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fairycake

@fairycake

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

Thank you for the OS. Amazing as always!👏

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Atyay

@Atyay

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

Nice os...
Loved it. 😊

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pia surve

@piaviviandsena

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

hey dear awsm update. plz continue dis to one more part. plz plz plz pretty plz!

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Raila1014

@Raila1014

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#24

This was cute. I loved the question and not so straightforward answers. She was running away from him,and he made her answer her own questions about him. I like that you left it where you did, it took away any sappiness from creeping in the story. It really was very interesting up to the every last line. Cheers!

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hilly

@hilly

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Posted: 11 years ago

#25

EEEPS!!* (giddy feelings)*
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OH, I LOVE THIS NAFIII ! This is SO darn awesome, sweet & cute and funny and oh-the-irritation-&-the-unknown-feelings-of-not-understanding-the-feeling.
This was SO much better than the scene in the episode and I love the continuation you made from the scene itself, except it wasn't Chai this time, but 'paani'. What better excuse ;)
...
Loved it all up until it end.. so he did make her understand, huh? Oouuu ;)
Jumbled my head with all there 'Idon'tknows', he should've just made her 'understand', except all that rambling and effectively faulting her question.

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meera30

@meera30

Dazzler

+ 7

Posted: 11 years ago

#26

My heart hasn't gone dhak dhak this way in a LONG time, Nafisa!

Take a bow. I would have so liked to see this happen in front of me.

And yet, reading it was...tingling - yep, that's what I am now!

Beautiful. You sure have a way with words and dialogue!

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Simran

@dmg123

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#27

Awesome!

I really like the title!

I liked how you incorporated everything from Akash and Payal's wedding.

I really like the dialogue only OSs, they are so well written!

When Arnav said, I am here to make you understand

I hope he has succeeded in his mission :)

Great job!

I hope you are enjoying the wedding!

Thank you so much for the pm!

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RasgullaSP

@Rasgulla_sp

Trailblazer

+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#28

I dont need descriptions, I dont need emotions, I dont need cues about where this story fits in the chronology of the events in the show, I dont need to know the mood, I dont need the expressions...

Everything is out there for me to feel with everything in my heart. This is Arnav Khushi. This is IPK 😊

The flirty Arnav and the restless Khushi (no terrace MU/ Shyam business) and you have transported me to the ArHi-fantasyland and woven the same IPK here again.

I loved the ping pong match of words, I loved the question, I loved the assured but silent answers... I just found that the end was kinda an 'unfinished business' There could have been more there 😕