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Posted: 8 years ago
Arre its ok... 
EXCITED for your next write up.
And pls don't underestimate youself. You are a nice simple writer!!! And that's amazing! 
Keep writing.
Waiting for the next one :-D
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Posted: 8 years ago
OS2: Someday
(Disclaimer: All characters in this write-up are imaginary & purely fictitious)

When I saw you I fell in love, and you smiled because you knew.
-William Shakespeare
 
I know you know, Just the way you know I know too.
& the best part is when we both pretend to not know,
Just coz we don't know why we know.
-Me
 
 
He pulled her closer to him in the heat of the moment

His proximity was too much for her to bear

They both began breathing heavily,

Her heartbeat drumming against her chest

This was it...finally it was about to happen...their first kiss.

Her eyesight was jumping in & out of focus

Paving the audacious path from his eyes to his lips & back to his eyes

Waiting...hoping...wanting...

His eyes were intense like he could see through her soul

Like a world didn't exist for him beyond her

Like she was all he ever wanted to see...ever wanted to touch

...all that he had craved for all his life

He was slowly closing the distance between them

His long locks of hair breezing towards her...tickling her forehead

His breath heavy...like a sedative... mingling with her senses...

His grip tightening around her waist...pulling her closer to the warmth of his body...

They had gotten this far before...but then he would snap out of it and distance himself immediately

And every fibre in her body would crave for him to come back...to close in the space between them...

She was ready...She had always been for him...and she knew she would always be...

But he had inhibitions...she didn't know why...He would always pull away...

What was he afraid of??

She knew the intensity of his feelings for her...

She knew the way she affected him at times

Her mere touch would make him jump out of his skin & he would immediately put some distance between them

She knew the way he looked at her lips

She knew exactly what he was thinking at those moments

Thinking how sweet her raspberry lipstick might taste

She knew the way his breathing would go erratic every single time she came too close

Like a tornado fuelling a wildfire in her body

She knew the fervour in his firm grip that held her fragile frame so close to him

Like he would never let go of her

She knew how much she mattered to him at times

The way he would breathe her in...

Like she was his oxygen...vital...like his life depended on her...She knew...

It was all there...all happening again...in that moment...now...

She was hoping...praying...he wouldn't come to his senses

That he wouldn't hold back...

"Not this time please...Dont hold back..."

"I need you, I love you, don't you get it...? I love you sooo much...Please don't hold back "she was screaming on the inside

But frozen on the outside...captivated in him...waiting...wanting...dizzily drowning in him

Her mind was fogging, heady with his intoxicating breath

His eyes were fixated on her parted lips...  now trembling under his passionate gaze...

...Anticipating the tingling sensation that would run through the course of her being with the first soft touch of his lips...

He was moving in... Coming closer and closer...this was it...she couldn't take it any more...

...her eyes closed of their own accord...and she lifted her face closer to him..Surrendering...


CUT


The director yelled...

In a flash of a second he had moved away from her...

Taking every inch of her soul with him

Leaving her bereft

She opened her eyes quickly, turned her back to him and hastily gestured towards her make-up dada for touch-up... reeling from the inertia of the moment...acclimatising herself to the void now present between them...

The director was applauding them for the shot that they has just given

But it was all incoherent rambling for her...

The moment had passed...

What was she thinking? How could she let herself get so carried away?

She knew the scene...She knew the nuances...she knew the lines

That moment was never going to go beyond that

It's just an act...it always was... and it will always be...she knew that too...

Senseless fiction...Epitomising her emotions...Leaving her incomplete...always

A frown had appeared on her face

His conversation with the director had ended, and the scene had turned out to be perfect

He started moving away from her...holding his lines for the next group scene...

She too took her script and started to feign memorizing while walking away from him

"Vrushika? "He called out to her...

She turned around to look at him with a frown

His eyes were glinting with some unnamed emotion...

"Group dance rehearsals after shoot. Come on time, or else!" He teased, making a playful punching gesture in the air towards her with his fist

...but stopped mid-way, assessed her expressions and immediately his face lit up with a mysterious, triumphant yet innocent smile...

And she came alive once again...

Mirroring his innocence and smiling thoughtlessly back at him...

"Make-up queen!"he teased

"Shut up... you know taking off this makeup takes time" she retorted, punching him for real in his arm

"Why would I know? I don't want to know" he grimaced, smiling at her with twinkling eyes, and walked away towards his vanity...with a slight bounce in his steps

Leaving her smiling & hoping...

Hoping against all hope...

That maybe just maybe... someday... he would know what these moments of intertwining reality and fiction really meant to her...

Maybe just maybe... someday ...he would know that he is the one...

Maybe just maybe... someday... he would see how much she loves him...

Maybe just maybe...Shantanu...Someday...that moment would complete itself for real...
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Posted: 8 years ago
I will comment by night! This needs time :')
Unreserved!

