New mystery story: Saturday is for murder? UPDATED Final part on pg 5

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Posted: 8 years ago
I'm here with another story! Trying to give mystery a shot since my last story was a romantic one.
I'm completely new to this, so I don't know if it'll be upto the mark. 

So here's a teaser.
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"Guys we have a new case. Its quite unusual."

"Kya hai boss? ", Rajbir asked.

" This was a two weeks back. Viveka vihar me. Gupta marriage hall me, pandit ka murder ho gaya. Aur abhi last week adarsh nagar me Shri Krishna Hall me dusre ek pandit ka murder. Next chaar din pehle okhla ke Raichand hall me teesre pandit ka murder. Teeno pandit ka murder shaadi ke mantra padhte padhte hua hai. Just one single gunshot heart pe and dead on the spot. Har ek murder saturday ko hua hai. Police se ye case cbi ko handle kiya hai as they are out of leads. We have to solve this case as soon as possible. "

" Par pehle in sab me hume link dhundna hoga. Kya link ho sakta hai? Raghav tumhe kya lagta hai? ", inquired bikram.

" In sab pandit ka koi link ek dusre se? ", asked raghav.

" Swati wohi pata laga rahi hai. "

" Boss koi link nahi in sab ka. No background link nothing. "said swati.

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How is it? I may update it by today or tomorrow! 

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Posted: 8 years ago
Wow new story it's really interesting continue soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
Interesting. Please continue.
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Posted: 8 years ago
wow interesting story .thanks a lot for this wonderful story
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Posted: 8 years ago
Nice teaser interesting. please continue soon 
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I hope I did well, since this is my first time I'm writing this genre. 

Part 1

Trisha was always in time for work. There was no denying. On the contrary raghav was always late. 
"Raghav aaj phir se-"

Raghav moved closer to her. She breathed heavily when he moved closer. 

"Raghav kya kar rahe ho "

Suddenly he removed a rose from behind her ear. 

" Sorry. Woh kya hai na mai jab subah aaraha tha tab ek bacha ko ye ful bech raha tha usse ye sundar gulab kharidne ka dil kiya. Aur ye magic trick toh tumhe yaad hoga jo zorino se seekha tha."

He motioned her to take the rose from him. She smiled and took it. While raghav moved towards the conference room, she kept the rose safely in her purse. 
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"Guys we have a new case. Its quite unusual."

"Kya hai boss? ", Rajbir asked.

" This was a two weeks back. Viveka vihar me. Gupta marriage hall me, pandit ka murder ho gaya. Aur abhi last week adarsh nagar me Shri Krishna Hall me dusre ek pandit ka murder. Next teen din pehle okhla ke Raichand hall me teesre pandit ka murder. Teeno pandit ka murder shaadi ke mantra padhte padhte hua hai. Just one single gunshot heart pe and dead on the spot. We have to solve this case as soon as possible. "

" Par pehle in sab me hume link dhundna hoga. Kya link ho sakta hai? Raghav tumhe kya lagta hai? ", inquired bikram.

" In sab pandit ka koi link ek dusre se? ", asked raghav.

" Swati wohi pata laga rahi hai. "

" Boss koi link nahi in sab ka. No background link nothing. "said swati.

" Bikram and Rajbir tum dono un shaadi ke couples se enquiry karo shayad usme koi link mile. "

" Trisha tum aur mai tab tak Dr. Aarti ke lab me zara bodies ko Hi bolke aate hai", he said with a wide smile. She rolled her eyes at his childish behaviour.

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At Dr. Aarti's office.

"Autopsy report ke baad pata chala hai ki teeno body me goli seedhe heart ke uss exact point pe lagi hai ki goli lagte hi insaan mar jaye. "

" Matlab skilled shooter. " Said Trisha.

" And yeh goli saare bhi ek hi hai", said raghav looking at the bullets. "Upar se ye saare goliyaan imported hai."

"Tumhe kaise pata? "

" Boss, ye dekho goli ke side pe. Ye Russian rifle ka hai. I'm sure gun choti hogi because koi badi gun hall me itne saare logo ke samne laa nahi sakta. "

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In Trisha's car.

" Koi high profile criminal hi hoga. Ye guns koi bada criminal hi import kar sakta hai. "

" I agree boss. "

" Par koi pandits ko kyu marega? "

" Shayad tumhare jaise uss criminal ko shaadi se allergy hogi", he laughed.

"Raghav! "

" Just kidding. "

" I hope Rajbir aur Bikram ko kuch mila ho. "

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In the cbi office.

" Boss interesting cheez mili "

" Unn teeno cases me se do marriage couple same the. Humne teeno ka background check kiya"

"Rashmi aur Abhinav pehle do pandit ke murder ke couple. Abhinav ek rich khaandan ka hai. Aur Rashmi ek orphan hai jo foster parents ke saath rehti hai. Initially abhinav ke parents against the shaadi ke par end me agree kar diya. "

" Aur dusre ek couple, Mukti aur Rahul. Mukti ki shaadi kisi aur se hone wali thi par parents ke pressure me uski shaadi rahul se ho rahi hai. Interesting baat ye hai ki Rahul ke parents aur Abhinav ke parents are close friends. "

" Ek kaam karo dono abhinav aur rahul ke parents ko cbi office bulao", said Trisha.

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Interrogation room.

With Abhinav's parents.

