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Posted: 12 years ago
#51
nice...
continue soon...😊
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Storyline

they say that everyone has secrets. in a way that is true. our past is a secret which is known to us, our future is a secret which is known by no one. so this a story which involves our ETF- Emergency Task Force. Etf has been formed for 3 years. everyone has faith and trust in each other. but a case will make them face their past and test that faith. A secret will lead them face to face in what will be the toughest challenge they will ever face. so will this challenge strenghten or break the Etf. will a quest of justice for roshni will lead to a battle of survival for arjun and the team.
Acp Arjun rawte- our favourite super cop
Acp sameer rathore- etf chief
shreekant sen- technical expert
chotu- muscle man
aisha- ammunition expert
Lisa- forensic expert
sakshi- investigative jounalist
sonia- villian or helper?
karan- good or bad?
okay guys, now please comment or hit the like button. and anyone wondering whether i changed the story well wait and find out. i will post the first chapter by tomorrow. pakka.
Edited by abjeya - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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okay guys here is the first part of this ss or ff. i have'nt decided. i know that u want to kill me so hope that this part appeases u.

Chapter 1

Dr Dixit was contemplating his life. He had always felt that it was his duty to help people become from abnormal to normal and according to his patients he has done it successfully. But if someone asked him what was the most regretful thing he had done then he would have told that person the thing he regretted doing. But alas in front of society he was the perfect person. He looked at the photo of his family "I know that what I am going to do will hurt all of you but I know also that this is the only way to get the message across to them. This is the only way I can help that girl. I am sorry. Please forgive me." And he died.

Shree was busy installing some programmes into his computer when chotu suddenly barged in. chotu : shree, tu busy hai (are u busy?). Shree got irritated and said " nahi, mai toh khali timepass kar raha hu( no I am just doing timepass)." chotu : tho please mere liye ek kaam karoge ( then,please do something for me?). Shree beat his forehead and said "chotu tujhe dikh nahi raha hai ki mai kya kar raha hu(chotu, don't u see what I am doing)." Chotu : shree,agar tu busy hai toh sidhe,sidhe bold ho na. yu arjun sir ki tarah bata me mat uljhao.( shree, if u are busy, then tell me straight away don't tell me like arjun sir tells in puzzles). Shree was surprised. Chotu never got angry with anyone well excluding criminals. Shree : kya baat hai chotu tu itna irritate kyu ho raha hai(what happened chotu,why are u so irritated?). Me toh bas mazzak kar raha tha(I was just joking). Chotu realized that he hurt shree with his words. Chotu : sorry shree, kuch zyada hi bol gaya(sorry shree, I said too much) Aisha and lisa who had entered at that time heard chotu's sorry. Aisha : chotu,kya hua shree ko sorry kyu bol rahe ho( chotu what happened?. Why are u saying sorry to shree). Chotu said in a small voice " voh maine shree par chillaya na( I scolded shree). lisa : tum aur specky par chillau? Matlab specky ne hi kuch kiya hoga? Kya kiya tumne specky?( u and scolded shree. That means specky only did something. what did u do specky) Shree: lisa tu chup baith. Maine kuch nahi kiya aur chotu tu sorry kyu bol raha hai. Tujhe yaada na rule kya hai dosti ka ' no sorry,no thank you. Ab chal gale lag ja. ( lisa u keep quit I did'nt do anything and chotu why are u saying sorry. U know that the rule in friendship is 'no sorry,no thank you'.Chotu and shree hugged each other. "awww" they broke the hug to see sakshi standing with camera which captured their picture. Sakshi started singing " jaane,jaane kyu dil jaanta hai. Tu hai to I will be alright". Everyone closed their ears. Shree : sakshi,gaana band kar. Tu sachem bohut bakwaas gaati hai.(sakshi stop singing. U sing really badly.) Sakshi stopped singing and was going to scold shree when sameer entered and said " guys,we have got a case." And everyone left with sakshi signaling to shree that she will take care of him later.

