The journey of Maidam to his Chakor - a mini OS Contn of RagKor

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Posted: 5 years ago

The journey of Maidam to his Chakor a mini OS

Uma, your today's dosage of that insta triggered me and I was just thinking about it too.

As Sukor too she did not open up easy, Suraj transformed himself to gain her.

The coins are bit different here in this journey, Maidam has to transform herself for him.

And your that line the journey of Maidam to Chakor... kindled my thought...

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He hugged her and said, I will wait for the day when my angel will wear that yellow saree and ask me to call her as "Chakor...

He wiped her tears... She raised to his height, he held her preciously, she brought down his face with both her hands slowly and kissed his forehead... A smile in his lips...

Months passed and she was getting comfortable with him, his touches, his proximity, he was very careful as he did not want her to feel even little discomfort.

Anjor was happy to see them both besides her as it was a norm that they both lay besides in her room and was there till she slept.  She ensured that she held both their hands in hers...

The hands were slowly moving to hold each others and holding the little one's hands within them.  The family was bonding well...But after Anjor slept and when Chakor moved her hands in sleep, Raaghav would get up and go to their room, while Chakor sometimes would sleep till dawn or sometimes would go to their room later. But their room was never locked.

Raaghav was learning the tricks of trade with Chakor in taking care of the Rajvanshi businesses and he was also taking care of the basti too.

He did not hurry her but he was silently seeing the change in her...Girija told Raghav about the Sukor journey and he felt awed about Suraj and also was feeling honoured to be loved by Chakor.

Chakor slowly replaced the photographs of her and Suraj with hers and Raghavs.  He knew he was getting into her slowly. He was careful in replacing those photos in another room which he cleared himself.  He always liked the photo where she was into Suraj hugging.  He saw himself in there... And indeed Chakor did notice this too..

It was a sunny day, they were cleaning the room when one of the cupboard had lots of Chakors, medals and trophies.  Raghav was surprised, he asked Maidam you have won so many shields and cups, why did not you display it.  Now that things have settled why don't you go behind your dream, your passion to pursue running.  No Raaghav, I don't think I will be able to as I have to take care of Anjor and you too. 

His eyes brightened, me, he held her hands looked at her, Maidam, please go ahead and fly high and I donot want to chain your wings.  She said she will not participate but will get herself to be qualified as a Coach.

The process of becoming Coach started with her training sessions which were tedious and Raaghav ensured to take care of Anjor and pick Chakor too from the sessions.  It had been late many a times and she would sleep on his shoulders while driving back due to her tiredness and he would lift her in his arms close to his heart, admiring the plain beauty in her tracks to be carefully placed onto the bed.  She qualified as a Coach and started Coaching the kids and she was felicitated as the best Coach of Northen India.

He was proud when she was addressed as Mrs. Chakor Raaghav Rajvanshi... and they had a special photo shoot too... They took many photos of the couple but she asked the photographer to take a particular photo in private. He was surprised but was happy ... and that special photo was... She hugged him had her head on his chest perfectly fitting into him and smiling.  He held her preciously eyes closed to sublime in that hold and she said Raaghav hug me tight and he did so with pride. 

Raaghav had to go to Lucknow to meet some experts for their silk loom, Chakor who always accompanied him, this time asked him to go as she had some work at the coaching centre. 

He returned only to be surprised that the Haveli was quite empty. Girija told that Teju and Anjor went to meet his Amma and was planning to spend that night there at the Basti and she was also leaving for home and the food was ready on his table.

He asked about Chakor but was told she is yet to come from the coaching centre.  He was worried but got a call from Chakor asking him to eat and to go sleep as she will be coming a bit late but will be escorted by her team till home.

He was restless but nibbled something... He waited and then thought to go to their room and look out from there through the window as it would be facing the gate.

He went up and suddenly the lights went off... He opened the room only to be surprised...

The room was fully decorated with candles and yellow roses all around and their photograph which was taken in private was placed in full size in the centre of the wall behind their bed.  There was a very very subtle music playing, he was awed... He saw a packet on the table writtenfor my Raaghav with love❤️... it was a beautiful white sheer shirt which he changed to. 

He was dazed when he was blindfolded from behind to be brought in front of the mirror... She removed her hands from his eyes and he was mesmerized with her on him back hugging him and all he could see was her hands in white jacquard sleeves. He could hear her heart beat which was rhythming in sync with his.  He slowly brought her from behind to front of him and for a second his heart skipped a beat, forgot to breathe as the angel came in front of him in that yellow saree, beautifully draped. Smiling shy... Her cheeks were blushing...

Her hair was loose, flowing, with that light sindoor which made him beam as it was his mark on her... she wore a mild makeup, a little kajal and a gloss with a mild lavender perfume which was making him loose himself. She wore that yellow saree and only her mangalsutra to keep it very simple...He held her tight as he did not want to faint...

