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Posted: 8 years ago
Hi everybody.. I m Trisha..before you start..sm warnings..
1-this is my first piece of writing which i chose to make public
2- NOT  a love story..no couples
3-this has already been rejected by my cousins
4-- i suck at endings..endings may make you go.."wht the beep was that!!! It could hav got a far better end!!"
5-ignore typos n grammer mistakes plz..😳
So read at you own risk..
 
FANTASY

I tried hard to open my eyes..but my dear eyelids refused to separate just lyk mushy lovers..  When i failed in my desperate attempts..i let them remain the way they were..closed.I realised a truth..open eyes may show us everythin..bt closed eyes show us somthing beyond everything..I had never imagined that the world would look so beautiful with closed eyes..i could see what i had always wanted.I now realised how my heart n my eyes had become soulmates..they knew exactly wht the other wanted.The highest mountains,most beautiful sceneries seemed to have travelled all the way to my eyes..Glittering streams,fresh aromatic breeze just strong enough to caress my tresses,periodic gushes to touch my cheeks turning them to crimson like fresh tomatoes kept in a basket..I felt beautifull..in a way no guy could make me feel..
The trees showered leaves which became my tiara and the flower beds became my stage..the high summits witnessed my coronation silently yet enthusiastically
  Suddenly..i felt someone shaking me..asking me to get up..i did not want to..my fantasy was amazing..i didn't want to open my eyes n be held like a criminal in the real world..
 Who is this wailing?
A boy?
Who?
Why?
Why cant I REST IN PEACE?
AM I deprived of tht too?
I felt a power gripping me..taking me away..it was something stronger than my decision to stay back..what was it?
My eyes..who had refused to obey me..opened at one command of that power..I was in a dilemma.. Wht was it?
Who was it?

To be continued...
Constructive kya kaisi bhi criticism is always welcom🀣
Do like and comment..because i hav a high inferiority complex as far as this thing is considered..
Loving you all..
Keep smiling..
Trisha..:)
Arghh..dekhenge jo hoga..nt posting anywhere else...πŸ˜•
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Posted: 8 years ago
Beautiful Trisha.
Amazing. Continue soon.
But is it a fan fiction or just a fiction?
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Posted: 8 years ago
RESERVED
UNRESERVED

Words... They have an exotic beauty of their own to create master-pieces worth cherishing and I got a glimpse of it here as well. Way to go girl!!
It's much hard to believe that this is your first set of creativity... Trust me it's much better than what many established writers have to offer...
That splendid description of the virtual world much akin to the positive realism of the world that only close eyes can visualize is so captivating! I just loved the metaphorical usage of words there.. Fantastic!
Did I somewhere read criminal, eh??
I just can't wait to read the next part already!!

Regards
K
Edited by -Kryptic.Keya- - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!wow!!wow!!!!!
I jusssttt lovvveeeddd ittt!
it was amazing...
beautiful fiction yaar...
or kuch new b...
do post the next part asap..:-)
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Posted: 8 years ago
res.
unres

it's awesome superb lovely lovely
lovely lovely lovely lovely lovely

it's very different and interesting concept.
very very nice and interesting starting 

very very well writing didu.πŸ‘
love it. update asap.😊
Edited by sudipto-69 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Wow yr sounds intrstng
Loved the proloug

For sure cntniue soon

Excited to read
Update soon
Wtng

Love u
Keep smiling
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Posted: 8 years ago
Beautiful girl...
I think u shld write more often ...
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Posted: 8 years ago
Trisha Baby Love it
I want to come there and hug you πŸ€—
It's very nice the use of words and knitting them together was awesome.
Maybe you got inspiration πŸ˜‰ from the journey

Love you
&
Do pm me when you continue...
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Posted: 8 years ago
Nice
Beautifully penned

Eagerly waiting
Continue soon

Love
Ayushi
Posted: 8 years ago
wwoo..
trishu...this is something different...interesting..,
dno what's it..but u do write well...
do continu.. πŸ˜‰