Poem on Antara ..........

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hi all,
Just thought I write down a line or two ..........but see how long it grew. I hope you have the patience to read through and will comment on it.
Poem on Antara

I live in my little world as silently as can be

Then why is everyone so irritated with me?

It's a quiet peaceful place where my mind loves to play

My body too does happily and comfortably sway

My blue rucksack has all the worldly treasures that I own

A bottle of water and my favourite jar of stones

I love my puzzles of Winnie and his many tales

Did you like my art work of that gigantic whale?

I enjoyed it when Papa made shadows on the wall

He seemed amazed when I answered to his call

Those numbers that fox the brain are like slaves to me

In the blink of an eye they fall in place and I answer quickly

Why does Abhi always sulk and spoils for a fight?

He just doesn't understand that I too have some right

That Billo shows he's very smart but really is a squeak

He thinks he gets away with it because I just don't speak

His dad is my best friend and very kind at that

His mom is always frowning and calling me a brat

My new school is awful and reminds me of a circus

My teacher, the ringmaster throws me out of focus

I love that lady's voice and like the way she sings

Solace to my little heart and also joy does bring

Why doesn't she look kindly or speak softly with me?

Why does she feel sad whenever she looks at me?

I didn't see her tumble nor did I hear her call

I swear I really wasn't the cause of her fall

The screaming and the banging frightened me no end

The shrillness of the sounds made my hair stand on end

I stand and watch the myriad stars with my seeking gaze

Where can I find my mother in that heavenly maze?

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nancy_loveSK thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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mindblowing poem.its words relate to hmari anatra.........
good job skeptical
princessunara thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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its beautiful skeptic 👏⭐️ explains lil baby antara's mind so very well😳
sami01 thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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aww skepy ka jadoo kya kahoon is ke baare mein...


ur gifted skepy u truly r gifted with words......
antra's feelings r so so perfectly described .....
thanks for sharing
as always just mind blowing
ranjnanarang thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Another lovely work from you skep loved every word of it . Simply outstanding.

The owrd were very touching.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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OMG! that was beautiful @skeptical just lovely, you penned down her whole life so beautifully. I just loved it!

"That Billo shows he's very smart but really is a squeak

He thinks he gets away with it because I just don't speak"

I specially loved these two lines! I had a good laugh reading it, I just hate Billo! I find him very annoying!


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Posted: 16 years ago
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I love Antara😊
she is soooo pyaari..i wish that when she is grown up she will be my girlfriend😳
I am only 14 years old and she is 11 years younger than me so maybe it is possible😆
namita25 thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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The poem is awesome skep........👏👏

I just loved it like anything.......

It brings forth the agony and the pain Angel is going through.......

you really rock dear......👍🏼👍🏼


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Posted: 16 years ago
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Woow Skep... amazing poem yaar...
I felt as if I had a safari thru Antra's mind...
you correctly pictured the feeling thoughts of the little one...
very touching tooo....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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HEY SKEP U R JUST AMAZING MAN .. DONT HAVE MUCH WORDS TO PRAISE U MAN....GOD BLESS U N UR LOVED ONES ALWAZ... JUST AMAZIN POEM!!!'

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