Originally posted by: Shona1991
Awww so cute....
I always love HS and Micky ka bonding from the day when they first meet and then that Minni k balcony k niche he caught him.....
Tab se I love them....
Do write more dear.....
Exactly haina? I love them too! Ever since he was explaining to him to the friend zone concept. Ever since they started interacting independent of Mini around.
Thank you!
Originally posted by: shruti_luvs_msk
awwwwwwwww
so sweet
veer balika ke father. mini mickey are too cute
That's the best phrase used in the show ever, apart from bhains ki pooch ofcourse 🤣
They're adorable. I love them!
Yeah, they are - the BESHT😎
Thanedaar aur unki ladaaki chori :P
Originally posted by: Mishti_Dahi
Thankyou so much Gur! <3
I am so delighted to read this compliment. Makes me feel so good :D
I know what you're saying. But the fact is, I wanted to focus on HS Mickey and frankly, I didn't know what to do with Mini! Here is where I feel, writing lacks a certain dimension - the visual one. I wish I had lenses in my hand to capture such things, which are too trivial to write and yet important for the scene.
I honestly didn't want to make her blush at Mickey or mention that she was just smiling there. But yeah, I should've mentioned her in the start of the scene, perhaps when I introduced the setting.
Thanks Gur! I've never received such healthy reviews ever, on IF. It's just the praise all the time, only once or twice does anyone point out things. And you- are keeping me on my toes, sharpening my skills! Thanks a lot! Means a lot. Feels great.
Hahaha, see my span is increasing, ain't it? But I need to make better use of that span
Muahhhh!
You're most welcome jaana! 🤗
I completely understand what you're saying. Lacking the visual element is both an advantage and a disadvantage. It's an advantage as it forces you to become really creative and actually take notice of all the details around you. However it's also a disadvantage, as sometimes you'll have to sacrifice mentioning certain things as they're not necessary for the story.
In your case, as you mentioned, you could have mentioned her at the beginning of the scene.
For example:
Taking a sip of the hot piping tea, Hanuman asked, "Ib yeh bata tu itni raat gaye mhaari chori ke balcony ke neeche kar kya raha tha?"
Mickey had his gaze lowered in absolute fear. Minnie looked on in amusement.
I know you said you didn't want to mention she was just sitting there smiling, but just a little something to let us know she was there.
You are most welcome!! 🤗 I remember you saying how I had helped you to become a better writer, so it just felt to right to keep that mentor ship going. 😳
Hahaha, I hear ya! The amount of tabs I have open to keep me distracted is on the next level. 🤣
Originally posted by: asmaanixx
You're most welcome jaana! 🤗
Awwww love you!🤗🤗
I completely understand what you're saying. Lacking the visual element is both an advantage and a disadvantage. It's an advantage as it forces you to become really creative and actually take notice of all the details around you. However it's also a disadvantage, as sometimes you'll have to sacrifice mentioning certain things as they're not necessary for the story.
Yep! That's right. Sometimes it easy to write, sometimes it's difficult, especially since you don't have frames and settings.
In your case, as you mentioned, you could have mentioned her at the beginning of the scene.
For example:
Taking a sip of the hot piping tea, Hanuman asked, "Ib yeh bata tu itni raat gaye mhaari chori ke balcony ke neeche kar kya raha tha?"
Mickey had his gaze lowered in absolute fear. Minnie looked on in amusement.
I know you said you didn't want to mention she was just sitting there smiling, but just a little something to let us know she was there.
Yes, I get that now! Thanks a lot Gur, I really appreciate this. Thank you.
You are most welcome!! 🤗 I remember you saying how I had helped you to become a better writer, so it just felt to right to keep that mentor ship going. 😳
Ofcourse you have always helped me and are continuing with your special services ;)
I remember, the number of corrections you gave in my first Diwali draft, I had almost freaked out lol. But then these details helped me improve a lot.
Hahaha, I hear ya! The amount of tabs I have open to keep me distracted is on the next level. 🤣
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