The Black Anarkali | in progress | an AbhiGya SS by mina - Page 6

Nice story. Loved it 

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Edited by kubare - 9 years ago

Warning. I am going to nit pick.

First the things i loved. RAGHAV!!! Oh how he reminded me of my own school/college days and the crazy stuff we used to to get up to. My best friend was a guy too, and though he is nothing like Raghav, the camaraderie is the same. Got to call him now 😊.

And "head of Sia Corporation". I was 🤣. Yeah, ok, i get amused by the weirdest things - but Mina!! This was awesome 😆.

And i love Pragya here. Here dawning realization that she is losing herself, and rediscovering her own personality in the safe haven of friendship. I just wanted to hug her.

Oh and before i forget. I like Aliya too and the way Nanad-Bhabhi are trying to build a bridge. And the fact that she can dress up her Bhabhi lights her up. That was - awww.

Ok. Now for the nit. And just so you know, its a nit because this was from you. In most other stories, i would just breeze by this entire section with a "whatever". But from you - ummm. No. Niet. So what am i going on and on about?? Tanu. That entire section in the 2nd update smacked of laziness and Mina taking the easy way out. Seriously woman?? You can do so much better. Tanu is a model, perhaps even with international exposure. Even if she does not have that level of exposure, she is still a model. And she does not know how to eat oyesters? Or table manners? Forget that - simple, basic etiquette? Nope. Not buying it. Granted, models can be bitches. Why them - we all can be, given enough provocation. But a model is trained to present the best of herself in any situation, especially in public.  And here she is in a public arena, with powers that be, and she knows it. She may be a bimbo, but she knows her role and how to play it.

I am loving this SS 'coz of Raghav and his friendship with Pragya. But Mina, this update left me with an overwhelming sense of disappointment in Mina, the writer, pandering to the public and taking the easy route. Please don't. Especially since you write so very well.

[And please, please, please - don't take this the wrong way. I wouldn't have written the above if i didn't care. And if i didn't think you would understand my point. I expect the same from you, btw - rip my writing to shreds so i know where to improve and how].

Amazing update loved reading I wonder what conversation between Abhi and Pragya will be when they go home can't wait to read the next part

I like how you got Pragyas friend in the story and using him to make abhi jealous

Raghav </3 </3 </3 </3 </3 </3 </3
MInaaa fantabulous, stupendous, just amazing update yaar Hehe
Loved the over protective Ragav yaar. Don't be mad but i love Ragav more in ur story then Abhi😆
Just loved the way he was trying to make Abhi jealous. And OMG Tanu part. ahahhh, here is a boy not flattered by her so called beauty😆. Loved the way he ignored her presence and indirectly insulted her.

I loved each and every bit of it,,,,

Hi Mina! I can't believe I still haven't commented on this yet. Too busy with the (real-life) fambam I guess. Loved the update - especially how much Raghav looks out for Pragya. I also liked the bit where you talk about the difference between pre-marriage and post-marriage Pragya - I love that she had the self-awareness to realise that. 

loved your story

Update sooon 

This is really good! I love the rapid pace of the story and Raghav seems like a wonderful foil for our dear Pragya, great to see her dish some sass back!