Ignoscentia-chapter 8 posted page 15 - Page 2

I will say this again. You write very well. 👏

he conversation between the three boys was so natural and fun. The reactions of all the four characters when Alya enters the scene, they were so sponataneous and believable. I really enjoyed reading it.

My favorite part, though, had to be Sam's POV. You really portrayed the emotions beautifully. It was heartwarming to read how, even after the breakup, he held onto the memories he shared with Alya. That he never did stop loving her. That everytime he passed by her house, a part of his heart hoped that they could be together again. You did a great job penning down such emotions into words.

You said that this is a story about forgiveness. But I think this is, more than anything else, a story of love that was never forgotten. A love that Sam and Alya shared. A love, a friendship that the three friends shared. A love that was always remembered and cherished.

I can't wait to read the next part of the story. Good job. And keep writing! 👍🏼

hey ana...i hv gone through ur ff actually someone has given me the link of this story...so i thought to hv a look n i must say u r an amazing writer...
poor Al is alone,sam was going through pain,kabeer was guilty n jai was confused...nice dear...their point of views r really intresting,...so both still love each other n kabeer felt guilty on seeing them...so bad...hope everything will be fine b/w them soon...
do pm me...
lol to u...

okey jii add me in ur pm list fr sure..
life ke side effects i hav resad on rtw...
main latest ud main jo sabse last main comment h by albatrosson life k side effects, .. dats me ..
lov ur writing..

will read dis piece soon too...

till den res..

~~EDITED~~

undoubtedly u hav to pm me wen u update next ..

now cming to stry, a pinch on dostana...
trio... hmm..
basiclly u cn say that i m nt vry fond of trio...(s)..
but m vry fond of ur writing, so i hav to actually read it,
past memos were really great to read..
best ws al's pov..

she is a coobie..
but wat eva it is.. she dnt deserve to be abandoned... in shrt she can b a gud lover n a friend...(actually latter one is more in wrds..)

jay's character ws impressive...
may be he is gonna play the cupid here..
th way he ignores al's accuse ws ice, really awesome..


kabir n sam's pov were touchy,
i liked it a lot..

histry has many things unfolded...lets see wat happens next..

do pm me,

hi dear loe u nd love ur ff nd thanks for giving the link

i was desperately waiting for new rtmc ff nd i got it thanks😊

nd good work nd carry on👏👏

actually i am here just couz this story is on rt-mc n after seeing Alya ,Sam n kabeer's condition i remebered a song from dostana

Kuch kam roshan hai roshani
kuch kam gili h barishein
kuch kam lehrati h hawa
kuch kam hai dil main khwahishein
tham sa gaya h, ye waqt aise
tere liye hi thehra ho jaise
hmmm

kiu meri saans bhi kuch phiki si h
dooriyon main hui nazdiki si h

phool meheke nahi kuch gumsum se hai
jaise roothe hue kuch ye tumse h
jaane kya ye baat h
har subah ab raat h
hmmm...

Originally posted by: ridzzi

actually i am here just couz this story is on rt-mc n after seeing Alya ,Sam n kabeer's condition i remebered a song from dostana

Kuch kam roshan hai roshani
kuch kam gili h barishein
kuch kam lehrati h hawa
kuch kam hai dil main khwahishein
tham sa gaya h, ye waqt aise
tere liye hi thehra ho jaise
hmmm

kiu meri saans bhi kuch phiki si h
dooriyon main hui nazdiki si h

phool meheke nahi kuch gumsum se hai
jaise roothe hue kuch ye tumse h
jaane kya ye baat h
har subah ab raat h
hmmm...

hit ekdum👍🏼

i loved the prologue and the two updates

so sam is rt n al is mugz.. m i rite??/

yup...rashmi
sameer will be rajat
alya will be mugdha
kabeer will be mehul or vikrant (chose any one u like)
n jai will be karan wahi
hwz that ?... :-)

Originally posted by: LoveToLaugh

I will say this again. You write very well. 👏 Aww..thanks so much :)

he conversation between the three boys was so natural and fun. The reactions of all the four characters when Alya enters the scene, they were so sponataneous and believable. I really enjoyed reading it. Good. I hate it when dialogue between characters seems too well thought out or too much like a writer. The narrator/writer shouldn't intefere with the character's personalities. IMO anyway

My favorite part, though, had to be Sam's POV. You really portrayed the emotions beautifully. It was heartwarming to read how, even after the breakup, he held onto the memories he shared with Alya. That he never did stop loving her. That everytime he passed by her house, a part of his heart hoped that they could be together again. You did a great job penning down such emotions into words. Oh I'm so relieved to hear that turned out well. I was worried that I'd overdone it or underdone…I don't want anything to be too soapy.. (like soap operas:P)

You said that this is a story about forgiveness. But I think this is, more than anything else, a story of love that was never forgotten. A love that Sam and Alya shared. A love, a friendship that the three friends shared. A love that was always remembered and cherished. Thats a really interesting way to look at it. Yeah, originally I had intended it to be a story about forgiveness, and essentially I suppose for me it will always be. But on the way if it incorporates other things, then thats good, right?

I can't wait to read the next part of the story. Good job. And keep writing! 👍🏼 Thank you. Don't worry, I will!