They reached dr dixit house. Dr dixit's body was found in his study by his servant who broke down the door when he was not answering. When they reached the crime scene they saw that arjun had already reached before them. He was examining the crime scene. Seeing sameer giving glares to both of them shree whispered to chotu and sakshi " hope aaj dono ka mood thik ho varna hum sab ki kher nahi." ( hope both of their moods are okay otherwise we are so dead)Lisa whispered " don't worry specky. Ye dono tumhe kacha nahi chabayengi balki roast karke khayenge"(these two won't eat u raw but they will first roast you them eat u). Shree : you do know ki mujhe tumhare sense of humour bilkul pasand nahi hai.( u do know ki I don't like your sense of humour.) Lisa : ha specky, jaanti hu lekin mujhe tumhe irritate karne me maja aata hai.( yes specky I know, but I love to irritate you a lot.) Before shree could say anything she went away to examine our body. Sighning frustratedly he went to give the details to arjun and sameer but sakshi had already briefed them. Sakshi : Dr dixit ek jaane mane psychiatrist the. he helped a lot of peole with his therapy and many of his therapy work was actually beneficial in helping people overcome their mental problems. Arjun : Lisa?. Lisa : death looks natural to me but I have to go to the lab to do the thorough postmortem of the body. Suddenly arjun noticed that Dr Dixit's right finger was pointing towards something. He saw that it pointed towards the painting. He went towards the painting and removed it. Not so surprisingly there was a safe behind the painting. But what safe contained will now lead the Etf to the on a path which even they could'nt contemplate. No not even arjun contemplated that this would now change his life and the life around him forever.

so please comment or hit the like button. i am waiting.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#54
hey nice cs...!!
and interesting start...!!!
choree aisha liza and sakshi scenes were lovely...!!!!
but whats in that safe? fultu mystery hai...!!!!
did you change the storyline kya? or is it the same?
continue soon...!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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WOW!! Amazing update!! Does this story have Ariya??
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Posted: 12 years ago
#56
nice update
full of mystery
cont soon

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Posted: 12 years ago
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okay guys, i know that after a long time i am posting it but now i will try to post on a weekly basis. but right now i really need your help. i don't know whom should i cast as chotu's love interest and rathore's younger brother. so i am open to suggestions regarding this ff and hoping to see them soon.

Chapter 2

The safe was empty. Arjun did'nt looked surprised. They again checked the crime scene and then went back to office.they started investigating the case. Lisa found out that the cardiac arrest was drug induced. Further investigation revealed that Dr dixit son-in-law had some debts but Dr Dixit refused to pay him the money. they had a big argument regarding this fact also. They bought the son-in-law for interrogation. But the son-in-law told that although they had a big argument regarding his fact but in the end Dr Dixit did help him but with the condition that he would make his investments next time. The son-in-law broke down and said " he was a really sweet person. He is more like a father to me than my father-in-law. He was a person who would always help anyone without any thought himself. Maybe that is why that guy killed him. Arjun : what guy?. Son-in-law: I did'nt see his face properly but I remember the argument that took place. It was 2 days before his death and in the house. The guy was telling him to keep his mouth shut but Dr Dixit said that now he is no longer afraid of them. That he will ensure that she will get justice. Sameer : justice? Who has to get justice?. Son-in-law: I have got no idea. But u should check his study again. U might get something over there. Because I saw one of the bills which showed that he had ordered another safe. But I never saw any sign of it. they then left the Son-in-law as he had a rock solid alibi. They went back to crime scene and again checked the study. This time they found a safe under the table. The safe contained a file,some documents and a letter to the ETF. They took all this back to the office. Sameer took the letter that is meant for the ETF and called shree,chotu,lisa,aisha,sakshi and arjun to the conference room. Sameer : this letter is for the ETF members. This means it includes each and everyone of us. He told to shree to read the letter.

Shree started reading it :

Respected Etf members,

I have a heard and a read a lot of your cases and I must say that u have really helped in trying to prove that although there is something bad is happening but in the end justice will prevail. People usually said that I was the best in the field but I used to just brush it off modestly. The one thing that I was proud of was my principles. That I will never harm any innocent person no matter what will happen. But alas, a day came when I had to break this very principle of mine. I cannot say much because if I do ,my family will be put in danger. But I can tell u this. That I had to give a person shock treatment for three days just to make her lose her memory permeanently. If I had'nt done this then they would have killed my family. I can still remember his face very clearly. When I was going to stop and tell them to kill me that person told me to give her the shock so that my family will be safe. He told me that my family's life is important more than her life. I had to agree. But that the person knew I think that her loved one's will find him in the end. I am myself not sure about this. This letter may come to you in the time of my death. If I am still alive and this letter is in your hands then please find that person. I am forever felt guility about what I have done. If I am dead then god will decide my punishment but if I am alive then I will face jail with the assurance that I was able to bring her back safely.

Yours sincerely,

Dr Dixit.

Everyone was silent hearing what the letter said. Sakshi finally asked " so is it a boy or a girl?". Arjun replied which brought a shock to everyone.

hope u liked it. please comment or hit the like button.

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Posted: 12 years ago
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interesting...loved it!!
lizzzaa...😡😡
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice update
shock treatment for 3 days continuously
memory loss permanently?😲 omg
i think arjun got it who she is & that criminal
y i hv a feeling that it's riya poor her
cont soon
Edited by madmadona - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#60
nice update continue soon..

i have a feeling that it is riya???????????

am i right?????

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