Paro Rudra: Conflagration (OS) - Awarded!! |OS of the week| - Page 7

Originally posted by: BondJ007

How I didn't come upon this sooner,I wonder.

I love it.

The fourth part especially,is exceptionally well-written

Her emotional trauma at having seen her parents' funeral is very realistic.

And because I'm obnoxious that way,I love that you've made sure that all the four parts are together. 😆

Hope that you come up with something even better soon.

😊

Beautifully written, loved it. Glad I came across this OS

Hey!

On part one:

Loving Rudras inner voice. 😆 A poet and a soldier, such a contrast but I've always loved the imagery it invokes. The little touches of softness in outwardly gruff men are so endearing to watch. Whether it involves their mothers, sisters, wives or children. Wouldn't expect it to look any less adorable coming from Rudra.

PS: I'll admit to watching a couple of videos where soldiers meet their babies for the first time and I actually cried my eyes out.

On part two:

Love the distracted Paro and the thought of her slowly becoming aware of Rudra as a man. Peeking at his chest eh? I also like the small insight into human observations. Being impressed at slam dunking the pan into the sink in one shot? It does happen,we do get side tracked and muse about seemingly strange things. I was pretty impressed when that happened to me although it involved my nephews dirty diaper and a dust bin 😆

On part three and four:

Rudras basic instinct when it comes to Paro is of fierce protection and when he doesn't have his guard up his attitude softens and he's so tuned in to her needs, not that he's any less aware of her when he's trying to act all nonchalant😉 when he prcieves her in danger he is anxious and so focussed on making things better and then when dust settles, his anger sparks, probably stemming from the fear of how she makes him feel and not understanding it

"how dare you have me so worried"

This jallad will definitely be worth it! Hang in there Paro 😃

This was wonderful! Continue writing.

Love
NitiEdited by niyoti - 10 years ago

It's been a while. *Shamelessly* When are you writing some more? 😛
Edited by Exprimere - 10 years ago

Originally posted by: niyoti

Hey!

On part one:

Loving Rudras inner voice. 😆 A poet and a soldier, such a contrast but I've always loved the imagery it invokes. The little touches of softness in outwardly gruff men are so endearing to watch. Whether it involves their mothers, sisters, wives or children. Wouldn't expect it to look any less adorable coming from Rudra.

PS: I'll admit to watching a couple of videos where soldiers meet their babies for the first time and I actually cried my eyes out.

On part two:

Love the distracted Paro and the thought of her slowly becoming aware of Rudra as a man. Peeking at his chest eh? I also like the small insight into human observations. Being impressed at slam dunking the pan into the sink in one shot? It does happen,we do get side tracked and muse about seemingly strange things. I was pretty impressed when that happened to me although it involved my nephews dirty diaper and a dust bin 😆

On part three and four:

Rudras basic instinct when it comes to Paro is of fierce protection and when he doesn't have his guard up his attitude softens and he's so tuned in to her needs, not that he's any less aware of her when he's trying to act all nonchalant😉 when he perceives her in danger he is anxious and so focussed on making things better and then when dust settles, his anger sparks, probably stemming from the fear of how she makes him feel and not understanding it

"how dare you have me so worried"

This jallad will definitely be worth it! Hang in there Paro 😃

This was wonderful! Continue writing.

Love
Niti

Originally posted by: Exprimere

It's been a while. *Shamelessly* When are you writing some more? 😛

Also, I think I like you more because of your profile pic. 😆

Edited by What_the - 10 years ago

Originally posted by: What_the

Thank you, thank you, thank you... for this generous and detailed comment! I am so overwhelmed!! Especially loved all those parts in bold!

As I said in my note, I started off writing something light and easy, but suddenly things moved in another direction altogether.

I am so glad that you liked this piece! Excited enough to write more...

Silly silly, grin grin!!

Hahaha silly silly grin grin!

I was grinning too while reading.

Originally posted by: niyoti

Hahaha silly silly grin grin!

I was grinning too while reading.

Congratulations! You won the SS/OS/FF of the week 😃
Edited by niyoti - 10 years ago

Congratulations for winning this week! :D

That puts you in a very revered league, I must say!