En(un)tangled Tale of Love: Last updt Pg 10 (PM later)

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Hi All!
I am here with Part 3 (a) of my story on SONG OS-THON thread of peace aka Pallavi.

As my story has turned into SS and it was taking a lot of space on the OS-Thon thread, it was decided to post it outside the thread after discussing with Pallavi.

Can we have a huge round of applause for Pallavi for obliging to the requests of Forumwasis and managing the thread so well?

Part 3 (a): In the post below this


Thanks😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi All!

Thanks for the overwhelming response for the previous parts...

I am here with Part 3(a)...Part 3 (b) will follow soon (not today)


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En(un)tangled Tale of Love

Part 3(a)

Song: Raabta (Agent Vinod)

He woke up with a huge smile on his face. He had had a peaceful sleep after days. Well that's not the reason for the smile on his face. The reason was that he was looking forward to his to-do list for the day.

He showered, changed, fixed himself a breakfast quickly while humming a self-made tune.

He glanced at the clock, 9:30 it said. She must be wide awake now!

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Meanwhile in another corner of the city another figure woke up with a huge smile too. She too had had a peaceful sleep after days. She too was excitedly looking forward to this day. She had many things on her to-do list but she was a little apprehensive about the most important task on her list.


She had showered, changed, fixed a breakfast humming one of her favourite tamil songs.


She glanced at the clock, 7:30 it said. He must be fast asleep now!

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He pulled out a pillow placing it on his lap, one foot dangling from the bed, taking his phone, opened WhatsApp messenger and scrolled through the contact list searching for Jhansi Ki Rani.

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She pulled out a pillow placing it on her lap, one foot dangling from the bed, taking her phone, opened WhatsApp messenger and scrolled through the contact list searching for Ravan Kumar.


She checked out his DP, a selfie that was surely clicked after last night's party. he was on his bed, resting his head on the pillow, faking a yawn. She chuckled.


Will have a sound sleep tonight the status read. She wondered what could be the reason for his sound sleep. She wished it was her.

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He first checked out her DP, a selfie that was probably clicked after last night's party. She looked content and happy. That made him happy as well. He glanced at the picture for good five minutes.


Feeling Complete the status read. He wondered what made her feel complete. He wished it was him.

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His chat window did not show the last seen. He had probably disabled it. She (im)patiently waited for him to show online. She kept going back to his DPand had it saved it in her gallery.


That reminded her that WhatsApp profile photos folder on her phone was filled with his DPs. She switched to gallery and checked out every single pic, recalling his status messages and reviewing every inch of each pic which she had already memorized.


Her phone pinged with a new message alert and her fingers raced competing with her racing heart to type a reply.

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Her chat window said online. His eyes glowed like a bulb on seeing that.


Hi😊 he sent


Hi😊 came the immediate reply


Itni jaldi reply? Lagta hai mere hi msg ka intezar tha😉


In dreams Mr.Bhalla🤢


Oh! To mai tumhari khwabon me bhi atha hun?😳


*ur she quickly sent as she noticed that she had missed out typing ur so added it with a *


Nah...tum mere khwabon me nahi athi...🥱


I meant in ur dreams😡 she tried to make it clear...but she didn't realize he already knew what she meant but was simply trying to annoy her


I know that...Isiliye kaha tum mere khwabon me nahi athi😆


Great news...congrats!👏😡


Thanks...Hanuman chalisa ka asar hai...Usko padhne se chudail khwaab me nahi athe...😃


Thanks fr the info...Aaj se mai b padhke soya karungi...thaki tumhara chehra na dekhna pade...🤢


Oh to u accept k mai tumhare khwab mai atha hun?😉


Khud ko itni importance dena band kar doge please?👎🏼


Ok Ma'am...your wish is my command👍🏼


Duniya ka 8wan ajooba! Ravan Kumar ne bina kisi mathbhed ke meri baat maanli! Aaj ki tareeq to suvarn aksharon me itihaas ke pannon me likhi jayegi...⭐️


Translation please! Itni Hindi mujhe nahi athi😲


No translators here...Google translate might help...😳she typed annoyed


Give me a minute...I'll b back came his reply


k...😊she typed thinking he was gone for some important work


He was gone for seconds now...she grew impatient...


R u der???😲she sent and waited for a few more seconds

No reply


??? she sent again


U r gone???😲 She asked after a few more seconds


I guess u r busy...carry on...c ya...😊she typed with a smile although she lost hers


Her phone pinged again when she was about to put it away

Sorry took me long😕


No prob...U may go if u r busy😊 she wrote with a heavy heart


No I am not busy...I was looking for smthng😛


K...😊


Google translate said we do not translate such heavy words, please contact Ishita Iyer🤣


Kuch bhi😆


Waise ek idea aya dimag me...U cud open a Spoken Hindi institute...A Madrasi teaching Hindi...Guinness Book of World records me na sahi Limca book of records me zaroor jayega! What say?😃


FYI Mr.Bhalla mere paas in sab faltu cheezon keliye time nahi hai...My hands are full...unlike some jo apne paas kaam na hone par aise faltu ideas lagate baith the hain...👎🏼


Ab to mai faltu hi lagunga na...Vella jo hogaya hun...