Is he dreaming!!!! His eyes was just looking at the beauty in front of him, holding her very close to him, he could not talk... She cupped his face spoke those words,

I am sorry Raaghav for keeping you wai... he closed her mouth with his palms, Maidaa... she kept her fingers on his lips... it was the first time... he felt her fingers on his lips and she felt his lips...soothed it and it was sending shivers for both.

She took him to the dressing table which had that special cake a very small one just for the two   ... had those special words!!

Forever... yours... Chakor...

Chakorrr... for the first time he called her name... with full of love.

They cut the cake fed each other... With eyes on each other...

For the first time she saw his eyes turning dark with lust, with love and her heart was beating fast...

He held her preciously, close to him, to his heart and said thank you Chakor...

He placed a kiss on her forehead, the first kiss of his and lifted her very very carefully holding her close to his heart which was indeed racing fast.

He placed her on the bed which was filled with yellow roses... very carefully with eyes fully on her... He held her cheeks and was closing in ...

She smiled and said... Raaghav the doors, lowering her eyes in shy...

He placed a gentle kiss on her hands and went to lock the doors...

He sat beside her on the bed pushed her strands... cupped her cheeks...

She said dreamily... Thank you for taking care of me... Thank you for allowing me to fly... And thank you for waiting for me...

She said yes... You have waited enough, for I wait no more to be blossomed!!!

He held her close, very slowly very very preciously kissed both her eyes...

and said

Thank you my angel in yellow for turning to this fellow!!!!            

Raaghav ...she said closing on to him...holding his face... boldly placing a subtle kiss on his lips... I love you more than my life...

Chakor... His voice was so hoarse and husky... He said taking her in to him preciously... I love you, as you are my life as I have no life of my own.

Chanduji was happily breezing through the windows as the curtains were drawing down...

The journey of RagKor has started only to be blossomed more and more...

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Posted: 5 years ago
Sumi dear,
what can I say.. I am speechless right now.

The below lines visualising it and going thru the emotions they went thru, I am in happy tears.

"had been late many a times and she would sleep on his shoulders while driving back due to her tiredness and he would lift her in his arms close to his heart, admiring the plain beauty in her tracks to be carefully placed onto the bed.  

and that special photo was... She hugged him had her head on his chest perfectly fitting into him and smiling.  He held her preciously eyes closed to sublime in that hold and she said Raaghav hug me tight and he did so with pride."


The journey was so beautiful dear, thanks for making us go through it,and I knew it will be beautiful, if only these writers and makers emphasised on it, we would have got to see a beautiful journey of them with MeeJay acing each scene of it.


so good and I enjoyed every bit of this. so so glad, happy to read this.

And I loved how their story was merged with this sukor hug photo that was a complete bliss and divine.


Their each hug in itself a story and with this hug of them , Raghav-chakor journey developed and ended in bliss. Thats so beautiful.


And bonus chakor being coach and he supportive of it. I loved it.


Hugs and Muaahs to you dear.

How I wish, we were blessed with something like this to see..



Edited by LuvSSever - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago
Thanks Uma you made my writing even more beautiful and thanks for that pic of my adories which I treasure the most...
My eyes always tears at this, she being so innocent and completely fits into him perfect, happily smiling and the happiness on his face for he feels proud to bring that effect on her and that slight slant makes me always think he the axis happily holding on to her his world.  

i can watch this non stop  as I sublime myself in this bliss.


coming to the journey... thanks you could visualise it and yes how much I crave for her sports.

Hope I brought some solace...


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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: sumsukor

Thanks Uma you made my writing even more beautiful and thanks for that pic of my adories which I treasure the most...

My eyes always tears at this, she being so innocent and completely fits into him perfect, happily smiling and the happiness on his face for he feels proud to bring that effect on her and that slight slant makes me always think he the axis happily holding on to her his world.  

i can watch this non stop   as I sublime myself in this bliss.


coming to the journey... thanks you could visualise it and yes how much I crave for her sports.

Hope I brought some solace...



Thats so ❤️❤️ written 
Every hug of them just always reminds your this line when i see them , she fits into him so well, completely perfect...

what a bliss that pic was.
thanks for reminding us that dear.

you indeed brought big solace bcoz in actual tho, there are no hopes left for me to see them again in udaan.😭


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Posted: 5 years ago
Sumi dear dhating dhating 😳 Thank you so much for writing the continuation. I was waiting for it...and as usual it is FANTAFAB KA BAAP 👏👏👏
God how much I miss raghav and his maidam and how much I wanted the story to progress like this!!!!

Every sentence of yours, I could visualise MEEJAY and how it would have been. I judt went weak in my knees😉 thinking of the last scene. 

