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BrhannadaArmour
BrhannadaArmour @BrhannadaArmour 2 years ago Yes, they are similar in some qualities. Or, as Jaya said to Raghav once when he called Vijay sanakī on the show, "If you were a girl, I would have proposed your marriage to him."

I was inspired by that scene on the show with Raghav showing concern for Vijay on the street. I had hoped that the writing would continue in that direction, but since it didn't, here we are in fan fiction. Yes, Raghav is caring, but Vijay can't see past Raghav's disrespectful words, so I thought an assignment from Sharada and a visit from Luṅgīvālā Raghav were needed.

Thanks for the encouragement, inlieu!
inlieu
inlieu @inlieu 2 years ago Really enjoyed reading this. I have always wanted to see these two grudgingly find their way to one another because Sanki craves a son and Raghav feels the void of not having his father. They are both quite similar in many ways. It reminded me of the scene where Raghav spotted him selling sarees on the road and offered him biscuits and water. He was genuinely concerned for him but didn't overly exprees it. As in the scene, I'd want this to happen organically on the show and not because of Pallavi or Ayi. It would be far more meaningful in that way because Raghav is a caring person by nature.
BrhannadaArmour
BrhannadaArmour @BrhannadaArmour 2 years ago hapc, thank you so much for the effusive comment. What you liked in the story was what I aimed to achieve, so it's immensely gratifying to read your impression.

Thank you also to everyone else for reacting and commenting. I appreciate all of you.
hapc
hapc @hapc 2 years ago Wow! This was so good that I just had to comment. It’s one of the few stories that I read because I enjoyed and not because I had to finish it. Like your interpretation of Lungiwala Raghav. Vijay Deshmukh and Raghav Rao could have been an extremely interesting dynamic had the writers not decided to mostly ruin his character. This is what we could have seen on screen. Two egoistic and hot headed men but who aren’t mean spirited unlike VD right now. I also liked that you made Pallavi his grounding figure and she could calm him down. She made her presence felt without being in a single scene. Coming to Aai, one of my favorite characters on the show and you have done justice to her. Beautifully written dialogues and the conversation she had with Raghav was brilliant. The change in meaning of the title delivery boy warmed my heart. Beautiful work.
Innocentlove96
Innocentlove96 @Innocentlove96 2 years ago It's beautiful with a hilarious note👏🏻👏🏻
BrhannadaArmour
BrhannadaArmour @BrhannadaArmour 2 years ago My version of the Luṅgīvālā Raghav character in this story is somewhat different from how he behaves on screen. His motivation is the same - to prioritize Pallavi so that Raghav can focus. However, in his scenes on screen the character has to be so serious and verbal. (Nice eye-rolls, though.) What I tried to add was insouciance and movement, for which Bharatanatyam seemed natural.

I think it's more fun for Raghav's alter ego to behave as in this Marathi song by Sandip Khare.

Mī hazāra cintāṃnī he ḍoke khāzavato
To kaṭṭyāvara basato, ghumato, śīḷa vāzavato!

I have a thousand worries to scratch my head
While he sits on a ledge, humming, whistling!

Mī zunāṭa dārāparī kirakirā, bandī
To satāḍa ughaḍyā khiḍakīparī svacchandī
Mī bijāgarīśī jīva gaṃzavīta basato
To laṅghūna çaukaṭa pāra nighāyā baghato!

I'm like an old door, grumbling, stuck shut
He's like a wide-open window, idiorhythmic
I wait, rusting my life against the hinges
He's set to jump the frame and go out free!

Ḍoḷyāṃta mājhiyā sūryāhunī saṃtāpa
Disatāta tvacevara rāpa, unhāçe śāpa!
To tyāça unhāçe zhagazhagīta lakhalakhate
Ghaḍavūna dāgine sūryaphulāṃvara zhulato!

My frustrated gaze is hotter than the sun
See my tanned skin, the curses of that heat!
He fashions ornaments, sparkling and bright
Of that same heat, rocking over the sunflowers!

Mī pāyī rutalyā kāçāṃvaratī ciḍato
To tyāça ghe'unī nakṣī māṇḍūna basato
Mī ḍāva raḍīçā khāta jiṅkato antī
To svaccha mokaḷyā mukta manāne harato!

I'm mad at the glass shards stuck in my feet
He takes them and arranges them in a pattern
I cheat in the game and win in the end
That honest, generous, easygoing one, he loses!
ReemShah
ReemShah @ReemShah 2 years ago this was awesome--really well writtenI loved the take on VD-Raghav's relationship
Shri_12
Shri @Shri_12 2 years ago Hello there, this one is a beautiful piece. A fresh take on VD-Raghav dynamic, which won't be explored much on the show.
BrhannadaArmour
BrhannadaArmour @BrhannadaArmour 2 years ago Thank you, SONIA441, and everyone who reacted. By the way, I'm not a girl, I'm a man.

This story was inspired by a couple of threads - one that appreciated Sharada as a mother figure to Raghav and another that dared the creative team to show something new, like Vijay and Raghav spending time together.

Are there any other fan fictions with Bharatanatyam, or the character of Luṅgīvālā Raghav? Please tell me if you've read any; I would like to read them.
SONIA441
SONIA441 @SONIA441 2 years ago Wow Girl!!You're so prolific with your wordsThe way you involved Marathi dialogues for Vijay adds more to the depth of the scene & character.Sharda's feelings for Raghav well explained.The way Aai explained to Raghav how to initiate a bond with VD
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