MadhVini OS-'Nothing without you'

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello friends...let me introduce to you all.
My name is ammu😊,i'm in so much love with MadhVini😳. SO something came into my mind and i thought to write one OS for our loving jodi... This is my very first attempt to write something so if i make any mistake plzz spare me😭 and do correct me..U all are welcome🤗

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Posted: 9 years ago
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We are waiting for your os
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Posted: 9 years ago
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(Scene starts from where Maya has been exposed by manu in front of raj-parivar...taking a chance maya and takshika get escaped...and manu and her clan is now out of Namishyavan and heading toward raj-mahal...)

MAYA-Bahut ghamand hai na us devrakshika ko khud pe...(she was furious)
TAKSHIKA-She just spoiled our year long wait,our plans... Naagrani was right we must not have taken her all alone and weak...
MAYA-Ab naagrani nahiii hai hamare bich..(she shouted in anger) Jo bhi karna hai ab hame hi karna hai...aur hum abhi haare nahi hai..
TAKSHIKA-Hmmm.. tum sahi keh rahi ho.. Now we have only one way,hame shesnaag ko khus karna hoga ab wo hi ham naago ki raksha kar sakte hai..unhe khus kar ke hi hum apni shaktiyaan badha sakte hai..
MAYA- humm..(she nodded being determined) in mind- Manasvini ab tumhe humse koi nahi bacha paega,tumhari maut to tay hai(she smiled evily)

Scene shifts to manu and clan:

Raj-parivar was very scared,Manu was very concerned for them ..she was all attentive and walking like a dutyful protector... Suddenly her eyes strikes to that of yuvraj who was staring at her all this while...there was tears glittering through his eyes ready to flow via. cheeks..
There was death like silence..cold breeze was flowing letting some of manu's loose strands of hairs on her face...hearts was beating faster then ever... and this all Madhvini got lost in each other eyes..

MANU- Hame is tarah mat dekhiye yuvraj...
MADHAV- hum tumse apni najar kese hata le manu..hame to wese bhi tumhare siva kuch najar nahi aata...ya hum yu kahe ki humari aankhe bas tumhe hi dekhna chahti hai har pal..apne samne..
MANU-(acting strong) Nahii yuvraj nahii... apko khud ko rokna hoga,aur fir aaj jo kuch bhi ho raha hai wo sab hota hi nahi agar hamare bich us raat koi Rishta na bana hota.. sab wahi se to shuru hua..
MADHAV- To tum manti ho ki hamare bich us raat ek RISHTA bana tha??
MANU- (all silent...tears rolled down her cheek)
MADHAV-bolo na manu??
MANU- bas kijiye Madhav... (and she turned her face other side to hide feelings she thought madhav may see thru her eyes)

As soon as manu turned her face madhav lifted his hand to stop her but... got hurt his hand by the thrones beside...
MADHAV- Ahhh... (he cried in pain) and then he realized all what was happening few moments ago was in his mind only.. a slight pain run thru his eyes..
All turned towards madhav being shocked listening his voice..
Manu who was also having mind talk now again turned her back being shocked..
MANU- yuvraj kya hua?? (she ran upto him instructing everyone to stay there she will see..)
she came and holded his hand and saw blood..
MANU- yuvraj apka dhyaan kaha rehta hai... dekhiye khoon nikal aaya (her voice had pain and concern,She no more could stop her tears...) Laiye dikhaiye hame... (she took out one hanky from her waist and tied it to his hand..
Madhav was mesmerized by her concern...in this while manu lifted her eyes and saw the ocean of pain and love in his eyes.. she soon came in sense...
MANU- (in a low voice) Khud ko takleef dena band kijiye yuvraj..
MADHAV- "Dard bhi deti ho aur chahti ho takleef bhi na ho manu..."
MANU- (Closing her eyes and taking a deep breath..she was trying to control the storm of emotions inside her)
Hamari taqdeer hamare hath nahi hoti yuvraj..ye apko samajhna hoga.. Mujhpe bahut badi jimmedari hai,aur use nibhane me mujhe apka sath chahie... par aap ko is halat me dekh mai kamjor pad jaugi.. kya aap chahte hai ki mai haar jau?? apne farz ko nibhane me asafal rahu??

