FF - Imperative Impulses - [CH16 UPDATED 14/12/23, UNEDITED TRANS.]

Posted: 1 years ago


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Posted: 1 years ago

Beautifully written ❤️❤️

Posted: 1 years ago

This is a great start. Well done on making it just slightly different that the original.

Posted: 1 years ago

Supperb 

Written nicely 

Do continue 

Waiting for next 

Posted: 1 years ago

Good job with exploring why Sahiba has such a gripe with rich people to begin with. It’s never properly explained in the show and that kind of irks me. Why hate the rich so much? Right now, I get it, the family she is in is not nice at all but on that first encounter with Angad, to go on about rich people wasn’t exactly needed or nice from her part. If she has had previous bad experience then it makes sense.

Good word flow and solid start

Looking forward for more❤️

Posted: 1 years ago

I agree with NidhaA. She pretty much stated what I wanted to say. So my review is easier to write now 😸😸 Thanks NidhaA.😂😂


I mostly enjoyed her point of view towards the Brar's. 😍😍😍

A very good start. Looking forward to see how you take this story with the tracks in the show. Best of luck for your writing ❤️

Posted: 1 years ago

@anjali9996 Thank you for checking this. 

Posted: 1 years ago

@allyson This is what I had truly indended. I am relieved that it worked.



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