The slow progress of their proximity, he understanding the business and taking care  of the basti... you have not forgotten any point👏...their sleeping together with anjor,  his going away at night, his waiting patiently for her to accept him, room door not being locked, the photos especially the perfect fit, her becoming the coach,  his unadulterated love and concern exactly like suraj,  she finding solace and comfort on his shoulders,  the finale in the yellow saree and the mention of the unlocked door here... all so very well written... hats off to you dear👏

I want to request you to keep writing the continuation of the story as a parallel #udaan  series which we all wanted to see...

Maybe you can actually expand this story into parts,  describing her journey to becoming a coach,  maybe red tapism faced,  small incidents in the haveli which got them closer, etc etc. 

Crux is keep writing these FANTAFAB OS'S and keep entertaining... otherwise we have nothing to look forward to. 😕

Sorry For This Long Reply😉


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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: 77nikita

Sumi dear dhating dhating  😳 Thank you so much for writing the continuation. I was waiting for it...and as usual it is FANTAFAB KA BAAP 👏👏👏

God how much I miss raghav and his maidam and how much I wanted the story to progress like this!!!!

Every sentence of yours, I could visualise MEEJAY and how it would have been. I judt went weak in my knees😉 thinking of the last scene. 

The slow progress of their proximity, he understanding the business and taking care  of the basti... you have not forgotten any point👏...their sleeping together with anjor,  his going away at night, his waiting patiently for her to accept him, room door not being locked, the photos especially the perfect fit, her becoming the coach,  his unadulterated love and concern exactly like suraj,  she finding solace and comfort on his shoulders,  the finale in the yellow saree and the mention of the unlocked door here... all so very well written... hats off to you dear👏

I want to request you to keep writing the continuation of the story as a parallel #udaan  series which we all wanted to see...

Maybe you can actually expand this story into parts,  describing her journey to becoming a coach,  maybe red tapism faced,  small incidents in the haveli which got them closer, etc etc. 

Crux is keep writing these FANTAFAB OS'S and keep entertaining... otherwise we have nothing to look forward to. 😕

Sorry For This Long Reply😉



superbly  said and pointed out nikki.
Entire Os was so fab and indeed hats off to sumi dear.

And yes agree , could visualise MeeJay on each of it and just relish it.

so sumi dear, add me too to the list of ones wanting such continuous Os from you, so that atleast we could visualise Meejay in your beautiful os and emotions , enjoying them in mind and heart by visualising them thru yours.

if only we got to see something like you wrote, we would have been on cloud nine, forum, Twitter and insta, sab would hv gone crazy..Kash yeh Sach hota..:(
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Posted: 5 years ago
@ Nikkiii🤗
thats so lovely... was like a precise writing ...  thank you soo much .

Well you thought I would write??? 

honestly I did not have any idea, but suddenly that insta of Uma and the line of the journey and the vaccuum i was facing not seeing MeeJay  made me write...

Happy for the likes and the special writing of yours... 

Loved it...


@ Uma  thats so so sweet of you to highlight nikki's

me writing more actually you all know I am dumbo with tracks or story just that emotional me and my feelings (acha acha pheelings bey) I pen down...

i am also waiting for those who have left their stories to complete (thats one problem with me, I cannot write story in parts as if I commit I have to deliver 😆😆 the corporate me)

lets hope our tweets, insta trends bring something good atleast a peaceful closure.

thanks to all again
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Posted: 5 years ago
Beautiful story Sumi
The story was so perfect , loved Ragkor's beautiful journey🤗
No words for it
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Beautiful story Sumi

The story was so perfect , loved Ragkor's beautiful journey🤗
No words for it


Thanks so much Sonali 

Your words mean a lot 
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Posted: 5 years ago
Feeling happy for the new beginning of the beautiful journey of Raghav& Chakor. Loved each &every part of the journey from Maidam to Chakor. I can visualize meejay in it bt felt sad that how beautiful this journey could have been but all are ruined by the maker's despicable decision. I don't know whether we will see them again in udaan bt your story make me satisfied & gave me the solace. Happy to see Raghav's involvement to the business & his caring nature even towards the villagers just like Suraj did. Slowly he became a member of the family. Loved how he encouraged Chakor to go back her racing track as he didn't want to be a barrier to her career and gave her time to be comfortable with him. Loved  the portion Raghav felt awed to hear about Suraj & honoured to be loved by Chakor , you didn't forget to mention Suraj 'S name (I liked that as he is an unforgettable character & will always remain in our heart)& the part when Chakor slept on his shoulder while driving and he admired her beauty. Then the romantic night, you make everything perfect,the yellow and white combination in their attire, the room decorations, the small cake cutting, the emotion they have shared. Not only Chanduji we all will very happy if that actually happens but thanks to you for giving us the pleasure.
Thanks so much Smita for your above lovely comment on Twitter..