Something in the mist: KriYansh OS *challenged*

Amazing os
So kria was on a mission
So gautum was kria's bro n rey thought him to becsombody else
Mujhe laga hi tha rey ka popat hoga
Anyways it was very well writtenEdited by zina.92 - 10 years ago

WOOOHOO!! F.I.N.A.L.L.Y


Yaaay!!!
My Shenz di is back!!
I love it baby..
accha ab jaldi jaldi unresing battery kam hai..
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*ahem ahem* so this WAS something..
and as per said by you i dint sleep instead i read all of it wide-eyed O.O
the start was amazing with kriya serving those perverts.. huh..
kriya pe gandi nazar daaltein hain..
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then rey.. bwahaha.. shocked to see her in such avatar that too in a bar!!
Correction strippin bar.
The three levels were amazingly describes i was like total "Lollla" while readin them.
Hahaha..
Rey pulling her.. :O.
All men r perverts.. they want it.. ahan so true got it 😉
500!! Rich brat..
For the first time on IF im reading something related to strippers.
Ok fr a moment i really was shocked dat abt dat kriya strippin part..
I was like "KRIYA STRIPPING?? O.O"
ahaaa.. sidha Rey pe nishana.. 😳
See the saviour is here--bole toh Reyaansh! Yay! Waah mere hero!!   👏
Kriya ko jacket diya fir shirt bhi.. awwwew..
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Aha kriya barely dressd dat too in his room .. rey bhala esa chance kese chod sakta ha..
hmm..oozing out anger on her.. that too this way.. not bad.
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then i really loved how u described dat after make-out vala part.
It was something which i really appreciated along the way as its highly detailed.
Gautam!!!!
First i was like pakka boyfriend hai.. pasand bhi kiya toh boyfriend vali ko..
But then bade bhaiya aagye.. i love protective brothers really..
Haha.. apne hi pair par kuladhi.. 😆
I can imagine rey ka expression dat time.. hitting her brother lol..
Ohhoo.. bhaiya ne akela chod diya!! Very good esa bhai sabko mile.. im already liking this character..
then d little twist.. haha kriya in crime branch bechari patli si kya pakde gi kisi ko..
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ohhoo.. rey ko shoo off naii kiya..
waah! !
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the only thing that i felt missing was the "i love u" part, not that it was necessary or something.. its just that the final para givs a signal of another episode not very different from the previous one. But i guess it felt complete at the last.
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All in all awesome OS..
Effectively written.. amazingly described.
and everything fell right into the frame..
plus there was no no no cribbing in it the entire time .. dat was smthing i adored.
Really. U toh know how much i always love ur works..
im officially in love with it..
really.. beautifully penned.. loved it!
Keep writing.. me toh still dancing.. still in dreamland after reading this..
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YAYYY!! MY SHENZ DI IS BACCK!! YEAH.. SAB SAMBHAL JAO AB.. AAGAYI YE VAPIS
Loved it n love u as well..

2nd cmmnt .. not bad *pats back*
Stalking ka nateeza ha!! :D
Hand painging now .. plus battery dyeing.. byee..
Muah :*Edited by Painted_Sky - 10 years ago

fall asleep!!!!!  ... not at all dear...

marrr ja 
Edited by -Vaish- - 10 years ago

awsum os..
Edited by Abhilashaarsha - 10 years ago

offo.. reserved comments ki bahar.. koi nahi karta mujhse ya mere works se pyaar.. 😭

Oh woww this so amazing
am reading such amazing os after a long time
great job shenz
i loved the whole bg and the way you wrote it was just brilliant



so all that was a mission...kria did her job amazingly though

and lamba tha toh kya hua...i totally enjoyed it...
Its was Ah-mazing



thanx to the challenger to challenge u this Edited by -Ocean.eyes- - 10 years ago

Ah-mazing OS
It was long but not boring at all.. In fact I enjoyed it thoroughly...
Wonderfully written dear.. Super lyk!

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