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BrhannadaArmour
BrhannadaArmour @BrhannadaArmour 1 years ago Thank you to everyone who reacted and commented. I feel honoured that you want a Chapter Three with Pallavi in it. After she dominated my first fan fiction (Antarāya-timir'opaśāntaye Chapter One), how did I leave her out of both chapters of this one? Now that Raghav and Vijay are being civil to each other, it should be safe to involve Pallavi.

I had to end Chapter Two with Raghav's pause, because we all know Vijay won't give us a happy ending so easily. Chapter Three, what will I do with you?

I wasn't aware of those promos, hapc. The early episodes made me think that the Deshmukhs would be developed as characters and have their own one-on-one moments with Raghav (such as Sharada calling him Delivery Boy for Manasi's keḷavaṇa gifts). Soon we got scenes of Raghav talking while they all stood in silence around the room, and the show got stuck in that habit. Maybe I did a little better with my waiting-for-breakfast scene, but if I can think of scenes between Raghav, maybe Pallavi, and one to three Deshmukhs, those might be easier to balance.

Technically, Raghav hasn't gotten arrested in my story yet, but yes, hapc, Pallavi is visibly pregnant in "Antarāya-timir'opaśāntaye" when Raghav's arrest is imminent, and in "Delivery Boy" children are only a hypothetical that Sharada brings up as a reason for Raghav to learn diplomacy. "Delivery Boy" takes place some time after Mandar's return in "Hasta-prāpya-stabaka-namito bāla-Mandāra-vṛkṣaḥ" - and after a conversation between Kirti and Mandar that I haven't written yet. However, in "Delivery Boy" so far, Vijay only knows Farhad as Raghav's man, and must be unaware of the romance that I hope to write for Farhad and Mandar in "Hasta-prāpya-stabaka-namito bāla-Mandāra-vṛkṣaḥ." So, I will have to run these two stories in parallel.
missFiesty_69
V @missFiesty_69 2 years ago Wow. Your story is really really awesome. Something I would have loved to see on the show. I loved his smart business proposition. It was hilarious that Raghav still calls him buddhe (Like Reem, I would have loved it if he called him out in the open, but saara efforts mitti mein mil jayega)I loved reading the authentic Marathi lines. Shardha as usual is very sensible here. Lovely story. Nice attention to details. I loved it I am waiting for the day when Vijay and Shardha discovers that Raghav is Ramaswami and yeah waiting for Pallavi to make an entry Waiting for the next part. Please tag me ❤️And yeah thanks for the intimation. I never realised you updated the second part. missFiesty_692021-10-26 17:30:21
SONIA441
SONIA441 @SONIA441 2 years ago This was a pretty good 2nd Part to the Delivery BoyI think the way Vijay took things wrongly & how Sharda became a mediator - then how Kirti finally realises that she was being an accomplice - then the conversation between Raghav & Vijay across the breakfast table with the whole Deshmukh clan was very summarizing.
ReemShah
ReemShah @ReemShah 2 years ago Part 2 of this FF was definitely surprising but it was a pleasant onethe fact that you are developing the relation between VD and Raghav is something different--Raghav and Aai are love...Raghav considers her as a mother to him and asking for adviceI definitely think you can start adding Pallavi in the FF now because whole delivery boy joke wouldn't have been there without her in the showthe update was all hilarious and witty with the perfect pinch of humour and Raghav's last line(not telling you but somewhere inside me it's wishing that Raghav might have said these words aloud)Mansi's character is a sensible one here--they have destroyed her in the show--glad she is not obsessed over Rahul here and moving ondefinitely eager for next part
Avneel07
Avneel07 @Avneel07 2 years ago Hi, this is absolutely fantastic. Loved it
Shri_12
Shri @Shri_12 2 years ago Thanks for tagging. Great realistic take on D's and their relationship with Raghav. Hoping to see Pallavi too in the next chapter.
hapc
hapc @hapc 2 years ago I didn't expect this update so I was pleasantly surprised when I checked my notifications. This story of yours is my personal favourite and the bond Raghav has with each of the Deshmukh family members is depicted so well. I remember the inital promos of the show were about whether someone will accept Pallavi's sasural and here we have a story dedicated to that. Also does this take place before the fic where Pallavi gets Raghav arrested? Anyways I liked the small misunderstanding that happened and was cleared just as quickly. Poor Manasi, seems like a sensible character here who deserves better. Raghav and VD scenes are the best. I like them more than Sharada Raghav scenes too. I like how the drugs bit was also cleared here. The characters have personalities and are not all villains. I absolutely love this story and am waiting for the next part.I didn't realise that the name of this fic is delivery boy which is one of my favourite scenes from the show.hapc2021-09-19 09:38:27
Morphedwings
Morphedwings @Morphedwings 2 years ago Hey Dear Writer,I absolutely love this story. The witty and know-it-all personality of Raghav and as usual vain and proud Vijay Deshmukh. I love their banters and how you depict every conversation that takes place between them. The way Raghav called him a buddha actually made me smile.I really enjoyed reading it. Can we get a part 3 please? I would like to see where Pallavi stands amid the chaos between her husband and Vijay Deshmukh. Keep writing! ❤️
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