"So humne suna hai ki aapko Rashmi se problem tha. "

" Nahi, hume koi problem nahi tha usse. ", said Abhinav's dad.

" Bilkul nahi. Kitni achi ladki hai woh. " said Abhinav's mom.

Raghav and Trisha move out of the room.

" Ye jhoot bol rahe hai", said raghav."Inke expressions dekhke pata lagta hai ki ye kuch chupa rahe hai"

With Rahul's parents.

"Hume pata laga hai aap Abhinav ke family se close hai. Aap phir bhi unke shaadi me nahi gaye? ", inquired Rajbir.

" Woh hum busy the tabhi. "

" Par shaadi toh do baar hui thi. Aap dono time busy the? "

" Ji Haan. "

Raghav noticed the uncomfortable nature of both.

After they moved out of the room, raghav asked Rajbir to do his research by asking people in his khufiya khabar to get details from both ceo of companies.

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Next day.

" Trisha, raghav muje khabar mili hai ki rahul aur abhinav me partnership ki baat chal rahi thi. Par amount of shares ke vajah se dono ne partnership se inkaar kar diya. Dono ko zyaada profit chahiye tha. Isliye dono families abhi ghulte milte nahi hai. "

" Ek link mila tha case ke liye ab woh bhi tut gaya ", said Trisha sounding frustrated.

" Don't give up Trisha, " raghav said trying to ease the situation seeing her tensed up." Rajbir tum aur Bikram Rashmi ke ghar jake aao. Shayad udhar se tumhe koi reason mile jise abhinav ke parents ne shaadi ke liye agree kiya ho. "

Trisha was already frustrated. Patience wasn't clearly her virtue. There was no link yet. Raghav had just came in with two cups of coffee for both of them.

Bikram entered the room with some news.

" Rashmi ke foster parents uske maa papa jaise hi hai. Apparently, abhinav ke parents ne shaadi se bohot inkar kiya. Par jab Rashmi ke parents ne dahej me unhe 50 lakh dene ki baat ki tab jaake unhone Haa kaha. "

They were back to square one, Trisha thought. No leads left. She banged the file in her hands in frustration.

" Trisha chill we will find something. Mukti ki family se kuch. "

" Raghav maine mukti ke uss boyfriend ka pata lagaya jisse usse shaadi karni thi par parents ne mana kiya. Uske parents ne uss boyfriend ko mukti se shaadi naa karne ke liye usse Malaysia ke ek hotel me 50,000 ki naukri lake di. Mukti ne end me rahul se apne marzi se hi shaadi kiya kyu ki uske paas koi choice nahi bacha tha", said swati.

"We are back to square one. Ek week hogaya ko aaya aur woh killer waha apna next location pe khun karne ke liye ready hoga. Nothing common between anything", said Trisha clearly angry.

Raghav thought for a moment. Suddenly he said," Ek clue mil gaya"

Ye dekho he said showing his laptop to the team. It was a map of Delhi. "Pehla murder viveka vihar. Dusra adarsh nagar. Teesra okhla. Uska next shikar Bijwasan me."

"Par raghav Bijwasan me shaadi ke kitne hall honge. How will we know kaha murder hoga? "

" Boss, Bijwasan me around 10 shaadi ke hall hai", said swati searching on her laptop.

"Inn dus hall me se koi bhi ho sakta hai Trisha ", said raghav.

"Aaj Saturday hai guys. Aaj hi woh murder karega. We don't have time", said Trisha

"We need to go to Bijwasan soon. Lets go guys hum car me strategy soch lenge."

Just before getting in the car, Trisha gets a call.

"Jai hind sir. "

" Trisha, tumhare case ka kya hua? Ek aur pandit ki laash mili hai Bijwasan me Birla hall me. Trisha find the killer soon. This is getting out of hands. I know case complicated hai par next murder ke pehle I want you and team to solve case. "

" Guys murder already ho chuka hai. Chief ka phone tha. Bijwasan me hi hua hai. "

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So what are your theories. Do let me know! 

Reviews good or bad are always welcome! 

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Posted: 8 years ago
thanks for the update dear
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Posted: 8 years ago
Such a wonderful update 
Loved the rose scene and she had kept it safely 
Case is interesting absolutely no idea who could be the murderer no loopholes such a brilliant presentation 
Trisha's frustration for no leads is just awesome after all she is the one who is answerable
Loved the deduction of Raghav as usual it was bang on 
It was hilarious that he said koi tumari jaisi Shaadi se Nafrat Kartha hai woh hi criminal hog a  
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Posted: 8 years ago
Nice update. First of all a very interesting story with lots of suspense. Raghav trying to flirt with Trisha nice like shown in cases. Raghav always tries to cool and relax her mood. I hope they will a link and get the killer soon. Update next part eagerly waiting for it ðŸ˜Š
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Originally posted by: Az07

Such a wonderful update 

Loved the rose scene and she had kept it safely 
Case is interesting absolutely no idea who could be the murderer no loopholes such a brilliant presentation 
Trisha's frustration for no leads is just awesome after all she is the one who is answerable
Loved the deduction of Raghav as usual it was bang on 
It was hilarious that he said koi tumari jaisi Shaadi se Nafrat Kartha hai woh hi criminal hog a  

I'm really glad you liked the update!
 I was a bit worried if it wouldn't turn out well, thanks for liking it! 
In the next update they'll try to think another approach for finding the killer! Stay tuned!