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Scene: Sameer house in the sitting room. Vishakha is talking to Naina and Sameer.
Vishakha: Teek hain Sameer. Tu jha sakta hai.
Sameer: Par Mummy...
Vishakha: Jhaaa. Go..
Sameer (a little worried looks at Naina): Okay... (He leaves)
Vishakha looks at Naina. Naina is very nervous, she's fidgeting with her bag, looking at the floor. Vishakha closes the door firmly, looks at Naina and smiles.
Vishakha : Use maaregi kiya?
Naina (jumps up): Ji? Kiya? Nahin !!!!
Vishakha: Relax Naina. Mein nahin katti. Bhetto.
They sit down.
Vishakha: Kaise ho?
Naina: Teek hoon.
Vishakha: Nervous hai?
Naina nods.
Vishakha: Kyon?
Naina looks down.
Vishakha: Sameer se pyaar karti hai?
Naina: Ji. Gud se bhi ziyaada.
Vishakha: Kyon?
Naina: Meh samjhi nahin?
Vishakha: Tu Sameer seh kyon pyaar karti hai.
Naina: Woh mere dil ki darkano hai. Jab seh woh mere zindagi meh aya hai, mein neh jeena sikha hai. Woh bohut hi ache insaan hain aur larki ki izzat karta hain. Woh meri khayal rakta hai aur mein unka. Woh dil, nahin jaan hain mera.
Vishakha: Agar mein is rishta koh nahin apnaogi toh tu kiya karegi ?
Naina: Intezaar.
Vishakha looks confused.
Naina: Mein ummar bar Sameer karta intezaar karungi.
Vishakha: Kab tak? Aur tere ghar wale tere sagayi kahin aur karwayenge toh?
Naina: Mein sirf Sameer seh shaadi karungi, uske siwa mein kuwari rahungi ummar bar. Ghar wale kuch bhi karein.
Vishakha: Hmmm
They both sit quietly in their own thoughts.
Vishakha: Ghar mein khon khon hain?
Naina: Chachaji, Chachiji, Papa, Arjun Bhaya, Preeti, Tauji, Taiji, Pralay aur Pooja Didi, par unki shaadi hogayi hain.
Vishakha: Aur papa librarian hain?
Naina: Jhi, hamare school mein.
Vishakha: Unko Sameer keh bare meh pata hain?
Naina: Nahin. Chachaji khon gabar hain.
Vishakha : Chachaji kon bataya lekin papa kon nahin? Kyon? Agar woh yeh rishta kon tukrayega toh?
Naina: Chachaji Unko samjayenge. Ab tak Chachaji meri zimadari Uttar rahein hain.
Vishakha: Tere Mummy Nathan hain?
Naina: Meri paydayis par khuzar gay.
Vishakha: Oh! Sorry!
Naina: Nahin Chachiji neh hamme upno khi tara phala hain.
Silence again. They continue talking, Naina visibly relaxes but still alert. Outside the door Sameer, Munna-Pundit are trying to listen to the conversation between Naina and Vishakha.
Sameer: Kuch sunai nahin dehta.
Munna: Haan, yaar. Yeh aurte itte dhimme kyon bolte?
Pundit: Haan year, hamare tara zhor se kyon nahin bolte?
Sameer- Munna: Shhh!!!
Vishakha and Naina hears this. Naina gets up to go to the door.
Vishakha: Naina rukh!
Outside the boys look worried. Vishakha opens the door, Sameer jumps back, Munna-Pundit fall at Vishakha's feet.
Munna: Happy Diwali Mausi!
Pundit: Happy Diwali Auntiji.
Vishakha: Happy Diwali. Jeete rahon.
Munna-Pundit: Happy Diwali Naina Bhabhi!
Vishakha raises her eyebrows at them and signals them to leave. They plead to stay. Vishakha makes to hit them. They run off. Sameer looks at Naina and smiles. She smiles wanly. He leaves reluctantly. Vishakha closes the door and shakes her head.
They both sit down again.
Vishakha: Tun Agarwal hain nah?
Naina nods.
Vishakha: Aur hum Maheshwari hain? Agarwal aur Maheshwari meh beech rishta nahin hoon sakta, aisa samaj kehta hain?
Naina: Mein aur Chachaji yeh nahin maanteh.
Vishakha: Aur beautiful ghar wale?
