Originally posted by: Rasgulla_sp
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I am so proud of myself 😃. Do you know when I had guessed it is Anjali who is after Khushi? When Jiman got Arnav's address to meet Khushi and Anjali didnt follow him immediately into the house. After that I could clearly read every hint that you had dropped. Before that I was thinking it is Shyam. But I enjoyed this story in spite of my early guesswork because it is brilliantly penned. You have written it well. The plot is engaging. The psychological messed-up-ness of Anjali is bang on. The sub-plots are dark enough. The state of affairs in which Arnav Khushi find themselves in are strange to the t. Their disparate ways of living. Their quick, snapping dialogues, especially Arnav's. And their sexual tension. Of course Disillusioned was a great read!
I know of Jeevan, Jumanji, even Jeejaji. But what kind of a name is Jiman??
Now to the ending and our scrap exchange. I didnt feel the ending was open or if I were to stretch it, it was near close enough. See, Arnav is too noble a criminal to stay one when faced with the 'indomitable power of love' combined with Khushi's 'never-ending love and determination to have him' 😛 And come on, they want the sex too. Ek ad kisses idhar udhar arent sufficient! 😉 Enough of the cheeky me.
For her love of Arnav, you have made Khushi swear on her place of worship... her work, for which she even accepted damaged relationship with her father. Now that calls for something. Upon that you have also shown that Khushi plans to pursue Arnav till he submits. Plus, you made Arnav swear on his profession which he has once already, though temporarily, given up for Khushi and this I am talking of after Khushi 'fired' him. What he can do once for her, he can do again and this time permanently. This was the practical me.
Now the romantic me. Strictly my views: Traditionally, men are the protectors and the providers. They are expected to go out there and conquer the world. Traditionally, these same men are expected to go down on their knees to propose love to the women they have fallen for. Arnav might want to go out there and nick every valuable possible. But love will bring him to his knees, to Khushi. Bas!
Now the idealist me. I am really not fond of criminals, even the white-collared ones. And between Arnav and Khushi, Arnav needs to change his profession pronto. I cant expect him to change overnight but I want him to change for the better and use his brains in conscientious and hard-working ways. Double bas!
God! You made me talk more of the ending than the story itself!
PS: The only thing that I was left wanting was to see Khushi falling in love. I could see Arnav steadily falling in love clearly; cant say the same for Khushi. Her thoughts and feelings were not fully explored. Sorry 😔
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