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Posted: 11 years ago
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Already posted on I-F as a fanfiction (yes, I have another ID).
Since this was written separately but only posted as a fanfiction 'coz it seemed to suit the couple, I'd posted it. But this is, in fact, a standalone piece.

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Stranger


The changing beats of the music, the twists and turns, the rustle of dresses, and there she was- in my arms.

I'd recognize her anywhere, with or without the feather mask she had on...

She smiled what would have been her most winning smile at me, except that it wasn't, for it didn't reach her eyes.


When did all the fire turn colder?


Her eyes which seemed to sparkle when they looked at me- with mirth, happiness, love, lust, whatever- were blank...


When did your heart start to beat slower?


I pulled her close, her chest to mine, but the gasp I expected from her at our proximity, never came. Neither did the pumping of her accelerated heartbeat...


My whole memory of me in love's gone so far from me, it's not fair


Then again, as I put a little distance between us, I felt no pang of sadness. I felt no loss, no emptiness that I expected myself to feel without her closeness...


And I can feel it almost start to change


The air around us was cold, or seemed so to me. The heat I always felt around her, especially when we danced, was missing. So was the tinge of pink on her cheeks and the smirk on my face...


But it just hurts too much, I let it go away


The realization stabbed me in my heart, cold and merciless. We were no longer in love with each other. The beats changed again as I twirled her, and her hand slipped out of mine...


No we' anymore


She never looked back even once at me as she fell into the embrace of her new partner. She was his till the beats changed again and it was time to exchange partners once more.

I looked away, turning my attention to my new partner instead.

After all, we were no longer in love...


She's a stranger that I used to know...



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Lyrics used- Amnesia by Justin Timberlake.

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~Maya
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Thank you so much! :)

~Maya
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Posted: 11 years ago
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http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3910944
pls read this and comment..
heartbreak...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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A known stranger. Ironical concept but very much possible.
We know everything about them but yet we choose not to care.
Choose to walk away. Choose pain.
Why does negative come so easily to us humans?
Angst seems like your core area Maya. You write too well in that.
Love
Nidha
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: CavingIn

A known stranger. Ironical concept but very much possible.

We know everything about them but yet we choose not to care.
Choose to walk away. Choose pain.
Why does negative come so easily to us humans?
Angst seems like your core area Maya. You write too well in that.
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Nidha

Nidha. 🤗
Thank you so much reading and commenting! :D
It means a lot and you know that. :)
Angst is good from time to time. The pain makes us feel alive, and we're stronger 'coz we know that after the pain, there is bound to be healing. I still believe in that. :)
Love you! :*

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Interesting..I must admit im not very good with breakup stories..there is always this little part of me that goes 'get back together losers!' 😆 But it made sense you know...when you look at somebody and no longer feel anything special it does hurt you know(though I feel more relieved really im weird like that😆)but it was well written..nothing too dramatic or angsty, just a clear simple realization..it was almost like the breakup was just like a hand slipping out of yours while changing partners...
keep writing more!! 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: IndigoBlues

Interesting..I must admit im not very good with breakup stories..there is always this little part of me that goes 'get back together losers!' 😆 But it made sense you know...when you look at somebody and no longer feel anything special it does hurt you know(though I feel more relieved really im weird like that😆) I've been through it, actually. It was a crush, and I refused to admit ki I had feelings for the guy, and one fine day I'm like, 'I think I liked but... but I don't like him now' and just like that, it was over. Almost as if it never was there... That's what I tried to portray in this, somehow. :)but it was well written..nothing too dramatic or angsty, just a clear simple realization..it was almost like the breakup was just like a hand slipping out of yours while changing partners... Thank you!! :*

keep writing more!! 😊 Yeah, I'm planning on a humourous piece.. bas these exams get over. -_-


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Okay, this is something different. I really really like your style of writing, and this is something real. true at one point of time we stop feeling anything at all and it's not something which can be explained well.
kudos for the idea and the style in which u penned it down.
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Originally posted by: bookworm-ALS--

Okay, this is something different. I really really like your style of writing, and this is something real. true at one point of time we stop feeling anything at all and it's not something which can be explained well.

kudos for the idea and the style in which u penned it down.


Falling out of love is a weird process. It's there, all the time, the love, brimming, threatening to overflow... and at some point of the time, you just look at the person you are supposed to be enamoured with, and you feel no love. There is nothing of the intensity and passion that was there before. This, I believe, is how you fall out of love.
Break-ups are different, coz you are breaking or trying to break the bonds by force, and that's how it hurts so much.
Falling out of love... the bonds just fade away slowly, and only a void is left, something, if you're willing to, you can fill up right again.

Ah, sorry. I tend to get carried away at times. :P

Thank you SO much for reading and commenting! :D

~Maya
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Posted: 11 years ago
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you are just too gooD in portraying pain and irony...
keep up the gooD worK
loveD reading it
short n snappy n lovelY
and i don't think you can so easily fall out of love. Love is always there we just learn and accept that .. that peson we no longer can claim him ours...
thats it but the feelings they are always there we just burry them deep inside but they are always there

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