This was one hell of a story. I'm slayed. 

The starting quote's, the depth in them, is just something which is unexplainable but at the same time the most explainable phrase. Such a paradox created there, ah I loved it. Needless to say the Shakespeare's one was perfect, but yours, di ; it was so good. I mean, it had a tinch of crudeness its style. I could feel the raw-ness that you have kept. And I loved that. You had hooked me on with just those opening lines, I guess that proves this one a winner. ;)


Then when I made way to your main plot. Man! I was left in hanging somewhere in third space. And I'll tell you I wish I would never come out from that third space, where you had transported me too. 

According to your note, yes I could feel that rustiness you had towards to such a topic, and believe me di that enhanced the Story. It gave it an innocent touch. The deficiency of your knowledge in that area, gave it a beguiling experience for all of us I can assure. 

This was something, that touched my heart instantly. And I really want/wish that it should've happened, not only to Vrushika but even Shantanu. 

Sigh! Lastly would like to say this peice of yours was definitely prodigious. And what an emotional journey it was to read this OS!

Keep writing :D
Love,
Ana ❤️


PS: sorry for such a long comment :P
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Posted: 8 years ago
Wow..its awesome.. Just amazing.. Loved it 👏Edited by sneharay - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
My god!... I'm speechless! 
Seriously... this is beautiful <3

How I love them! 
And now I love you too for portraying them so realistically.
They were one masterpiece... and now this is one!
Rutu this is beyond expectations... I loved it!

Love the way you show Vrushika... having seen so many ivs of her ... anybody can easily assume that she has feelings for him. Now whether its true or not is something only time can tell...

Loved the opening lines. Yes they both know and they still pretend!
How I wish all this was true... 
I love them.

We miss them so much ki these heartwarming os and ff is the only way we can remember them... cherish those memories created by them... feel them. 
Dil se bada wala THANK YOU!

Also big hugs from Krups..she loved it! She is not on IF and will not be able to tweet so she asked me to convey it to you.😊

Also pls write more and more... want to read more.
Keep it up.

With loads of love
Priya😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
[QUOTE=pri98.arora]My god!... I'm speechless! 
Seriously... this is beautiful <3

How I love them! 
And now I love you too for portraying them so realistically.
They were one masterpiece... and now this is one!
Rutu this is beyond expectations... I loved it!

Love the way you show Vrushika... having seen so many ivs of her ... anybody can easily assume that she has feelings for him. Now whether its true or not is something only time can tell...

Loved the opening lines. Yes they both know and they still pretend!
How I wish all this was true... 
I love them.

We miss them so much ki these heartwarming os and ff is the only way we can remember them... cherish those memories created by them... feel them. 
Dil se bada wala THANK YOU!

Also big hugs from Krups..she loved it! She is not on IF and will not be able to tweet so she asked me to convey it to you.😊

Also pls write more and more... want to read more.
Keep it up.

With loads of love
Priya😊

Thank you so much priya, You have no idea what ur comment has meant to me, I am so happy u connected with this OS really means a lot!! & yes I thanked krups personally on twitter too ty for conveying her msg❤️ Surely will write more😊 u guys give me enough motivation to not give up on writing ty again😳
Love,
Rutu
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: sneharay

Wow..its awesome.. Just amazing.. Loved it 👏


Thank you Sneha😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
VruShan OS ❤️ 😃

"I know you know, Just the way you know I know too.& the best part is when we both pretend to not know,Just coz we don't know why we know." Perfect👍🏼

2nd half..it was soo vrushanish..shantanu teasing vrush n vrush ka shut up..i miss them..
And and and my fav part 

"Maybe just maybe... someday ...he would know that he is the one...
Maybe just maybe... someday... he would see how much she loves him..

Loved lt..It felt soo real..awesome work Rutu👏
N ya hope.. someday...
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Posted: 8 years ago
Awesome work rutu.. ..totally into vrushan world.. .may be one day ll these dreams will come true.. .
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Posted: 8 years ago
Hey rutu
Such a beautiful piece of write-up
U certainly met up with the expectations no second thought to it
The beginning I could predict it to b a shooting sequence.
Well I was right..
And the way it went out was beautiful.
Though the ending made me little sad and incomplete (not in a bad way) it was a writers piece indeed. Not that I expected them to b together at the end of os it was well written. We understand ur note before the writeup. Whatever u had written jus simple and sweet.
It kind of made me emotional thinking on vrushyy.
Jus want vrushan badly. The recent statements of these two have made us all the more mad
I have mixed up feelings after reading. Give shantanu POV too I think that would add up to it's awesomeness.

P.s. I always find the reversal of ur os in the sense sm is into her and vm is all in her masti always and we are crazy to note so much of them in  a 2min iv too..