Sorry I didn't mean that!😒 She was remorseful


It's ok ab vella ko vella hi bolenge na...not ur fault...😒he faked being hurt


I am really sorry...mera matlab o nahi tha...🤔


Rehne do ab...😭he was now enjoying it


I am really sorry...😲


It's ok...😕he still didn't give up on his act of being hurt


Wo sab jane do...ye batao what next? TV ya Bollywood ya kuch aur...😳she asked trying to lighten the mood


He found it as a golden opportunity to put forth what he had been planning to do


Soch raha hun shadi kar lun he smartly brought in the topic


What??? Ek minute! Kahin tumhare number se koi aur to chat nahi kar raha na? Tum Raman hi ho???😲


O hello Madam! Itna over-react karne ki zarurat nahi hai...maine shadi karne ki baat ki hai...kisi ka khoon karne ki nahi...😳


Khoon karne ki baat karte to mai maan leti...par tum aur shadi? Ye kuch ajeeb nahi sunayi detha? Waise ye shadi ka khayal achanak se kaise agaya?


Bas aise hi... suna hai hare k ko uparwale ne uske jode ke sath paida kiya hai...to socha ke kyun na thoda sa punya ka kaam kar lun...warna meri Soulmate bechari bhatakti rahegi mere intezar me...😳

Kehte hain Khuda ne is jahan me sabhi keliye

Kisi na kisi ko hai banaya har kisi keliye


Not bad Mr.Bhalla! Philosophy and all haan! Waise ek baat batayenge? Aap ki ye so-called "bechari bhatakti Soulmate" ko aap kaise pehchanoge?😉


Have u heard Samajhdaar ko ishara kafi'?😃


Haan...to?😕


FYI mai samjhdaar hun...Koi na koi ishara to hoga...jaise tumse milke ye ishara hua tha ke we are a perfect couple...❤️

Tera milna hai us Rab ka ishara maanun


He had decided to put his message across to her indirectly so that he could gauge from her reaction what she felt for him. He wanted to make sure she was ready for this relationship before he officially proposed her.


His heart raced after tapping the send button and hers skipped a beat.

She read and re-read trying to comprehend what he meant. Did he really mean what was apparent or there was something more to it?


She kept contemplating and hesitated to type a reply. She feared her reply would end up in embarrassment.


*ONSCREEN😛 he added on not receiving her reply. She had taken long enough and he noticed that she wasn't typing anything either.


Oh k...😲she replied with a tinge of disappointment


Tum khush nahi lag rahi 😉he prodded sensing the disappointment in her reply


Kuch bhi she typed and quickly erased before sending remembering their last convo about Kuch bhi


Nothing like that she typed and gave it a thought. Iska matlab tum disappointed ho par batana nahi chahti he could say, so erased that too


Nahi😃 she finally sent


Ek 4 letter-word likhne me tumhe itna tym laga?😆 He asked as he had seen her chat window showing typing from a long time.


Mai kuch aur kaam kar rahi thi...isliye reply karne me der hui🥱 she lied


Rehne do ab jhoot kisko bol rahi ho...I know tum yahi soch rahi ho na ke jaise Khuda ne mere liye kisi ko banaya hai waise hi tumhare liye bhi kisiko banaya hoga he raised that topic again

Tujhko banaya mere jaise hi kisi keliye


Kuch bhi logic poore confidence se! Tumhari is bekar philosophy ka mere se kya connection hai?😲


Koi connection to hai...tumhe nahi lagta?😳 he asked silkily

Kuch to hai tujhse raabta

Kuch to hai tujhse raabta


Mujhe kaise patha hoga? Tumne hi kaha hai...tumhe hi patha hoga...😕She asked trying to find out what he intended to convey to her

Kaise hum jaanein humein kya patha


Mujhe to lagta hai ke hamare beech wahi connection hai jo ON-SCREEN hamare beech tha😳 he replied smartly

Kuch to hai tujhse raabta


Her heart skipped another beat and her mind stopped working totally.

This time he would not back off. He was almost close to comprehending her feelings for him.


Kya soch rahi ho?


Kuch nahi🤔


Well I don't think it's a bad idea...Agar hum donon shadi karlenge to humein future ki koi fikr nahi hogi...What say?☺️

Tu humsafar hai to kya fikr hai


And what makes you think that Mr.Bhalla?😲


5 saal sath kaam karke ek doosre ko jhelne ki adat to humein pad hi gayi hai...saari zindagi jhel lenge😆

Jeene ki wajah yahi hai


FYI Mr.Bhalla! aapse shadi karne se to mai single hi better hun...aur agar galti se kar bhi liya to in advance note likh dungi ke MERI MOUT KI ZIMMEDAR MERE PATHI HAIN🤢

Marna isi keliye


The mention of Pathi brought a smile on his face.

Oh wow! Pathi! All sorted then? We are getting married?


She hadn't expected that from him. Now she was trapped in her own words. Trying to find a way out she typed Tum meri taang kheench rahe ho?😡


Nahi tumhara haath maang raha hun🤗 came his reply immediately.

