me!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#89
Hey Helna, by the number of pages I guess some serious grilling is going on :D I will read it all today night hopefully.

Now that I am here, I am not empty hand, I have also a task to attribute . OS on the spot ;)
This one is my one of my all time favorite concept, if any problem please let me knw:

ONE SHOT:
Riya loves Arjun but could never confess, now Ayesha joined ETF too. Riya notices the clashes between them and how Arjun gets impressed by Ayesha sometimes but he considers Ayesha nothing more than a friend. Riya feels like she is no where suited to Arjun and tries to stay away from him, but Arjun doesn't like her ignoring him so he confronts her and a confession.

Quite a long concept you can use it the way you like as in add some background or future but respecting the concept.

Will be waiting for the ONE SHOT from you, whenever you can. :D

Luv u<333
Kashish
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Posted: 12 years ago
#90
Last chalenge frm my side di
hatrick yay
os on arjun n her mother relationship on sng maa frm tzp par
wanna cry a lot di
take ur tym
hws it ??

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