Naina: Hum unne samjha dahenge.
Vishakha: Aur woh maan jayenge?
Naina looks down and nods.
Vishakha: Yakeen hain tujhe?
Naina: Jhi. Chachaji bhi saat dahenge unok neh aisa kahan tha.
Vishakha: Acha. Yeh asaan nahin hoga, mujhe pata hain. Experience hain mujhe.
Naina looks confused.
Vishakha: Yeh baat chor. Aur bata. Teri ghoobiyaan kiya hai.
Naina looks shyly and says: Mujme aisa kuch khaas nahin hain. Sirf yeh keh mein aap keh bete seh beyhad, beypanah muhabbat karti hoon. Unko hamesha khush rakne khi khoshish karungi.
Vishakha: Shaadi keh baad kiya karegi?
Naina: Mujhe CA bannha hain. Aur lekak bhi.
Vishakha: Aur kaam karegi shaadi keh baad?
Naina: Jhi. Aur ghar bhi sambalungi.
Vishakha: Hmmm
Naina aside (Hmmm kah matlab kiya hain?)
They talk some more. Meanwhile in Sameer's room the three boys are sitting. Munna has his hands on his mouth, Pundit has his hands on his ears and Sameer is sitting with his eyes closed.
Naina runs out of the house, down the driveway towards the road. Munna-Pundit see her and gesture to each other.
Sameer: Who awaaz kiya thi?
Pundit: Mein sun nahin sakta.
Sameer: Munna?
Munna does not respond.
Sameer opens his eyes. He sees Naina getting into an auto.
Sameer: Naina chaligay? Aur Tumlok dekhte rehgay.
Munna-Pundit look at him. He slaps their hands away.
Sameer: Chup kyon hain Bhai?
Munna: Are yaar, bhoolgay tu nah kahan hum chup rahe.
Flashback: The boys enter Sameer's room. Munna pretends he is Vishakha. Pundit pretends to be Naina.
Munna: Toh tu mere hero beta seh pyaar karti hain.
Pundit: Jjjhi Mmmummyjjji.
Munna: Sameer seh ya uske paise se pyaar hain?
Sameer: Chup kar, yaar. Waise bhi bohut tension meh hoon aur tumlok dimak kha dahi bana rahe hoon.
Munna-Pundit take up the speak no evil, hear no evil pose.
Present:
Sameer: Woh sab choro. Naina kyon chaligay?
Munna-Pundit: Hamme kyon puch rahe hoon? Chalo Mausi seh puchte.
They virtually stumble into the sitting room. Vishakha is sitting watching TV.
Sameer: Mummy?
Vishakha: Hmm?
Sameer: Naina chaligay?
Vishakha: Hm.
Sameer: Kyon?
Vishakha: Hamare baat khatam hogayi toh woh chaligay.
Sameer: Hum koh bye kehna binah?
Vishakha: Mujhe gabar nahin. Jab baat khatam buying, woh ut khar chaligay.
Sameer: Toh Mummy, Naina kaisi laghi?
Vishakha: Soch khar batadunghi,
Sameer: Mummyyy!!!
Vishakha: Nahin Sameer, zabardasti nahin.
Just then Mama, Mami, Devaan and Poonam walk in with loads of packets, They all talk at once. The boys stand around looking worried.
Meantime Naina reaches the place where she agreed to meet Preeti and Juhi. They arrive simultaneously. Naina looks pre-occupied.
Preeti: Tho, rishta pakhi?
Naina doesn't respond.
Preeti: Behna, diyaan khidr hain tera? Sasuma nah kiya kahan? Rishta pakhi?
Naina: Preeti woh sab choro. Mujhe bata airport par kiya Hua take meh ghar par ache se jhoot bhol sakhe.
Preeti: Teek hain. Tujhe gabar Anuradha Paudwal nah itna acha gaya, itna acha gaya, hum sab pagalpan hogayi. Hena Juhi.
The three talk until they get home. There's merriment and firecrackers are being burst in the society. They all participate.
Sameer's house they're also burning firecrackers and all seem happy, particularly Vishakha. Sameer wonders why she is so happy and showering him with so much love. He nevertheless enjoys himself with his family and friends.
Precap: Naina at Chachaji 's bedroom door saying, Chachiji Mujhe aap aur Chachaji seh zaroori baat Karin hain.
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