Ayyo!!! He will kill me with his one-liners today' she thought


He assumed now was the time to officially propose her.

But he was RKB! Uniqueness was his style statement. He had thought of a unique way of proposing her too.


He chose one of her pics on his phone, cropped out everything except her left hand and sent it with a text saying Ye haath mujhe dede Iyer!😳


She chuckled. Nahiii👎🏼 she replied


Ye haath mujhe de de Iyer🤗 he sent again


Nahiii👎🏼 came the reply


Ye haath mujhe de de Iyer😡


Nahiii...👎🏼


Soch lo...warna haath kaat dunga😈 he warned


Kaat to chuke ho...Crop I mean😆 she replied

His turn to chuckle now. Biwi hai na aapke takkar ki? He remembered her dialogue from an episode.


He was getting impatient with every minute. He realized this war of words will go on and on and end up in nothing. So he decided to call her and talk to her directly.


Can I call u? he was typing when her message popped in


Hey...Got to go...Catalogue shoot...Already late...Continue later?😳 she said as her reminder reminded her of this day's commitments. (Salman Khan you remember???)


Ok😔 he answered disappointedly


I will take your leave then?😳 she replied not wanting to go but bound by her commitments.


He was not happy at all. He wanted more. He wanted to hear her voice. He wanted to see her.

Ek shart pe he said


Kya?😲 She asked


Apna hath to nahi diya...Kam se kam apna chehra o dikha do he could not help put that request forward


She thought for a while and decided she should let him know what's going on in her life. It was wrong to keep him in dark.


He waited for a reply. It didn't come.


He checked the chat window recording video it said. He reached on top of cloud nine. He was over-joyed that she had obliged to his request without arguing. That one moment of her acceptance seemed to fill the void created in his heart when she said she would be leaving.

Meherbaani jaate jaate mujh pe kar gaya

Guzarta sa lamha ek daaman bhar gaya


His eyes were glued on the screen.

She sent the video and went offline.

The phone beeped. He tapped on the thumbnail to download the video getting impatient by every second.


"Hi I am sorry...But I really need to go...I am already late...Sorry again"

Koi baat nahi...Tumhe dekh liya to din mukammal hogaya... he said pausing the video. She agreeing to his request was like a sign for him from the heavens above.

Tera nazara mila roshan sitaara mila

Taqdeer ki kashtiyon ko kinara mila

He tapped the play button.

"By the way Mr.Bhalla I am expecting a ring soon on this very hand" she said showing her left hand, the very hand that he had cropped and sent her


His expression changed and so did hers!😲

--------------------------To be continued--------------------------------
Kehte hain Khuda ne is forum me har post keliye
Kisi na kisi ko banaya hai COMMENTS keliye
Tere like ko mai us Rab ka ishara maanun
Readers ko banaya mere jaise hi writers keliye😉

Kuch to hai tujhse raabta
Kaisa laga tumhe ye part mujhe kya patha
Ab jaldi se de tu batha😆
Edited by maanvir - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awesome update dear..Loved it..
finally they proposed..
what a way to propose..
waiting for the next update already😆

P.S i have posted a long comment on previous part in song OS thon...do see😳
Edited by nitii - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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waiting for it please update soon
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omg amazing!!!!!
i mean he proposed her on whatsapp so cute
and she accepted in the end in such a cute way aweee
Edited by sush_avina - 10 years ago
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Res...
I'm here..🤗
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Uff!!!! I am dead...
I jst luv this kind of chats...it actually gives me a DivAn feel all the time whenevr I read it...aapke saath mujhe apni ek stry share karni hai...actually a idea n I really want u 2 write on it...usske baare mein I'll PM u...

Main bahut samajhdaar hoon Mano...actually

Kuch toh hai tujhse Raabta...

Coz abhi mera TV bhi wahi song BG mein play kar rahaan hai...

Cumin to the part...

Wow jst wow..mere dil ki unknown muraad poori kar di aapne...

Raman jst directly poochh liya my God..

But thts super cute(jst like u..😉)...

At the end bahut achha part hai...updt soon...I can't w8 more...

PS:Hwz my dear Jiju??😉
Plzz don't get angry Mano...I wud actually luv to meet Chaar Kadam version waale Raman...aur jab woh mere Jiju ho toh main mauka kyon chhodu...😉🤣...I can actually imagine ur expressions nw...🤣
Edited by crazy_neha - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Welcome Nehu!

I am here too...waiting for ur cmnts...

Kuch to hai tujhse raabta😉

PS: Tum samjdaar ho...ishara samajh jao
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Thnks😊

Hv u read the other parts?
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awesome!! I love the way u write!! Continue soon
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Very nice loved it n thanks for pm
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OMG!! This was the cutest proposal ever. Hayye.. Div..oops... IshRa are soo adorable!! 😆
Yeah haath mujhe de de Iyer.. LOL! Truly unique proposal!

Absolutely loved this part. Very very well written. Thoroughly enjoyed the nok-jhok and the flirting😃
Waiting to know what happens next.Continue soon.

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