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Posted: 12 years ago

#11

Wonderful!!!! Please keep writng more!!!

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573339

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Posted: 12 years ago

#12

this was such an awesome OS :) loved

sweet and emotional

loved the song in the end :)

hope you write more OS like this :)

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Sreeparna

@Mellifluous

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Posted: 12 years ago

#13

Misti 🤗 its your first attempt & I would say write more &"more.

It was so sweet ,short & simple but yet had a meaningfull truth of life..the initial line was very heart touching & true also 👏 👏

the tragic death of Roshni & merely tragic life for Arjun is realy heartfelt.

Pleaseee dont stop it here you can continue it right & I know you are a good writer..please do proceed 😛

The song at the end creats it magic on this os..its so beautiful 😊

Great piece of writing..loved the idea 🤗 🤗

P.S. I wanna ask one thing Arni is your favorite na??

Edited by -sree13- - 12 years ago

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JeeLeZaraa

@JeeLeZaraa

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

It was great 😊 Good job with the starting 👍🏼

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vidya.anand

@vidya.anand

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

Nice start dear...a new angle to Roshni's death...different and unique

this death is even more cruel...She died saving Arjun from it...as they say, death is painful but its even more painful for the other person who survives and lives with that vacuum in their life...

Tujhe kyun dekha na tujhe kyun jaana na
Shikaayatein karu ya nahi
Thami hai yeh saansein, pari hai yeh aankhein
Sahu kaise abb yeh faasala

lovely lines...and amazing song...love it!

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pravallika

@prava55663

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

pari..it was awesome..

And i so agree with you dear..

specially the initial lines of the poem...

The way you made it visible in the story..

Arjun saved by Roshni...

Roshni death..so sad...

Akela reh gaya Arjun...

Awesome🤗

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debu

@shuruli

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

Awww dear wat an emotional os after reading had tears in my eyes 😭 Sachi mein jo insaan sabki khushi chahta hai wahi hamesha akela reh jata hai Roshni died in the blast 😕 Really an heart touching os u write really well yaar...realy luvd reading it keep up ur amazing work would lyk to read more from u 😳
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