MADHAV- "Jo jindagi me khud apne sabse KIMTI cheez ko haar gaya ho... usse umeed kar rahi ho manu??" (he lifted his eyes straight into manu eyes with pain)
MANU- Madhav..? (she was loss of words,she couldn't believe her rejection have made madhav so weak & broken from inside)
MADHAV- (taking a deep breath)
Thik hai manu... hum to apne pyar ko haar gaye hai,shyad usme hi kami rahi hogi.. par tumhe haarte nahi dekh paege,hum kosis karege ki kam-se-kam tum apna farz nibha pao.(his voice chocked..)
MANU- (hiding her tears) Hame chalna chahie.. and she turnes to go..
MADHAV- Manu..?? (he held her hand)
MANU- (turned to him surprized and questioningly)
MADHAV- Shukriya..!! Aaaj hamare parivar ki jaan bachane ke lie... aur..aur hamari shaadi rokne k lie.
MANU- (acting strong) Ye hum kese hone dete yuvraj,hum us naagin ko jeetne nahi de saktey the..aur ye to hamara...
MADHAV- (cutting her) Ye sab hum nahi jante par hum itna jante hai ki agar aaj hamari shaadi ho jati to hum...to hum..'mar jatey' (he lowered his eyes) Hum tumhare siva kisi ko apne khyal me bhi nahi soch saktey manu... Isliye SHUKRIYA..!!
[eye lock..]

MANU- In mind (Kaas hum apko bata pate ki hum bhi apko kisi k sath nahi dekh sakte madhav...kaas bata pate ki hum kya mehsoos karte hai...ki apko dikha pate aaj hamne apne suhaag ki nishaaniya dali hai... par..par ise chupana hamari majboori hai,hum is waqt kamjor nahi pad saktey) TEARS rolled down her cheeks..
MADHAV- Manu..?? (he was finding hard to stand he was broken his eyes was filled with tears and pain)
kya hum ek baar...bas ek baar kisi devrakshika ko nahi..apni manu ko gale laga saktey hai?? (he was kinda begging her)
MANU- (she was all lost of words and she didn't realized when and how she nodded in YES)

[MADHAV embraced her in his arms,Both were crying..(OHH.. how pityful their destiny was)
MANU surrendered herself in madhav arms like she never again wanted to part ways...and MADHAV was holding manu as if a dying person tries to hold his every breath...]
BG- "Do pal ruka khwabo ka kaarwan ..
aur fir chal diye...
Tum kaha..hum kahan..
Do pal ki thi..ye dilon ki daastan..
aur fir chal diye..
tum kaha hum kaha..."
*END*

SO GUYS HOW WAS IT??😆
U CAN KEEP YOUR TOMATOES AND EGGS READY FOR ME...🤣
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Posted: 9 years ago
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wow is the only word for the story...👏

loved the dialogue "Hame is tarah mat dekhiye yuvraj...
"Dard bhi deti ho aur chahti ho takleef bhi na ho manu..." i was thinking abot Madhav getting hurt for my story and you already did that scene 😆 dil ko dil se rrah hoti hai, hum ne socha aur app ne likh bhi dia 😉

it was beautifully written... although the nagin scene was unnecessary... 😳



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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: blueflames



wow is the only word for the story...👏

loved the dialogue "Hame is tarah mat dekhiye yuvraj...
"Dard bhi deti ho aur chahti ho takleef bhi na ho manu..." i was thinking abot Madhav getting hurt for my story and you already did that scene😆dil ko dil se rrah hoti hai, hum ne socha aur app ne likh bhi dia😉

it was beautifully written...although the nagin scene was unnecessary...😳





Thank u dear 🤗
We all are in madhvini dreamland na isliye khabar Ho jati... Dil se dil ka rishta bada hi pyara hai... Ooppss again I started.. Btw thankeww.. 😉
Yeah i also thought after reading ye Maya scene was unnecessary... Stupid me u know..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Beatifully written with the essence of characters of serial in tact...👍🏼.Loved it very much...one can feel the state of mind of both...Hope to read more as the story progresses...Thanks...🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: vyoman

Beatifully written with the essence of characters of serial in tact...👍🏼.Loved it very much...one can feel the state of mind of both...Hope to read more as the story progresses...Thanks...🤗



queen of late latif... an OS means One shot story... this story has got its end... 😆
and waise where are you these days... AKH forum pasand nahi tmhe ??
aur mera bhi OS dekh lo... 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: blueflames



queen of late latif... an OS means One shot story... this story has got its end... 😆
and waise where are you these days... AKH forum pasand nahi tmhe ??
aur mera bhi OS dekh lo... 😆


This particular story ended but not Madhav and Manu's story na...u will get more and more shades if I am not wrong...I am talking about that...har ek baar ek naya OS...😆😆

Thanks for promotion...late latif se queen of LL...😆😆

I am here only...yesterday also I made a comment on your post...may be u were so busy u didn't read or recognise my name...AKH forum na pasand karne ka koi baat hi nahi...end tak rahne ka already soch rakka hai...😉😆

Aapka ek OS maine read kar ke comment kiya tha...naya hai to woh bhi pad lenge night mein ...


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: vyoman

<font color="#0000ff">Beatifully written with the essence of characters of serial in tact...👍🏼.Loved it very much...one can feel the state of mind of both...Hope to read more as the story progresses...Thanks...🤗</font>



Awww.. Thank you.. So sweet of u 🤗
Though I got to knw u are late latif..ooppss sorry queen of late latif..thanks to saba 🤣
But seriously what's ur name? 😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thanks 😉 shall I call u sweta??

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