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Ramya

@Ramya_98

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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Viswasruti
Love's deceit is the theme of this poem ... you expressed it in a dulcet way with the intertwined emotions and in-depth feelings. The hurt that kills the tenderness of the heart in such tempestuous moment which allows the pain and hurt to gush out like a river, to lay down the love to die! It lets you forget what really happened and offers you a distortion of the truth! In last two lines, you chronicled the acceptance of deceit with grace! Wonderful poetic expression Ramya . I saw in this poem the rhythmic outbursts of emotion are spontaneous, unintentional and irresistible too!👏

Madhuri di, I don't know how to thank you for that review. It makes me feel elated but at the same I don't think my piece deserves this.

Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

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Ramya

@Ramya_98

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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: SenAnu
Already told you,
FANTASTIC!!!!!!!!!

Originally posted by: _Eternity_
brilliant 👏
Taylor swift she is awesome..❤️

Thank you! Love you both ❤️

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Ramya

@Ramya_98

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Posted: 6 years ago

A Night Retreat

I woke up one morning to a serene sight,

Found myself in one of those castles, right,

Decided that moment that I wasn't out,

Even if they had wiggly worms with sprouts.

I had heard of more than just magic wands,

Knew centaurs were as real as marching ants,

And there was nothing that was keeping me from dropping by,

For I was as free as the birds in the sky.

I laughed through the funny tunes the violins played,

And cast aside tea and a table laid,

As the want to explore took the best of me,

And if there was snow outside I just wanted to ski.

I glanced at the books fancying a read on return,

And stopped for some warmth where the fire burned,

Breaking out of the teak door into the blooming streets,

Bringing me out of my night retreat.

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Edited by .moonglade. - 6 years ago

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proteeti

@wayward

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Posted: 6 years ago

This is so beautiful! Lovely expressions and a etherealty all throughout! <3

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NONIE

@Nonie12345

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Posted: 6 years ago

Fantastic poem Ramya ⭐️

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MsChanadlerBong

@MsChanadlerBong

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Posted: 6 years ago

such a beautiful one.

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Amaya Rishikesh

@Seraphina231

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Posted: 6 years ago

Poetess ❤️

I love it! I told you, you are born to write poetry, and I stick by that.

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Janaki

@RamKiSeeta

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Posted: 6 years ago

Wow, amazing poetry, Ramya! 👏 I don't know how you do it, but your rhyming is so perfect and has just the right rhythm. This was truly a joy to read.

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Madhuri

@Viswasruti

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Posted: 6 years ago

A pragmatic approach towards life which set positivity in the first sentence itself, great!😊

Feeling like a free bird to fly in the sky -- shows that the eagerness to reach the far-off lands in search of love, glee, happiness whatever-- indicating an unconditional love which touched the heart, infusing new jollity into the life!

Traversing from a night's retreat into the vast canvas of the ever-changing skyscape-- have to say your imagery is at it's best Ramya!👏

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Ramya

@Ramya_98

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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Radhikerani
This is so beautiful! Lovely expressions and a etherealty all throughout! <3

Thank you, Pro! <3

Originally posted by: Nonie12345
Fantastic poem Ramya ⭐️

Originally posted by: -PyaariBhootni-
Fabb one👏

Originally posted by: PanchaliKaArjun
such a beautiful one.

Thank you, guys! Your support keeps me going. 😳

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